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Re: Histories Strongest Disciple kenichi

Hello, i have just started and haven't done too much, but I hope you give me some constructive criticism. Please inform me if I have mistranslated or made a mistake. Please note, I do not give a speaker because I have written the Japanese in the order it should have been read.

In volume 18, Chapter 157

Battle 157 – The flower inside the darkness
バトル157 - 闇の中の花

Page 1, Slide 3 -
Yaa, welcome to Japan, Lord Li (plum) Tenmon (heaven’s gate).
やあ日本へようこぞ、李 天門殿。
I heard you are the advance guard.
先鋒はあんただそうだな。

I am Ogata Itushinsai, before you enter the country I will deliver this!!
私は緒方一神斎、入国前にこれをわたしておこう!!
Isshinsai (the furigana doesn't distinguish between large and small kana, but small tsu is most natural here.)

Page 2, Slide 1 –
Oh my, “shadow boxing” (hard to work out martial arts style) is one person, Lord Kensei, isn’t it?
これはこれは“一影九拳”が一人、けんせい殿ですな!!
You're one of the "One Shadow Nine Fists" (leadership council of Yami), Kensei-dono, aren't you?
I have the honour of meeting you.
お目にかかれて光栄ですよ。

Slide 2
I see…
ああ。。。
Slide 3

Buriimaadaraa (Chinese kanji with furigana) isn’t it?
“ブリーマーダラー”ですね?
First character is フ, not ブ: Free Murderer is what the katakana says; looking at the kanji, I think "License to Kill" is appropriate.
Don’t mention my bad reputation. It’s a simple passport, of darkness.
人聞きの悪いこと言うなよ。ただのパスポートだよ、闇のな。
Don't mention things of ill repute. It's just a passport, from Yami (organization name.)

Slide 4
Ryouzanpaku, eh? Mha ha ha
梁山泊か、ふふふ
First is a preliminary test instead of greetings
まずは挨拶がわりの小手調べだ。

Battle 157 – The flower inside the darkness
バトル157 - 闇の中の花

Page 3 – slide 1
SHIINPAAKU!!
しーんぱあく!!

Slide 2
Shiin, paaaku!!
しーん、ぱあく!!


Slide 3
Shiiiin, pAaku!!
しーん、ぱあく!!

Slide 4
SHIINPAKU!!
しーんぱく!!

SHIINPAKU!!
しーんぱく!!

SHIIN….
しーん。。。

Page 4 – slide 1
As per Nijima-viceroy’s orders, for 300 metres in every direction, in 38 locations, we have established traps for defense.
新島総督のご命令通り、300メートル四方38か所に防御用罠を設置しました。

yes
むっ

Shiinpaku!!
しーんぱく!!

All departments’ assignments are also proceeding well.
各部屋の割り当ても順調です!
I think this is more like "Room assignments are also going well"

yes
む!!

Slide 2 –
Where are the other commanding officers?
隊長連中はどこんにいる?

In the training room.
トレーニングルームのほうに。

Slide 3 –
training room
トレーニングルーム

Slide 4 –
Oh! The atmosphere (they’re training so its like feeling, I suppose) became extremely appropriate.
おおーーー!ずいぶんらしくなったな。
I think this is more like "Oh! This has become just like you guys" or something.

Uhh, not Nijima…
やあ、新島君じゃな---い。
Hey, it's Niijima-kun, isn't it?

Somehow, with his entry it became bad…
なんかいたれりつくせりで悪いね---
Maybe "Too bad you graced us with your presence"

Welcome vice-roy!!
総督いらっしゃいませ!!
 
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Re: [Shonen] Naruto Chapter 394 by KNH

Bleach is popular, but normal fans wouldn't be able to check your translation. You'd need a Bleach fan who is a translator, reads the chapters in Japanese, is up to date with the story and has time/is willing to check your work. Although Bleach has many fans, I guess just a few actually possess all of those requirements
Yeah, I guess you're right. Though, I still will not stop with my translations! I plan on adding more manga translations when I get used to things.

But I really like this board and its purpose, and I don't want people to think "hmm, I guess my work will only be checked if it's a popular manga". On the contrary, I want people to think that anything they post in here will be checked (though maybe not right away). There's probably a lot of potential or wannabe translators out there, we must encourage them to post in here, hehe
Well said. And for the record, I have never thought that which is why I will continue to translate with each passing week. ^_^

As for the transcription, I'd suggest that you copy the script yourself and then use the one posted in that section to doublecheck your own Unless you really have no time, copying the script helps a lot and makes you learn interesting things It improves your reading speed, you learn new kanji, you're obliged to read the lines thoroughly if you don't want to copy something wrong (and then have your translation messed up by it x_x), etc. Lots of benefits Oh and by the way, if you use online dictionaries it's a lot easier to search for words if you have the transcript (especially if you use helpers like Rikai.com)
I love transcribing for all the reasons you mentioned, but I will definitely check my transcriptions with said section from now on. Yes, I only use online dictionaries (I really want to get an electronic one, too), and I love Rikaichan; it has helped me out a number of times. ^^

Thank you for your tips! I will most definitely keep them in mind this week. I see myself needing to do #4 a lot better than I have done in the past.
 

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Re: Histories Strongest Disciple kenichi

woot thx, i shall endevour to improve!!
 

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Re: [Shonen] Naruto Chapter 394 by KNH

Right Zetsu:
死んでない?
He's not dead, right?
I have to speak about this line.

The right translation here is "Is he dead?" Or continuing from the previous page's line "No way...Is...Is Itachi...

Dead?"

When Zetsu actually says this line in the anime (many moons from now) you'll hear his voice going up at the end. The nuances here are subtle, but he's asking this question in disbelief/shock. The context + the shot of Itachi's lifeless face tells us this, but the use of the ~ない form as a question is sometimes used in the same way as ~いるんじゃない?  This will usually end up as "Isn't X doing Y?" or just "Isn't X Y?" Maybe I'm not explaining it quite right, but the others will back me up on this.

Oh, and just because the Japanese has something in the negative form doesn't mean the English needs to have it, too.

Example: You're walking back from class to with your friend to his dorm to hang out. His door is slightly ajar, and when you walk in you notice his roommate under the covers, with a certain area of the covers rising and falling rapidly. He has yet to notice you. You lean over to your friend and whisper,

あいつ、 オナニしてねぇか?
Now which sounds more correct - "Is he jacking it?" or "Isn't he jacking it?"

Protip - When rikaichan (a great addon, don't get me wrong) and jdic/edict fail you, try dic.yahoo.co.jp. You learn very quickly and pick up things that the J-E dictionaries miss when you look stuff up in japanese :)
 
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Re: [Shonen] Naruto Chapter 394 by KNH

あいつ、 オナニしてねぇか?
Now which sounds more correct - "Is he jacking it?" or "Isn't he jacking it?"
I see what you're saying. The former definitely feels correct.

Thank you for the advice. I will most certainly keep them in mind for my future translations.
 

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[Shonen] Naruto Chapter 395 by KNH

As always, the parts I was unsure of are in bold.

Page 1

ナンバー395: トビの謎
Number 395: Tobi’s riddle

Side portion:
奇異なる秘伝をその身に宿る、木ノ葉の名門。油女シノ、いざ
Konoha’s noble family that has a strange secret residing in their bodies. Now comes Aburame Shino

Page 2:

奇壊蟲を従え
シノが行く!!!
The kikaichuu are out
Shino is going to make his move

Shino:
行け!!!
Get him!!!!

Tobi:
うわあ! キモイって!!!
Whoa!! That's disgusting!!!

Naruto:
何だよ簡単にかわされてんじゃねーかよ!
Whoa, he's dodging them so easily!

Page 3

Kakashi:
油女一族は一点集中型の攻撃ではなく
空間を大きくとった広範囲型攻撃を得意とするんだ
The Aburame Clan's attack style is not focused on a single point; they specialize in attacks that cover a wide airspace.

Kiba:
ナルトお前はシノと組んだ任務数が少ねーからな
Naruto, it's because you haven't been paired up with Shino on countless missions...

ここはシノに任せてみてろ! 蟲の邪魔になっからよ
Leave this to Shino and watch! Don’t get in the way of the bugs

Shino:
散れ
Scatter

Page 4:

Kakashi:
あれで逃げられない
蟲を全てかわすことは不可能だ
He cannot run away now.
Dodging all of those bugs is impossible

Naruto:
おお!
Yeah

Shino:
かわしているのかすり抜けてるのか
あいつの術を見切ってやる
Will he dodge it? Will it go through him?
I'll see through his jutsu

やれ 秘術・蟲玉
Get him! Hijutsu Mushidama (bug ball?)

Page 5:

Naruto:
ょっしゃ! いいぞシノ!
Yeah! Give him hell, Shino!

Shino:
オレが決める
何故なら任務に参加している以上今回こそは役に立たなければならない
I'll finish this
Since I'm participating in this mission, I have to be useful.

Kiba:
ったくまだ根に持ってんのかよ!
Aw man, you're still not over that!

Tobi
くっ・・・
Ah....

Sakura:
みるみるうちに蟲が・・・
あれだけの蟲をこうも自由に操れるなんて
In a flash, the bugs are...
I can't believe how he's able to manipulate that amount of bugs...

Kakashi:
ヒナタどう?
Hinata, what can you see?

ハ・・・ハイ!!
ターゲットのチャクラ確認出来ます
Y...Yes!
I've confirmed the target's chakra.

確かにシノくんの蟲たちの中にいます
He's certainly inside of Shino-kun's bugs.

Kakashi:
ヤマト!
Yamato!

Yamato:
ハイ!
Yes!

Page 7:

Yamato:
いつでも攻撃出来ます
I can attack at any time

どうなのシノ?
What's the situation, Shino?

Shino:
手ごたえは感じる・・・
何故なら奇壊蟲がチャクラを吸い取っている活発な動きが見て取れる 
I can feel a response...
That's because I can sense the kikaichuu are sucking his chakra

Naruto:
よし! そのまま吸い尽くしちまえってばよ!
Great! Let them suck his chakra until he's dry!

Page 8:

Shino:
どういう事だ?
What just happened?!?

Page 9:

チャクラに反応していた蟲が突然奴を見失った
あれえない・・・
The bugs that were reacting to his chakra have suddenly lost sight of him....that's not possible

Sakura:
瞬身の術?
Shunshin no jutsu?

Shino:
いや・・・瞬身の術ではない
何故ならもし瞬身なら蟲たちは奴が飛んだ方向へ反応して動く
No.... it's not shunshin no jutsu.
That's because if it was, the bugs would have reacted to where he went and they would have gone there themselves.

Kakashi:
あの状態で時空間忍術を使ったということか・・・?
いや・・・そんな事はありえない・・・
He used a time-space type of ninjutsu in that situation...?
No, that’s not possible...

Page 10:

Hinata:
・・・そんな・・・突然・・・消えた・・・
I can't believe...he suddenly....disappeared

Kakashi:
印も結ばず マーキングも口寄せも無しに空間を飛んだってのか?
それじゃ四代目以上の時空間忍術だぞ!
Without making seals, without marking, or without kuchiyose, he disappeared?
That’s something that’s beyond the fourth’s time-space ninjutsu!

Yamato:
体全体を消した・・・奴は存在を消せるってのか?
His whole body disappeared... He can make himself disappear without a trace?!?!

