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Please suggestions are welcomed as well as I require an artist. The work is already finished an set for publication, here is the first chapter, anyone interested can see the entire manuscript if you email me.
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Chapter 1
Panel 1
We see the desert like landscape of Pronoii, the ground is cracking. Farther into the distance we see many volcanoes. The sky appears semi black as if it’s caught between rain and sun. We see little black drops falling from the sky. The world is most chaotic yet it seems as if it has a purpose.
EXT. PRONOII – NIGHT
Oren has made accommodations by the shore, he sits outside and converses telepathically with Hemu
Oren
‘I am blind, I am dumb, I am deaf, I do not feel, I cannot taste.’
Hemu
Master how can that be, you see, you speak, you hear, you feel and you drink? You are greater than any OMNI I know of, you are master of this world, you are my god.
Oren
You do not understand me, because my appearance states otherwise, you assume because I have exhibited use of all that I said, that I am lying to you. Feel free to come closer and listen to more of what I have to tell you.
Hemu
Yes of course master, I will listen attentively.
Oren
Remember my message; remember my words for it will be lost to you, when I no longer abide with you.
You and I alone know of our mission, at least the truth behind it.
I tell you though before the day is at its end, you will know more, I will know more, they will know more and there will be no more.
I said that I am dumb, because I am quiet, what good is a tongue if one never learned to use it. What good is an ear if one never uses it, what good is anything if you cannot use it.
I depend on you entirely yet you and I both know that my capacity for evil far exceeds it for good. I simply want to harm yet I am caged in this house to which I must surely pay the ultimate to escape.
Hemu
Master we will attain the exit and find freedom for you and for us all. You alone possess what is needed. You may be blind, deaf, dumb, and without feeling but you possess the tools of the gods because you are god. Only your hands and not mine, nor any hagi[1] can change our fates, the curse befell Pronoii, it befell man, it befell hagi. All is lost but yet it is not because you still possess the day. Master I believe you are the one to do all that is needed.
Oren
Hemu today is the day of change, we will venture forth and encounter all the perils yet none shall dissuade or hinder our progress, you Hemu, Houku[2]- the guardian of man and I Oren the Omni[3] shall put an end to the darkness and free Pronoii back to paradise.
Panel 2
So Oren the Omni and Hemu the Houku set out to rid Pronoii of the darkness, Hemu had traveled with the child for five years and knew the child’s many secrets. For who are the mute and deaf to communicate to when father and mother both have made their exits.
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Oren.
Today we utilize everything we have gained, and learn our greatest lessons.
Narration
Oren and Hemu set forward to the great tree at Pronoii core; in its dark shade laid the bright future. Before Oren could get to the core he needed the assistance of the great hagi. Having acquainted himself with Hemu long ago, Oren only required two additional companions to ensure the exit was carried out.
Adam stored his knowledge away until his death, father was always good to mother. And they were one under the moon.
Panel 3
We see a man clutching a woman closely, they are surrounded by swirling sand, the ground a taint of red and yellow, the sky a hue of blue. There appearance is old and are almost naked. The man has a faint green beard, his face shows the wrinkles of age, his skin a black polished brass, the woman slightly lighter, her eyes are white and contain no pupils. They stand before a boy, no taller than four feet, between the ages of nine and eleven, his skin is very black almost similar to the man, he has gold marking running along his arms. We see white marks (resembling scars) running down his vertebrae and from the base of his eyelids to his chin. He wears a sack around his waist, by his side is a dog, though it has three tails, that flow ethereal in the wind, the dog has no expression, his back feet are larger than his front paws.
EXT. PRONOII – DAY
Odom (speaks slowly)
Don’t be afraid, of anything, ever again…
Eve
You are all that you are
Oren
Thank you for this purpose, be strong, it will only last for a moment
Panel 4
They suddenly implode into nothingness
Oren
Up, Quickly!
Panel 5
We see the dog plow his tails into the ground and jumps, quickly into the air, he’s at the troposphere, as if an impending danger demanded that much retreat radius. A vacuum of air rushes past the child and he is consumed by it. We see surrounding debris and ton-boulders being drawn to the centre, the air has been warped and the surrounding energy is at its maximum saturation. The child should surely be crushed, a supersonic wave is sent out, clearing everything at ground level. Rubble starts to fall to the ground, huge cylindrical columns have been left over. The dog watches from above and falls back, instantaneously he is on the ground. From his perspective in the distance, the child hanging by one hand at top one of the rods, his grip is slipping, he falls and scrambles at it, as he falls we see a trail of blood follow his palm. The Hagi hound rushes to lend assistance.
