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[Chibi-Chibi]

This might actually be a wrong section since this is a first work i've tried to translate till the end, and most likely i failed big time since i'm still in the middle of learning the basics (or at least that is what i think).

I let myself quite a lot of freedom but i think thats mainly due to my non-proficiency in English and lack of experiences -.-;;

(under spoiler some informations if you think that manga pages are important for the said to be correctly understood)

Spoiler

This is from extra booklet that comes with SEX POSTOLS ova lit. edition (no worries, nothing "dirty" on those 4 pages) and deals with character named Shiro, mainly his thought only.
Nothing happens what so ever on this 4 pages so seeing them will not help you understand the lines, however previous knowledge of the story might help.
So here is the shorty summery that i think might be necessary to understand whats going on:
Yonekuni is a guy who absolutely despises anybody of male sex. And Shiro is a guy who feel in love with Yonekuni after seeing him swim.
Because of reasons unique to Sex Pistols world Yonkuni cannot maintain his body temperature well which makes him seek human warmth, female only (preferably several at a time). However he developed a habit, which he's not aware of, to seek Shiro (again because of reasons unique to Sex Pistols world) when maintaining body temperature gets ruff - usually on the rainy days. The ketch is that Shiro is keeping this a secret from him. Of course later he finds out but this 4 pages deal with Shiros though before long before Yonekuni found out about it.

And that should be it.

I've had some problems in full understanding of some lines, but most of the time it was a problem to give them a proper form in English. Proofreading (the flow of English) will be done by a friend of mine, but i'd really like to confirm if my translations is at least to some point accurate.

First short text is comment from mangaka, the rest are manga pages. The text in [] are thoughts bubbles, and > means that said is in small font outside of the bubble. The rest of the text are Shiros' thoughts.
The spaces in text indicate there is where the line is broken and new line indicates new group of words (i'm saying this merely because i have a feeling mangaka played with words to some extant)

PISTOLSが動いています。
PISTOLS are moving.
色。音。歌がプラスされ素敵に先まれ変 わりました。
Color. Sound. With addition of a song it got wonderful life.
みなさまのお気に入りにしていただけたら幸せです。
It would make me very happy if it is of your likening.
わたくしも大変気に入っております。
Since I liked it very much myself.

PAGE1
きっと自分は　彼に恋しすぎて　頭がおかしくなったんだと　思う
I'm sure I'm going crazy because I fell in love with him to much.
自分が怖い
I'm scared of myself,
怖ろしい事をしている
since I'm doing such a scary thing.

PAGE2
絶対　酷い結果になる
If he'll get aware of himself mid way
もし彼が途中で　正気に戻ったら？
it'll definitely have an awful outcome.
どうする？
What will I do?
彼のことだから
Because it's him,
暴れるかも？
he might find out.

PAGE3
きっと彼は嫌悪して　最終的に自分白身を　責めるはず
I'm sure on the end he'd end up hating himself for this.
それでもいいって　思ってる僕は
Even so I still think that's ok.
[しろ：嫌悪だ]
[Shiro: Hate, huh]
だって
Because
まともなやり方じゃ　彼の一秒だって　手に入らない
If i'd try to size him with honorable manners I wouldn't get him in my hands even for a second.
彼と一秒だって　一緒にいられない
Because it is just a second, other wise we cannot be together.
だから
So no matter

PAGE4
[しろ：どんなに　汚い方法だって　いいんだ…]
[Shiro: What kind of dirty way it is, it's ok...]
中途半端で　足場の無い幸福感
Bland feeling of happiness.
偶然みた。白昼夢みたいな関係
Accidentally appeared. Daydream like relationship.
しろ：おはよう
Shiro: Morning
米国：……
Yonekuni: ….
>朝から　話かけんな…
>Don't talk to me so early in the morning.
米国：また雨かよ　ウンザリだな
Yonekuni: Again rain? What a bad luck.
毎日傷ついて　ご褒美は一瞬
A reward for being hurt every day is that moment.
それでいい
Even so it's ok.
それでいいんだ
Really, it's ok.

I'd really like to translated 彼のことだから 暴れるかも？ But i didn't know if i should understand the said as i've translated it or as because it's about him he might find out about this(ie. the filing Shiro has) - kinda complicated xD.

Also the "偶然みた。白昼夢みたいな関係" i think its meant more as a pure fact than actual Shiro thoughts. The line itself is place in between panels surrounded by nothing while the rest of the thought are in panels, even though half of them are empty.

Also, i know that last line might not be correct, but i did not want to have 2 identical lines. Also remember, the mangaka play of words - both lines already appeared before in the text (in extended version though :P)

Anyway, any kind of corrections or comments are highly appreciated.

 

[Ju-da-su]

Know what? Just give us the pictures of those pages in the manga. Having the transcription clearly wrong ever since the second line of the whole thing does tell us a lot...-_-" (It's supposed to be 生まれ変わりました, isn't it? -_-")

Another part being this 彼のことだから 暴れるかも？ you're asking...either you translate it wrong or transcribe it wrong, if you say 暴れる means "find out". I mean 暴れる means "to rage; to act aggressive; to be out of control; to thrash around; to rebel; etc." It's ばれる that means "to find out something". -_-"

Not going to comment any further than that at the moment. Make sure you transcribe the whole thing correctly first, or else just give us the pictures. Seriously, I mean no offense to you, but I don't want to risk wasting my time explaining thing to you if I know that you might go "Whoops...sorry, I typed the Japanese words wrong..." -_-"

 

[Chibi-Chibi]

I would if i could, but my scanner is not compatible with linux, and a friend who said she can do it - i doubt i'll meet her before the end of the month; and i have yet to see these scans online.

I guess i can go and die in shame now. Yes, there should be "生" instead of "先" ... i have no idea how i've managed to do that (probably because i didn't care to double check the comment).
But the rest of the transcription is correct. I've checked it at least 5 times precisely because i've done mistakes like above in the past and they didn't do me any good and a text like that is useless for translation check -.-;;

Thinking of 暴れる as "ばれる" instead of "あばれる" is my miss again ^^' - character vise rage is definitely more appropriate (i should know there was something wrong -.-;; ) but that still doesn't clear up the first part of the sentence for me. I still don't get it if he is going to rage because:
1. of his personality
2. he is kept in ignorance
"のこと" is use so i think it should be #2 ... but i just cant decide D:

P.S.: thank you for pointing out the obvious mistakes .... which i doubt i'd notice them myself later -.-;;