Chapter 13: the Darkness draws closer

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"Bookmen?"

"Yes! rero! Magier-tama and Ameratsu-tama are already on their way! You are suppossed to meet them in three days."
Jaques puts down the bible he was studying before Rero and the akumas appeared. "then I should hurry. Me and my children will need some time to get there. Tell them I may come a bit later. Please go but leave this akuma here." Rero vanishes. "So you are an lv. 1 Akuma", Jaques says in a quiet tone," not smarter than a brick, no emotions, no hope. Who do you wanted to revive? Your husband? Brother? Maybe your lover? Your existence is a sin." Jaques takes a step closer to the akuma. "Well, if you get killed by an excorcist your soul will be saved. I cannot allow that to happen! In my eyes there is no salvation for someone so hopeless." With a single punch Jaques smashes the akuma which blows up in a blue flame. "But I am shure. God loves even you." Folding his hands he goes to his followers.

"Now shall we go?"

Three days later in a cafe.
"Well, now they are too late. I should have thought about this Magier is just too playful." He looks over the Headlines of the Newspaper.

"Slaughter in a church near the Mexican border"
"Mass Insanity caused by strange Virus?"
"Women gave birth to two headed baby"

Suddenly three people dressed in black enter the Cafe.
Jaques smiles and says: "Well, this should get interesting!" He nods to several people inside the cafe and they stand up going behind him.He slowly goes to our three exocists.

"Well, should I introduce myself? Jaques," his skin turns grey," and you are?"
 

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8D You cannot resist his logic XD Whoo~ Nice chappie =3
 

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thx! I was thinking about this scene since I thought about Jaques!
I was inspired by Claudia from Silent Hill 3 and Kain from Poltergeist. I hope I'll be able to develop this further in the next chapters. Making his character a bit "rounder" he's still quiet flat imo
 

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Wow, your character is really cool ^_^
but I wonder, is the place where we meet the restaurant you're sitting in a reading a newspaper as said in chapter 12?
I guess yes, ne? ^_^
*looks through chapter 12*
Yes it is.
 

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I wonder if I should write a bit more about the restaurant? I mean he's sitting there and waiting, thinking about the past..... thats I dunno boring :(
 

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why not? you certainly are allowed to do that... It's all your choice
 

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so expanded it a bit! I'm not good in writing battle scenes so I'll leave that to you.
the people who went with him are called:

Michael using a sword (male)
Raphael using an Axe (male)
Gabriel a women using a Rifle

these are the compatibles and his guardians
remember their humans and have no magical powers (which does not mean they are not skilled fighters)
 

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Raijatsu said:
"Well, should I introduce myself? Jaques," his skin turns grey," and you are?"
drunk! jk jk

Nice chapter! It should be an interesting encounter since we exorcists are supposed to be arriving at the church later.

Your character seems really interesting. I like the quote about God even loving the Akuma when you destroyed it. Such a good quote!

Good job with your premiere chapter!
 

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I agree this chapter was pretty darn good I liked it and I am growing impatient yay!
 
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