Done Shchelkunchik, chapter 33

[Elanor Pam]

Last part of my troublesome sentences backlog.

Page 02, second pannel:

しかも今度の村は1千500人を超える被害者が出ている

Moreover, it came out that this week's village had over 1500 victims

Page 03, 1st and 3rd pannels

全員が消息を絶っている

all their communications/news had been cut off

もうごまかしがきく時分ではないぞ

Deception is not going to be effective in this time

Page 04, first and last pannels
コーラングレー国 - Country of Korangrey?

各大陸に渡って被害は拡大している

The damage has been increasing In all these countries

まるで我らを嘲け笑っているかの
ようだ。。。

As if we were being...
mocked...

Page 5, 4th and last pannels

奴は職務を全うする事に使命を懸けている

He put his life on the line to fulfill his duties

いつ我が国に被害が発生するやもしれん。。。

One such incident could take place in our contry at any time...

Page 6, second pannel

数か月前に消滅事件がおきている

several months ago there was a lapse of incidents

Page 7, most of it >_>;;

魔法兵団が全力を尽くして捜査をしているが

If you devote all of the Magicorps' power to this search

霧が消えるかのようにヤツらは
忽然と姿を消す

And lift this fog, they might
suddenly disappear

亡霊を相手にしているかのようだ

It's like making enemies of ghosts

神に祈り。。。
十字架でその亡霊を
滅する。。。

I will pray to god...
And with the cross I will extinguish
these ghosts...

Page 13, 3rd pannel (warning: may cause severe brainscarring)

さざ波さんが私を
ほんのチョピツと
大胆にさせる。。。の

The ripples in the water
make me bold with these
real (chopitsu?)

 

[Unproductive]

Moreover, it came out that this week's village had over 1500 victims

rewrite >> and in the village of the most recent incident, there were over 1500 victims.

all their communications/news had been cut off

rewrite >> We lost contact with every single member.

Deception is not going to be effective in this time

fill in meaning from context >> The chance for ambush is already gone.

The damage has been increasing In all these countries

minor >> The damage over these countries has been increasing.

As if we were being...
mocked...

good

He put his life on the line to fulfill his duties

meaning >> He took on the mission to fulfill those orders.

One such incident could take place in our contry at any time...

good but might want a rewrite

several months ago there was a lapse of incidents

source >> Disappearances were happening several months earlier.

If you devote all of the Magicorps' power to this search

source grammar >> We devoted the entire Magicorp to the search

And lift this fog, they might
suddenly disappear

source grammar >> but they disappeared without a trace like a fog lifting into thin air.

It's like making enemies of ghosts

source >> It's like our enemy are ghosts.

I will pray to god...
And with the cross I will extinguish
these ghosts...

good but I'd suggest a rewrite

last part, I didn't look. SORRY.

 

[Elanor Pam]

Thanks for the help! Are you going to check the last one, though?

 

[redcap]

さざ波さんが私を
> ほんのチョピツと
> 大胆にさせる。。。の
> The ripples in the water
> make me bold with these
> real (chopitsu?)

ちょっぴと：ほんの少し, just a little bit.

The ripples in the water
are making me
just a little bit ...bolder