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    Demon King (Added Chapter 8!)

    Tell me what you think:

    Prologue:

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    Chapter 1: A Story Worth Telling

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    Chapter 2: Strange Boy with the Bowler Hat

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    Chapter 3: Enter Team Avalanche!

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    Chapter 4: A Fallen Hero

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    Chapter 5: Relit

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    Chapter 6: Heavy Flame

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    Chapter 7: Wrong Way
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    Chapter 8: Hospitality!
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    Last edited by Rideouter; August 15, 2009 at 12:13 AM.

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    Re: Demon King

    It's funny!
    Are you going to write more?

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    Re: Demon King

    I added new content to it and nobody want to rate this?
    Last edited by Rideouter; July 16, 2009 at 12:14 AM. Reason: Automerged Doublepost

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    Re: Demon King (anybody want to criteek)

    I've got a couple of questions:

    1) how many pages per chapter?

    2) How far have you written this? Is it far enough to be able to go though several arcs?

    3) What about the other characters. You've done one write-up for a character so far, how about the others.

    So far, so good. You've done a good job at making detailled scripts. This is simple enough to start making layouts and finished pages from. The character write-up is not bad either
    Last edited by Yukishirow; July 18, 2009 at 09:15 PM. Reason: edited for mistakes
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    Re: Demon King (anybody want to criteek)

    1. Well i don't really count but atleast 6 per chapter.

    2. Well i thought up the idea ALONG time ago but now im writing it so i know how everything is going to play out. It isn't ending any time soon haha.

    3. Well i was waiting for feed-back from you guys to see if i should continue the character bios/summaries but for right now i like to explain the characters as the story progresses.

    And thanks but i think that i am going to change to novel format because i have nbeen gettin alot of comments on how scritpt speech is weak compared to novel.

    EDIT: I am now going to write this in both script and novel speech forms. First i write the chapters in Novel form then i re-write them in script because it is easier.


    Ok i realize that this is a short chapter but i wasn't really done with it. I will add alot more of them fighting later and explanations later.


    Wow, I thought that I added this already. I will add chapter 8 sometime this week, after I recover alittle from my surgury.


    Updated! Please Comment!
    Last edited by Rideouter; August 14, 2009 at 11:52 PM. Reason: Automerged Doublepost

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