Hemu
Camara (Teacher) are you in good condition?
Panel 6
Oren dusts at his knees, he has no visible sign of injury.
Oren
I am good, we should move further east.
Panel 7
After the dust storms have settled and all that is left is Hemu and Oren. Out from the east comes a giant boulder. We see Kynn and the creep[4] Boab, Boab sent it as an attempt at mocking the damned.
Boab
It’s done, last of our troubles
Kynn
Silent (points toward the north)
Boab
What is that, I sense the hagi but what is that?
Kynn
Family
Boab
Ha ha ha ha I never knew you to have a sense of humour
In any event, this is where that line ends
(Boab beats the ground and causes another boulder to fly at a tremendous velocity to where Oren and Hemu are.)
Hemu
Master!
Oren moves two steps to the right and avoids being crushed. We see the child stretch his left hand toward the boulder and feels about its centre, we see trails of dust and some blood left on its surface. Out of nowhere he flexes his right arm and sends the boulder at an even greater speed toward Kynn and Boab. They both appear as if they do not know its coming but then at the very last moment they both teleport to the sides.
Kynn touches the boulder similar to the way Oren did, except every spot he touches seems to instantly deteriorate.
Boab
What is this?
There are suppose to be none like this
It cannot be him, he never would get involved.
They are dead I sensed the dust collect all their fragments
Wait, wait, don’t tell me the old man pulled had hidden Talents.
Kynn
My brother, whom I had forgotten, the blind dumb and deaf.
Come I will fight you.
Boab
Is this gonna be a problem?
Kynn
(Silent)
(Black rain fall about the whole land.)
Hemu
They get desperate don’t they master?
Oren
My brother
Oren pull from is sack a large device in the shape of umbrella (uhy) but wider ancient and fierce.
They continue onward, following the endless darkness toward their destiny.
Creeps have the ability to phase through solid matter and instantly appear anywhere, Kynn displays this power as well. They both materialize in DZYN.
Boab
These fools refuse to follow orders!
Bish
The challenge is still real
Kynn
Proceed as planned
Boab
You don’t get it, this Omni is different he makes wars without death, he is gaining favor with ????[5]
Suppose he were to assist him?
Bish
You talk too much
Boab
I do…( his frustration visible, he makes an intercession)
(Boab teleports to oren, as soon as his head appears, oren almost kicks it off. Boab is teleported back to the shade of DZYN.)
He grows stronger
Bish
Tell me about this brother of yours?
Kynn
He was never Omni, he was creep…
Flashback
Narrated by Kynn
After I had struck my brother and been transmorphed, all senses became acute, the smell and sight in particular.
I noticed something falling from the shade and the sky…I didn’t think too much
But in the days when father and mother tried to console me and alter my state back, father ventured out and sought aid from mysterious sources, in fact perhaps father was greater than all of us. He returned and brought to my mother a young Omni, so dark and black that his eyes, ears and mouth were blocked out. he was very playful and the whole family seemed at peace until the day of exit. We were forced to leave the land of everything in abundance and forced a vestitude of blood and sweat. I knew I would not function and father I guess knew the same…but to think that he actually went through with it.
Bish
What do you speak of
Kynn
The exit
The key to change
The answer to the question
The true meaning of life is when it ends.
Kynn
Now father went to many lengths to fulfill his purpose, he saw that his life forever was an upward climb, but when the enemy becomes friend and the friend becomes enemy, the treads collapse
[1] Hagi – The Animals of Pronoii, lesser than Omni but possessing formidable skill.
[2] Houku – Ancient Hagi Hound (Canine Breed)
[3] Omni – The Primordial Human race of Pronoii
[4] Creep – A dark entity that existed before Pronoii, it thrives in the Void of darkness .
[5] Exit – A reference to the creator of all existence his very name is power, only few know it, to attempt its pronunciation resulted in death.
