Playing for Keeps (Kakashi x Sakura fanfic)

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Well, I decided to start back up on my fanfics. I guess I haven't done any in so long, though, that no one here even knows I do them ,oO

Anyways.

I'm a Kakashi x Sakura fan, so I figured it'd be fitting to hop back onto the fic scene with a chapter story about my favorite pair.

No worries, they're all jounin and Sakura's an adult!

http://www.mediaminer.org/fanfic/view_ch.php/133396/459187/

It was a mission that they had to do, though none of them wanted to. Can they pull through it, or will they fail and lead Konoha to it's death? Kakashi x Sakura

I have a couple one shots too, if you want to read ^^

Chapters will be up every two weeks at the most. Let me know what you think!
 

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I WANT MORE.

<3
 

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Weeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee, great read <3

Could use a few more visual details in the shower scene though :ninja
 

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Great 1st chapter, LH. I'll be waiting for the next one. :D
 

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^_^ I do hope there will be another chapter too.
 

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Maybe when I get time XD I have a few sentences for chapter 2, but that's all. Now that I'm done with exams, however, I'll have more time to write ^^
 

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XD Thanks. I'm actually planning on writing another chapter tonight, if/when I finish my english homework :S I actually just got a new computer, and the old chapters were on there >< so I ahve to re-write >.>
 

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kakasaku rockz. I want ****** of the 2 :pleased :shannaro
 

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Yeah, KakaSaku is my favorite :D I just started writing a second chapter last weekend. Hopefully, if i finish a paper for one of my classes today, I can finish t up and post it ^^
 

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I'm sure there's plenty of hentei out there somewhere... >_>
 

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So far so good. KakaSaku is interesting. Looking forward to chapter 3. :D
 

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Not bad, and I'm betting you've improved as a writer from the time that you wrote this. There are a few grammar and spelling mistakes so you might want to do a spell-check. Also, the narrator shouldn't have a biased opinion or position on characters [referring to the line where the sound ninja called Sakura out of her name, and the line "Was this man such an idiot?" came into play.] If you wanted to make it seem like Sakura was thinking that, you should've had something on the lines of; Sakura smirked. "Is this guy that much of an idiot?" she thought to herself. Besides that I liked the detail in both chapters when describing the characters, but thought that abbreviating "ninja" into "nin" didn't fit too well. Also when describing beautiful characters, attempt to use beautiful words like; elegant, angelic, etc. This lets us know that she or he has a rare bread of beauty. Not flaming of course, just a few tips on how I think it could've been written a bit better.
 

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Katy!!! I had no idea this section existed till today and no idea that you wrote fanfic! I loved your story! :wtf Write more I say!

I'm just trying to write fanfic myself (not an expert by any means). I really like your style and you've inspired me. So keep doing more stories please! :wtf
 
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