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I only did 148. Maybe I'll do 149 and 150 later if I feel like it. ^^; Syntax was pretty good, but there were quite a lot of grammatical errors. You seem to omit punctuation a lot and you're either missing capitalization or putting it in the wrong spots. Those may be typo errors and it's nothing a good read-over after you're done translating won't fix. You can look over the changes I did and see if they're okay for you.

On page 13, panel 3...
- Th...That’s a discussion I don't want to get into.../If I use my tran...Then I could...
What's a "tran"? ^^; I'm not familiar with this series, so is it a special term used in here?



page 1
top left->Love's 3rd year anniversary! A breakthough commemorative color page!->heart

right->A burning summer of
left-> pursuing your hotness.

page 2
panel 4
Hohohohoho!!

outside panel
If you’re talking about summer,/then you’re talking about resorts!!

page 3
panel 1
Welcome, everybody,

panel 2
to the Tenjouin family’s villa!!

panel 3
Wow!

page 4
panel 1
You are Saki-sama's friends, right?/Pleased to meet you.

panel 2
Who are you?

panel 3
I'm Arashiyama, the butler who manages this mansion./I have prepared lots of seafood for you, so please make yourselves at home.

panel 4
Ah...thanks. Please take care of us./Nice to meet you!!

panel 5
I'm a little nervous because this is an invitation from Tenjouin-senpai, but I'm glad he seems like a nice person.../

page 5
panel 1
Saki! Thanks for inviting us!

panel 2
It's because you guys helped me when I ran away from home./ The Tenjouin family never forgets a favor.

panel 3
But with this, we are even, right?/Yep.

panel 4
Now then, Arashiyama! Show everyone to their rooms./Yes, Saki-sama.

page 6
panel 1
This would’ve been better if Risa, Mio and Oshizu-chan also came./It’s unfortunate that this came up all of a sudden.

panel 3
Saki-senpai./Oh...Run.

panel 4
It’s been a while./Ehehee. You too, Senpai.

page 7
panel 1
Anyway, Senpai! Is it really okay to let Lala enjoy herself like this?/Eh?

panel 2
This is your chance, isn't it?/To create a plan and embarrass Lala in front of everybody.

panel 3
And then if Senpai reaches out to the fallen Lala in a gentle way.../Saki...You really are the true Queen./Saki-sama is the best!!

panel 4
That...would be great....../Wouldn't it?/Saki-sama...

page 8
panel 1
Wow,/ what a great view!->16th notes

panel 2
You seem happy, Mikan./Of course, I am.->16th notes

panel 3
Aren't you excited to be staying with such a big crowd of people?/Is that something to be happy about...?/

page 9
panel 1
Hey, Yami-san. There’s still time before supper, so how about we go look at the giant bath?/The bath...Okay...

panel 2
Alright, then! Let's go!

page 10
panel 3
Fuu.../I just knew big baths would feel great.

panel 4
That's the truth.->16th notes/.........

page 11
panel 1
Kotegawa.../You have really big breasts...

panel 2
Hee.

panel 3
How can I get mine to be that way?/You...You're asking me how, Nana-chan?!

panel 4
I want to know, too.../You too, Sairenji-san!?

page 12
panel 1
Now that you mention it, Yui, your breasts have gotten bigger since the first time we met./Ahh! Ho...Hold on, Lala-san!!

panel 2
That childish Nana…

panel 3
Is there something that makes you worry about your chest?

page 13
panel 1
It's very annoying when you say that!!/Uhn? I was just trying to back you up.

panel 2
Hey, hey! Stop the fighting, you two./Enough with the breast talk.

panel 3
Th...That’s a discussion I don't want to get into.../If I use my tran...Then I could...


page 14
panel 2
Run! Do you have a good plan to embarrass Lala with?/Fufu...I bought a good item through the Galaxy Mail just for that.