Sakura:
そんな・・・・
That's...
でも・・・!
But...

自在に体を消せると仮定するれば体の一部分だけを消せても不思議じゃない・・・
If we assume he can freely make his body disappear, it wouldn't be strange he could do that with another part of his body...

だとしたら体に当たるであろう外的攻撃のその接触部分だけを消すことも・・・
そうすれば攻撃はすり抜けて見える
In that case, if an attack hits somewhere along his body, he might be able to make that part disappear…
It would give the illusion that attacks go through him.

Kakashi:
やはり攻撃はかわされていたわけじゃなくて奴の体をすり抜けてたってことか・・・
As I thought, it's not that the attacks were dodged...they went through him?!?!

Hinata:
白眼
Byakugan

Akamaru:
ワン! ワン!
Woof! Woof!

Hinata:
見つけたわ・・・あそこ!!
I found him... he's over there!!

Tobi:
いやー!
どーもどーも!
Whoa, hello hello

Naruto:
くっ!
Ugh!

Kiba:
オレの鼻からに逃げられっと思うなよ!
Don't think you can escape from my nose!

通牙!!
Tsuuga!

Kiba:
ぐっ!
Wah!

Sakura:
こらキバ! 一人でムチャしない!!!
Hey, Kiba!!! Don't do reckless things on your own!

Kiba
またすり抜けられたか・・・くそっ!
It went through him again....dammit!

Hinata (not too sure it's her):
キバくん・・・今のは単にかわされただけだと・・・
Kiba-kun.... he simply dodged it this time...

Page 14:

Tobi:
どうだった?
How was it?

Left Zetsu
終ワッタゾ
It's over

Sakura:
何? あれ・・・
What... is that?

Naruto:
カブトの残した"暁"のリストに載っていた・・・
He was in the akatsuki list Kabuto left behind...

Page 15:

Naruto:
邪魔ばっかしやがって!
Don’t you dare try to interrupt!

Right Zetsu:
サスケの勝ちだよ!
うちはイタチは死亡
It's Sasuke's Victory!
Uchiha Itachi is dead.

Tobi:
うわー!
しんじられなーい!
Whoa! I cannot believe it!

Page 16:

Tobi:
なんてね・・・思った通りだ・・・
Just kidding....I knew that would happen....

Sakura:
サ・・・サスケくんが・・・イタチを
Sa...Sasuke-kun...killed Itachi...

Right Zetsu:
サスケも倒れちゃったけど・・・
Sasuke also collapsed though...

どうだろ?
What do we do now?

Right Zetsu:
結構ぎりぎりかも・・・
He could be barely hanging on.

Page 17

Naruto:
おい!! そこのトゲトゲアロエヤロー!!
今サスケはどこにいる?!
Hey!!! You thorn aloe looking bastard
Where’s Sasuke right now?!?

Right Zetsu:
アロエだとォ?!
Aloe, you say?

Left Zetsu:
構ウナ・・・
Pay him no mind

Part next to Kakashi:
謎の男(トビ)、動き始める!!
Tobi has begun to make his move!

Tobi:
貴様らの相手はまた今度だ
I'll deal with you punks some other time.

ナンバー395 トビの行き先は? そしてサスケは・・・? 次号、「急行せよ!」 へ!!!
Number 395 Where’s Tobi going?!?! And what about Sasuke? Next time “Hurry up!”
 
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[shonen] Ushio to Tora Ch 1 by alessandriana

First-timer here! Figured I'd give a shot at Ushio to Tora after seeing the shout out on the main page. I got a little help in doing the more complicated sentences (grr, old-fashioned Japanese) from watching the first episode of the OVA.

I've put things I wasn't sure of in bold.

Title page:
序章
「うしおとらとであうの縁」
Ushio and Tora's Destined Meeting

Page 1:
Shigure:
そもそも
妖怪変化は目にはみえんがちゃーんといるもんなんだぞ。
Youkai aren't visible to the naked eye, but they do exist.

Shigure: 現にうちの寺にまつられとる槍なんぞは、妖怪退治の名人のありがたーい槍なんだからな!
It's because the spear our temple is dedicated to is actually the famous youkai exterminator's cursed* spear.


(*The only reference I can find to arigatai is "grateful", but the OAV translated it as cursed, so I'm goin' with that.)

Ushio:
あのな。。。オヤジ今年いくつになる?
Hey dad... how old are you going to turn this year?

Shigure:
47だがそれがどうした?
47, but why do you ask?

Page 2:

Ushio:
そうか。。。 
47の分別ざかりでその上
寺の住職という社会的地位もある。。。そんなオトナが。。。
You've got 47 years of experience... and furthermore you're the head priest of a temple... and yet that kind of adult is...

Ushio:
#毎日毎朝ムスコにオバケの説教たれんじゃねーっ!!
preaching to his son every day and every morning about monsters!

Shigure:
ひてててててて
ow ow ow ow ow

Ushio:
ありがたあい「槍」があるっつーがな!
Does this cursed "spear" really even exist?

Ushio:
みせたことねーだろがよ一回も!
I've never even seen it once!

Shigure:
#う。。。うむ
Y...yes

Ushio:
このボケハゲ。ホラふくんじゃねー。
You senile old baldie. Don't brag.

Shigure:
だれがハゲだって?このちび!!
Who's bald!? You stupid chibi!

Page 3:

Ushio:
ムスコを足げにするとはてめー!!
Kicking your son like that, you bastard!

Random old couple:
はじまりましたな今日も
They've started again today

Shigure:
てめーとはなんだ!気にしてるコトを。
Who're you calling a bastard! Take care.

Ushio:
こーしてやる こーしてやる!!
Take this! And this!!

Shigure:
ちーび ちーび!!
Chibi! Chibi!

Ushio:
いてててなにすんだハゲ!
Ow ow ow, what're you doing, baldie!

Shigure:
お〜ろか者が! ガキがオヤジさまの相手になるか!
You fool! Did you think a kid like you would be a match for your father?

Sign:
くらの中の古本をムシぼししろ (バカムスコへ)
Idiot son: Air out the old books in the cellar

Shigure:
ちゃんとやっとけよ、潮!
Shigure: Do it right, Ushio!

Ushio:
オレは蒼月潮。今のは寺の住職でアホのくせにバカ強いオヤジだ。
Ushio: I'm Aotsuki Ushio. My stupid yet strong dad is currently the head priest at this temple.

Ushio:
ちっ
Damn.

Page 4:

Ushio:
うちの寺はけっこう古くて五00年くらいの歴史があるらしい。
Our temple is pretty old-- it's been around for about 500 years.

Ushio:
だもんだからこの蔵には檀家※からの寄贈品やらおはらいを頼まれたものやらがいっぱいだ。
That's why we have so many things in our cellar that parishioners* have given us or asked us to purify.

upper text: ※その寺に属してる家。お布施もするぞ。
*Families that are affiliated with the temple. They give offerings as well.

Ushio:
オヤジのホラの原因になるわけだ。
That's the reason Dad's always bragging.

Ushio:
まったくなにが「ヨーカイ」だ、なにが「ヤリ」だ!
Geez, it's always "youkai" this, "spear" that!

Ushio:
ガキのころからくどくどくどくどきかせやがって。。。
He's been going on and on and on about the same things ever since I was a kid...

Ushio:
しょっと。。。
Okay...


Page 5:

Ushio:
いってーっ。なんだよ!
Ouch. What was that?

Ushio:
トビラ。。。だ。
It's a... door

Ushio:
ふんっ!
Grr!

Ushio:
こんなのしらんぞ。なんか入っとるのか。。。なっと。。。
I didn't know about this. Let's see if it opens... okay...

Ushio::
うひゃ!!
Gah!

Page 6:

Ushio:
あいた〜
Ushio: Oww

Ushio:
あ。。。?
Aa...?

Ushio:
うえ〜〜
地下室たあオドロイたなあ。
Whoa~ I'm surprised there's a cellar here.

Ushio:
なにかいる!?
Is there something here?

Page 7:

Tora:
人間か。。。
A human...

Ushio:
うわああああ!! なんだなんだおまえなんだ!?
Uwaaaa! What the-- what the hell are you?

Tora:
やれやれ。。。五00年ぶりの人間はずいぶんやかましいな。
Geez... what a noisy human after 500 years.

Tora:
でも、まあいいか。。。
But, that's all right...

Page 8:

Tora:
この槍をぬけるのは人間だけだからな。。。
Because only a human can pull out this spear...

Ushio:
槍!?
Spear!?

Ushio:
ひょっとして。。。
Could it be...

Ushio:
オヤジのいってた妖怪退治男の「槍」ってこれのことかよ。。。!?
That this is the youkai exterminator's spear that dad was talking about!?

Tora:
どうした、今じゃそんなに妖怪がめずらしいのか?ならばついでに、自由になった妖怪もみせてやる。
What, are bakemono that rare now? In that case, I'll show you what a free bakemono can do.

Tora:
この槍をぬきな。。。小僧!
Take this spear out... brat!

Page 9:

Tora:
五00年の間!わしはこのいまいましい槍でここにはりつけられてきた。
I've been stuck here for 500 years by this annoying spear!

Tora:
どんなにもがいてもこの槍はぬけぬ。
No matter how much I struggled I couldn't take out this spear.

Tora:
この「獣の槍」がよ。。。
This Beast Spear...

Ushio:
けものの。。。槍。。。?
Ushio: Beast... Spear...?

Tora:
しらんのか?人の魂を食いながら邪を裂き鬼を突くこのクソったれな槍を。。。
Didn't you know? This damn spear that runs on human souls and tears apart evil...

Tora:
ま、いいから早くこれをぬけ。
Well, anyways, hurry up and take out the spear.

Ushio:
そ。。。それをオレがぬいたら。。。おまえはどうするつもりだ!?
If... if i do that, what do you plan to do!?

Page 10:

Tora:
フフン!しれたことよ!!
Heh! That's obvious!

Tora:
まずおのれを食らって昔のようにこの辺の人間どもを地獄へひきずりこんでくれるわ!
First I'll eat you, and then I'll drag the people in this area into hell just like I did in the past!

Tora:
うっぎゃあああああ
Owwwwww

Tora:
いててててておまえ〜〜〜〜なにをする〜〜っ!!
Ow ow ow ow~~ what are you doing!!

いて、じゃねーかよー

Ushio:
「なにをする」だあ〜〜!?そんなこといわれて自由にするかボケなあすっ!!
"What are you doing," you say~~!? You think I'm stupid enough to let you go after saying something like that!!

Tora:
イテテイテ!
Ow ow ow!

Page 11:

Ushio:
うわっ!
Uwaa!

Tora:
うわひひてあうあぴよよ〜!
Tora: Owwwwwwwww~!

Tora:
くそおおおぼえとれよ〜
Shit, I'll r-remember this~

Tora:
うぬはわしが絶対に食ってやるからな。
I'll definitely eat you, bastard.

Ushio:
へーそうかい。そいつは次のヤツにいってやれよ。
Oh, is that so. Then tell that to the next guy who comes along.

Tora:
あ〜〜〜まてまて!!
Ah~~ wait, wait!

Tora:
あ〜なんだ!わしもちょっといいすぎたよなんせ五00年ぶりの好機だったんでね。。。
Ah~ what! I also said a little too much, since this is my first good chance in 500 years...

