Choku! 2

njt: PLEASE SEE PAGE TWO's edit before copy-pasta. "here at all." vs. "here and all."

p01 ", a high school" "meeting"
p02 I changed it to "here at all." but did you really mean "here and all."?
p06 "...I'm"
p11 "do, then... can"
p14 "...Guess"
p16 "hallway,"
p17 "flew by"
p18 "Girls'"
p19 "ghost." ""ghosts"" ""spirits"" ""O●Qs""
p27 "anything wrong..."
p29 "boys'"
p30 "Mizuhashi, Nao"


p01

Right box: Mizuhashi, Nao. Friendless 16 year old.

Next box: Who one day meets Serika, a high school girl, in the boy's bathroom.

Left box: Was their meeting fate?!

Right box: Covered with nose blood.

Next box: Asked out.

Serika: Date me.

Last box: Meeting Serika has turned his world upside down.

p02

Nao: If I spend my lunch break in the restroom then I'm very likely to run into Serika.

Small type: Her.

Nao: I wonder if there's a place I can spend my time in peace. // This might do it... No one passes by here at all. // Better yet, it doesn't smell like the restroom... // Hm?!

p03

Spot: Choku!

Chapter two: Twilight Dreams.

p04

Nao: EHHHH!?!

sound: Splat

p05

Serika: What are you doing outside the restroom?

Nao: Oh?! // So this place was outside the restroom...

Serika: I have a favor to ask of you.

Nao: Eh?

Serika: I want you to come to the library after school.

Nao: Library? // Wha- what for?

Serika: I'll be waiting.

p06

Box: After school.

Sign: Class 1-2.

Nao: Library... // I doubt anything good will come from me going. // ...I'm going home! // I don't really like school anyway. // I want to be home alone!! // Now that's decided... // I just gotta get outta here...

p07

Nao: Something's been stuffed in here!?!?!? // What is this? I can't get it out!

p08

Nao: Hm? // What do we have here?

Paper: Come to the library Come to the library Come to the Library (repeat)

School bell: Ding Doooong

Nao: Come to the library...

School bell: Ding dong diiiing dong.

Sign: Library

Paper: Taking manga and magazines from the library is forbidden.
- Librarian

p09

Black board: Cherish trees. Let's not forget to (paper blocking) during work.

Paper on board: Life line.
- There's no need to worry alone...

Book: Library catalog.
Box by book: Book request box.

Nao: Oh? // So you're a library aid?

Serika: Yeah.

p10

Serika: Thanks for coming.

Nao: Oh, yeah...
Nao thought: That letter freaked me out enough...

Nao: S-so why do you want me here?

Serika: The other library aid won't be in because she's sick. // So I want you to stay in the library.

Nao: Oh? Just stay here? / You don't need my help or anything?

Serika: Just stay.

p11

Nao: Oh, well if there's nothing you want me to do, then... can I go home?

Nao thought: I rather not stay in school if I don't have to.

Nao: Well... See ya...

p12

Nao: She'll hate me if I go home like this... // I guess a little reading every now and then isn't bad... // Oh wow! They have light novels... // I guess I'll read this.

p13

Guy: I'd like to check out this...
Guy thought: What's with this aid?!

Nao: I'm thirsty... // Guess I'll go to the restroom and get something on the way back.

p14

Nao: It doesn't look like she's doing her job... // Hmm it got dark faster than I realized. // I was surprisingly quite comfortable that I lost track of time... // ...Guess I'll go back and continue reading.

p15

Sign: Library

Nao: Serika?

Serika: Where were you?

Nao: Uhh, the restroom... // You don't look well, are you OK?

p16

Serika: Come next to me. // Now.

Nao: O-OK...

Serika: If you don't hurry I'll become incontinent.

Nao: WHY!?!? // Don't tell me, you're scared?

Speaker: School is now closing up for the day. Those still ----

Serika: From the lonely melodies that flow in here from the hallway, to the classrooms without people. // School at night time is very scary.

Nao: Why'd you choose to be a library aid then?

Sound: Crush

p17

Serika: So that's why I wanted you by my side. // I'm happy that you stayed with me this late.

Nao: I was unexpectedly comfortable so I just stayed.
Nao thought: Time flew by so all is good I guess.

Serika: It's time. Let's go home.

Keys: Library // Science // Choir // PE

p18

Serika: I have to shit.

Nao: Eh? // Then... use the restroom?

Door: Girls' restroom

Serika: It's OK. I'll hold it.

p19

Serika: I'll be taking a risk of shitting myself on the way home though.

Nao: Don't risk that!! // I'll wait for you, so go!

Serika: I'm scared.
small: I might see a ghost.

Serika: I'll be OK if you join me...

Nao: No way in hell! What are you, a perv?!

Small nao: Good luck
Small serika: OK

Nao: You'll be fine, ghosts don't exist!

Serika: Calling them "ghosts" scares me. Call them "spirits". // On second thought, that's scary too. Call them "O●Qs".
[TN: She's referring to "ObaQ" an old famous ghost, like japan's casper^^
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Obake_no_Q-tar%C5%8D ]

Nao: Who cares!! Hurry up already!

p20

Serika: Or "O●rou" would work too.
[TN: This is Ojirou, ObaQ's younger brother.]

