Done Karneval 16 (need help with translating some lines)

Mirlaine

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I'm translating Gareki's inner monologue from Karneval chapter 16.

He and his group have arrived in a wintry country. Then they are presented with a little robot-like thing that is supposed to keep them warm. Then Gareki starts thinking to himself. I have trouble understanding what he's trying to say there :( Can someone help me?

Here's his full monologue:

無意味に俺を同行させんのも
Me traveling together with them is not meaningless.
ヤツラを引き寄せる囮の一つだろ
I'm probably just a bait being pushed towards those guys.
大歓迎だな
A warm welcome, huh.
せいぜいヤツラの目の前に放り出してくれよ
Just throw me in front of those guys.
煙嗅いだ程度実感じゃスッキリしねぇ
???
煙の奥に隠れて
???
他人の泣き顔で優越に浸る
???
馬鹿の胸倉を掴めるなら進んで利用されてやる
??? (possibly: If they're going to drag me around like a fool, then I'm going to move forward and make myself useful.)
 
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Here's one option. I didn't look at the raw though:


無意味に俺を同行させんのも
Taking me along for no reason,

ヤツラを引き寄せる囮の一つだろ
Means I'm just bait for luring them in.

大歓迎だな
Sure thing.

せいぜいヤツラの目の前に放り出してくれよ
Throw me in front of them.

煙嗅いだ程度実感じゃスッキリしねぇ
Just smelling the smoke won't be good enough.

煙の奥に隠れて
Hiding behind the smoke,

他人の泣き顔で優越に浸る
Looking down at peoples' crying faces,

馬鹿の胸倉を掴めるなら進んで利用されてやる
If I can get a hold of the idiot doing that, then go ahead. Use me.


Not a good translation, but it's reasonably accurate. The confusing part is that the last three lines form a single thought. You might want to consider rearranging the structure of the last 3 lines for the sake of clarity (If space/bubbles will allow it).
 

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:D Thank you so much!! Your translation actually makes perfect sense to me! Gareki seeks revenge on those yatsura, so... Wai, it's just so perfect! Would you mind if I copypaste your translation into my script? I'll properly credit you and stuff :)
 

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Sure, go ahead :)
 
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