Discussion Re-write the Alvarez Arc

Would you change the Alvarez arc?

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Dude... it just gets better! How do you do it?

I loved how you treated Irene but I think this is going to be the best part of the re-write for me, August's personality is much better and I'm interested to see how his fight goes.
 

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The Alvarez Rewrite - Chapter 22
And so begins the August fight!
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Thank you for this! Please show us more Ancient spells. Hahaha. Loved the last line. "This is what it means to be the king of magic." Chills.

Great touch with the nullification bit. Nice twist. Oh, and his far more objective-fueled persona.

Sadly Irene still couldn't fare much better. But the fight had a far better excuse for her loss this time. Although I still call Wendy's mastery over high-level enchantment PiS.

Great stuff. Please do us proud for August (he did win the fighting tourney hahaha).:super
 

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Dude... it just gets better! How do you do it?

I loved how you treated Irene but I think this is going to be the best part of the re-write for me, August's personality is much better and I'm interested to see how his fight goes.
I'd say it gets even better from here on out ;)

That's exactly what I love about August here, his personality. He feels a lot more like an evil Gandalf of sorts, an old, wise wizard with more of an interest in politics and morality rather than just giving a creepy pedo smile at the thought of father and daughter (still can't believe that happened -_-;)

P.S.: Love the Cody avi!
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That chapter...

Crime Sorciere vs August! The re-match that should have been!

I'm too hyped dude, that last panel was god damn glorious.

I'm loving August right now, his question isn't stupid AF now, and the only reason Gildarts and Cana are still alive is because he was interested in them.
Damn, Hiro should hire you man, the canon manga pales in comparison to your re-write IMO.

Also, a big thanks again for doing this, I can't imagine how much time this must take to make.
 

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So you made August even better and gave CS (or at least Jellal) another chance at defeating him. That is glorious.
I love the way this is going :wtf
 

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I'm not a fan of non-canon stuff but i see a lot of effort in your Alverz rework. Good job."
 

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This was the first chapter we're it actually felt more like a fanfiction. Im not buying CS vs August v2. If Gildarts cant do shit to August, CS shouldnt be able to. Oh well, ill just wait to see if my ideal Laxus/Jellal/Gildarts vs August happens


Pssss, please make it happen!!!!
 

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This was the first chapter we're it actually felt more like a fanfiction. Im not buying CS vs August v2. If Gildarts cant do shit to August, CS shouldnt be able to. Oh well, ill just wait to see if my ideal Laxus/Jellal/Gildarts vs August happens


Pssss, please make it happen!!!!
Actually, I did consider at first to do a Laxus + Jellal + Gildarts team up, but it eventually not only felt incredibly disjointed, but also lacked any real depth or point to the fight, which just made me unsatisfied with it. Because of that I decided to shift the focus onto Jellal and Crime Sorciere (the latter of which really needed character development this arc) and centered more around the themes of the fight rather than just a mindless 3v1.

If it's any consolation, here's some scrapped storyboards that I tried out for Laxus (keep in mind these are heavily unfinshed though).

As for CS not being able to truly damage August it's true, though they have Jellal on their side (they are more for support), a mage of a level close to that of Gildarts. Not to mention, no one is saying that they might actually win against him...
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Best chapter of the arc. "We builed an Utopia." This was best quote for entire FT series.Also you deserve to get a crossover manga with FT x. NNT.
 

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@OharaLibrarian My boi... how do you do this!? Every week I've thought "the next chapter can't be more hype than the last", and every week you prove me wrong.

Damn, this is what Crime Sorciere should have been like in the canon, powerful mages with great teamwork. Seriously, Midnight's double illusion was awesome, and of course...

ABYSS BREAK! :datass

With the AoE of Melt! :victory

Not to mention Jellal's rapid casting. But the praise doesn't go solely to CS, August himself has a much better personality, as well as dialogue.

Everything in this chapter was incredible man, as are the previous chapters of this re-write. Thank you so much for doing this!
 

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Without thorough re-writing to the main plot. there isn't much you can change to actually make the arc good. But I could tweak what we were given mostly in regards to match ups, and maybe add little to the story side.

I'll break it down from a Spriggan perspective:
Just about the time the GoI are about to land a fatal blow on an all-out Serena after a tough battle, August and Jacob join to make quick work of them. It then resumes to the original track when Acnologia enters

Story: a backstory...
Fight:
Same but longer. After Laxus' illness is cured, the fight continues on for an extra chapter.

