Check sentence please

[stlwright]

むねは油気が足らないし,
The breast isn't oily enough.

一回、肩だか首だかのさ
Once, on the shoulder or the neck...


お前、手先に集中すると口尖るんだもん
When you were concentrating on my fingers, you were pouting.


The second line doesn't make sense to me. They are talking about chicken.

[mikkih]

むねは油気が足らないし,
The breast isn't oily enough.

一回、肩だか首だかのさ
Once, on the shoulder or the neck...


お前、手先に集中すると口尖るんだもん
When you were concentrating on my fingers, you were pouting.


The second line doesn't make sense to me. They are talking about chicken.

Line 1: The literal translation seems fine as is. It probably means "The breast is a bit too dry."

Line 2: When a sentence starts with 一回/Once,　a suggestion follows such as ~した方がいい or ~してもらった方がいい. In that case, the sentence can be something like "Maybe you should (do whatever to) the/your throat and shoulders (once)." Either you guess the abbreviated verb from the context to fill in or keep the translation similar to what you have. I am not sure about your usage of "on" without knowing the context.

Line 3: When reading your sentence, "your fingers" sounds more natural than "my fingers" You could start with "Whatever Whenever " instead of "When." It's probably talking about his/her habit. Also change "were ~ing" to present tense. I would translate 口をとがらせる literally.

[stlwright]

Thanks. Line 2 comes right after line 1, so I assume that they are talking about the piece of chicken.