Hey guys this is my 1st lineart that i ever made, well i was browsing DA to look for this legendary panel but i couldnt find any so i gave it a shot and i think it looks good.
It took me maximum 2 hours and i was suprised that it took so much, usually experianced lineartists make a line out of this for more that 3 hours but i guess i am special xD.
Well i hope you use these lines and before and after you do , you should notify me , after all i am going to color this too xD
I'm going to give you some constructive criticism, bear with me. :]
It's very obvious that you don't have much experience using the pen tool in photoshop. The easiest way to spot this is that you don't curve your lines, you simply add more waypoints. This makes your lineart very pointy and rough. Take a look at the Rinnegan pattern to see what I mean - those aren't circles.
There's also several artifacts and lines crossing each other that should've been cleaned up, take for instance the right part of Kakashi's hand in the upper panel (there's double lines), the bottom of Kakashi's scar in the bottom left panel and the rod just in front of Iruka's face in the right panel which you've forgotten to make lines for. There's also the issue with some of Kakashi's hair being made with a thicker brush than the rest of the lineart in the right panel.
The black border you've made is also messy - you can see the original panel lines a few pixels right of your border in the top and the bottom left panels, you've forgotten to fill in some of the border in the bottom left panels, you can see white lines at three different points where they're not supposed to be and it's not properly aligned (it should be a little thicker at the left of the top panel in order to make its thickness the same all the way to the bottom of the left side of the page).
Sorry if this sounds harsh, but there is a reason why good lineart takes quite some time. This isn't quite as bad as I might've made it sound though, with some more practice you'll become very good at this. The most important thing you should focus on is curving your lines properly.
The reason why I can easily spot all of these mistakes is because I more or less made all the same ones when I started doing lineart myself. ;]
haha dont wory i can take harsh comments, you were right about a lot of those misstakes and expecially that i dont curve the lines, i have been using the pen tool for a while but only for little stuff like coloring the area around eyes and etc , nothing complicated, and the reason i didnt try so much to corrent these things was that i am planing to color this and when i do i usually delete lines that arent necesary, like the rinnegan lines.
Well thank you for you long comment, it was helpfull
Damn he hit the nail on the coffin. I can give you a tut if need be. Also when are you gonna color that lineart I made for you?
Your light sources are all over the place.
Yeah you may like it the light source to be crazy, but then it just makes it invalid if you are trying to attempt to use a light source and it is not correct. And why the hell are you making the first panel blurry, I also don't appreciate how you vaguely try to present the idea that your work was much better then the one who won the contest.
Last edited by lee-nus; June 16, 2010 at 12:32 PM.
Well thanks Lee if i might call you that way xD . i hope you leave comments in the near futture as well, btw can you comment on my newest coloring of Ullqiora cause i dont know if that other style is better
There is more to art than just the piece itself, the meaning could be deeper to that. Some arts are worth thousands and these are the arts of just splattered paint.