Pinoy Thread v.5

[mangadictus]

@ garpjr1188
- well, anything critically acclaimed and contemporary. or anything you have in mind. i got the whole nick sparks collection dyan sa pinas, all paperback except three weeks with my brother which is hardbound. you can post me anything you have there are long as they're .pdf and if its not that much to ask maybe you can find me the whole diablo series, dragonlance and forgotten realms series, and maybe the available warcraft manga. i only got the sunwell trilogy. that is, if its not much to ask from you. thanks!
- and oh! id like to add the chicken soup series, the sisterhood of traveling pants series (currently has book 3), men are from mars women are from venus, shopaholic series, then the newberry books.

 

[Paper]

@MD- have you tried going to fanfic? it may not be the original stuff, but there are some worth reading!

 

[mangadictus]

@ level4paperboy
- nah, never liked fanfics anyway...

 

[Paper]

@MD- lol....no originality ba? in their defence some of the fics i've read are quite entertaining....(i made a SH one...in screenplay format...sadly i never got around to continuing it...lol)

 

[mangadictus]

@ level4paperboy
- maybe ive never read anything interesting from that category yet.... too bad...

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@ Devil May Cry Anime
- WTF! didnt know about this! aarrgggg im going crazy cant watch it

 

[Paper]

@MD- lol...i have an idea! wanna proof-read for me? i'm currently working on a few different titels....and my proof-reader's been MIA for a few weeks now...

 

[bisayang dako]

putang ina... onemanga.com is down!!!!

 

[garpjr1188]

@MD
sorry all my collections are in ms reader format(*.lit)..as i've said i dont like reading in any other format, i like page by page reading, not scrolling down..

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hey i just finished reading RK..how come the anime has the greater number of arcs? the manga got only 2, she shishio one and the enishi(revenge) one..it was great, a bit sad on the ending, saying goodbye to all the characters. i didnt see the one where they fought the other ninjas together with some knights or the one about the underground christians..

 

[bisayang dako]

sino po meron ng lahat ng chapter ng One Piece?

 

[baboysai]

hey l4pb, I could proof-read for you... hehe.

if i'm not too busy.

 

[Paper]

@BBS- hm.... promies not to freak out if you read something disturbing?

 

[bakashijinsan]

@l4pb

Why don't you just post it here so that we can all see and have a say. That way more people can proof-read it for you.

But I have got to admit, I'm not really a fan of fan fictions. As you mentioned l4pb, it lacks originality.



@bisdak

I have all the chapters for One Piece man? Why?

 

[yoniekai]

download ka lahat ng chapters OP sa www.onepiecehq.com

 

[mangadictus]

@ level4paperboy
- yeah i can do proof-reading, maybe. be warned. im very OC when it comes to details. ill try my best to be up par with your standards.

@ garpjr1188
- that's ok that'll do. i think i saw abc amber lit converter for download. ill go check if itll work

@ bakashijinsan
- yeah that'll work. just spoilertag each others work with the name's caption on it.

@ bisayang dako
- its kinda slow but it'll do. check out groups.msn.com/OnePieceManga
- now remember there are 3 versions of that group, check the 3rd one

 

[Paper]

@BSS- oi! long time no see ah! lol... i'm still kind of sceptic about posting it here...the last time i posted something like that i only got one reply....mhmhmhm...in fanfic..

@MD- yaaay! being OC is ok...i need someone to scrutinize my work....so that i can see the holes!

 

[yoniekai]

@l4pb: that sounds like fun dude, can i help?? i can proof too some of your titles

 

[mangadictus]

@ level4paperboy
- do you write this way? i mean, its more like script form. ill proof-read this and not change the structure. but if you want it more narrative-like, like those of novels, i can do edit it but its gonna take time. i printed them so i can make changes back at camp. if you dont mind ill rephrase some of the lines that i think needs to.

 

[Paper]

@yonie- hm....i'm warning you ahead of time....my stuff aint that good....and well...it can be pretty disturbing too...

@MD- that one that i sent you was way back when i was still in highschool...lol...my new screenplays are written properly now...(well...at least i think i write them properly....lol). you can edit it if you like..it;s all up to you...

 

[mangadictus]

@ level4paperboy
- mhen am i too busy or something, that i was just finished with scene one. i change a little bit of the structure, did rephrases, and changed it to narrative form so most of it is past 3rd person view. mhen, i feel rusty. there's a line there, i dunno which one it is now, that took me 5 mins to decide what phrase would sound better to the human ear. crap! ill finish this up then maybe tomorrow ill have the final edit. hope i pass ur standards mhen.