Tora:
どうだ、こうしよう!この槍をぬいてくれたら、なんでもいうことをきいてやる。わしも人間に恐れられた妖怪よ約束はまもる!
Well, how about this? If you take out this spear, I'll do anything you say! I know I'm a terrifying monster to humans, but I promise!

Page 12

Ushio:
それで自由になったらどうすんのよ?
And then once you get free, what will you do?

Tora:
そりゃーまずおまえを食らって。。。
Well, first I'll eat you...

Tora:
おっおいっ!
Hey, hey!

Ushio:
人の命が食いモンにしかみえない妖怪を誰が野放しにするってんだよ!
Who in their right mind would let go a monster who only sees humans' lives as food?

Tora:
おっ、おいっ、イノチってなんだよ!動けるってコトだろ?
Hey, hey, what's this "life"? Does it mean that you can move?

Tora:
おまえは動けるように食わないって!ほかの人間はオマエにカンケーないだろうっ!!
In order to keep you moving, I won't eat you! Just other people who don't have anything to do with you!

Tora:
なんでもしてやるぞ! 気にいらんヤツでもなんでもころしてやるから!!
I'll do anything! If there's someone you hate or anything, I'll kill them!

Ushio:
てめーが自殺しろっ!
Just go kill yourself!

Page 13:
オヤジーっ。槍はあったけどバケモンつきじゃねーかよ!
Dad--. The spear was there but the monster was there too!

Ushio:
と。。。あれ?
...Huh?

ん。
Hmm.

Letter:
潮へ
ちょっと日本海の方をプラプラしてくるから一週間ほどまたテキトーにやっとくれ
追伸
冷蔵庫の中の中華まんじゅーに手をつけたら殺すぞ
パパより

To Ushio
I've gone to the ocean to relax, see you in about a week, do it properly(?) (take care of yourself?)
P.S.
If you touch the chinese buns in the fridge, I'll kill you.
From Papa

Ushio:
あのボケオヤジー!!かんじんな時にーっ!
That senile old man! At a time like this!

Page 14:

Asako:
やだ、気持ちワルい雲!
はやく帰らなきゃ。。。まったく!
Man, what an ugly looking cloud! If we don't get home soon... geez!

Asako:
レポート提出明日なのよ!あたしだってあのノートつかうんだから。
The report's due tomorrow, and I need to use those notes too!

Mayuko:
なーんていって日曜日にも蒼月クンとあえるなんていーねぇ麻子!
What're you saying, don't you think it's nice to see Aotsuki-kun on a Sunday, Asako?

Asako:
ちょ、ちょっとまってよ、誰が誰にあってうれしいだって?真由子。
W-wait a minute, who'd be happy to see who? Mayuko.

Mayuko:
あら、うれしくないの?
Oh, then you aren't happy?

Asako:
あったりまえよだーれが!
Obviously, who would be!

Mayuko:
あたしはうれしいな。じゃ、もらってもいいの。
Mayuko: I'm happy. So then, is it okay if I take him?

Asako:
どつ、どーぞどーぞゴカッテに!
Have, have at him!

Page 15:

Ushio:
あれーどーしたーおまえら?
Huh? Why are you guys here?

Asako:
どうしたーじゃないでしょ!この前貸したノート
あれあたしもつかうのよ!
What do you mean, "why"? I need to use those notes I loaned you too!

Mayuko:
ハーイ。
Yep.

Ushio:
あ〜〜〜わっすれてたあ〜
Ah, geez, I forgot~

Asako:
わっすれてた〜じゃなーい!
What d'you mean, you forgot!

Asako:
だいたいいつもあんたはねー。。。
You're always like this...

。。。!

Page 16:

Ushio:
おまえらっうしろっ!!
Behind you!

Mayuko:
なにっ
What?

Asako:
きゃっ
Eek!

Asako:
なによっおどかさないでよっ!
What the-- don't scare us like that!

Ushio:
え。。。
Uh...

Asako:
これだから子供は、こまったもんなのよ!
This is why you were such a pain when we were kids!

Mayuko:
あはははあおどろいちゃった。
Ahaha, that surprised me!

Ushio:
こいつらにはみえてない!?
They can't see them!?

Ushio:
うわっわっ!!
Aaah!

Asako:
どうしたのよ?
What is it?

Mayuko:
ムシでもいるの?
Is it a bug?

Ushio:
二人とも本当になにもみえんのか?
You two really don't see anything?

Asako:
#なにもってなにがよ!?
What do you mean, "anything"!?

Page 17:

Ushio:
こっ。。。このっ。。。
It... it's...

Mayuko:
きゃん
Eek!

Asako:
なにをトチ狂っておるバカモン!!
What are you going (touch??) crazy for, idiot!

Ushio:
そうそう、はやくノートとってこい。
That's right, hurry up and get my notes!


Page 18:

Ushio:
おかしぜ。
That's strange.

Ushio:
なんであんなのがオレにだけみえるんだよ!?
Why am I the only one who can see those things?

Ushio:
オイ、バケモンてめーオレの目になんかしたろっ!!
Oi, bastard, what'd you do to my eyes!

Ushio:
ヘンなマボロしでもみるよーな術でもかけたろちくしょー!
You put some kind of spell on me to make me see strange illusions, didn't you!

Tora:
くくっ。。。
くっくっくっくっ。。。
はっはっはっは。。。
Kukukuku.... hahahaha.

Page 19:

Tora:
ばーか、そりゃわしの妖気がよんだ虫怪や魚妖どもよ!!
Idiot, those are the bug and fish youkai that my youki called here!

Tora:
この地下には五00年間とじこめられていたわしの妖気やうっぷんがたまってた。。。
In the 500 years I've been imprisoned here, my youki and my resentment have accumulated here...

Ushio:
なに。。。
What...

Tora:
それをおまえが解放した。
And that's what you released.

Tora:
妖気は流れでて、この辺りの低級な小妖怪どもを引きよせたのさ。
My youki is flowing out, and pulling in all the low-class youkai in this area.

Tora:
わしに接したおまえは人間よりはやくみれるだろうがな。
You can see them sooner than other humans because you have been in contact with me.

Tora:
みてろよ。やつらは実体化して人を襲うぞ!
You'll see. As soon as they become substantial, they will attack people!

Page 20:

Girls:
きゃああああああ
Kyaaaaaaa

Ushio:
くっ!
Shit!

Tora:
ほう、ほかに人間がいたのか女か。。。
Ah, so the other humans here were women...

Tora:
ムダだね。おまえにゃたすけられん 魚妖どもは、やっかいだからな。
It's useless. There's no way you can save them.

Tora:
おまえのせいだな!おまえがここをあけなけりゃよかったんだ。
It's your fault! You should never have opened this place.

Ushio:
そうだ オレのせいだ!
He's right. It's my fault!

Ushio:
おれのせいであいつら。。。!
It's my fault that they...!

Tora:
わかってるな。
You seem to understand.

Tora:
わしならできるんだぜ!
But I could do it!

Page 21:

Tora:
へへ。。。そのためにゃこの槍がジャマだがなあ。。。
Hehe... though to do that, this spear would get in the way...

Tora:
フン。わかったみてえじゃねえか。
Heh. Looks like you do understand...

Ushio:
。。。やっつけてくれよ。。。
You'll get rid of them...

Tora:
約束は守るさ。。。
I keep my promises...

Page 22:

Ushio:
うわっ!
Uwaa!

Page 23:

Tora:
はあはあ。よくもわしをコケにしてくれたなああ。。。
Tora: Hahaha... How dare you think you could make a fool of me...

Ushio:
な。。。!
Wha...!

Ushio:
約束はどうなる。。。あいつらわ。。。
What about your promise? They're...

Tora:
だれが人間との約束なんてまもるんだよ!けけけ。
Who the hell would keep a promise to a mere human? Kekeke.

Ushio:
きたねえぞ。。。
That's dirty...

Tora:
まさまーッ!
No way... (???)

Page 24:

Tora:
しまった!コイツまだ槍をもったままだったんだ。。。
Shit! He still has the spear...

Tora:
ということは。。。
That is to say...

Tora:
あの時と。。。同じだ。。。
It's the same... as that time...

Tora:
五00年前わしをここにぬいつけたサムライと。。。
The samurai that trapped me here 500 years ago...

Tora:
同じだああ。。。!
It's the same!

Tora:
ああ。
Aah.

Tora:
あああ〜〜〜!
Aaaaa~!

Page 25:

Tora:
うっわああああああ
Uwaaaaaaa!

Tora:
どけえええいっ!!
Outta the way!!


Page 26

Tora:
まいったあっ!まいりましたあっ!!
I give up! I surrender!

Tora:
約束どおり妖怪はやっつけるぜ!
I'l get rid of the youkai like I promised!

Tora:
だからカンベンしてくれえっ!
So please forgive me!

Tora:
ひゃあああっ!!
Hyaaaa!


Page 27:

Asako:
なにコレ!なんなのよーっ!!
What the-- what are they!?

Mayuko:
やだーっやだやだ たすけてーっ!!
Ew ew ew, help!

Asako:
えっ!?
Huh!?

Page 28:

Girls:
あああっ!
Aaaa!

Tora:
うわ!やってくれるぜ。魚妖どもがあつまってどんどんでかくなっていきやがる。
Uwa! They're really coming. Those damn fish youkai are quickly coming out and merging together...

Tora:
ひっ!
Eep!

Ushio:
先におまえがいけ。オレがとどめをさす。
You go first. I'll finish it off.

Page 29:

Tora:
はっ はいっ。
Ri-- right.

Ushio:
5。#フウウウウ
Aaaaaaaah!


Page 31:

Ushio:
槍が。。。教えてくれた。。。
The spear... it's talking to me...

この槍は妖怪を退治するためだけに二千年も昔中国でつくられた。。。「獣の槍」。
The spear was made two thousand years ago in ancient China for the sole purpose of exterminating youkai... the Beast Spear.

人の魂を力に変えて妖怪を討つ。。。ゆえに使う物は獣と化してゆく。
It changes people's souls into power in order to fight youkai... therefore those who use it are changed into beasts.

獣と化し槍と一体となり その物は妖怪を倒すためだけの生きものになってゆく。
They change into a beast and become one with the spear... and become someone who lives only for killing youkai.

おまえを刺した侍もそうだったんだろ?
Ushio: The samurai who trapped you was the same, right?

Page 32

Tora:
ああ。。。
Yeah...

Tora:
じゃ あばよ
Well, goodbye.

Ushio:
まさかゆるされると思ってんじゃないよな?
You didn't really think you were forgiven, did you?

Tora:
だってサカナやムシはやっつけただろ。。。!
But I killed the fish and bug youkai...!

Ushio:
ちがうね。
Wrong.

Ushio:
おまえの五00年分の妖気はまだ当分の間ほかの妖怪をよぶんだろ?
Your 500 year old youki will still be drawing in other youkai for the time being, right?

Ushio:
それもおまえの責任だ!
That's also your responsibility!

Tora;
きったねーっ。いたたたたたた。。。
Cheater. Owowowowow....

Ushio:
なにいってんだだましたクセに。
Look who's talking, liar...


Page 33:

Tora:
人間め!こうなったらとりついてやる。スキをみて絶対に食ってやるぞ!
Stupid human! In that case I'm going to haunt you. And as soon as I get a chance, I'm definitely going to eat you!

