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beautifuldreamer1289
December 21, 2006, 02:13 PM
cleaning challenge 3. i neglected to do like, 2 of the patterns, and the redrawing needs alot of work, but i got sick of taking so long on it and just wanted feedback from what ive done already.

http://img126.imageshack.us/img126/8749/kain16zv1copypa0.th.png (http://img126.imageshack.us/my.php?image=kain16zv1copypa0.png)

and a random one from spiral that i found and did. i knew some of the translation (currently taking japanese), but not all of it, so i only type-set the parts i knew.

http://img77.imageshack.us/img77/2404/222copyea9.th.png (http://img77.imageshack.us/my.php?image=222copyea9.png)

Allashandra
December 22, 2006, 03:07 PM
Hi sorry I wasn't able to get to this sooner. It is a good job. The borders are done well the blacks are mostly filled in. The whites look pretty good for the most part though there are a few specks. You already know about the redrawing so my main suggestion for that is to practice making the lines a little smoother. And for some reason this clean is a little blurry in comparision to the raw (particularly on panels 1 and 4) and I'm not sure why.

For the Sprial page it is better to also have the raw to compare it too when giving feedback. The main thing I noticed is that the redraw lines all appear to have no anti-alias on them.

I hope this helps