panel 3
Tada!! The shocking Bubble WOW Soup Item!!/Just a little bit will cause a lot of bubbles to form and it will cause great excitement to the person you use it!!

panel 4
Mauuu.

panel 5
Ehh.

page 15
panel 1
Kyaa!/What's with this kid?!

panel 3
AH!

panel
4
Hyaaaaaaa!!!

panel 5
It's in my eyes!/Save me,/Sa...Saki-sama...

page 16
panel 2
It's starting to look bad outside.

panel 3
Rito.../It seem the girls have already gone to the giant baths...

panel 4
Eh?/Yeah...So we'll have to go after dinner.../That not what I meant!!

panel 5
Let's go spy on them!!!/Haaa!?

page 17
panel 1
Saruyama Genichi locks onto the target and goes in for the kill!!/Hey, hey, Saruyama! Wait a sec!

panel 2
That wrong, right? So let’s.../I know that.../I may be on the path to hell.

panel 3
But Rito, men are animals that chase/ and the name of our El Dorado is Breasts......!!

panel 4
If I go to hell for that, then fine by me!! Let's go, Rito!!/ Why me!?

page 18
panel 1
Where you going?

panel 2
.........

panel 3
No, it’s not what you think! Rito was just saying something about breasts being the dreams of men.../WHAT!?

panel 4
Hey! Don't just make thing up, Saruyama!!

page 19
panel 1
Dream, huh? Yuuki-kun.../I...I didn't say that!!

panel 2
Uwaaa!/Kyaa!?

page 20
panel 1
Wh...What was that sound.../Gunfire...?

panel 2
Rito! What was that just now!?/Lala!

panel 3
It sounded like it came from the hall.../Let’s go take a look!

panel 6
!!

page 21
panel 2
Th...That's.../Arashiyama...-San.........!?

panel 3
.........

outside panel
What labyrinth of troubles.../has started to develop...!?
 

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I only did 148. Maybe I'll do 149 and 150 later if I feel like it. ^^; Syntax was pretty good, but there were quite a lot of grammatical errors. You seem to omit punctuation a lot and you're either missing capitalization or putting it in the wrong spots. Those may be typo errors and it's nothing a good read-over after you're done translating won't fix. You can look over the changes I did and see if they're okay for you.

On page 13, panel 3...
- Th...That’s a discussion I don't want to get into.../If I use my tran...Then I could...
What's a "tran"? ^^; I'm not familiar with this series, so is it a special term used in here?
Hey it's the name of the character's move to change her body.

Thank you for proof-reading this chapter for me.
 

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You're welcome. :) I had time, so I went ahead and did 149 and 150. I'm not sure about some punctuation because I wasn't looking at the RAWs, so you should look over these again too. ^^;

149

page 1
panel 2
し。。。 / 死んでる。。。!?
He's.../He's dead...!?

outside panel
本当に死んでる。。。 / 今週もミステリアス!!
He's really dead.../Another mysterious week!!

page 2
panel 1
嵐山(あらしやま)が。。。 / どうしてこんなことに。。。
Arashiyama.../Why would someone do that...?

panel 2
沙姫(さき)さま。。。他の従業員の者には皆部屋で待機しておくように伝えました / そう。。。ありがと 綾(あや)
Saki-sama... I have told the other employees to go wait in their rooms for further orders./I see...Thank you, Aya.

panel 3
大変な事になりましたわね。。。
What a horrible turn of events...

panel 4
殺人事件なんて。。。。。。
Of all things, a murder......

page 3
panel 1
沙姫様 / 凛(りん)!警察と連絡はつきましたの!?
Saki-sama./Rin! Did you get in touch with the police!?

panel 2
それが。。。
Well...

panel 2
どういうわけか電話 ネット あらゆる通信手段が使えなくなっています /
まるでこの島が外界から遮断されたように。。。
For some reason, the telephone, internet, and all others means of communication are no longer working./It seems the whole island has been completely cut off from the outside world...

