fox attempts Editing Practice #002

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This took me three hours at least...and I got yelled at. :darn Is there anything that I should make better?

 

shinwei

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An excellent effort.

Here's the critique:

1) I don't see why it was necessary to redo the BOM!! in the second panel? Perhaps you were just bored...
2) Experiment with Align-Left and Align-Right settings for your text. Especially for the first and last bubbles of this page. Try to have it so the text is aligned a certain distance away from the left/right edge of the panel and the top edge.
3) Generally speaking you don't want SFX text to be flipped with each other. I see you have the two BLASHes flipped and the two JIRBLES flipped. Nice try, but ultimately it's not the way to go.
 

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nice effort,
just one point to add:
4) incomplete redrawing behind the blash and jrble-sfxs
 

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you should try to make the font size a bit smaller. You have to get the hang of it, true, but you have to leave some space around the text. In some of your bubbles, the text nearly touches the bubble itself, which is a no-no.
 
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