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[cmertb]

This is my first translation attempt ever. Please point out any mistakes I might have made. (Transcribed Japanese included, raws are available on MH.)

http://mangahelpers.com/t/cmertb/releases/16236

Thank you!

 

[yen2x]

11
女にフラレタたんじゃない？
dumped by a woman?


12
声でか. あっ　ごめん。
too loud.　ah, sorry.

もったいないでしょう？！チケット！
isn't that a waste???!!! the tickets!!!

だから　ちょうだい。
so, gimme

見ず知らずhmm...it means complete(total) stranger
=>どうして見ず知らずのアンタにオレのチケットを？
＝why should I give my tickets to a TOTAL STRANGER huh?


捨てよとしたよ。
you tried to throw it...


15
どうして私まで隠れなきゃならないの？
why even me should hide???

16

私がなぐさめようか？
how 'bout i'll comfort you??



this is all i could help you...
hmmm....you have a lot of mistakes....hmmm sorry

 

[cmertb]

Thanks for your help. These seem to be more stylistic differences than mistakes in translation. Are there any spots where I misunderstood Japanese text? I'm especially concerned about pages 17-19.

 

[yen2x]

19
それでもあきらめきれなくて社内公募の企画書なんか出してるけど、
but still,i can't give up so i keep submitting proposal(plans) to the company's advertisement


おごるしかないだろ？
can't help but treat you right?

p.s.(社会人　means adult,会社員means a company man or salary man)

21
やじ馬
onlooker

22

it seems like this is caused by the couple's quarrel in the neighborhood

あほう＝moron

来い＝come!

30

i wanted to buy her books...





hope this will help you.....gudluck!!!

 

[cmertb]

Yep, I really got 社会人 wrong. Next time should check a dictionary just in case...

 

[naniwabushi]

24
>長椅子の寝ごこちは、// 悪か。。。ったで。。。
>Aka: Sleeping on the sofa, // I'm... sorry...

Aka speaks Princess Ann's line in "Roman Holiday".I think the complete line is "長椅子の寝ごこちは、悪かったでしょう".
The original line in the movie is "You must have been awfully uncomfortable on that couch."

Reference: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Fcif6jDNl98
(The scene concerned begins at 0:50.)

I hope my poor English will not make you confused.

 

[cmertb]

Thank you!!! I actually suspected this was the case and tried to find a possible match in the screenplay, but failed. Unfortunately, I haven't actually seen the movie.

What about the preceding phrase, ベッドをお使いください王女様。 //　アハハ、今日の映画？

Is Matsumaru also quoting the movie, and Aka is trying to confirm that it's from the movie?

 

[yen2x]

yes, i think that ,it was a line on the roman holiday....

=>"アハハ　今日の映画？？”
hahaha today's movie???