Nao: Enough!! // Sheesh. // It's already night time... // Seems like she's going to be a while, I might as well use the restroom too. // The lights...

p21

Nao: AGHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!! // AH!! This happened during lunch break. // I thought I was going to have a heart attack. // I knew nothing good was going to happen hanging around her. // I wanna hurry and go home.

p22

Sign: Trash Can

Nao: How in the hell?? // Se-Serika? / What in the hell happened...?

Serika: Nao?!

p23

Serika: You alive?

Nao: What do you mean by that?

Serika: When I got out of the restroom you were gone / so I hide in here. // Then I heard you scream and thought you died.

Nao: I'm alive.

Serika: Good. // I'm so glad you're alive.

p24

Nao Thought: It's not like I could have possibly died... // And the whole reason I freaked out back there was all her fault anyway... // But it does look she was genuinely worried about me...

Nao: You're covered in trash... // Let's hurry up and go home...

p25

Serika: I can't.

Nao: HUH?!

Serika: My back gave out and I can't move my lower half.

Nao: EHHHHHH?!?! // What do you plan on doing then?!

Serika: I don't know.

Nao: Fine. // I'll think of something. // Haah // Haah // Haah

p26

Nao: She's heavy!! // I knew it... she's too heavy... My knees are giving out... // Ah...

p27

Serika: Domestic violence??

Nao: SORRY!! // Are you OK?! Of course you're not!!

Serika: I'm OK. // It's actually starting to feel pretty good.

Nao: Wait! That doesn't sound good!

Serika: I can see O●rou...

Guy: I heard glass break but there doesn't seem to be... // anything wrong...

p28

Guy: OAGHHHHHHHHHH!!!

Nao: D-did something happen?

Serika: Someone was here.

Nao: They'll lock up the gate if we don't hurry.

Serika: OK.

p29

Box: The next day.

Nao: Yesterday was tiring.

Girl: Did you hear what happened?

girl 2: What?

Girl: A spirit of a girl with only half a body appeared at the school last night!!

girl 2: No way?!

Girl: The also found the boys' restroom covered in blood, // someone screamed, // broken glass, // and a trail of blood.

girl 2: Is that really true?

Girl: I heard it from someone who saw it yesterday.

Nao: Hm?

p30

Name tag: Class 1-2
Mizuhashi, Nao

Nao: What are you doing?

Serika: I want you to come the library again today. // Apparently you'll get covered in blood by a girl with only half a body. // I'm too scared to go alone. / I want to be with you.

Nao: Nah, I think you'll be fine...

right side: There's apparently a new ghost story for the school!

bottom: Next chapter will be on January 8th.

Thanks for the TL~ ^_^

Here's some comments- will edit comment when I add more later:
p.1: "Covered with nose blood.">>
>> sounds kind of weird to me.... - I know you mean he was covered with blood from a nose bleed, but the 'nose blood' sounds kind of weird to me
>> Maybe: Sprayed/covered with blood from a nose bleed.

p.2: This might do it... No one passes by here and all.
>> This might do... No one passes by here at all. (drop 'it' + and -> all)

p.6: I want to be home alone!!
>> I want to be alone at home!! (lol @ home alone)

p.6: Now that's decided...
>> Now that I've made the decision...

p.9: Nao: Oh?
>> I'd probably have this as 'Eh?' or 'Huh?'

p.11: I rather not stay in school if I don't have to.
>> I'd rather not stay in school if I don't have to.

p.13: Guy: I'd like to check out this...
>> out this -> this out

p.14: Hmm it got dark faster than I realized. // I was surprisingly quite comfortable that I lost track of time...
>> Hmm... It got dark faster than I realized. // Surprisingly, I was quite comfortable and I lost track of time...

p.15: You don't look well, are you OK?
>> comma -> period or semi-colon

p.16: Serika: Come next to me.
>> Come -> Get (or stand)

p.16: Serika: From the lonely melodies that flow in here from the hallway, to the classrooms without people. // School at night time is very scary.
>> drop the comma before 'to'; period after 'people' -> comma; uncap 'school'
>>Serika: From the lonely melodies that flow in here from the hallway to the classrooms without people, // school at night time is a very scary place.

p.17: I'm happy that you stayed with me this late.
>> I'm happy you stayed this late with me.

p.17: Time flew by so all is good I guess.
>> Time flew by so it's all good I guess.

p.18: Serika: I have to shit.
>> I have to take a shit.

p.18: Serika: It's OK. I'll hold it.
>> Serika: It's OK. I'll hold it in.

p.19: Nao: You'll be fine, ghosts don't exist!
>> comma -> semi-colon

p.20: Seems like she's going to be a while, I might as well use the restroom too.
>> comma -> period ; insert 'it' + take
>> It seems like she's going to take a while. I might as well use the restroom too.

p.21: AH!! This happened during lunch break.
>> Maybe: Oh yeah! This happened during lunch break!

p.21: I wanna hurry and go home.
>> I wanna hurry up and go home.

p.24: It's not like I could have possibly died...
>> It's not like it was possible for me to have died...

p.26: My knees are giving out...
>> My knees are gonna give out...

p.27: It's actually starting to feel pretty good.
>> It's starting to actually feel pretty good.

p.27: I heard glass break but there doesn't seem to be...
>> comma after 'break'

p.29: girl 2: No way?!
>> drop ?

p.30: Serika: I want you to come the library again today.
>> Serika: I want you to come to the library again today.