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    Translation Check

    Hello. May I please get a translation check of the following two panels?

    Spoiler: First show


    Spoiler: Second show


    Thank you for your time!


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    Re: Translation Check

    Quote Originally Posted by Jackk View Post
    Hello. May I please get a translation check of the following two panels?
    Hi, Jackk.

    Quote Quote:
    And then they can split the earth and shatter the stars.
    I guess you could remove "And," but it sounds fine to me. People don't generally call the earth 星(a star), so I assume that 星 means stars, not the earth. Context might change this.

    Quote Quote:
    That was the Galaxian Explosion, which has the power to destroy immense celestial bodies.
    Translate 「GEの威力」 as a set instead of using it after ", which."
    --> That was the power of GE, which ...

    Edit: the "it" I mentioned above = the power

    Quote Quote:
    It wouldn't surprise me if they've both been obliterated without a trace.
    JP txt: 消し飛んだようだな
    ようだな is more like "Looks like," "It seems," or "(They) must have ---." Your tl ("It wouldn't surprise me if") suits better for a phrase such as 消し飛んだとしても不思議はない. Your tl is not wrong, but JP is a bit simpler.  
    Last edited by mikkih; June 06, 2014 at 03:11 PM. Reason: Edit: the "it" I mentioned above = the power

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    Re: Translation Check

    Hey mikkih, thanks for the suggestions/help! I really appreciate it

    Hmm, I think I'm still confused with something in the first panel that I posted though

    Particularly the 大地 ...which I translated as Earth. But 大地 could also mean ground and/or soil of the earth, right?

    Basically I'm not sure if the panel is talking about the planet earth or the ground

    I suppose basically going from talking about damaging/splitting the planet to then also the stars... makes sense in terms of progression at least. But perhaps the 大地 here refers to the ground of the planet (as in splitting/cracking the ground/soil, but not actually splitting the planet itself) and that could also make sense

    How would you interpret the 大地 in the panel?

    Below is the page where the panel is from if you want to look at it for context or something-

    Spoiler show


    The page seems to describe how the character[s] get their superhuman power, which is basically by causing their inner mini-universe to explode. I don't see something that would clarify if the 大地 is referring to the planet itself or just the ground, maybe either could work (it's vague) ?

    The manga is called Saint Seiya, by the way. It's a fighting shounen with a Greek mythology theme and really powerful characters (atomic destruction, attacks at the speed of light etc...)
    Last edited by Jackk; June 06, 2014 at 04:22 PM.


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    Re: Translation Check

    I see, I thought you might be wondering if the 星(a star/stars) meant the earth or not. I know what you mean now. It sure can go both ways. I might still go with the earth - practically saying that his power can "destroy everything including earth and stars." It seems like a very important scene. I never read the manga or watch the anime, but isn't there already officially published version?

    I'm out of town this Sat. and Sun, so I can't do any reseach myself. Someone who knows this story might be able to help you better.

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    Re: Translation Check

    WOOPIE!! Saint seiya...

    1) yeah, they meant Earth.. as a PLANET.. I assure you.

    2) Add in some laugh... this dude's being sadistic.. or sardonic.. can't tell..

    3) It wouldn't surprise me if they've both been obliterated without a trace.
    Try "Both seemingly obliterated without a trace kukkukuku"

    Edit: "It wouldn't surprise me".. use that places where sentences end with "deshou"..
    e.g. "sore demo hashiri wa tsudzukerun desho" is a polite way of saying "They won't stop the race".. To keep the Japanese humility.. you could say "It wouldn't surprise me if they continue the race"
    Last edited by MadHatterRyu; June 10, 2014 at 07:27 PM.

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    Re: Translation Check

    Hmm, a bit of a bump... sorry. But I was looking over the JP text of that second panel again, and I've been wondering if maybe the "immense celestial bodies" part isn't really accurate (or there's something better/closer to the JP text that could be used)

    Looking at that first part-

    ク シクク
    銀河の星星さえも
    破壊する
    GEの威力...

    There's the 銀河の星星 part, which means stars and galaxies

    So... would it actually be more like "Heh heh heh... That was the power of GE, which can destroy stars and galaxies" ?

    Though there's also that さえも part, which I'm not sure if it's actually making it say something more like "which can destroy stars of the galaxy" instead

    I guess I wasn't sure what to go with so I went with a more vague/general approach and used "immense celestial bodies" ...which I suppose technically isn't wrong

    ....But do you guys think there's a better way to translate/phrase that line ?

    On a semi-related note, I'm finding trying to translate JP manga panels kind of a fun way to learn Japanese. Though I still have to use a dictionary a lot for words/kanji that I don't recognize or remember
    Last edited by Jackk; June 17, 2014 at 04:13 AM.


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    Re: Translation Check

    さえも in this case is "even," so it's saying: it can even destroy stars...

    I wouldn't go with "immense celestial bodies" in place of "stars and galaxies* " here, you'd inadvertently changed the feel of the dialogue otherwise. Try saying it out loud to yourself, and you might find the sound of "stars and galaxies" in this particular scene holds a lot more impact than "immense celestial bodies" because the latter is too vague to create a certain image in your head.


    And yes, being persistent in using a dictionary is a fool-proof way to improve your vocab. Good luck!

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    Re: Translation Check

    Hi, Jackk
    Quote Originally Posted by Jackk View Post
    ク シクク
    銀河の星星さえも
    破壊する
    GEの威力...

    There's the 銀河の星星 part, which means stars and galaxies

    So... would it actually be more like "Heh heh heh... That was the power of GE, which can destroy stars and galaxies" ?
    ク シクク <--- ククク Your translation is fine, but the second letter is a "small tsu" not a "big shi" in katakana.


    "の" in 銀河の星星 is not "and." It means either "in" or "of."
    Quote Quote:
    Though there's also that さえも part, which I'm not sure if it's actually making it say something more like "which can destroy stars of the galaxy" instead
    さえも is "even" just like Utsu mentioned.

    Quote Quote:
    I guess I wasn't sure what to go with so I went with a more vague/general approach and used "immense celestial bodies" ...which I suppose technically isn't wrong

    ....But do you guys think there's a better way to translate/phrase that line ?
    For better accuracy, I think I would go with more traditional approach without changing words too much. If you have a problem translating and nobody could help you with it, then a vague translation approach would do.

    Quote Quote:
    On a semi-related note, I'm finding trying to translate JP manga panels kind of a fun way to learn Japanese. Though I still have to use a dictionary a lot for words/kanji that I don't recognize or remember
    That's sounds great! Enjoy, and feel free post as many questions as you'd like on TA mainboard.

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    Re: Translation Check

    Thanks a lot for the replies/help, Utsune and mikkih

    If I understood correctly, for better accuracy here... I could/should use-

    クックク
    銀河の星星さえも
    破壊する
    GEの威力...

    "Heh heh heh... That was the power of GE, which can even destroy stars of the galaxy"

    Hmm, is a "the" before "stars" implied in the JP text? So in other words... "Heh heh heh... That was the power of GE, which can even destroy the stars of the galaxy"


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    Re: Translation Check

    Quote Originally Posted by Jackk View Post
    クックク
    銀河の星星さえも
    破壊する
    GEの威力...

    "Heh heh heh... That was the power of GE, which can even destroy stars of the galaxy"

    Hmm, is a "the" before "stars" implied in the JP text? So in other words... "Heh heh heh... That was the power of GE, which can even destroy the stars of the galaxy"
    星星 means "any" stars in/of the galaxy, but you are defining stars with "of the galaxy." I think it's rather an English grammar issue whether to use a definite article "the" or not.

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