Email me [email protected] with comments suggestions ...seven more chapters to go
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camwilordietryin.blogspot.com/
XZZT
Chapter 1
Panel 1
We see the desert like landscape of Pronoii, the ground is cracking. Farther into the distance we see many volcanoes. The sky appears semi black as if it’s caught between rain and sun. We see little black drops falling from the sky. The world is most chaotic yet it seems as if it has a purpose.
EXT. PRONOII – NIGHT
Oren has made accommodations by the shore, he sits outside and converses telepathically with Hemu
Oren
‘I am blind, I am dumb, I am deaf, I do not feel, I cannot taste.’
Hemu
Master how can that be, you see, you speak, you hear, you feel and you drink? You are greater than any OMNI I know of, you are master of this world, you are my god.
Oren
You do not understand me, because my appearance states otherwise, you assume because I have exhibited use of all that I said, that I am lying to you. Feel free to come closer and listen to more of what I have to tell you.
Hemu
Yes of course master, I will listen attentively.
Oren
Remember my message; remember my words for it will be lost to you, when I no longer abide with you.
You and I alone know of our mission, at least the truth behind it.
I tell you though before the day is at its end, you will know more, I will know more, they will know more and there will be no more.
I said that I am dumb, because I am quiet, what good is a tongue if one never learned to use it. What good is an ear if one never uses it, what good is anything if you cannot use it.
I depend on you entirely yet you and I both know that my capacity for evil far exceeds it for good. I simply want to harm yet I am caged in this house to which I must surely pay the ultimate to escape.
Hemu
Master we will attain the exit and find freedom for you and for us all. You alone possess what is needed. You may be blind, deaf, dumb, and without feeling but you possess the tools of the gods because you are god. Only your hands and not mine, nor any hagi[1] can change our fates, the curse befell Pronoii, it befell man, it befell hagi. All is lost but yet it is not because you still possess the day. Master I believe you are the one to do all that is needed.
Oren
Hemu today is the day of change, we will venture forth and encounter all the perils yet none shall dissuade or hinder our progress, you Hemu, Houku[2]- the guardian of man and I Oren the Omni[3] shall put an end to the darkness and free Pronoii back to paradise.
Panel 2
So Oren the Omni and Hemu the Houku set out to rid Pronoii of the darkness, Hemu had traveled with the child for five years and knew the child’s many secrets. For who are the mute and deaf to communicate to when father and mother both have made their exits.
________________________________________________________________________
Oren.
Today we utilize everything we have gained, and learn our greatest lessons.
Narration
Oren and Hemu set forward to the great tree at Pronoii core; in its dark shade laid the bright future. Before Oren could get to the core he needed the assistance of the great hagi. Having acquainted himself with Hemu long ago, Oren only required two additional companions to ensure the exit was carried out.
Adam stored his knowledge away until his death, father was always good to mother. And they were one under the moon.
Panel 3
We see a man clutching a woman closely, they are surrounded by swirling sand, the ground a taint of red and yellow, the sky a hue of blue. There appearance is old and are almost naked. The man has a faint green beard, his face shows the wrinkles of age, his skin a black polished brass, the woman slightly lighter, her eyes are white and contain no pupils. They stand before a boy, no taller than four feet, between the ages of nine and eleven, his skin is very black almost similar to the man, he has gold marking running along his arms. We see white marks (resembling scars) running down his vertebrae and from the base of his eyelids to his chin. He wears a sack around his waist, by his side is a dog, though it has three tails, that flow ethereal in the wind, the dog has no expression, his back feet are larger than his front paws.
EXT. PRONOII – DAY
Odom (speaks slowly)
Don’t be afraid, of anything, ever again…
Eve
You are all that you are
Oren
Thank you for this purpose, be strong, it will only last for a moment
Panel 4
They suddenly implode into nothingness
Oren
Up, Quickly!
Panel 5
We see the dog plow his tails into the ground and jumps, quickly into the air, he’s at the troposphere, as if an impending danger demanded that much retreat radius. A vacuum of air rushes past the child and he is consumed by it. We see surrounding debris and ton-boulders being drawn to the centre, the air has been warped and the surrounding energy is at its maximum saturation. The child should surely be crushed, a supersonic wave is sent out, clearing everything at ground level. Rubble starts to fall to the ground, huge cylindrical columns have been left over. The dog watches from above and falls back, instantaneously he is on the ground. From his perspective in the distance, the child hanging by one hand at top one of the rods, his grip is slipping, he falls and scrambles at it, as he falls we see a trail of blood follow his palm. The Hagi hound rushes to lend assistance.
