Looks pretty cool to me. As for translations, you might want to ask some of the translators we have on hand here in their own section ( check out Translator Central in the sidebar menu. ) Go to any one of their Ask Me threads in the 'Meet the Translators' section. Or you can make a request in 'Translator Requests.'
However if you're considering Editing the first volume and onward, I just have to say that it may get you in trouble with Viz. In any case, nice work and hope to see you around.
Also, if you're planning to re-draw that double spread, you might want to take a screenshot from episode 1 and use it for reference.