Ushio:
こんなヤツを世に放つわけにゃいかねーもんな。いつかゼッタイこの槍でホロボしてやるぞ。
There's no way I can let him go free. I'm definitely going to kill him with this spear someday.

Tora:
おい クソ人間!
Oi, shitty human!

Ushio:
なんだバカ妖怪!
What, idiot youkai!

Girls:
え あ。。。あれ; うそオ
huh, what, no way

Tora:
さっきいってた「イノチ」ってコトバの意味がわからん。。。
Tora: I still don't understand that "life" word you said earlier...

Ushio:
おまえにゃ一生わかんねーよ!それよりも名前ねえと不便だな。。。
Like hell you don't understand it! And more importantly, it's irritating not having a name to call you...

Ushio:
よし!おまえのコトをとらとよぼう。(かおそっくりだし。。。)
Right! I'll call you Tora. (Your face looks like one...*)

*Tora = tiger

Tora:
なっ。。。!やだぞわしはそんなの。。。
Wha...! But I don't like it...

Ushio:
うるせえ!じゃこの態度はなんだ!?
Shut up! And what's with that attitude!? (is he talking about how Tora is now invisible and weightless and sitting on his shoulder?)

Tora:
いーだろ、どうせほかの人間にゃみえねえから。それよりわしはそんな名はいやだぞ。
It's fine, other humans can't see me. And more importantly, I don't like that name.

Ushio:
やかましいっ。
Shut up.
 

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Re: [Shonen] Naruto Chapter 395 by KNH

Sorry for taking so long, I was somewhat busy >_<

This time I was very picky XD; Though actually, there weren't many wrong lines. I mostly wrote suggestions on how to make the lines sound better/more fluent, and sometimes I just explained some nuances :)
This chapter wasn't very easy, anyway. I had no problems understanding, but it took me quite some time to translate it to English as well! @_@ It had quite a few twisted sentences in it~ XD


Tobi:
うわあ! キモイって!!!
Whoa!! I already said that's disgusting!!!


The って is indeed used to express that he said that already, but it's often left untranslated because it sounds a bit verbose. You might just use "Whoa!! That's disgusting!!!" and that would deliver the meaning alright without getting the line longer and less fluent :D


Naruto:
何だよ簡単にかわされてんじゃねーかよ!
What the hell? He's not dodging it so easily.


This one means the opposite :) It's the form じゃない(か), they use it very often. To remember how it works, you could think it as "isn't he dodging them easily?", and then you could make it sound more fluent, like "he's just dodging them easily!" or something similar. When you see じゃない, always pay attention and try to understand whether it's used with its normal negative meaning or as an abbreviation/slang of じゃないか! :D


Shino:
かわしているのかすり抜けてるのか
あいつの術を見切ってやる
Will he dodge it? Will it go through him?
I'll see through his jutsu


This is actually pretty fine, I just wanted to point out something about the first part :) In this case it's fine to word it like you did, but the expression "〜のか 〜のか" is often used to say "whether xxx or xxx". For example, if it were said like this:
かわしているのかすり抜けてるのかを見切ってやる
a better translation would be:
"I'll find out [see through] whether he dodges or it goes through him".
And by the way, a single 〜のか can also be used in a similar way :) For example:
彼に何があったのか(を)調べてみる
Wrong -> What happened to him? I'll try to find out.
Right -> I'll try to find out what happened to him.
It's more easy to get when there's a を, but that's not always the case, especially when people speak :)


やれ 秘術・蟲玉
Get him! Hijutsu Mushidama (bug ball?)


Yeah, it sounds something like "bug ball" or "ball of bugs" XD


Shino:
オレが決める
何故なら任務に参加している以上今回こそは役に立たなければならない
I've decided...
It’s because I don’t get a chance to participate in missions; this time I’ll be useful.


In this case, 決める means "to finish someone/to make the final move". A bit like "I'll decide the end of this fight because I'll be the one to make the final move" XD; So you could just say "I'll finish him" :)
As for the second part, "任務に参加している以上" means "since I'm participating in the [this] mission". 以上 is used in the meaning of "from the moment that/since" :D So basically the whole line means "It's because - since I'm participating in this mission - this time I HAVE to be useful" (=since the last time I was left out, I must show that I'm perfectly capable of doing something helpful)


Sakura:
みるみるうちに蟲が・・・
あれだけの蟲をこうも自由に操れるなんて
On top of being quick, the bugs are...
To be able to manipulate that amount of bugs...


About the first line: みるみる means "very quick/in the blink of an eye" and うちに can also mean "while (within a certain time)". For example, 子供が寝てるうちに家の掃除をしました = "I cleaned the house while the kids were sleeping." Thus, Sakura's line means -> "In the blink of an eye/In a flash [In a very quick time] the bugs..."
The second line does indeed mean that, but you could make it a bit more fluent. For example, you could translate it as "How can he freely manipulate that amoung of bugs...?" or "I can't believe he's able to freely manipulate that amount of bugs...!". I added "freely" because there's 自由に too, but you could use "ease/easily" or such.


Kakashi:
ヒナタどう?
Hinata, what's going on?


Not wrong, since anyway どう is a bit vague, but I'd say it more like "what do you see/how does it seem to you?". It's more like Kakashi is asking Hinata, who has the Byakugan, what she's seeing with it, not just a general "what's happening?".


Naruto:
よし! そのまま吸い尽くしちまえってばよ!
Great! Let them suck his chakra until it’s depleted.


Not wrong, but since it's Naruto speaking, I'd just use "[he's] dry" or "empty" instead of "depleted" ;)


Kakashi:
印も結ばず マーキングも口寄せも無しに空間を飛んだってのか?
それじゃ四代目以上の時空間忍術だぞ!
Without putting seals together, without marking, or without kuchiyose, he disappeared?
That’s something that’s beyond the fourth’s time-space ninjutsu!


This is right :) I'd say "making seals" instead of "putting seals together" though, it sounds more fluent. And by the way, I don't know if you got what he means with "marking", so I'll explain just in case (because it could be useful in the future, you never know XD). In Kakashi Gaiden the fourth Hokage used a kind of space-time ninjutsu that involved markings. Basically, he had a special kunai (that had a seal on it or something) that worked as a mark: when he wanted, he could use a space-time ninjutsu to teleport to the exact point the kunai was. This is what Kakashi was referring to :)


Sakura:
そんな・・・・
That's horrible


It's pretty hard to guess what Sakura actually meant here, though we could suppose it was similar to "that's impossible", so I'd just leave it as "that's..." :)


自在に体を消せると仮定するれば体の一部分だけを消せても不思議じゃない・・・
If we assume we can freely make his body disappear, even making one part of his body disappear isn't strange.


Second "we" -> he (typo I believe XD)
It's correct, but you could've expressed it better ;) There are two "disappear", they sound a bit redundant. A possible version: "If we assume he can freely make his body disappear, it wouldn't be strange that he can do it with just one part of his body too".


だとしたら体に当たるであろう外的攻撃のその接触部分だけを消すことも・・・
そうすれば攻撃はすり抜けて見える
If that’s the case, if an attack hits somewhere along his body, he might be able to make that part disappear…
If that's done, it gives the illusion that attacks go through him.


Same as before. It's correct, but there are many "if" and it could've been worded better. For example: "In that case" instead of "If that's the case"; "It would give" instead of "If that's done, it gives".


Naruto:
くっ!
Damn


In this kind of manga くっ is often just an SFX, like "ugh/gh/agh", I wouldn't give it a deeper meaning like "short for くそ" or such ;)


Kiba
またすり抜けられたか・・・くそっ!
He went through him again....dammit!


"It", not "he", since he's referring to his attack :)


Naruto:
邪魔ばっかしやがって!
Don’t you dare try to interrupt!


It's more like "You're getting in the way!", literally. I think here (judging from the ばっか too) Naruto is referring to the fact that Akatsuki is always in their way, since someone just said Zetsu is an Akatsuki member. In fact I personally translated as "You're in our way again!"


Tobi:
なんてね・・・思った通りだ・・・
Some how....I thought that would happen....


なんてね in such cases means "[I was] just joking/kidding" :) The second part is a bit more like "Just as I thought/predicted", but your version isn't wrong either.


Sakura:
サ・・・サスケくんが・・・イタチを
Sa...Sasuke-kun...defeated Itachi...


Not wrong, but since they just said Itachi died I'd translate it as "killed" and not "defeated".


Right Zetsu:
サスケも倒れちゃったけど・・・
Sasuke also collapsed but...
どうだろ?
Tobi: How is he?


I'd use "though" instead of "but". Like, "Sasuke also collapsed though.." And then he asks Madara's opinion. I'd put something like "What do you think?/What do we do now?"


Right Zetsu:
結構ぎりぎりかも・・・
He could be barely hanging on.


Yes this is fine :)


Naruto:
おい!! そこのトゲトゲアロエヤロー!!
Hey!!! You there, the thorn aloe looking bastard


This is good too, though it's more like "you thorn aloe looking bastard", instead of "you there, the", because it sounds more fluent.


Left Zetsu:
構ウナ・・・
Don’t worry about it


Not wrong, but I'd say "(Just) ignore him". 構うな is like "don't care about what he says" XD


Tobi:
貴様らの相手はまた今度だ
I'll be your opponent some other time.


The meaning is fine, but 貴様ら is a denigratory term and the whole line expresses Madara's belief that they are inferior to him, so I would translate in a way that shows the nuance. As an example, these are mine and Hisshou's translations:
Tobi: I'll deal with you useless scum another time.
Tobi: I'll play with you children some other time.
We both expressed Madara's contempt, though differently :)

ナンバー395 トビの行き先は? そしてサスケは・・・? 次号、「急行せよ!」 へ!!!
Number 395 Where’s Tobi going?!?! And what about Sasuke? Next time “Moving at high speed”


急行せよ is more like "hurry up!"

I hope this helped! XD
(And I hope I'll have some time to see your other translations as well :))
 

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Re: [shonen] Ushio to Tora Ch 1 by alessandriana

Yay, I'm glad we have more people here! ^__^

I'll take a look at your translation as soon as I have some free time! :D
 

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Re: [Shonen] Naruto Chapter 395 by KNH

Hehe! Thank you very much, tora-chan!! You need not apologize. Although you were busy, you still found time to check my translation; I appreciate it very much. As always, your insight is very helpful!

This one means the opposite It's the form じゃない(か), they use it very often. To remember how it works, you could think it as "isn't he dodging them easily?", and then you could make it sound more fluent, like "he's just dodging them easily!" or something similar. When you see じゃない, always pay attention and try to understand whether it's used with its normal negative meaning or as an abbreviation/slang of じゃないか!
Ah, this is most certainly a tricky one. Whenever I see じゃない, a red flag goes off in my head telling me negative, so I see must fully understand what's going on before I can attempt to translate.

This is actually pretty fine, I just wanted to point out something about the first part In this case it's fine to word it like you did, but the expression "〜のか 〜のか" is often used to say "whether xxx or xxx".
Hehe. This isn't the first time I've encountered ~のか, and I've always messed up its translation; I need to able to recognize this construction.