panel 3
何ですかそのベタな推理ドラマみたいな状況!! / オレたちこのままこのしまですごすのか!?まうーっ
So what!? This is like some clichéd mystery drama!?/You’re saying we're stuck on this island!?/Mauuuu.->16th notes

page 4
panel 1
迎えの船はいつ来る予定なんですか? / 明日の夕方ですわ
So when is the pick-up boat scheduled to come?/Tomorrow evening.

panel 2
でも。。。 / この嵐じゃそれもどうなるか。。。。。。
But with this storm, I’m not sure about that anymore......

panel 3
.........

panel 4
そうだ!ララのデダイヤルがある!! / ザスティンに連絡して助けに来てもらえば。。。
That's right! We have Lala’s D-Dialer!!/ We can contact Zastin and have him come help us...

page 5
panel 1
さっきからそう思って試してたんだけど / デダイヤルも使えないみたい
I thought about that earlier and tried it,/but the D-Dialer doesn't seem to be working.

panel 2
え!?
Eh!?

panel 3
私とナナのデダイヤルもです / ヘンですね。。。嵐の影響なんか受けるはずないんですけど。。。
Nana and Mine also aren't working./It’s weird, you know...The storm shouldn't have any effect on them...

panel 4
。。。。。。。。。 / これじゃザスティンはよべないねー。。。
........./So then we can't call Zastin, huh...


page 6
panel 2
きゃっ / 美柑(みかん)!?
Kyaaa!/Mikan!?

panel 3
ご。。。ごめん。。。ちょっとビックリしちゃって。。。
Sor...Sorry...That scared me a little...

panel 4
昔から苦手だっけな雷。。。
Ever since you were young, you've hated thunder...

panel 5
!

page 7
panel 1
春菜(はるな)ちゃん。。。
Haruna-chan...

panel 2
古手川。。。
Kotegawa...

panel 3
み。。。みんな不安がってる。。。 / 男のオレがしっかりしねーと。。。
Ev...Everyone is on edge.../As a guy, I have to keep a level head...

panel 4
だ。。。大丈夫だよみんな!ここに全員でいれば安心だし。。。 / ホラ。。。何たってヤミもいるし!どんな地球人があいてだってー。。。
It...It's okay, guys! If we stay together here, it'll be okay. And.../Look...We have Yami here, too! No Earthling would dare to...

panel 5
地球人が犯人とは限りませんよ
Do not think an Earthling is the criminal.

page 8
panel 1
え。。。 / ど。。。どーゆー事だよ ヤミ。。。
Eh.../Wh...What do you mean, Yami...?

panel 3

確かに。。。 / 地球外の技術であるデダイヤルまで通信不能。。。
Indeed.../For them to go as far as to block the D-Dialer which is beyond Earth's technology...

panel 4
これがもし人為的なものなら。。。 / 異星人と考える方が自然ですね。。。
If this is an unnatural event…then I would expect that this is an alien’s doing...

page 9
panel 1
犯人の狙いはオレたち。。。 / って事か。。。?
Are you saying that the criminal’s target.../is us?

panel 2
う。。。ううう / 猿山(さるやま)くん?
Uh...uhhh…/Saruyama-kun?

panel 3
うおおおおお~~~~っ / もう耐えられねー殺人鬼がいる島なんか!!オレはおよいででもかえるぞっ!!
Uhoooooooo/I can't take it anymore! There's a murderer on this island!! I'm leaving even if I have to swim back!!

page 10
panel 1
ま まて 猿山この展開でそれ死亡フラグ。。。
Wa...Wait, Saruyama! Given the current weather, it'd be a certain death if...

panel 2
ととっ
Utouto.

panel 4
ふぁ
Fuuah.

page 11
panel 1
リ.。。リトくん。。。
Ri...Rito-kun...

