Help Wanted My one shot for the Shonen Jump Competition

[Seny]

Hey guys!

I've been drawing manga for years, and I entered the recent International Shonen Jump Manga Competition with a one shot, titled DreamWalker. I didn't get into the final six, but I'm too attached to this story to let it sink like a failure. So I posted it on MangaMagazine, if you're interested you can read it, and I'd be really interested in hearing your opinions. Feedback and critiques are always welcome, I want to learn a lot from this project, so I can improve my skills.
Thank you very much in advance, and I hope you'll enjoy reading my work! ^^


You can read the manga here: http://www.mangamagazine.net/manga-and-comics/DreamWalker/detail-page/5636?lang=en

You can also watch a quick trailer video I made from it, to decide whether it's worth your time, or not. ^^" http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tICSls5EUR8

 

[SharkBait]

There is something you need to learn? I love Rain such a perfect character design that is even better than some of the lead characters in Jump even and in the competitions final six.

 

[Seny]

Thank you for your opinion! Yes, there are many things I still need to learn, starting from art basics to story telling. This one shot has many flaws which could have been done better. ^^" But I'm really happy you liked the design of Rain.

 

[bossx5]

I am just now reading this first your art work is wonderful great concept. If u don't mind do u know what place u can in.

 

[zachfulger]

that was pretty good.......one of the best for this sight

 

[kentigurn]

I haven't finished it yet but it seems a bit exposition heavy at the moment.

 

[stream light]

It was really great, i really liked it it was super cool one of the best