About the first line: みるみる means "very quick/in the blink of an eye" and うちに can also mean "while (within a certain time)". For example, 子供が寝てるうちに家の掃除をしました = "I cleaned the house while the kids were sleeping." Thus, Sakura's line means -> "In the blink of an eye/In a flash [In a very quick time] the bugs..."
The second line does indeed mean that, but you could make it a bit more fluent. For example, you could translate it as "How can he freely manipulate that amoung of bugs...?" or "I can't believe he's able to freely manipulate that amount of bugs...!". I added "freely" because there's 自由に too, but you could use "ease/easily" or such.
Ah, I didn't know what うちに meant. Thanks for showing me how to use it. Also, I can now see how that second line could be translated better.

Not wrong, since anyway どう is a bit vague, but I'd say it more like "what do you see/how does it seem to you?". It's more like Kakashi is asking Hinata, who has the Byakugan, what she's seeing with it, not just a general "what's happening?".
I can see what you say makes more sense.

Not wrong, but since it's Naruto speaking, I'd just use "[he's] dry" or "empty" instead of "depleted"
Right. This falls under translating in a manner that represents the character, and since Naruto isn't all that bright, depleted wouldn't be the right word.

This is right I'd say "making seals" instead of "putting seals together" though, it sounds more fluent. And by the way, I don't know if you got what he means with "marking", so I'll explain just in case (because it could be useful in the future, you never know XD). In Kakashi Gaiden the fourth Hokage used a kind of space-time ninjutsu that involved markings. Basically, he had a special kunai (that had a seal on it or something) that worked as a mark: when he wanted, he could use a space-time ninjutsu to teleport to the exact point the kunai was. This is what Kakashi was referring to
Ah, yes, putting seals together does sound a bit awkward, doesn't it? ^_^
I had no idea what he meant by markings, but now that I think about it, I remember that part in Kakashi's Gaiden.

なんてね in such cases means "[I was] just joking/kidding" The second part is a bit more like "Just as I thought/predicted", but your version isn't wrong either.
Now that I think about it, I hear なんてね in anime a lot, and it's always said in a playful manner, so I should reflect that.

お疲れ様でした! The correction was rather long! Thank you!
 

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[Seinen] Black Lagoon Vol. 3 Chapter 15 by Akas

*This is the first non-shonen/easy seinen translation I've done, and I have a couple of questions but here's the raw edit of this. I'm doing this for Moar Bad Scans, so you should check them out here: http://mbs.project-darkomega.com/forum/ and ignore the comments I have on the side unless you want to help. Also, any references would be appreciated.*

Black Lagoon Volume 3 Chapter 15 Bloodsport Fairy Tale pt. 5

-Midnight with the stars and you, Midnight and a rendezvous
-Your eyes held a tender message
-Saying “surrender all my love to you”
-Midnight brought us sweet romance
-I know all my whole life through, I’ll be remembering you
-Whatever else I do
-Midnight with the stars and you

-That’s a nice singing voice
-I must be crazy, thinking that that cutthroat has a nice singing voice.
-Only the voice could touch the heavens
p. 50
-But
-that child grew to like strange things
-Geez
-Roanapura’s (city) “One night of terror” how did that demon-child come to request that sort of thing I wonder
-Huh
-Well…a request’s a request, usually we let one person have those duties (?)
-Thanks to you, we’ll be $15,000 dollars richer
-(12.7 millicut, 50 case, shouldn’t you be grateful?) (millicut is referring to a metal cutter?)
-Eda’s also poor
-It seems you’ve changed from killing, don’t try and steal the bullets from this (diigan).
-Oi oi, the (bad heads of family) have given up on this situation, Benny (hmm…)
-Eda’s so satisfied with the 5 figure (payout) that she’d satisfy the condition’s request. (Hmm)
-There’s a limit to how many times you can buy your life, Eda’s been pretty fortunate.
-I should receive the Nobel Humanitarianism prize for this, don’t you think? (hmm)
-Isn’t that right, Benny Boy?
p. 51
-You for that reason Giana Jones (full name of Eda?) should be at peace, for being a clergyman is a noble prize in itself
-Yeah, it’s like as you said
-In this place
-What’s Levi been doing?
-Levi?
-She’s been grumbling a lot about that kid’s situation
-Now she’s taking watch outside of the cabin
-Rock’s been preparing provisions in case of emergency
-That’s a pretty song
-Where did you hear it from? (…)
-Hu hu hu
-I viewed it from the TV. For myself, I really love that song.
p. 52
-But you know
-If Mister wants to more than just my song, (?)
-You can be the first
-He
-Hey?
-Mister,
-What do you feel is the difference between us
-In a different place…I must seem a person from a different world.
-…Before I said things that were strange, right
-I’m not familiar with this sort of life I guess…
-U fu fu
-Mister, you’re a good person
-Me
-Are good people also clever like you?
p. 53
-….it’s me
-…..is this Balalaika?
-I know what path you’re taking, Dutch.
-How long do you plan to be a recluse with that craft
-Do you think that this phone is also (secure? I can’t read the kanji)
-There are a lot of obstacles to saying (Watosappu?/What’s up?)
-By running away from a prize it seems as though you intend to put a chip on my shoulder.
-Right, Dutch.
-You
-Do you know what you’re doing?
-Certainly
-That including the price that we would receive, the reserve and what it would cost to chase us (?)
-When looking at all of that it’s lucky business. (?)
-…Dutch.
p. 54
-Why won’t you look at this logically?
- (Shrapnel love main morality thing are the kanji's individual meanings, guessing at what it means) It appears that vengeance is the main thing in your shrapneled heart.
-For the moment, I guess.
-I’m standing at a position but will change locations
-Dutch!
-Is our course north?
-Don’t think I’m doing this for any other I’m doing this thing only for you.
-Isn’t that right, Balalaika?
-Yes, that’s it Dutch
-I already came to an agreement in bargaining
-Yeah.
-It seems as though you’ve already found us.
-we’ve finished any regrets or future trouble (stopped anything from happening, I guess)
-Well then, best of luck to you
-Got it, Big Boss (or Big Rear officer?)
p. 55
-….Sergeant
-Yes
-What course do you think the Lagoon is proceeding under?
-That’s impossible to tell. We’re doing our best to herd them but they’re probably not changing (course, I think)
-That’s all right
-Bring the Trouble List with the E heading (to hire an assassin? I think)
-It’s always good to have insurance for your profits (?)
-Go and fetch our contacts
-Yes.
-That was extremely quick.
-Have you changed how you feel?
-It seems like that doesn’t it? (hmmm…)
-look at those guys
p. 56
-It was our child’s room but I was able to identify it
-That’s the Vietnam Navy
-You’re absolutely right
-They expertly made it so that we don’t have any good route
-This sea is Thai jurisdiction and they’re on the verge of making us lap backwards (go back).
-That’s Balalaika for you, Benny.
-Hotel Moscow’s power is (decaying/overriding?) authority and driving us until we’re in a corner
-Did you match wits with them?
-It’s an idiot house. This small boat has torpedoes and over there the warship has missiles
-These guys also have jurisdiction and can pass through with a good tailwind (?)
-we’ll piss them off if we try to talk so a South Ocean Island route won’t come to any sort of fruition.
-What’s your plan?
-Borneo (?)
-Melody Lee’s place? (?)
-I wonder if we’re done for
-Since we made this acquisition we haven’t had any chance at all (awk.)
-Well
-As it is, we should change course from N-NW heading.
-With this boat we can only go within range of Elroy (contact name) in Pangkalpinang (Indonesia).
-we can escape to that old geezer with that arm’s store if I remember right (the word is literally “arm”, so I don’t know how this fits in)
p. 57
-Bighorn Elroy
-Certainly looking at our alternatives, let’s go to that one (awk.)
-I got it
-Soon we’ll be able to contact them
-Ahh
-the ocean!
-Even when I come to the ocean I can’t at all look at the thing
-It’s regrettable!
-I’m sorry
-Just to make sure, we’ve changed our decision.
-It’s okay, I’m used to these things.
-About the sea,
-You haven’t seen it at all?
-I’ve never played with that thing.
-The time we went to Sicily we also were in an orphan house but,
-We always only saw the ash-colored walls.
p. 58
-The place we were born was in the middle of mountains
-In the middle of Calpachia’s (karupachia?) rocky mountains
-Always it when it (snowed? I’m guessing, can’t read the kanji), we would always feel incredibly lonely.
-When those old folks took charge of the place, it was eternally a bloody and gloomy period.
-Somehow in the past the ocean never had much of an impact through the TV
-We were kicked to the point of death, we were afraid to the point when we stopped urinating at night.
p. 59
-This is your first time, it’s good that Mister/brother is saying that (?)
-Why did God
-treat us so harshly, I wonder
p. 60
-But you know
-Brother and I took care of each other.
-The other kids that were before us were taken (away)
-that time when those kids were crying we were repetitively with a (bat/sword) beating them to the concrete floor.
-Everyone was laughing.
-Brother and I were also laughing.
-While we were laughing, I was thinking “I’m some sort of machine”
-Yeah
-Brother said we’re used for God’s machinery
-A bicycle’s tires have a purpose, moving through the world with it’s power…
-as for us, anyone’s life can be robbed like that.
-For that reason this world has used us,
-we are here for that reason as well, and only for that reason.
-Killing, to kill, we haven’t yet killed, we’re meant to dispatch those in order to keep the world spinning (?)
-….
-My brother for that reason is dying…
-don’t you think that’s sad?
p. 60
-What do you say to that? Mister
-That’s exactly what I exist here. At all times Sister and I exist together.
-For that reason we “never die”, forever we’re circling each other. (I think it’s yin/yang?)
-We’re forever together when we come and kill.
-In the past…with this sort of thing also, as the world continues to turn, we’ll kill.
-For the reason of killing, we meet all over the world, going with everyone, and that’s why we exist.
-But you know, Mister.
-Already we, when we kill, we’re never sad.
-the stink of blood, the screams, the lukewarm guts
-Now we really love those things!
p. 61
-You’re wrong
-That’s wrong.
-In this world, truly…
-the source of your happiness…it exists
-it’s all right
-Somehow blood and darkness are in your present world and it’s one-sided and lacks anything else but
-You haven’t felt…everything out there!!
-…..
-hey
-don’t cry, Mister.
-Hey, Mister.
-You’re the first person I’ve felt tenderness from.
p. 62
-That’s why
-hey
-Please, help yourself (you have my gratitude, etc…)
p. 63
-Was that Rock?
-Yeah
-Benny, my bad.
-I saw this situation happen
-The kid was troubled by what he saw.
-I got it, I’ll leave it to you.
-Hmm
-You seem like a monster but your blood’s red.
-Hey, shitty kid.
p. 64
-I’m not only your elder sister (?)
-It’s regrettable that you didn’t back then kick the bucket.
-You look like crap, shitty kid. (?)
-In this world, it’s best if you die
-You’d make everyone happy
-….hu hu
-you smell the same as I do.
-the stink of blood and gunpowder (smoke), sewage and back alley rot.
-You and I are the same thing
-mm, whatever type of individual you say you are is fine with me
-If you once again try and ridicule me, though, I’ll kill you where you stand.
-and also, it’s not funny to say that I’m the same as a killer
-you got that?
p. 65
-Shit
-Shit
-Dammit!
-…why….
-Why does that thing have to be too much (awk.)
-…everyone has been so close (?)
-That kid has to be finished off by the tigers. (like fed to the wolves >.>)
-That person is going to be sacrificed to the tigers dammit!
-Rock
-You’ll see the truth of that thing soon.
p. 66
-Here in this sort of place
-that's a first
-we have no choice, Rock
-....
-I
-You want to save that kid?
-It's impossible
-that kid won't stop killing.
p. 67
-....anyone can
-Right now that kid showed a bit of gentleness
-Get entered into school, make friends, she can probably find happiness in that life.
-But, she hasn't been changed yet (?)
-She can't change from this, Rock.
-For that reason
-what you're talking about here should end.
p. 68
-Dutch
-It's been a long time
-Yeah, been a while.
-That is
-Is that the load this time.
-Yeah.
-It's an emergency, can you prepare a ticketed trip to somewhere else?
-(sfx: ton! = step?)
-Somehow or another I'll arrange that thing. I always do.
p. 69
-Mister!
-Let's meet again sometime okay?
-Next time with just us two
-We'll have lunch.
-Okay
-With you it'll be wonderful.
-It truly will be won-
p. 71
-.....
-ah....
-....it's so pretty
-the sky
-Why...
-Elroy
p. 72
-It was Hotel Moscow, Dutch.
-What more can I say?
-Trying to run from that organization is finished. (awk.)
-For what, 10 years I've stockpiled things with you on the water's foam , Elroy. (?)
-....
-In South Africa you're son's living.
-Two months before, a letter came from your son's bride.
-He wasn't even 34 years old but he was already ill from cancer.
-The way that you've already chosen at your age
- You're also walking a tight rope.
-This person is our last job (together).
-As for Hotel Moscow, I'm hope you're not receiving a bad amount from them.
p. 73
-....as for you, Dutch.
-you guys be proud of your work.
-Wearing those things to the end, doing precisely dirty work. (hmm...)
-Farewell.
-....
-In her dying moments she said “The sky is pretty.”
-She wasn't tense/afraid.
-Rock.
-Give me the compass
-Don't try to cover up the body.
-....don't go there (?)
-Dutch.
p. 74
-It's okay
-Up until now
-Looking up at the sky
-She's viewing the ocean as she sleeps.
 

