I'm normally not rating any pages, but I'll make an exception.
I've encircled all the spots I'd suggest to re-do.
First you're blacks aren't fully filled. Mainly on the very left and right in the first panel.
Japanese text is still there. It needs to be removed and eventually re-drawn a few things under it.
There're a lot of spots where you can see some white specks. Doesn't look good in my eyes. :-/
And you should re-do you're borders. I'd suggest to make a straight line from the very left to the right,
therewith all the three small panels have the same borders.
And you should fill the gaps between your borders with white, therewith all the remaining borders of the actual image are removed.
And it's not really necessary to border the first panel on all sides, it's enough if you border it on the right and on the foot of the panel.
(Damn, I really lack of english expressions. :-/ )
Ah, and I'd recommend to save your page as *.png.
So here's the promised picture:
~hel