[Original Story] Elemental

[KyuRyu]

https://www.facebook.com/media/set/?set=a.167654826742479.1073741837.155921407915821&type=1

I finally finished my first chapter and wanted some opinions on what I've got (and maybe advertize a tad)

 

[Farfalla]

I have a small comment xD

The way you drew the bubbles makes me think that you did it before thinking about the dialogue itself. I'm saying this 'cause, sometimes, it looks like the speeches wouldn't fit the bubbles, and you had to adjust the text to them, and not the other way around. The typeset would look better if the texts were placed in bubbles suited for them^^

About the ad part... This site is an online reader for original works, so give it a try^^

 

[KyuRyu]

Yup you caught me! Honestly, the text was the final thing I had to do so I did sort of lose my mind doing it haha. I have to keep it in mind for next chapter.