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Re: Black Lagoon Vol. 3 Chapter 15 by Akas

Thanks for posting your work here! ^_^ I've been somewhat busy lately but if no one does it in the meanwhile I'll check it!

Just one thing... Could you post the Japanese script and/or a link to the raw version? I think I know where I could find a raw scan for that volume, but if you include a link yourself it will be easier and faster! :)
 

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Houkago Wind Orchestra by Yami no Ame

This translation is reserved, please don't use it.

Hopefully someone can glance through this.


「」is used for boxes as well as the Japanese quotation/speech marks
[] My comments
( ) for small non-SFX text that aren’t part of the main speech bubbles

Page 1:
彼の名前は平音佳敏 15歳 この春から高校生
His name is Yoshitoshi Heion 15 years old A high schooler starting from this summer
中学時代の趣味は睡眠 特技は授業中気配を消すこと(お陰で当てられた例しがない) 成績は中の下 帰宅部
His interests at middle school were sleeping His skill was hiding his prescience during class (Thanks to this he was never chosen) His results were bottom of the average No club activities
ようはおおよそ濃ゆい青春を送るタイプではなく ____ それは彼自身自覚するところ
Basically, he isn’t the type that has an interesting spring time of youth _____ That is something that even he appreciates
しかし奇しくも彼の親友は言った 人生一歩先では何が起こるかわからないものだと
But oddly his friend said that ‘One step ahead in life you don’t know what might happen’

Page 2-3:
第1話 ちょっと涙出ちゃいました
Chapter 1: I cried a bit
ささやかな出会いが多重奏を作り出す… 吹奏楽グラフィティ、開幕!
Small meetings overlap to create an ensemble… Brass music graffity, Begin!
宇佐悠一郎

Page 4:
私立千代谷高校 通称チヨコー
Private Chiyotani High Hchool A.K.A Chiyokou
勉強もスポーツも全てにおいて平凡で実に目立たない高校
A plain school that is average in everything, results and sports
でも俺はどうしてもここに入りたかった
But I really badly wanted to get a place here
なんと言っても家から5分の好アクセス
I mean, it’s 5 minutes from my house
朝は秒単位で長く寝たいし
and in the mornings I want to sleep longer, even in seconds
きっとこの中では可もなく不可もない連中が低燃費な毎日を過ごしているんだ
I expect there’s going to be loads of average people spending non-descript days
なんと俺にフィットすることか
Ah, how it suits me

Page 5:
あっれ~~敏ちん!!?
Oooooooh, Toshi-chin!!?
うげぇっ… シロー!!?
Ugeh, Shirou!!?
いかにも~~~!!!うわ~~敏ちんココ入ったんだァ~~!!?小学校ぶりじゃな~い!!?
Absolutely!!! Wooooow Toshi-chin came here!!? It’s been since primary hasn’t it!!?
うっひょ~この地味な顔!!!全っ然変わってないしー!!つっかなっつかしーねー覚えてる?小2んときプールで敏ちん急にウン…
Woooooo that plain face!!! You haven’t changed at all!! Oh yeah, it’s been a while hasn’t it, you remember? In year to when Toshi-chin suddenly poo…
だ~~~ッッッ
Daaaaaaaahhhhhh
中学違っても毎年年賀状送ってたのに一度も返事くれなかったでしょ~~!!?
Even when our Middle schools were different I still sent New Years greetings, but you didn’t reply to any of them did you!!?
そっから何か察しろよ!!!
Deduce something from that!!!
は~~ 入学早々最っっっっ低だ!!!
Haaa This is sooo bad right from induction!!!
ねーねーおばさんとか元気? うっわ~俺のこと覚えてっかな~~!? (ねっねっ今度家行ってイイ?)
Hey hey is your mum doing well? Wow, I wonder if she remembers me!? (hey, hey can I go round your house?)
しっ 黙れ
Shhhh shut up
え!
huh!
Page 6:
あ… おはよう
oh… Good morning
ホッ
phew
うっひょ~~何よ今の美少女!!!ヤダ~~敏ちんにきびも直らんうちに色気づいちゃった!!?ウヒ~~~!!!
Woooooow, what was that cute girl just now!!! Ooooooh, Toshi-chins getting sexy is he? And before he loses his acne! Uhiiiiiiii!!!
っるせーな 同じクラスなだけだよ
Shut up! It’s just that She’s in the same class

Page 7:
そーいや敏ちんE組だっけ? なんかすげーっ カワイイ女子がいるってA組でも噂なんだけど 藤本鈴菜って知ってる?
Oh yeah, Toshi-chin’s in Class E right? There’s a rumour that you’ve got a reeeaaaally cute girl in your class, you know Rina Fujimoto?
…… [Doesn’t really need translating]
はぁ?さっきの?
Oh, The one just now?
(オハヨー)
(good morning)
ははーー… いやねすでに絶対オトすーーって息ごんでた奴いたから あ~~…ちょっと敏ちんにはムッズかしーーかな~~…
hahaaa… the thing is there’s a guy who was like really determined to make her fall for him. Ahhhh… maybe it’s a teeeensy bit difficult for Toshi-chin…
残念だったね敏ちん!!!
Unlucky Toshi-chin
敏ちんは多分ねーあのコが他の男と仲良くなってくの遠~~~くから見てるんだと思うヨ!!
I think that Toshi-chin’s going to end up having to watch her get friendlier with another guy!!
そだ!!!もしあのコもしあのコのメアドゲットできたら一万円やろか!!!一万円!!!
That's it!!! If you can get that girls mobile number I'll give you 10,000Yen!!! 10,000Yen!!!
「社長令息」
「Son of C.E.O.」
お前…悲しいくらい何ひとつ改善されてねーな…
Really… you haven’t gotten any better at all…

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あー あそこに500円玉
Aaaah, look a 500 yen coin over there
えー―!!?
Eeeh!!?
どこどこどこ
where where where
あいかわらず金持ちの金持ちの癖にくせにせこい家系だ
As always, what a stingy lineage, even though their rich
えーいそんなことはわかっている
Damn it I already know that
「藤本鈴菜ですよろしくお願いします」
‘I’m Rina Fujimoto, Pleased remember me’
たったそれだけの自己紹介に教室が軽くざわめいた
A short self introduction like that and there was a light commotion in the class
華やかで でもどこか控えめで さわぐ男がいるというのもわかるけど―
gorgeous and yet slightly withdrawn so I understand that there are guys who talk about her
そのての女子はあっち側の人間であってつまり… なんだ 俺には関係ない
But that kind of girl is, you know… well has nothing to do with me
えー 今から部活案内配るので――
Uhh, I’m going to hand out the club activities guide――
あれ? 一枚足んねーな
Oh? We’re one copy short

Page 9:
あ―… 俺いらねーわ
Ahhhhhhh… I won’t take one
そ?
Ok?
部活なんか入んねーし
I’m not going to join a club anyways
中学の時もよくあったよな… 気配消しすぎてプリントとか回ってこねーの忍者なれっかな
It happened quite often in middle school as well… I hid my prescience so much that I never got any sheets Maybe I could be a ninja
あの… よかったら… どうぞ…
Urm… please… take this…
へ
huh
あ いやいいから…
oh, don’t worry, I’m ok
いいんです… 私必要ないから…
no, it’s ok… I don’t need it…
あの あ…
Urm Th…

Page 10:
あり…
Thank…
えー鈴菜部活入んないのぉ?
Eeeeeeh, Rina aren’t you going to join any clubs?
ううん もう入るトコ決めてるから
It’s not that, just I’ve already decided which one I’m joining
そうなの?
Really?
あ… まいっか…
ah… oh well…
部活ねぇ… 部活って見るからに疲れそうだし …キョーミねーな――…
club activities… Just looking at them makes me feel tired …not interested…
平和な海… いいながめだ… やっぱココ入って正解だな…
A peaceful sea… good view… I was right in coming here…
わっ
Wa…
目にゴミがっ うわ――最低… ん
something got in my eye  Aaargh damn… mmm

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あ…
Ah…
やっ おれA組の伊東 俺さぁーまだ友達できなくってさー寂しーの! だからさー俺のおともだち一号になってくんない?
Hey I’m Itou from class A I don’t have any friends yet and I was feeling lonely! Sooo won’t you be my first friend?
アレか…
That’s the guy…
私人見知りするのでー
I’m shy of strangers…
マジ?わ~奇遇俺もなのよ! 気があったトコでとりあえずメルアド交換しない?
Really? Wow, what coincidence, I do as well! Seeing as we’ve just started to understand each other, you want to swap mobile numbers?
あ! 平音くん 先生が呼んでたよ 職員室に来いってさ! いこ
Ah! Heion-kun The teacher was looking for you He said to come to the staff room! Let’s go
ひいい!
Hiiiii!

