Hi...looking for some fonts? Try blambot.com, dafont.com
You can also find fonts here: http://www.unblessed.net/guide/main.html, where I got my first font, Wild words - You should read thru this guide esp about how to deal with gutters, leveling and typesetting. After you learn the basics about Edited Manga, you should redo your first clean and post it up for comments again. I'm sure you can get better feedback at that time.