I'm wondering what were you trying to do in the speech bubbles. It looks interesting, but I' not sure what you were trying to do, so an explanation would be nice. I was also trying to recall whether or not, that is 1 of Pain's hands around Ebisu's throat. In Hiruko's version it looks like 1 of Pain's bare hands, but in yours, it looks like Pain's wearing black gloves, or it's just part of Ebisu's clothing. Anyways, overall your coloring is okay, I do think the blood marks on Ebisu's face could of been colored better though.