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ご ごめんなさいいきなり…
S, sorry about that
い…いや
N… no problem
音楽室探してたら迷っちゃって…
I got lost searching for the music room…
別棟の4Fだな
It’s on the 4th floor of the outer wing
え~っと
Urrrrmm
―一緒に行こうか?
Shall I go with you?
え?
Huh?
バカか俺は!!! これじゃーナンパ君2号じゃん!!!
Am I stupid!!! At this rate I’m gonna be Womaniser #2!!!
いいの?
Is that ok?
へ
huh
うわ… ありがとう助かるかも (実はちょっと方向オンチで)
Wow… Thanks, that’d be really helpful (I’m actually really good at getting lost)
でもさ 何しに行くの? 音楽室
By the way why are you going to the music room?
仮入部
Provisionary club entry
――ああ
ahh

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あ ここかな?
Oh, is it here?
吹奏楽部?
Brass music club?
中学の時ずっとやってたの 高校でも絶対続けようと思って
I was doing it all the way through middle school and I definitely wanted to continue it at high school
わぁ…すごいりっぱな楽器庫
Wow… What a great instrument store
スイソーガク…て どんなだっけ?
Brass music… What’s it like again?
これだけ揃えば大編成だって―――
If there’s all this it’s even massive compositions are…
大編成?
Massive composition…
ん?  新入生?
Mmm? freshmen?
あ…はいっ入部希望なんですが…
ah… Yes I’d like to join…
あ 俺は違……
ah I’m no…
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あちゃ―― 悪いな―― 今年から吹奏楽部なくなってたんだけど… 部活案内かなんかに書いてなかった?
Woooooops… Sorry… The brass music club disbanded this year… wasn’t it written in the club activities guide or something?
え? (知らない…)
huh? (I didn’t know…)
読んでない…
I didn’t read it…
人が足りないとかですか?
Is it because there weren’t enough members?
ん――…それもあっけどー… 校長が突然去年の対外成績が悪かった部をなくすって言い出して まーうちもそのひとつで
mmm… there was that… Last year the Principal suddenly decided that clubs that hadn’t achieved much outside school were going to be closed and well, we happened to be one of them
ま 去年のメンバーも9人しか残ってなかったし ハイ解散!て言われたときも誰も反対しなかったし… 結局そのままグダグダっと廃部に……
Well there were only 9 of last years members left, and when they told us ‘disband!’ no one complained… In the end we just slipped into disbanding…
9人? 9人もいりゃ人もいりゃー充分でしょ 練習試合だって組めるし…
9? If you have 9 members that should enough, shouldn’t it I mean you can even hold friendly matches…
あれ? 吹奏楽って1チーム11人?
Eh? Do you have 11 to a team in brass music?
…………………… [I don’t think this needs anything either…]

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この辺市民の吹奏楽団とかあるし よかったらそっちあたってみたら? んじゃま 悪いけど
There are civilian brass bands around here so why don’t you go check them out? Sorry but I’ll be off then
ざ 残念だったな
T, that was unfortunate wasn’t it
で でもホラっ仕方ないし え~~とバイオリン?とか?別に部活でなくてもやれっし…
B, but you know, it couldn’t be helped urrrrmm Violin? or? You could do it somewhere other than a school club…
そ…そーだよ!! スイソー楽よりもっと楽し~~って思えること探せばいいじゃん!!!
Y, yeah!! Why don’t you look for something that you find more fun than brass music!!!
は?
Huh?
じゃあ聞くけど何? 部活より楽しいことって…… 何!?
Right then I’ll ask you, What? Something that’s more fun than club activities…… What is it!?
あああああわわわ ぼぼ僕何か失礼なことを……
aaaaaawawawa D, did I say something offenseive……

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あんた何一つ分かってないのね!!! 起立!!!
You really don’t know anything do you!!! Stand!!!
は… はひっっっ
ha… hahiii
まずひとつ!! 吹奏楽ってーのは読んで字の如く「吹く楽器」による音楽!!! 大別すれば 金管楽器 木管楽器 打楽器!!! ゆえに弦であるバイオリンは含まれない!!! (コントラバスは入るけど)
First!! Brass music is as read when written music by ‘blown instruments’!! [this sentence only makes sense when written in Japanese because of the symbols used for brass music] In general Brass instruments, Woodwind instruments, and percussion instruments!!! Therefore violins which are string instruments are not included!!! (though contrabass is included)
はっ ははははは はひっ わかりましたっ
ha hahahahahahahi Understood
復唱!!!
Repeat!!!
すすすすすスイソーガクは吹くガッキのオンガクでうんぬんかんぬん
b, b, br, brass music is music by blown instruments, rants on…
ふたつ!!! 楽器は全部で30くらいになるし練習場所と楽器の確保を考えればむしろ部活は最適!!! それでいて人数やジャンルの幅もかなり自由度が高くて気軽でおちゃめ!!!かつ楽しい!!! あたしはこのために高校入ったっつ――の!!!
Secondly!!! In total you get to around 30 instruments and when considering the space and the instruments needed, club activities are in fact perfect!!! And yet the number of people and the spread of genre’s is extremely open and is handy and cute!!! Also fun!!! THIS is why I came to high school!!!

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みっつ!!!
Thirdly!!!
まだあんの!!?
There’s still more!!?
わ…私たら… わ~~っっ平音くんしっかりっっごめんなさい~~っっ
W, wooops… Waaaaaa are you ok Heion-kun, Sorryyy
わわ……私その なんか吹奏楽部のことになると関することになると極端に沸点が低くなるというか… 高校では出さないようにと………
I, I…… When it comes to brass band I become kind of, well, easily agitated… I was trying not to show it at High school………
さ さっそく出たね…
I, it showed straight away didn’t it…
ごめんなさい……平音くんは出会ったばかりの人なのに…
Sorry…… Even though I only just met Heion-kun
あ で でも よく知りもしないのに軽はずみなこと言って…俺のほうも悪かったかな……とか
ah, b, but even though I didn’t know anything I said something thoughtlessly… I was… in the wrong too
よかったぁ…
Thank god…
うわー…反則だこの人…
Uwaaa… This is unfair…
そ それが藤本のやってた楽器?
I, is that the instrument you play Fujimoto?
あ うん
A, yes

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中一からずっとトランペットやってたんだ
I’ve been playing the trumpet since the first year of middle school
おおっすげー …高そう 使わないのももったいない話だな (さわらせて)
Wow, great …it looks expensive, not using it seems like a real waste (Can I hold it?)
ホント…こんなに揃っているのに… このままじゃただ楽器が傷んでくだけじゃない
True… There’s such a collection as well… At this rate the instruments will just rot away in the corner
藤本のいた中学って… 上手かったの?
Was the school you were at… good at it?
ううん別にフツー…
not really, only average…
私も上手いわけじゃなくて でも楽しかったし毎日休まず出てたら
I’m not that good either, but it was fun and I went everyday without fail

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中三で重要な独奏をもらえて… 必死で練習して…
In the concert in Year 9 I was given the important part of solo… I practiced really hard…
本番ステージに上がったとき
When I got up on the stage for the real thing
ああこれでこのメンバーと演奏できるの最後になるのかも…と思ったら いよいよ失敗できないって思って
I thought that this might be the last time we could play with these members and I thought ‘I can’t make any mistakes’
へたくそかもしれないけど一生懸命がんばったもん その成果を全て出すんだ…!!
Even though I’m not good at this, I practiced really hard I’m gonna show the results of that practice…!!
まあ…結果から言うと… 思いっきり事故ったんだけど…
Well… If you start with the results… I reeeaaally badly messed up…
(失敗したってことね)
(So you mean you failed…)
それで…結果聞くのが怖くて… 会場の外に逃げてひとりで落ち込んで…
And so… I was scared to listen to the results… and ran away to outside the hall and got depressed…
そそれはさトラウマとゆーか 嫌な思い出にはならなかったの?
D, didn’t that become a trauma or some other kind of bad memory?
うーん そうなるかと思った
Mmm, I thought that it would
え?
Huh?

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発表は聞かないんですか?
Aren’t you going to hear the results?
いいんです最後の大会なのに… 全然上手くいかなかった…
I don’t want to even though it was my last concert… I did really badly…
中学生に「上手さ」を求める審査員はいません
There are no judges that seek ‘brilliance’ from middle schoolers
知ってるこの人「常勝」賢洋高の顧問… で…では何を求められていたのでしょうか
I know this person he’s the supervisor of ‘Invincible’ Kenyoukou… th…then What do they seek from us
いやぁそう言われると難しいところですが (アハハ)
Ah, it’s hard to reply when asked like that (ahahaha)
ただね…僕なんかが学生の音楽を聴くと彼らが何に憧れそのためにどんな毎日を送ってきたのかー そんなことが全て見えてくるんですねぇ
Just… When I listen to a student’s music I start to see everything, like what they admire and what kind of day they’ve been spending for that

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その制服… 千賀中ですか実にイイ演奏でした 是非高校に入っても音楽を続けていつか今日の続きを聞かせてください
That uniform… Chigachu It was a truly good performance please continue music when you go to high school and let us hear the continuation of today
今日の…続き?
The continuation of… today?
ア―――っ鈴菜いた――っ!!!
Aaaaaaaaaa Rina There you are!!!
金賞だったよーっ
You got the Gold award
だめ金だったけど―――っっ!!!
Even though it was a Dame-kin*-------!!! (*Dame-kin – a gold award but the receiver cannot go on to the next competition)
ヨカッタあ―――!!
Thank god!!
仲間が迎えに来ましたよ
Your companions have come to pick you up
その先生最後にこう言ってくれた
That teacher told me at the end

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「15歳が「今日できなかったこと」を悔やむ必要なんかどこにもない」「大事なのはこれから先何ができるようになるかだ」って
‘There’s no need for a 15 year old to regret ‘what they couldn’t do today’ what’s important is what you are able to do in the future’
あー…だからかな つい部活にこだわっちゃうの…
Aaah, maybe that’s why I get so obsessed over club activities…
―――
いいんじゃない? ここでも音楽…続けられるといいな
That’s good, I hope you’ll be able to continue with… music here
ありがと
Thanks
そうよね 新入生に声かけたりできることあるよね!!
That’s right, There’s stuff I can do, like call on the freshmen

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――平音くん音楽は?
――Heion-kun how are with music?
お俺ムリムリムリムリぜって―――ムリ
T, there’s NONONONO Nooooooo way I could do it
――そっかごめんなさい
――I see, sorry
あ…
ah…
つきあってくれてありがとね 私一年の校舎まわってみる
Thanks for bearing with me I’ll go look around the first year block
あ…ああ
Y…yeah
何に憧れどんな毎日を送るか…か…
What you admire and what kind of days you spend… huh…
「どっと押しよせる疲れ」
「Fatigue suddenly washes over」
今だけで中学3年間の女子会話量を超えた……たぶん……
Just now I surpassed my 3 middle school years worth of conversation with girls……probably……

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一声かけただけでこんなに違った…
I called to her once, and it was so different…
一歩踏み出したら…… どうなるんだろう…?
Once you make the first step…… I wonder what happens…?
……って ちょっと待った!!
……hey Just wait a second!!

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考えても見ろ音楽だぞ?中学ん時2だったし楽譜も読めねーし 手伝えること…ないな うん
think about it, I mean its music right? At middle school I was a 2 and I can’t even read Scores [the 2 refers to the Japanese report grades with 5 being the best and 1 being the worst] I can’t help… Right
お…
oh…
どの部も勧誘はじまってんだ…
All the clubs have started recruiting…
おっとワリーな急いでんだ
Whoa, sorry I’m in a hurry
一度入部したら一学期間は変えられねーからな (ブヒャヒャヒャ)
Once they join the club they can’t change clubs for a term (buhyahyahya)
とりあえず入部させりゃ勝ちっすねセンパイ!
As long as they join we’re set aren’t we Senpai!

