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original version

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The redraws look very good. There are some mistakes, but you can only see them with the raw next to the clean.

There is, however, still a lot of dirt and noise on the page. Watch this video and you'll be able to easily check your pages for leftover dirt/noise: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jwT0-W0YO4A
 

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Thanks for the help.
Could you make a suggestion about how to fix this mistake?
I tried to make this piece of the suit jacket seems like cloth, but I couldn't.
 
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You mean something like this?

You add an empty layer, you outline the missing part with Pen Tool, you stroke it with white brush (1px tip), then you use soft eraser to slightly erase half (or so) of the line's width. And voila~
 

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You mean something like this?

You add an empty layer, you outline the missing part with Pen Tool, you stroke it with white brush (1px tip), then you use soft eraser to slightly erase half (or so) of the line's width. And voila~
No, actually I meant the part on the bottom of the books. It seems cubistic.
 
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Oh, that.

1. The leg should be slightly wider.
2. There should be more books filling the white space.
3. The jacket should partially cover said books - it shouldn't go under any of them (like it does now).
 

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Also, little finger seems to be missing a joint. Otherwise, really good redraw.
 

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I followed the 3 hints, but I still have problems with the jacket.
But, here is what i've done until now:

---------- Post added at 05:27 PM ---------- Previous post was at 05:22 PM ----------

Also, little finger seems to be missing a joint. Otherwise, really good redraw.
Thanks to your comment, I could see how weird the fingers are. I'll try to fix them too.

---------- Post added at 05:30 PM ---------- Previous post was at 05:27 PM ----------

I intend to use both pages, the covered one and the cleaned one. That's why I'm worried about the last one.

---------- Post added February 16, 2014 at 09:08 AM ---------- Previous post was February 15, 2014 at 05:30 PM ----------

The jacket's edge isn't good enough yet, but it's getting better. The same goes for the fingers.
 
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Thanks to your comment, I could see how weird the fingers are. I'll try to fix them too.
you don't have to redraw stuff, which is already their.

about your jacket
go with something simple.
or with Gradonil_Ral's version
 

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