December 18, 2012 02:11 PM
初心者/ Shoshinsha / Beginner
Looking for a little advice or help with my manga :)
So I’ve been working on ideas for manga for a while now, well to be honest ever since I got hooked on it which is only a few years ago. My ideas normally are more Shounen-esk, with a touch of Seinin here and there. I’ve watched that much anime that all my ideas are probably collaborations of them all but it still feels like they’re my own in some way. I have two main ideas in my head, I’m going to try to make a summary of both in a few lines just to see what people’s first impressions are and if anyone even likes them for a start.
My first idea was made over years of watching anime, so I’ve made it span a good bit in my head. The main protagonist in this story is a young boy around the age of 16-18, who doesn’t know much about himself. One day he was found by passers-by and he couldn’t remember anything. Where he came from, why was he covered in blood or even his own name. The only thing he can remember is the image if a woman smiling and a deep blue sky in the background. Being the only thing he could remember he begins calling himself Sky.
The reality of the situation is that he has been granted a power by an organisation that has a larger influence on his life than he knows. In order to make him more willing to cooperate he had his memories wiped and their main aim is to reclaim him as the weapon they see him as. As the story continues he’ll grow stronger, meet new friends, and come in to a new found darker power.
It may seem typical shounen but who doesn't enjoy a good story were the main character grows and suffers hardships along the way.
My second idea I've only recently began working on, adding to it in little bits here and there. I could see it as a much shorter series overall. The main protagonist in this story is a young man searching for answers, the questions being who massacred my entire town and why. The first part of the story follows him as he searches for the people responsible for the trauma he’s suffered so far. To get to the bottom of it all he begins to ally himself with people on the wrong side of the law, with himself slowly slipping into a world of blood and money. He begins to close in on information that could finally get him out of this world but it only ends up in him being butchered and left for dead by the people he was searching for. Before the final curtain closes on him, a new found power locked within his genes awakens allowing him to continue his quest for vengeance.
I've yet to find a name for this character; I’d want one that suits just right. His main choice of weapons are a set of handguns and chains. I wanted to make it a little different from the usual sword etc. His skills are later amplified by his superhuman abilities such as enhanced strength, speed, accuracy and healing. But not having complete compatibility with his powers he is limited to using them for initially 15 minutes. The story then develops showing other characters with similar abilities but with much more enhanced attributes and experience.
Any feedback would be much appreciated. Anyone willing to help out with it or even with a concept drawing or two would be a great help. I have no one who is this much into manga near me so I’m sort of on my own here. Thanks to anyone who reads it, just glad to get my ideas out of my head for a change
January 01, 2013 09:18 AM
初心者/ Shoshinsha / Beginner
Re: Looking for a little advice or help with my manga :)
I just want to help you so please don't take any of this personally. I carefully analyzed your ideas and this is what I think of them. Please keep in mind that I am just another user of this community and I am no professional critic, so you don't need to take everything I say so seriously.
For your first idea, I find it a bit strange that he calls himself Sky based off of the only thing he can remember (the memory of the woman smiling with a deep blue sky in the background). I think in that sort of situation he wouldn't really want to give himself a new name, but rather he would want to find out his real one. Also, if the image is of a smiling woman with a deep blue sky as the background, wouldn't the woman normally stand out more? Therefore, wouldn't his mind rather be occupied with figuring out who that woman really is?
Another thing that seems strange to me is the part where the organization erased the boy's memories so he'd more "willing to cooperate." What happened after? Did they lose him or something? You said he was found by passers-by, not the organization. Are the "passers-by" from the organization? Either way, I think you should clear that part up.
I think the second idea is fine except for this part. "He begins to close in on information that could finally get him out of this world but it only ends up in him being butchered and left for dead by the people he was searching for." What kind of "information" could get him out of a world full of blood and money? I don't think any sort of information can do that. Also, why would he want to get out of that world in the first place? I thought he entered it because he wanted to find out who massacred his entire town and why. Did he change his mind about wanting to pursue the killer? The part just doesn't seem clear to me.
I hope you can make use of what I have to offer. I wish you the best of luck with your work
Thanks for reading,
January 01, 2013 02:25 PM
初心者/ Shoshinsha / Beginner