Done Need a TLC

[b3nriya]

Hey guys

I hope I'm posting this in the right place ... so I need a TLC for these three pages here the first two are a little shorter and the third is basically the whole page, so I hope that I can rely on your help. I marked the sentences i need help with in a different color

pg. 114

Spoiler

pg. 114
panel 1: why you!
if you listen to my reason, you will understand that sometimes it was Momiji's doing // she was ordered now and appears to have listened to the speech!!
panel 2: so, since i didn't want to behave violently
your subordinate can't behave in any other way but violently!!
panel 3: besides ...even if // even if my existence is the mistake of the gods...
thanks to that, i've been able to protect many important people
panel 4: even you can't claim...
that all of that is a mistake!!
panel 5: certainly... i can't deny people important to you
nevertheless...

pg. 116

Spoiler

pg. 116
panel 1: i mean / weren't you my opponent to begin with!?
how can you be relying on your boss, you've lost your edge too!
panel 2: watch what you say Ichiko...
i didn't rely on her... she came here for her own convenience!
how mean!!
panel 3: well are we going to have a match // let's have a summerlike nagashi soumen speed-eating contest!!
shouldn't we put something like that off until the real summer?
hahaa! in the end, you're just scared of being defeated, aren't you?
i'm not scared or anything!!
huh...
oh?
panel 4: what are you doing you two? you should leave that aside and quickly start with your fight // even you can't deny, that until you have a mutual understanding, this conversation...
panel 5: outsiders should keep quiet!!
it is involving no killing so i have no confidence

pg. 150

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pg. 150
character file 32
Safran
birthday: unknown
blood type: unknown
height: 2m 50cm
weigth: unknown
things he likes: Yamabuki, things Yamabuki likes
things he dislikes: things Yamabuki dislikes, careless binbougami and their familiars
in the language of flowers: Safran (overly careful, abusive, standard beauty, normal love, pleasure, merry, joy of youth)

Kumagai's familiar-senpai, rather than his boss doesn't he look more like his instructor? spartanic. absolutely. did he go to the familiar training academy?
ah, can you imagine it, the youth of the familiars. they can't speak however. su... surreal...

character file 33
family head of the binbougami
if she would be Yamabuki's boss, i naturally had the idea of making her the family head.
she is a "sorry for lumping it all together!"- kind of god character, only with a "unkown" foundation.
the granny is the superior of Yamabuki, but are the other geezers too? or something... like that.
ah,, they are also the first male binbougami.
at least if i thought up of a name for the granny it would be Ichou (Chouju Chinkon, the graceful).
i wanted to draw the granny on the back of the cover where it was said that she was over 1000 years, but
the assistant who saw the original picture made a brief comment: "would Yamabuki look like that granny as well after 1000 years?"
...huh? aah...
under these circumstances, there's no comment.

Update: It doesn't need to get checked anymore since a friend of mine was kind enough to check it for me

 

[mikkih]

Done -->Glad that you got help from your friend. If you have your final version, other members may appreciate it.

P114

事情を聞いて納得するなら紅葉の時にやってるわよ。Sounds like you and me are reversed in your translation
聞いたようなセリフ今更並べられても。今更～しても: It's to late to


大切なもの：もの what is important/precious
もの（mono） can be 物 (things) or 者 (person/people) but it generally includes things and people. Things like feelings and relationships are such examples.


P116

頼る(tayoru/rely on) and 頼む(tanomu/ask someone a favor)　share the same kanji, but the latter is "to ask"

巻き込んで殺さねえ自信はねえ＝（あなたを）巻き込んで（私があなたを）殺さない自信は（私にはない）
Edit:
巻き込んで殺さねえ自信はねえ＝（あなたを）巻き込んで（私があなたを）殺さない自信は（私には)ない
I don't have confidence not to kill you by accident. (Basically, it's the same as "I might kill you by accident.")

P150 - I have not checked

 

[b3nriya]

ok ^^ so here is the corrected version of the sentences in question (sry it took so long XP)

pg. 114
panel 1: why you!
If I’ve listened and understood your circumstances then I would’ve done that with Momiji already//No matter if even if you just repeated the same kind of words I’ve heard before!!

pg. 116
panel 5: outsiders should keep quiet!!
I have no confidence to avoid killing you once you’re involved

pg. 150

Spoiler

character file 32
Safran
birthday: unknown
blood type: unknown
height: 2m 50cm
weigth: unknown
things he likes: Yamabuki, things Yamabuki likes
things he dislikes: things Yamabuki dislikes, careless binbougami and their familiars
in the language of flowers: Safran (overly careful, abusive, standard beauty, normal love, pleasure, merry, joy of youth)

Kumagai's familiar-senpai, rather than his boss doesn't he look more like his instructor? spartanic. absolutely. did he go to the familiar training academy?
ah,I wanted to write about it can you imagine it, the youth of the familiars. they can't speak however. su... surreal...

character file 33
family head of the binbougami
if she would be Yamabuki's boss, i naturally had the idea of making her the family head.
she is a "sorry for lumping it all together!"- kind of god character, only with a "unkown" foundation.
the granny is the superior of Yamabuki, but are the other geezers too? or something... like that.
ah,, they are also the first male binbougami.
at least if i thought up of a name for the granny it would be Ichou (Chouju (Long life) Chinkon (Repose of Souls), the graceful).
i wanted to draw the granny on the back of the cover where it was said that she was over 1000 years, but
the assistant who saw the original picture made a brief comment: "would Yamabuki look like that granny as well after 1000 years?"
...huh? aah...
under these circumstances, there's no comment.