Have you ever thought of how song lyrics could be improved?
Blood Axis - The Ride
When doors lie open at halloween
On glimmering hills and lands unseen
The oldest of all that the world gave birth
Ride again through the hills of earth
Long before the word was spoken
Moon scarred or promise broken
From dust before the first day's sun
The children of the twilight come
When the great stones rose on the windy plain When the great stones rose on Salisbury plain
And the corn mother sang for the springing grain
They carved the shot downs on the hill They carved the white horse on the hill
The grey host rode and it's riding still The grey host rode and they ride there stil
When the eagles came with their wings outspread
And the hard roads rang to the legion's tread
The war ran straight from coast to coast The wall ran straight from coast to coast
Under the starlight rode the host
When they came from the north with their axe and plow When the dragonships came with the axe and plow
And the one-eyed god hung from the bough And our one-eyed Lord hung from the bough
Nine nights between the earth and sky
He saw the host come riding by
When clamoring bells and chanting priests
Proclaimed the dead god from the east Proclaimed their dead god from the east
And churches rose on every hand
Still the grey host rode the land
When gold was gone and labor cheap
And they herded men like dogs herd sheep And men herded men like dogs herd sheep
Through furnace glare and smokey mill
The grey host rode and it's riding still
Through towered blocks and littered streets
Where sirens wail and buses sleep
Where hope lives god only knows
For the gods died long ago All the gods are dead you know
Still the grey host rides through the dead of night
And the cities are shadow to their sight
For beyond the mist of centuries And to cleanse the filth of centuries
Still shine the stars and the ancient trees Reveals the stars and the ancient trees
Out of the darkness
On the road where the dead years run
Cold as moonlight
Terrible as the sun
Last edited by faintsmile1992; November 09, 2011 at 12:00 PM. Reason: Added prefix~
I love the Salisbury plain and white horse part. The white horse on a hill reminds me of the hill figures.
"The wall ran straight from coast to coast": I feel this part is a bit too weird since it talks about legions and then suddenly, wall?
"All the gods are dead you know": I feel the "you know" part is weird too because it addresses the readers directly when the other parts of the song are like poems that doesn't recognize the "fourth wall".
However, you did really well. I never know before that a song lyrics can be improved.
And yep, its a reference to the hill figure at Uffington, which is so old its original meaning has been lost. Later Christian traditions associate the horse with St George and the Dragon but its actually Iron Age.
Behold a pale horse
The Romans built Hadrian's Wall as a part of their northern defences, although their empire reached further to the Firth of Forth.Quote:
I you listen the lyrics, I think Michael Moynihan actually says 'war' not 'wall' and it makes more sense than a war running from coast to coast. I also wanted to enter the phrase 'race war' by changing the line to 'Race war raged from coast to coast', to get the sense that foreign-looking people with a foreign culture had arrived from the south, with new concepts foreign to Celtic Britain. If hitler or Napoleon had invaded Britain then there wouldn't have been such a difference in culture from us and the Vikings and the Normans were nothing like as foreign to Britain as the Romans.
It's a reference to Freidrich Nietzsche of course.Quote:
Nietzsche said "Dead are all the Gods: now do we desire the overman to live", and the overman will cleanse away the filth that is modern civilisation and 'progress' to create something more pleasing that's more natural and life-affirming, and less harmful to human life and therefore less anti-human (misanthropes like Nietzsche don't hate humans, we hate what humans have become).
And to cleanse the filth of centuries
Reveals the stars and the ancient trees
OUT OF THE DARKNESS
It is still weird for me though that the lyrics tell about Britain and then there's a reference to Nietzsche.
I've never been to Salisbury Plain, but I might go to see Stonehenge one day. I actually prefer forests to open, grassy plains.
And the reason I've rewritten the lyrics to include the Nietzschean theme is because they're about the history of Britain, and because Nietzsche wrote about the history of values. Thus, the coming of the overmen will bring the end of modern British society and its present, unclean value systems which are based upon the false idols of individual freedom and equality.
Last edited by faintsmile1992; November 09, 2011 at 11:56 AM.