[MimiHyuuga] attempts Editing Practice #002!

mimihyuuga

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Ok, here's my attempt...I usually automatically go for the cleaning tests/challenges/tutorials, but lately I've been wanting to do more editing and typesetting, so I had fun doing this.

It's the first time I've ever tried text effects - I always figured redrawing the background would be too much trouble, but this one was easy to redraw, so I had fun with it. ^^

http://img213.imageshack.us/img213/1261/cleanedpage2gn8.jpg

Please point out any mistakes - I'm really looking to improve since I'm a huge beginner at cleaning/editing! Thanks!!
 

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okay i'll give some comments :) I'll go panel by panel so its easier.

Panel 1

1st - the text could be placed a bit more to the left, try nudging the text box by holding ctrl and then moving the arrow keys. Also the placement of the text could be done better, to make it more of a diamond shape.

I would have just made it this way: We've|got to get|ashore so|i can take|out a hoi-|poi capsule|for gas,so|turn into an|oar, okay? (With | indicating a new line)

2nd bubble- Sizing, its a bit too small, try to make it a big bigger maybe 3 to 4 pixels bigger and same thing try and place it in the middle

3rd bubble- looks nice

Panel 2

1st bubble- It looks nice but you could have given the word henge some flair but maybe italizing it but thats just my personal preferences. Also try and nudge it to left a bit too, its a bit close to the border.

Panel 3

1st and 2nd bubble- Try and make the fonts bigger for this and also if possible bold it since he's sorta shouting out one! and two!

SFX- the sfx looks really nice here, big and clear.

3rd and 4th bubble- nudge down a bit

Panel 4

1st bubble- this needs to be bigger, and try and place the text like this All|tied|up!, since he's shouting this to the ppl on the boat, you can also bold it to emphasize that.

2nd bubble- looks nice

Panel 5

1st bubble- the size is fine but you could change the placing of the text to this: Okay, I| made myself| useful! Now| give!

2nd bubble- its fine, the effect on deranged looks nice.

sfx- I think the sfx could be changed to a less butchy looking font, it makes it really hard to see what it is.

Well that's my two cents, you don't have to follow it since most of the comments i've made are my own personal preferences. But good job nonetheless
 

mimihyuuga

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Ahh, thank you SO much! I really didn't notice that stuff at all (total noob) so having someone take the time to actually point it out is wonderful. I really appreciate it! You were a massive help ^_^
 

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no worries :) as long as its helpful.
 
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