Story: Just give the poor man a story...
Fight:
R1) Same
R2) Anything that doesn't involve Lisanna and Elfman lol (I like you Lisanna but you're fodder)

Story: I don't particularly like this guy. So as an eloquent man once said: "Skip!!"
R1) Same.
R2) Kagura vs Base Dimaria rematch. Who wouldn't want to see some legit swordplay action from Dimaria? I'd like this to end with Kagura stripping Dimaria naked before delivering the final hit -____- As Dimaria falls defeated, she curses Sherria for putting Chronos to sleep, and disturbing her time dimension. Effectively giving Kagura and Sherria the highlight they deserve.

Story: Backstory with August and Brandish.
R1) Same, excluding the silly fanservice. I mean current Natsu is extremely capable even without BS factored in. That's been established since the beginning of year X792
R2) Mira and Lucy vs an actually serious Jacob. Lucy serves to somehow disrupt his hax. Mirajane does most of the fighting and barely manages to win. I'd also nerf Alegria and prolong its duration to make things interesting.

Story:.... I don't know. I actually like Jacob's personality. His introduction in the Fairy Tail guild was pretty cool and goofy. I don't mind his shyness so long as it plays no role in battles.
Fight:
Screw this clown.. I would leave both rounds as they are. Maybe scrap the part where Brandish overhypes his enchanted-version, or better yet not have him enchanted in the first place. Good thing he served to develop Kagura, and it was really refreshing to see Erza struggle for once. I guess that makes up for his disappointing character.

Story: Well there is potential here, I mean we still don't know about his connection to Irene... is Fairy Tail really ending in 3 weeks?
Too lazy to care, sorry.
Eh, I can't think of any interesting setups for this woman. Ever since her connection to Lucy was disclosed, she was kind of just there as a hype narrator and plot device that can take neither side. So I don't know. It annoys me that she hasn't got a proper chance to demonstrate her abilities though. I suppose a melodramatic fight between Brandish and Dimaria without cheap hax involved would be enjoyable, but that would eliminate the Kagura/Dimaria rematch. Well if it does go that way, then I would replace Bradman for Mermaid Heel's forgotten guild master and pit her up against Kagura with minor assistance.

Story: a huge-ass NO-NO! for her trying to kill Lucy for revenge. She should have just attacked her in an attempt to escape or something coz the vengeance thing doesn't match her personality at all. Brandish is very difficult to meaningfully change because doing so would have a ripple effect on the arc. I would at least make her stop hyping Spriggans every second line!
Fight: vs Gray + Lyon. This guy was portrayed as Zeref's second in command. He should have been the fourth and weakest "Special Spriggan" Instead, the poor thing was destined to be PoF-Gray's literal punching bag "BLRGHH!!!"

Story: A little backstory would be nice. But no connection to Fairy Tail, please. Next...
I'm good if this fight remains for the most part the same. Except without Erza getting her bones crushed. Wendy's high-enchantment is overpowered so slashing the meteorite wasn't THAT illogical by itself. And Irene is too overpowered. Maybe going the feelsy way by letting her kill herself for her daughter's sake wasn't too bad a decision.

Story: I didn't like her love-hate relationship with Erza coz it didn't make sense to me. Wouldn't it be better if Erza remained inside her belly against her will for one reason or another? Like, as a result of a deformation, or a curse, caused by her dragonification or something along these lines.
R1) Defeats Jellal and Co (on-panel -_-), with them figuring out his weakness a bit late. That would have made Crime Sorciere less stupid. Although realistically, he should have killed them... not doing that was bad for his character..
R2) Scrap the laughable part where Cana hurts August with her puny cards. Besides that, I've no idea how this fight could have been handled coz he's a top Spriggan. Maybe Crime Sorciere sending Racer to inform them of his weakness is a good start to redeem themselves.

