December 30, 2012 09:14 PM
初心者/ Shoshinsha / Beginner
Elfi: a war time tale
Panel 1 Open in the village of pangate, a run down place where slaves ore the main export
Panel 2 over head of a children running in the street
panel 3 a boy(sage) leading a girl(Elfi) and running from a butcher
Sage:"come on...this way"
panel 4 boy(Sage) leading the girl(Elfi) down an ally way
sage:"we gotta go.. this way come on"
panel 5 boy and girl standing at a wall
sage:"oh no... a dead end"
Panel 6 boy and girl looking and man off panel shadowing over them
Man:"you kids just make a huge mistake"
panel 7 boy(sage) protecting girl(elfi) who is now crying
Sage:"dont worry Elfi i wont let anything happen to you"
Panel 8 sage arms stretched out as to protect Elfi
sage:"i wont let you hurt her"
Panel 9 letterbox of devilish smile
panel 10 man with one hand on girl(Elfi)
man:"well kid, hows 'bout you give my the girl and we call it even"
Panel 11 Boy sage running at the man(off panel)
Sage:"get your hands off her!"
panel 1 boy(sage) and girl(Elfi) sitting on hill outside of village
Panel 2 Boy(sage) badly beaten
panel 3 Boy(sage) hanging his head down, girl(Elfi) eating a peice of bread
Panel 4 Boy(sage) looking up with a smile
panel 5 Boy(sage) now standing up
Sage:"come on, we be getting home"
panel 6 Girl(elfi) now standing beside Boy(sage)
Elfi:"yhea i guess your right"
panel 7 boy start to walk away girl standing stil both silhouetted
Panel 8 girl(elfi) chasing after boy(sage)
panel 9 girl(elfi) grabbing boy's(sage's) hand
Elfi:"promise.. promise you wont leave..."
panel 10 boy(sage) blushing
panel 1: boy(sage) and girl(Elfi) holding hands on hill over looking (pangate)village
Elfi:"and promise we will stay best friends forever and ever?"
Panel 2 close up on girls(elfi's) face
Elfi:"cross your heart and hope to die?"
panel 3 Sages face looking mischevious
Panel 4 girl(elfi) angry/sad face
Panel 5 boy(sage) kissing girl(elfi) on the nose
Panel 6 boy(sage) now away from girl(Elfi's cheek)
Sage:"forever and ever.."
Panel 7 2 years later...Sage and Elfi are now 14, sage, is packing his things, crying and bleeding, Elfi in the background
Elfi:"sage?, Sage are you okay? what are you doing?
panel 8 Sage now facing Elfi blood and tears rolling down his face
Elfi" leaving? why? and why are you bleeding?"
Sage:"i cannot stay here any longer, they treat us like slaves and they....
Panel 9 sage, now hanging his head down with tears in his eyes
Sage:"i dont want to see you hurting anymore.."
Panel 10 sage looking at Elfi in the foreground and Elfi being in the background
sage:"come with me"
Panel 11 close up on Elfi (now crying) face
Elfi:"my place is here, with our people and so is yours"
Panel 12 Sage finishing packing
Sage:"no, im sorry but i promise to come back for you"
panel 1 Sage silhouetted as he leaves the room in back ground, Elfi in the forground
Panel 2 Sage leaving village(in background)
Sage:"cross my heart..."
Panel 3 4 years later...Sage is now 18 and a soilder for the army standing outside his village (pangate) now in ruins
Sage:"Elfi, im home..."
panel 4 planes fly overhead of the village
so this is the first instalment of my story and if you have any suggestions, corrections, ideas, or want to help in any way with the story, send me a comment.
Last edited by Joymofo; December 30, 2012 at 09:22 PM.