Randomness

[Erian]

Well, that one is still an work in Progress, it popped up in my mind while re-reading the first volume of Naruto. Still needs a lot of finetuning everywhere. Someone Ideas for details everywhere?
I Planned a few things but I would like a few suggestions from you guys.
So hope you like it^^.

First version (WiP)
http://erian1mortal.deviantart.com/art/Random-Madness-124095714

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Second Version
http://erian1mortal.deviantart.com/art/Random-Madness-Version-1-2-124184726

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Third Version (slightly changes from the 2nd)
http://erian1mortal.deviantart.com/art/Random-Madness-1-3-124197317

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[tEchIe]

really good !
but yes, it could use some detailing;
the trees could use some trunks;
the leaf symbol is reversed, I think ?!
the focus isn't good, you can save yourself a lot of work by focusing on the guy on the right, and blurring out the background and the guy on the left, but you'll need to fix that shuriken...
you can throw in some loose items of clothing, like that rope sasuke has instead of a belt, or naruto's thingy on the shoulder...
- kishimoto's original characters designs are full of this stuff, but he removes them cause it will be too difficult to draw them on a weekly basis...

or you can just leave it as is, cause it's pretty good just like that

 

[Erian]

Thanks, thats the critics I´m looking for the most^^
Yeah, that Shuriken was drawn in totally lazy and I just looked and saw, that hand with the Kunai has to get out of the way, it just looks wel, ugly....

The leaf Symbol is reversed, didn´t noticed that, thanks for pointing out^^

Also thanks for the detailing tips, I should look at my Naruto Seteis, might find some good cloathing things^^.
Are there any scans from the Naruto Data Books?´Cause I think there might be some interesting stuff in there.

 

[VASSiLi]

Oh, nice style, but you need to work on details ^^

 

[tEchIe]

Thanks, thats the critics I´m looking for the most^^
Yeah, that Shuriken was drawn in totally lazy and I just looked and saw, that hand with the Kunai has to get out of the way, it just looks wel, ugly....

The leaf Symbol is reversed, didn´t noticed that, thanks for pointing out^^

Also thanks for the detailing tips, I should look at my Naruto Seteis, might find some good cloathing things^^.
Are there any scans from the Naruto Data Books?´Cause I think there might be some interesting stuff in there.

happy I can help, I'm currently in a slump of sorts (been involved in some non-drawing projects), so I'm hopeful that looking and analysing what other guys draw \ colour, can kick-start me to do something too...

as for the prototypes and early designs, I can't say; I've seen those a while back and for the life of me I can't remember where
however it shouldn't be too hard to make up stuff, the bandages can have loose threads, the buttons that hold the vests can be set loose, you can throw in a coat similar to that of pain or sasuke that will be flowing in the wind like it was discarded by the guy on the left as he jumped, a few kunai on the ground, birds in the air...

and a million other little things that just don't come to mind...

p.s. check out some of the early cover pages, they had all sorts of crazy things in them...

 

[Jaime F.]

Interesting fan art, and nice title. I think it looks pretty cool, and you did a pretty good job to.

 

[Erian]

@VASSiLi: Thank you very much^^, I´ve uploaded the new version now^^.

@tEchIe: Thanks for the tipps, I´m sure I´ll do that^^.

@Jaime F. : Thank you very much^^.

And as I said, here is the new version:

http://erian1mortal.deviantart.com/art/Random-Madness-Version-1-2-124184726

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[tEchIe]

@VASSiLi: Thank you very much^^, I´ve uploaded the new version now^^.

@tEchIe: Thanks for the tipps, I´m sure I´ll do that^^.

@Jaime F. : Thank you very much^^.

And as I said, here is the new version:

http://erian1mortal.deviantart.com/art/Random-Madness-Version-1-2-124184726

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That's brilliant !!! what an improvement !
the shuriken is excellent !
the rock and tree trunks sure add a lot ! and the vines growing on it is true genius !
the focus worked great ! and seems to have saved you a lot of work
the clothings are much better !
the kunai change is a good call ! and no need to work on that hand

if you're still working on it theirs still a few things you can do, but nothing mandatory:

- the hand that's holding the shuriken is still a little off, but hands are always a problem...

- the sky could use some more work, I suggest you either use a stock for reference, or just paste one in the layer The last time I've been to Wacken the sky and natural lights were awful so it's better to use photo-ref, I think, I was kinda wasted

- HDR-like lights from the sky; highlighting surfaces that come into contact from light surfaces...

- you can do some fxs now, like the edges of the blade can sparkle

so much improvements, this is so amazing !

 

[Erian]

Thank you very much^^, I will work on those a bit more I think.
On picture like this I always see how much I can get out of myself when someone gives me hints into theright direction, thanks again for that, I really appreciate it!

 

[tEchIe]

Thank you very much^^, I will work on those a bit more I think.
On picture like this I always see how much I can get out of myself when someone gives me hints into theright direction, thanks again for that, I really appreciate it!

I'm happy I can help ! when I draw or colour or mix audio or anything really, I relay on feedback, without it, my stuff are barely half as good !
I always felt like the most ill conceived opinion is better then no opinion so either way, I qualify

-the coat sure improved on the flow, and the extra kunai's ! so right !
-the glove seems to have fixed things up nicely !
-also, don't think I didn't notice the gradual improvements in textures and details !, its really impressive !

It's already so good ! I'm almost tapped out on tips !

-maybe some more optional highlights, lights and shadows...
-highlighting the hand's bandages was a good call, but it feels like it might need some more definition...
-try playing with some motion blur, especially for the guy on the left, it might add even more motion and flow...

overall, I think you're damn good ! also, if you want to get a certain effect or something else you're not sure how to get done in photoshop, give me a try ! despite my poor output, I'm quite capable when it comes to the technical sides of photoshop

 

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