Spoiler: scene one edit

Scene one

"Nobody knows why, or what I get out of doing it. Nobody knows how I get by without feeling guilty/any guilt at all… they just don’t understand…”

Tim sat up in his bed. He looks at the clock, then noticed his surroundings. The room is dark and looks thrashed as if someone raided it. Light from the sun punched through the openings of the exhaust fan & the cracks on the wood nailed to the windows. "Morning already?"

--
-Opening credits roll while tim gets dressed, rides his bike, & rides off. BGM: Sugar Free- “Cleptomania”-

Tim, while riding his bike. "Five down, two more to go…"

-Credits continue W/ BGM-

"This time it ends…"

Credits continue W/ BGM-

"I’m coming for you…"

Credits continue W/ BGM-

Tim, still riding his bike, tightens his grip on the handle and accelerates. "Alessa…"

Credits continue W/ BGM. Tim hits some kind of a creature. His bike crashes, & BGM fades out-
--

Tim helped himself up and then started at his bike. "Argh! Damn!" He checked himself for injuries. "Hhmmm… this is your doing, isn’t it Alessa?" He laughed while rubbing his forehead. "You never change… last stick." Out of his pocket, he took the last stick of cigarette from its pack, lit it, then threw the empty pack away. He blew out smoke and started walking. Tim took out his gun, loaded it with a magazine and cocked it. "I know you got your little pets to come after me." A zombie dog is now running towards him. Tim gave it a clean headshot and its lifeless body feel on the ground. "You should really teach them how to play nice… By the way, I’ve got some friends coming after me. You can do whatever you want with them."

Tim stopped and blew out some smoke. "Don’t worry Alessa… I still have one more to kill, so you can just sit back and relax…" He blew another one, looked down, and started walking again. "For now."

Tim soon arrived at a deserted gas station and saw a car nearby with its doors open. "Not my style." He went in, hot-wired the car, "But it’ll have to do…" and closed the door. *next scene*

 

[garpjr1188]

@ level4paperboy
- mhen am i too busy or something, that i was just finished with scene one. i change a little bit of the structure, did rephrases, and changed it to narrative form so most of it is past 3rd person view. mhen, i feel rusty. there's a line there, i dunno which one it is now, that took me 5 mins to decide what phrase would sound better to the human ear. crap! ill finish this up then maybe tomorrow ill have the final edit. hope i pass ur standards mhen.

Spoiler: scene one edit

Scene one

"Nobody knows why, or what I get out of doing it. Nobody knows how I get by without feeling guilty/any guilt at all… they just don’t understand…”

Tim sat up in his bed. He looks at the clock, then noticed his surroundings. The room is dark and looks thrashed as if someone raided it. Light from the sun punched through the openings of the exhaust fan & the cracks on the wood nailed to the windows. "Morning already?"

--
-Opening credits roll while tim gets dressed, rides his bike, & rides off. BGM: Sugar Free- “Cleptomania”-

Tim, while riding his bike. "Five down, two more to go…"

-Credits continue W/ BGM-

"This time it ends…"

Credits continue W/ BGM-

"I’m coming for you…"

Credits continue W/ BGM-

Tim, still riding his bike, tightens his grip on the handle and accelerates. "Alessa…"

Credits continue W/ BGM. Tim hits some kind of a creature. His bike crashes, & BGM fades out-
--

Tim helped himself up and then started at his bike. "Argh! Damn!" He checked himself for injuries. "Hhmmm… this is your doing, isn’t it Alessa?" He laughed while rubbing his forehead. "You never change… last stick." Out of his pocket, he took the last stick of cigarette from its pack, lit it, then threw the empty pack away. He blew out smoke and started walking. Tim took out his gun, loaded it with a magazine and cocked it. "I know you got your little pets to come after me." A zombie dog is now running towards him. Tim gave it a clean headshot and its lifeless body feel on the ground. "You should really teach them how to play nice… By the way, I’ve got some friends coming after me. You can do whatever you want with them."

Tim stopped and blew out some smoke. "Don’t worry Alessa… I still have one more to kill, so you can just sit back and relax…" He blew another one, looked down, and started walking again. "For now."

Tim soon arrived at a deserted gas station and saw a car nearby with its doors open. "Not my style." He went in, hot-wired the car, "But it’ll have to do…" and closed the door. *next scene*

hmm..interesting read, nice work for both of you guys..very straightforward and not so descriptive..i think it still has a script/comics type of form than a narrative one like in a book because of this..

by the way is this an original work or a fanfic of what book/show/comics? i am not familiar with the characters...