Hemu
Camara (Teacher) are you in good condition?
Panel 6
Oren dusts at his knees, he has no visible sign of injury.
Oren
I am good, we should move further east.
Panel 7
After the dust storms have settled and all that is left is Hemu and Oren. Out from the east comes a giant boulder. We see Kynn and the creep[4] Boab, Boab sent it as an attempt at mocking the damned.
Boab
It’s done, last of our troubles
Kynn
Silent (points toward the north)
Boab
What is that, I sense the hagi but what is that?
Kynn
Family
Boab
Ha ha ha ha I never knew you to have a sense of humour
In any event, this is where that line ends
(Boab beats the ground and causes another boulder to fly at a tremendous velocity to where Oren and Hemu are.)
Hemu
Master!
Oren moves two steps to the right and avoids being crushed. We see the child stretch his left hand toward the boulder and feels about its centre, we see trails of dust and some blood left on its surface. Out of nowhere he flexes his right arm and sends the boulder at an even greater speed toward Kynn and Boab. They both appear as if they do not know its coming but then at the very last moment they both teleport to the sides.
Kynn touches the boulder similar to the way Oren did, except every spot he touches seems to instantly deteriorate.
Boab
What is this?
There are suppose to be none like this
It cannot be him, he never would get involved.
They are dead I sensed the dust collect all their fragments
Wait, wait, don’t tell me the old man pulled had hidden Talents.
Kynn
My brother, whom I had forgotten, the blind dumb and deaf.
Come I will fight you.
Boab
Is this gonna be a problem?
Kynn
(Silent)
(Black rain fall about the whole land.)
Hemu
They get desperate don’t they master?
Oren
My brother
Oren pull from is sack a large device in the shape of umbrella (uhy) but wider ancient and fierce.
They continue onward, following the endless darkness toward their destiny.
Creeps have the ability to phase through solid matter and instantly appear anywhere, Kynn displays this power as well. They both materialize in DZYN.
Boab
These fools refuse to follow orders!
Bish
The challenge is still real
Kynn
Proceed as planned
Boab
You don’t get it, this Omni is different he makes wars without death, he is gaining favor with ????[5]
Suppose he were to assist him?
Bish
You talk too much
Boab
I do…( his frustration visible, he makes an intercession)
(Boab teleports to oren, as soon as his head appears, oren almost kicks it off. Boab is teleported back to the shade of DZYN.)
He grows stronger
Bish
Tell me about this brother of yours?
Kynn
He was never Omni, he was creep…
Flashback
Narrated by Kynn
After I had struck my brother and been transmorphed, all senses became acute, the smell and sight in particular.
I noticed something falling from the shade and the sky…I didn’t think too much
But in the days when father and mother tried to console me and alter my state back, father ventured out and sought aid from mysterious sources, in fact perhaps father was greater than all of us. He returned and brought to my mother a young Omni, so dark and black that his eyes, ears and mouth were blocked out. he was very playful and the whole family seemed at peace until the day of exit. We were forced to leave the land of everything in abundance and forced a vestitude of blood and sweat. I knew I would not function and father I guess knew the same…but to think that he actually went through with it.
Bish
What do you speak of
Kynn
The exit
The key to change
The answer to the question
The true meaning of life is when it ends.
Kynn
Now father went to many lengths to fulfill his purpose, he saw that his life forever was an upward climb, but when the enemy becomes friend and the friend becomes enemy, the treads collapse
[1] Hagi – The Animals of Pronoii, lesser than Omni but possessing formidable skill.
[2] Houku – Ancient Hagi Hound (Canine Breed)
[3] Omni – The Primordial Human race of Pronoii
[4] Creep – A dark entity that existed before Pronoii, it thrives in the Void of darkness .
[5] Exit – A reference to the creator of all existence his very name is power, only few know it, to attempt its pronunciation resulted in death.
Email me [email protected] with comments suggestions ...seven more chapters to go
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http://wilsondesigns.webs.com/books.htm
camwilordietryin.blogspot.com/
