Deidara and Tobi

[§madara§]

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[lee-nus]

you have some work to do, but i'll say this now so you dont think i jumped at you too personally in the other thread. this is a lot better, it shows you have put some effort into it. some of the shading is good, like that of deidara's face. and you even show that you know how to work with a light source in mind, which most of the forum doesnt. so, i think its okay. there are some grey pixels here and there. there could be more done to the background. and you would probably do better without the black outlines to 青 and 玉. or at least make them a little thinner, they attact too much attention now i think. that's some constructive crit then... if i didnt make myself clear, please ask.

 

[Jaime F.]

Hey Madara, decent coloring this time. I think you're definetly improving, and again I can tell that you're serious about getting good at this type of art. As far as criticsm goes, just the lineart in some areas look thick, but it doesn't look to bad. Also, the lineart for the back of Madara's head, and neck seems to look lightly faded, like the lines are light gray, or white. On the back part of Madara's neck, it looks like grayish white dots are going up through the area where the lineart is. Now I don't know if this is something the person who did the lineart is responsible for, or if it has more to do with your coloring, but if you could learn how to fix that type of stuff, so the lines look smooth, in tact, and one semi-solid color, then it would make your colorings look a lot better. Either that, or just be very picky with what lineart you choose to color. Anyways, if 1 of the other more experienced colorists here knows how to fix that type of thing, or knows what to do to completely avoid having the lines look like that in the end, then please give Madara some good tips about it. Now as for the rest of the coloring, it's definetly the best I've seen from you. I also agree with Lee-nus, that it's good that you put some effort into making some shadows. Chosing a lightsource beforehand, and useing it properly to make your shadows is definetly a good thing to know how to do. Well keep up the good work Madara, and I hope some of the other artists here will give you some more good advice, to help you progress more.

 

[alpvonkri]

Good job!!!