My first Clean? Any good? HELP!

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Hi all, I have just started to clean manga. And after a few practises this is my first one,
From this

http://img259.imageshack.us/i/naruto46901.jpg/

To this

http://img259.imageshack.us/i/ednaruto46901.jpg/

What do you think?

And The grey on Bee, i just can seem to make it look any nicer? Any ideas?
I Dont mind being a Cleaner!

Sorry for not directly showing you the image. The reason is, its too HQ and too BIG

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Well, first of all: reduce the size. There's no way to see the whole page like this, it's annoying to scroll always up and down and left and right. You can resize it to 1200 px height, for example.

Second: grayscale the image.

Third: well, it's quite bad... but just keep learning, and btw, the raw isn't HQ at all. It's just big and hi-res, but it's LQ. And I'd say the cleaning is LQ too. But just keep trying and take a look at some tutorials. There you have a few to get HQ cleans: http://senbonzakura.kageyoshi.net

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I agree, I have doubts that the page is set to grayscale.

The raw doesn't have to be HQ but if it's available I'd pick it up.

You can remove all the text btw, don't be afraid to get rid of the "By Internal" there. Also, I can tell you used some filters or a denoiser but use them in order otherwise the page still turns out washed out and blurry.

And the sfx in the second panel there, don't try to remove it. I'd leave it in unless you're going for really top quality. Or you're Viz, lol.