Original Work Critiques?

[hunterzero785]

https://tapas.io/episode/768514

Ok so I put up the first 5 pages and tried to color them best I could but idk if the colors look acceptable or not, also if there's any mistakes anyone can point out to help me improve its much appreciated thank you.

 

[Ulquiorra73]

If your trying to make a manga exactly like japans manga, is your manga panels start from the top right to the left?

Japan manga panels ussually starts off from the top right i believe