Done A little help

[phmoura]

Hi everyone.
I translated a chapter of Hidan no Aria AA, but there's a few sentences giving me trouble.

The greens are the ones I had trouble wording it,
The reds are the sentences I don't know if I got the meaning right

ライカもあの子の事本気では嫌ってないような感じがするんだようね
doesn't fell like Raika really hates that girl


お星様のように遠い存在。。。！
her existence is like a far away star....!

ライカの隙うまく見つかるといいけど...
It would be good if i found an opening, but...

そっとしておいた方がいいのかな。。。
i wonder if it's better to leave her like that...

あたしもちゃんと分かってなかった。。。
I did not understand

and this two sentences i have no idea.

Spoiler

oh, and from the context, sound like an sound effect, but i'm not sure.
どうえりゃー

 

[Utsune]

Hiya,

ライカもあの子の事本気では嫌ってないような感じがするんだようね
doesn't fell like Raika really hates that girl

I'd personally go with "feels like Raika also doesn't really hate the girl" since the sentence flows a tad better this way with the "also" (also a bit more literal.)
I guess the alternative of adding "either" to the end of the sentence would work in both cases. ("feels like Raika doesn't really hate that girl either.")

お星様のように遠い存在。。。！
her existence is like a far away star....!

ライカの隙うまく見つかるといいけど...
It would be good if i found an opening, but...

そっとしておいた方がいいのかな。。。
i wonder if it's better to leave her like that...

These should be fine.
Perhaps "Raika" should be specified in the second one, should the context require clarification.

あたしもちゃんと分かってなかった。。。
I did not understand

Something along the lines of "I too did not fully understand"

and this two sentences i have no idea.

Spoiler

でも尾行感づかれてないみたいだね。
お姉様注意力はあまりないみたいですの。

"But it seems she doesn't notice she's being followed."
"Onee-sama seems to be lacking a bit in attentiveness."

oh, and from the context, sound like an sound effect, but i'm not sure.
どうえりゃー

I *think* it's probably a yell/battle cry of the sort.

 

[mikkih]

ライカもあの子の事本気では嫌ってないような感じがするんだようね
doesn't fell like Raika really hates that girl

I doubt Raika really hates that girl.
I don't really think that Raika actually hates that girl.

感じがするんだようね　... 感じがするんだよね instead?

そっとしておいた方がいいのかな。。。
i wonder if it's better to leave her like that...

leave like that --> leave (someone) alone
I wonder if I/we should leave her alone ...

 

[Aarowaim]

ライカもあの子の事本気では嫌ってないような感じがするんだようね

Lit: " Feeling comes that Raika also doesn't dislike that girl/person."
Trans: "I get the feeling that even Raika doesn't have a problem with her/(who she is)"
Note: may imply that Raika dislikes most people.

お星様のように遠い存在。。。！
her existence is like a far away star....!

Lit: "Her existence is like a faraway star" (good as a final trans)
Trans: "She's (out of reach) like the distant stars"
Note: Your translation is perfect; it captures the poetry of Japanese without becoming awkward in English.

ライカの隙うまく見つかるといいけど...

Lit: "It would be good if I could find an opening (in her armour), but..."
Trans: "I wish I could get through to her, but..."
Note: I really like your translation and I simply recommend you keep the implied "in her armour" for clarity.

そっとしておいた方がいいのかな。。。

Lit: "I wonder is it good to leave it/her that way?"
Trans: "I wonder if we should get involved?"
Note: At this point, they want to know her better, but worry that perhaps they'd be interfering with Raika's apparent desire to be alone.

あたしもちゃんと分かってなかった。。。

Lit: "I didn't understand her/it either..."
Trans: "It didn't make sense to me either"

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Spoiler

でも尾行感づかれてないみたいだね
Lit: "But it appears she hasn't noticed being followed"
Trans: "But I don't think she's noticed us following her

お姉様注意力はあまりないみたいですの
Lit: "Doesn't it seem (big sister/she) lacks most attentiveness?"
Trans: "Doesn't she seem oblivious (to her surroundings)?" or "Doesn't she seem to be very inattentive?"
Note: Very tough to translate smoothly without sacrificing some of the meaning. Oblivious is the closest in meaning, while attentiveness is just a smoother translation.