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@woody,
yep! I've taken up CW 10 under prof. Butch Guerrero. Prerog. Hehe. Okay naman ang class nya, coz it's workshop-style. Other than writing exercises, you write two major short stories, and people will dissect it in class.

Nga pla, if you guys care,
these are the links to my two short stories.
Ten Feet Below Ground
Picking Up The Beads
 

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@MD- thanks for the compiment! :XD ...lol, i have OCD too...but with my hands....i can't stand getting my hands dirty....in fact i run to the sink right after touching money....i also carry alcohol with me wherever i go....:scry...weird... as for starthip troopers goes, it's not based on the movie...rather the book.

also, don't worry about finishing anything! it's not like i'm asking you to edit! lolz... i tend to leave some blank spaces in my screenplays so that whoever directs it has holes to fill out....then again, it may cause some confusion with other people...lol...

@BBS- LOL..it's ok, i know there are lots of people out there who dislike reading things in screenplay format...as for the starship troopers fic, it's because of the pasting...and i'm too lazy to fix it..lol...
 
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@bbsai: ang galeng! very introspective! you're really observant aren't you? :D i like your stories, good job :thumbs

i imagine myself tho getting frustrated at a creative writing class... im either too proud that i deem all criticism unappreciative of my work or ignorant... i always feel that way, i can see myself arguing with the professor, forcing my disdain of all opinions i regard as everything objective, whether it is or not :XD
 

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@woody,
yep! I've taken up CW 10 under prof. Butch Guerrero. Prerog. Hehe. Okay naman ang class nya, coz it's workshop-style. Other than writing exercises, you write two major short stories, and people will dissect it in class.
Yay!! Kukunin ko siya next sem. I hope my sched permits it.. epal ng mga majors ko e. Sa lahat ng engg, eee ang may pinakaepal na sked ng majors... hehe :tem Either CW10 or LA (Landscape Architecture - the super GE!! :XD)
 

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@yonie, thanks. Taking the CW class wasn't easy for me too, but I'm very honest about my work so I really take constructive criticism well.

@woody, well I hear (being archi and all) that LA 1, though a super-GE is fairly boring. haha. That's talking about it relative to other archi subjects.
 

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o? wala pa sumagot saakin! lol...saan maganda mag take-up ng CW dito sa pinas?
 

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what are you talking about? HERE in this thread of course! haha it's free and illegal too xD
 

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:laser i need a diploma....
 

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and I WANT a diploma too in that field.

since we're all talking about some works, I'll try posting mine here. Just give me some feedbacks. I'll be reading your works (l4pb and bbsai) once I get home.



Portrait or landscape really doesn’t matter so long as the essence of the picture sings
By: Aniki del Valle​


She lost her grip of her handbag as his words echoed inside her head. She was in shock but nonetheless, she tried to regain her calm. It was too late though for he already noticed this. Actually, he was expecting this from her—this very reaction. He was also expecting something else. Any moment now.
“You could be wrong.” She braved to let go of these words. Stammering wasn’t really a popular way of claiming confidence.
He just smiled at her. He wanted to answer immediately but he was feeling mixed emotions inside him. He wanted it to end now; and he wanted to kid some more. But being a man doesn’t entitle you to behave like a gentleman.
He just sighed under a quiet smile and let her speak.
“You could be wrong,” she said once again, now with more confidence than before. It seemed that, after saying that a while ago, she has already created an escape from the truth; a haven that could calm her.
He still remained silent.
“I mean, what is your proof? Did…did you see? Did you hear?” She was continually waving her hand in the air, swatting it with a quick swoosh and blending unseen particles with violent shaking of her hands.
He continued to say nothing while throwing at her awkward smiles. He wasn’t sure whether these smiles were anymore comforting but he was quite sure that it was adding fuel to the already growing fire.
Well, if it’s crackling nicely, it’s music to my ears.
There was now a long and prickly silence. He looked at her intently. Her eyes were rolling in different directions. Up, down, left, right—everywhere except towards his direction.
What could she be thinking right now?
“You’re just messing with us. You want us to break apart!” She finally yelled—a sign that she’s already losing control. Now, he has got himself a nice bonfire in front of him, rising rapidly, building up heat as it consumes all its internal fuel. And he was the oxygen that blows it ever brighter.
Her eyes were now filled with tears, flooding her vision in a mortifying way. Suppressed anger, perhaps indignation, fear, sadness were all welling up from her eyes, like water that dribbled heavily from being hurriedly drunk from a pitcher. There was no more space to place all that volume of water yet, she needed to empty the whole container if she was to live with it.
The almost silent sobs and wails should have been ailing and disquieting, had it been a normal situation, but every broken frequency of sound that harbors that room is being translated by my ears into a smooth and swaying music—that’s it! Pachabel’s Canon.
Then she laughed. She just continued laughing for some time, dousing away his fine bonfire little by little. She looked at him, for the first time after loosing her calm.
Not good.
“You have no evidence!” A finger was aiming at him like a bullet that’s suspended in mid-air, impossible to divert, with all murderous intents at its tip.
He looked at her eyes. This wasn’t even worth worrying.
This time he flashed a triumphant smile.
That finger in front of him began to twitch in despair. It curled back and retreated along with its vessel in utter defeat.
“That’s a lie.” She whispered.
He shook his head.
She clamped her face with her hands, her nails digging through her face, scratching, damaging that once prestigious visage. “THAT’S A LIE!” she shrieked.
She ran towards the back to an isolated room and disappeared from his sight.
About time.
Pachabel’s Canon was playing again. There were loud crashings, breaking of things, moving of furniture and hysterical screams. And in an abrupt moment, Canon ended.