panel 2
人前で。。。ダイタンなんだからぁ / あっ いやそんな。。。
You’ve got guts to be doing that in front of other people…/Ah! No! That wasn't...

panel 3
こんな時まであなたは!!ハレンチなーッ!!! / ゴッゴメンなさいーっ
You're being offensive at a time like this!!!/Sor…Sorry!

panel 4
うわぁぁーッ!!!
Uwaaaa!!

panel 5
猿山!!
Saruyama!!

panel 6
まさか。。。フラグ成立!?
No, it couldn’t be... Did my warning come true!?

page 12
panel 1
い。。。今向こうに黒い影が。。。 / 何!? *生きてた*
Ju...Just now, there was a dark shadow over there.../What?/*He's alive.*

panel 3
ヤミさん!?
Yami-san!?

panel 4
私が見て来ます / ここに居てください。。。
I'll go take a look./Please stay here...

page 13
panel 2
やはり。。。 / あなたでしたか
So.../It was you.

panel 3
こんな惑星(ほし)で。。。 / ドクターティアーユの生体兵器に出くわすとはな。。。
Imagine running into/Doctor Tearju's living weapon on this planet...

panel 5
私も。。。またあなたの顔を見るとは思いませんでした
I didn't think I would see your face again either…

page 14
panel 1
殺し屋。。。 / 通称“クロ”
The Assassin.../Code name, "Black".

panel 2
。。。お前の事は。。。 / 金色の闇。。。と呼べばいいのか?
...Would it be okay if I…/call you...Golden Darkness?

panel 3
ヤミちゃんでもいいですよ /全力で遠慮うする
You can call me Yami-chan./I will restrain fully from doing that.

panel 4
金色の闇 / 一つ忠告しておくぜ
Golden Darkness,/ I'm going to give you one piece of advice.

page 15
panel 1
オレの仕事のジャマをするな / でないとまた。。。戦う事になる
Do not interfere with my work./If you do, then…we will have to fight again.

panel 3
クロ。。。私も言っておきます
Black...I also have something to tell you.

panel 4
ここにいる私の友人達に手を出したら / 許しませんから
If you lay your hands on my friends here,/I will not forgive you.

page 16
panel 1
ともだち。。。? / はい。。。あ ひとりは“ターゲット”でした訂正します
Friends...?/Yes... Ah, let me correct myself. One of them is my target.

panel 2
.........

panel 3
フッ
Uhn.

page 18
panel 1
.........

panel 2
本当に。。。私が狙いではないようですね。。。
So it seems his target isn't really me...

panel 3
「仕事のジャマをするな」と言った。。。 / まだ終わっていない。。。。。。?
He said, “Do not interfere with my work”.../So he's not finished yet......?

panel 4
*まさか。。。彼の狙いは…* / リトー / ヤミちゃん一人で大丈夫かなぁ
Don't tell me...his target is......*/Rito./Is it really okay for Yami-chan to go alone?

page 19
panel 1
今 またピストルの音聞こえたよ / ヤミなら心配ないとはおもうけど。。。
Just now, I heard another gun shot./I don't think we have to worry because it’s Yami, after all, but...

outside of panel
“クロ”が狙う真の標的(ターゲット)とは一体。。。
Who in the world is Black's true target...?


150

page 1
panel 4
Uhm… It seems/to have stopped raining…
outside panel
The terror presses down on them...a precipitous cliff and no escape!!

page 2
panel 1
.........
panel 4
Mauu mauu./You seem to be in a good mood, Celine-chan…
panel 5
.........

page 3
panel 1
Everyone sure looks worn out.../It's probably because it has been many hours since then......
panel 2
Yami-san!
panel 3
Yami! We heard a gunshot earlier! Are you okay?/I'm fine...
panel 4
Does anyone know who's behind this?/Eh!?
panel 5
An assassin just like me.../His code name’s "Black".