Story: That's a toughie... I want a chapter or two dedicated for his past with Brandish and Dimaria. But he's also a papa/mama's boy. I didn't like that he killed himself the way he did but then again, Fairy Tail, and allies would otherwise be outmatched, logically.
The first chapter where he destroys Kagura should stay 90% as it is. That fight was actually AWESOME for both characters up that point (Kagura biting her tongue, Larcade stopping Archenemy, the panels, flow, dialogue, creepy vibes! Yes it was short.. but intense and near-perfect. My only gripe is Kagura deciding to idiotically spam slashes towards the end, she should have gone defensive to come up with a plan before Larcade cuts her) In my re-telling, Kagura already served the role of cutting down Dimaria, so falling here would have been nice. The following chapter however could see some radical changes. I would have liked Laxus to somehow join Rogue and Sting and they beat him up strategically in a high difficulty match. Granted, Archenemy had been nerfed, but Kagura still casually slashed a small hill. Larcade's fingers stopped her best attack without sustaining a single scratch. Someone of that caliber shouldn't go down easily. Elemental advantages and WSDM powerup alone come off as a lazy solution.

Story: Show us how and when he was created, and further details on what caused him to feel obsessively attached to Zeref despite being a demon.
Jeez man, that was by a landslide the worst fight in the entire series, a disaster among disasters. It should have been Base Zeref losing to DF Natsu. Even then, that wouldn't quite be a fitting end to one of the two hyped antagonists.

Story: Anything but that cancer inducing ending./SPOILER]
 
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Perhaps Acnologia don't say all the time "KEHAHAHAHAHA" in this rewrite ? Would be there a connection to Dragon Cry or you haven't seen yet the movie ?

It misses something for Brandish's closure.
 

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Perhaps Acnologia don't say all the time "KEHAHAHAHAHA" in this rewrite ? Would be there a connection to Dragon Cry or you haven't seen yet the movie ?

It misses something for Brandish's closure.
Acnologia's personality is expanded on a little more, he doesn't exactly get an enormous amount of depth, but it's a bit more than just "Destruction!". I've seen the movie, but considering how some elements of it straight up create plot holes in my rewrite and the original now that I think about it, I'd rather deem it non-canon in the context of my rewrite.
I agree with Brandish, though I feel it's a bit better here, because for me her closure happened on chapter 9, this is just wrapping up said closure.
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It finally begins, the final fight against Zeref!
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It's finally here, the team up of our dreams!
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Acnologia's personality is expanded on a little more, he doesn't exactly get an enormous amount of depth, but it's a bit more than just "Destruction!". I've seen the movie, but considering how some elements of it straight up create plot holes in my rewrite and the original now that I think about it, I'd rather deem it non-canon in the context of my rewrite.
I agree with Brandish, though I feel it's a bit better here, because for me her closure happened on chapter 9, this is just wrapping up said closure.
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It finally begins, the final fight against Zeref!
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The Alvarez Rewrite - Chapter 27
It's finally here, the team up of our dreams!
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Yessss , this how you write a story :super
 

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Before even reading it, the title triggers my curiosity :zomg

EDIT: I can't access the chapter yet :/
 

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Before even reading it, the title triggers my curiosity :zomg

EDIT: I can't access the chapter yet :/
Yeah same, it links me to chapter 27.

Speaking of which, chapter 27 was great, I loved Zeref using some of Mard's moves.
 

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Honestly just scrap everything after the last Tartaros chapter and go in a completely different direction for optimal results if I'm being honest. He started making mistakes right away bringing Natsu back immediately and just a lot stronger. If he'd been missing for ages, that'd have been something - could then have had a reason for it, was Zeref involved, the Avatar Cult, Acnologia even? Build the story from there.

Have Lucy on her own for a while, and finally reach the point where she decides she's going to go see her friends, not just wait for Natsu to whisk her off on another adventure. Show Lucy's grown as a character in self confidence since the start, not ruin all of her development with some lame 'what if they don't like me' self doubt. Have happy join her and tell her even he doesn't know where Natsu is - up the suspense.

Have Lucy go to Other guilds to look for people/ clues to where they are, have her interacting with new characters, making more friends, interesting exchanges - she could find Laxus/ the Thunder God Tribe first and go with them for a change, she could find Cana in a pub somewhere and restart their pairing, Wendy even, just something a little bit different!

Start meeting up with other guild members and exchanging stories with them - what have they been doing, surely they know things/ have ideas of where to look. Continue on, encounter some bad guys who end up offering the next clue, or find Brandish who is secretly on a scouting mission for whoever, or doing anything else. Have her recognise Lucy from the start. None of this is difficult to come up with and would have been a lot more interesting/ varied than just the same old same old we ended up getting.
 
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