I walked towards the door and opened it. The room was lighted dimly from the street lamps outside. I took my cellphone out and switched to camera mode.

He was more anxious than he ever was in his life. It was during that small span of time that he sweated more than ever. Everything ended when his cellphone rang. But it was not a call. His screen read, “1 multimedia message received.” With clammy hands, he opened it and saw a pair of familiar feminine feet hanging in the air. It was titled picturesque with a message at the bottom: We’re free.

I can see some weaknesses in this work of mine but I need somebody else's opinion about it. Please! :wtf
 

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@ level4paperboy
- mhen, im lost here. creative writing? i dunno, im not creative enough. or maybe i just wasnt paying attention to class. blame it on counter-strike, quake, dota, uo, samurai showdown and daytona XD

@ bakashijinsan
- damn! ur good! *kudos to bakashijinsan* all i cay is: very deep thought, smooth flow of narration, emotionally descriptive. MangaHelpers Times Best Seller: 2 Thumbs Up!


@ http://www.lyrics-realm.com/mp3/
- so guys, did you check that site? can you download stuff from it?
 
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@l4pb, sa UP!! hehe. take ka ng CW course sa UP. I don't know about it being a course if a diploma's what you need, i mean, kung meron ba silang short course for it or something. Kasi all I've taken is one subject ng CW.

@bakashijin,
I'll read your work in a while.
 

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WTF????????? boomboom got KO'd in the FIRST ROUND! SHIT!!!! what the hell is this????
 

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@ Heroes Season 2
- David Anders (known for his role as Alias' Julian Sark or "Mr. Sark") was casted as Takezo Kensei. huh!? an american turning japanese? not good... not good.
 
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who's this guy? hehe wala talaga akong alam. I have an idea it's boxing though. :XD
 

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why not cast this guy? girls watch out... *initiates drool containment procedure*




 
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cast him for what?
oh I've seen a very good painting of the first pic in dA, as in gayang gaya.
 

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@ baboysai
- as Takezou Kensei in Heroes. Season 2 will start with a few episodes of Hiro back in feudal Japan. eh ung na cast nila is an american. not good. so i suggest takeshi kaneshiro should play that part. he speaks fluent english. and i dont think takezou needs to speak english.















 
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Thanks so much MD! That's one heck of a compliment. How bout some comments on the story? I know it's got weaknesses. So please be as OC as you can.

peepz, if you have time, please comment on my work. It'd really help me big time.

@bbsai

I've read your work a while ago and I have to say your stories are very entertaining. I especially liked the monologue kind of story. If I get it right
Jen is a baby and the guy they were discussing was their father.

@l4pb

I'll be reading your work later at work. I'll hit the sack first.



re: CW course

Diploma ba yun bbsai? Kase I REALLY want a diploma on that program. :wtf
And what are the chances of me getting some of the subjects I've taken in college being credited so that I won't be feeling like I've gone all the way back to first year college?


re: takeshi Kaneshiro

heyheyhey! He really looks like Samanosuke! Who'd have thought that a real guy would look like some CG character? :XD


errrr...who the hell's boomboom?
 

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@ bakashijinsan
- looks like? Samanosuke was actually modeled after Takeshi Kaneshiro! hehehehe
 

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@bakashijin, didn't you receive my PM? man, I put a lot of thought on my comments there.

and on the story, yeah, you got it right. ^_^
however, on the diploma thing, di talaga ako sure e. Because I only took one subject on CW, and that's not enough for a diploma. Pero even one subject is so worth it. Also because the prof I had expected us to catch up really fast kaya we had no choice but to cover a lot of the subject matter.


@yonie,
i remembered you posted something about some ilonggo vid on youtube. Was it this benjo thing?
 
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