page 4
panel 1
Did you say Bl...Black!?/Do you know him, Peke?
panel 2
I have seen his name on “The People Under Surveillance List”./He's an assassin that has mastered the "Black Ornament Gun". It shoots bullets that have spiritual energy placed into them...
panel 3
As...Assassin.........!/Nooooo, Rito-kun! I'm scared!->heart
panel 4
Wh...Why did he kill Arashiyama?/I...don't know yet.

page 5
panel 1
But...It seems he still has not accomplished his goal./For now, it’d be a good idea to wait for our opponent to make a move first before we do anything foolish ourselves.
panel 2
...Since then, that Black hasn't made a move.../What is his goal?
panel 3
Could it be.../Deviluke...?
panel 4
Rito!!/Woah!!
panel 5
If something happens, then we’ll be okay with Lala-chan and Yami-chan here, right?/Uhn!?

page 6
panel 1
No matter what kind of assassin may come, those two will win, right!? Right!?/And Nana-chan and Momo-chan are here, too!!/Calm down, Saruyama!!
panel 2
...Everything’s going to be fine.
panel 3
Because I will protect everyone!/Okay.->heart
panel 4
Lala.../I will too, Aneue!! Aneue=Big sis

page 7
panel 1
When he comes, we'll quickly turn the tables on him!!/I hate violence…but one must protect oneself against any possible dangers.
panel 2
Nana... Momo...
panel 2
Damn it... I'm worthless./Not being able to do anything and having to be protected by girls......
panel 3
Ahahh. I beg you, my Fighting Goddesses!! Protect me!/You...

page 8
panel 3
Golden Darkness...uhn?/...Why are you targeting me?

page 9
panel 1
We have no more reason to fight./I have destroyed the organization that made you a weapon.
panel 2
You’re saying... I can live however I want to?/In spite of me knowing no other way of living…
panel 3
Except for fighting?

page 10
panel 1
Yami-san.../Are you okay...?
panel 2
Eh...?/What is it, Mikan?
panel 3
I was worried because you looked troubled…
panel 4
Troubled? Me?/Yeah...

page 11
panel 1
I was just remembering a little about a past event./Anyway...
panel 2
You’re pretty good at reading facial expressions./Well, you’re not as easy to read as Rito, but…
panel 3
I can tell./Because we're friends.

page 12
panel 1
I.../I-I-I have some horrible news!!!
panel 2
Saki?/Why are you panicking?
panel 3
Just now...We got a call from the employees...
panel 4
Arashiyama’s body was left at the entrance, but it seems to have disappeared... Not even a trace of blood was left behind.
panel 13
panel 1
Eh!?/What does that mean…!?
panel 5
Kyaaa!/The…the power’s out!?
panel 6
Why did it suddenly…?

page 14
panel 2
.........
What is it, Kotegawa?
panel 3
I was thinking that you would fall down on me like you usually do.../What are saying?
panel 4
Heeee./Kyaaa.

page 15
panel 2
Hee.
panel 3
!?/Hol...

page 16
panel 1
I didn’t do it! Saruyama pushed me into you!!
panel 2
Right, Saruyama-kun!? That's what happened, right!?
panel 3
Ov...ov.../over there...
panel 4
Ehh?

page 17
panel 2
...Black...
panel 3
!!
panel 4
!!/That's him...
panel 5
Please stand back, everybody.

page 18
panel 1
Mau mau./Eh?
panel 3
What are you doing, Celine!?/.....
panel 4
I'll translate...She’s saying, "Wow! A guest! Mauu.-Heart"./He’s not a guest!!

page 19
panel 1
Mau mauu.
panel 2
!/Eeek! Lala-chan!!
panel 3
Prepare yourself.
panel 4
So his target is Lala!!/And Celine...You should read the situation!!
outside panel
So Black's target is/ the Universe's Princess...!?
 
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Thank you Amzy for proofreading them for me. Hopefully I'll be able return the favor one day.
Thanks.
 
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