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ふーん 大変だね… ガンバレ ………………………
Fuuuhn seems tough… Good luck ………………………
わー教室ほとんど人残ってない ん?
Waaaa there’s almost no one in the class rooms mmm?
あ
Ah
中庭で部活の勧誘やってる どーりで!
There recruiting for club activities in the playground That’s why!

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鈴~~菜っ!!!
Riiiiiiina!!!
きゃあっ… ――長谷部さん
Kyaaa… ――Hasebe-san
もー 唯でいいってば
really, I told you that Yui’s fine
ねーねー吹奏楽部の仮入部どうだった?
How did your provisionary club entry go?
あ それが…
ah that was…
そういやさ中庭でこんなん配ってたよでこんなん配ってたよぉ~~
By the way they were handing these in the playground
な…
Wha…
なぁーんだ!他にもやりたい人いたんだ! 私手伝ってくる…どこにいた?
Oh right! There were others who wanted to do it as well! I’m going to go help them… Where were they?
こっから見えるよ?
You can see them from here you know?

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え?
Huh?
あーすいません!そこゆくひと! 吹奏楽部入りませんか?
Ah Excuse me! You going there! Why not join the Brass music club?
…………
どっかで見た顔…誰だっけ?
I’ve seen that face before… Who was it?
新一年も歓迎です!吹奏楽部は部員募集中で――す!
Freshmen are welcome! The brass music club is recruiting members!
こんな大声出すの何年振りだ 明日ぜってー声枯れてる~っ
It must have been years since I’ve shouted like this My voice is gonna be gone tomorrow

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わ…私 ちょっと行ってくる…!
I.. I’m going to go..!
――鈴菜待った!!
――Rina wait!!
へ!?
Huh!?
人を集めたいんでしょお? いい考えがある
You wanna gather people riiiight? I’ve got a good idea
あ あの吹奏楽部でっ…
U, urm we’re the Brass music club
へぇ吹奏楽部か 君が代表?
Hmm the brass music club Are you the representative?

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あ…そのなんとゆーか …ハア
Uh.. What do you say …yes
それカッコイイねどーやって吹くの?
That looks cool, how do you play it?
えっ
Eh
―たぶん… これは――…その
―probably… This is――… Urm
たぶん?
Probably?
ここに息を入れて… 音を出す?
Blow in here… and make noise?
どーやって?
How?
――ふむ
――hmm

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―なんか 根本的な何かが絶対的に足りてない気がするなぁ…
―I get the feeling that something really basic is very definitely missing…
そ…そぉ?
I, is… that so?
あこれじゃない?これつけて吹くんじゃない?
Ah, isn’t it this? Don’t you put this on and play it?
お! ――正解です
Oh! ――Correct
て…手のこんだ前フリするのね…
You… you do a really well planned test…
いや…いいかげんしつこいし…
No… It’s getting really persistant…
!!!?
誰?
Who?
ちょい あんた誰っっ (つか返してっっ)
Hey Who are you (Just give it back)
…構え方も知らないのあんた?
…Don’t you even know how to hold it?

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口の端ひいて
Pull your mouth back and
―「ぷ」
―’Pu’
「ぷ」?
‘Pu’?
そうあくまで軽く
Yes, but lightly
真っ直ぐ構えて
Hold it straight
遠く見てそのまま
Look into the distance
そのまま?
Like this?
「ぷ」?
‘Pu’?

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――…
うおっ!!! 今の見た?
Wow!!! Did you see that?
見たとゆーかうん聞いた
Urm, I not as much saw it as I heard it
うわ今すっげ楽に音でたし!!
Wow just now the note came out really easily!!
すげ――…何つーの? 音に当たった時 すげーすげー気持ちいー!!
Amazing――… How do you say it? When I hit the note, it felt really really good!!
なんか面白そうだな 俺1年C組の岩崎ってんだけど 仮入部してみようかな
It seems quite interesting I’m Iwasaki in Class C, First year, I might try joining this club
(お) マジで?
(Oh) Seriously?

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それに初心者でもやれそうだ
It seems you can do it even if you’re a beginner too
は――いみなさ――ん
Heeeellooooooo Everybody
ん?
Mm?
私たちと楽器やりませんか―― 吹奏楽部で――っす
Do you want to play instruments with uuuuuus We’re the Brass music club
…………
目立ちたい?とりあえず露出よ露出―― (アイドル研から借りてきたわ――)
You wanna stand out? Well then you increase exposure (I’ve borrowed these from the Idol research club)
(おにーさんどーよどーよ)
(how about it, guy over there)
あ…は… (はっ…恥ず…)
a…emba…(emb…embaras…)
藤本…!
Fujimoto…!
平音くん…
Heion-kun…

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藤本…
Fujimoto…
手伝うね 遅くなりました!!
I’ll help too Sorry we’re late
おい何だうるさいな しかも何だねそのハレンチな格好は 何部だね! 代表者は!!?
Hey what is this commotion An what’s up with that unshameful appearance what club are you! Where is the representative!!?
げげっ…誰?
Shit…Who?
校長だろ
Probably the Principal
すみませんーこの人の指示なんです
We’re sorry, It was him who told us to do this
はあ!?
What!?
な…な…なんという…
Y…Y…You…
ちょっ…この女っ…
Wai…This Bitch…

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あ あいつ…一体何者?
T that guy… What is he?
あの吹奏楽部――です
Er, We’re the Brass music club
すみませんでした……
We apologise……
――吹奏? ――ああ… 潰したはずだと思ったが…?
――Brass? ――ahh… I thought that I’d crushed it…?
ももう一度立ちあげたいんです
W, we want to start it up again
フン
Fun
「強い部活」かどうか私の判断はそこだけだ 吹奏楽部の強さとは何だね 大会に出て「強豪」と呼ばれることだろう?
I only decide whether something is a ‘Strong Club’ What is the strength of the brass music club Isn’t it to enter competitions and be called a ‘Strong group’?
とにかくだ結果も残せず学校のお荷物になる部活に 次など無いんだよ
Anyway There is no next for a club that doesn’t leave results and hampers the rest of the school

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お…お言葉ですが校長先生は スクールバンドの価値のありかたを誤解なさっているのでは…
I, I’m sorry but isn’t the Principal misunderstanding the method of weighing a School band’s worth?
鈴菜……
Rina……
その価値をはかるのがコンクールだろう 私もこの学校の演奏を聞いたことがないわけではないんだよ
Isn’t it the concerts that measure that worth, It isn’t as though I haven’t heard this school’s band
ただプースカと煩いだけで芸術性のかけらもない
It’s just noisy and doesn’t have any artistic value
ただでさえ目にも見えん形にも残らんそのうえ他人からは評価されない そのくせ金ばかり喰うそんな部活動に意味などあるのかね
You can’t even see it, it doesn’t have any lasting shape, and above that it isn’t even appraised by anyone and yet it squanders large sums of money, is there even a meaning for such a club to exist

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なにこのオッサン!!! 感じ悪いわね ねぇ鈴…
What’s with this old man!!! He’s so annoying hey Rin…
は?
Huh?
や やばっ…
C, Crap…
あ あの も―この辺で!!!
U, urm let’s leave it around here!!!

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こ…ここはひとつ 今後の活動を見て判断してもらうってわけにはいきませんか?
C, couldn’t you make a decision after having looked at the club activities from now on?
何だね君は
Who are you
あ…俺―…… そ…その!俺です!
Er…I’m……Y…yeah! It’s me!
俺が部長です!!!
I’m the club chairman!!!

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あ――つっかれた―!!
Ahhhhhhh I’m sooo tired!!
あんたけっこう度胸あんのね
You’ve got some guts haven’t you
おまえがゆーか!!
You can talk!!
確かにあの状況だったとはいえ まーいーけどそんなん後でどうとだって……
Even though it was that situation oh well, I can do something about that later……
平音くんだっけ?
Was it Heion-kun?
あ…
ah…
2年の小宮山!いや~帰ろうとしたらオモロイもん見たわ~
2nd year Komiyama! Iya~~ When I was about to leave I saw something amusing
いや…笑うトコちゃうな うち去年のコンクールだめだったからねー校長校長やたらとそれが気にくわないみたいで… あの女のコにも悪いことしたね
ah… that isn’t somewhere to laugh is it we did badly in last years competition and the Principal really seems pissed about it… Did something bad to that girl
いや…
No…
いえいいんです うまくいかなかったなら
It’s ok If it didn’t go well before

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こっから皆で続き始めればいいんじゃないすか?
Why not continue again form here with everyone?
――ん 私もちょっと皆に声かけてみるわ
―mm I’ll try and call on everyone
ま まじすか!
R, really!
おー ヨカッタね
Ohh That was good
あたし入ってもいいわよ!! なんか今日みたいなオモロイもんが見れそうだし
I don’t mind joining!! I feel as though I might get to watch something as interesting as today again
いやそれはどうよ
I don’t think so
なんとかなりそうね――
It seems like we might manage
じゃまた明日な――
Well, See you tomorrow
よかったな藤本 高校でも音楽続けられて…
That went well Fujimoto Now you can continue with music at high school…

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な 涙…?
T, tears…?
あ―…なんか疲れちゃったね 帰ろっか!
Ahh… I’m tired, let’s go home!
あ…ああ
Y…Yeah
お 女の子は 疲れると泣くのか… 知らなかった……
G, girls cry when their tired… I didn’t know……

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は―― 濃かった…
Haaaa What a day…
今日一日で中学の3年間分くらい疲れた…
Just today I’m as tired as the whole three years of middle school put together…
何言ってんの あとさっき携帯鳴ってたわよ
What are on about and your phone was ringing a while ago
メール? あービラ見て…
text? Ah they must’ve seen the pamphlets…
「メール受信
件名:藤本です
本文:藤本鈴菜です。」
「Message received
Title: It’s Fujimoto
Message: It’s Fujimoto Rina.]
なななななな
nanananana
藤本鈴菜です。今日はどうもありがとう。おかげで明日からまた吹奏楽やれそうです。 平音くんが力になってくれて、
It’s Fujimoto Rina. Thank you for today. Thanks to you it seems like I’ll be able to play brass music again from tomorrow. When you helped me,

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びっくりしたけど嬉しかった。ちょっと涙出ちゃいました。それではまた明日。藤本鈴菜
I was slightly surprised but pleased. I cried a bit. See you tomorrow.
Fujimoto Rina
う
U
おおおおお見たかシロー!!!
Ooooooo Did you see that Shirou!!!

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シロー!!?
Shirou!!?
いやぁ…俺は感動したよ
Iyaa… I’m moved
つーか何故いる!!!
‘The hell are you doing here!!!
夕飯食べに来てたのよ (久々に…)
He came to have dinner (it’s been a while…)
まさか一日で部活の長となりあのコのメアドまで見事ゲットするとは…
To think that you became the leader of a club and also manage to get that girls mobile number on the first day…
シローお前… 見てたのか?
Shirou you… were you watching?
なんか中庭でハズカシーことやってんなーって
I thought ‘their doing something embarassing’
見てたんなら手伝え!!!
If you were watching why didn’t you help!!!
でもまさか佳敏とシローちゃんが同じ学校になるなんてねぇ
But to think that Yoshitoshi and Shirou-chan would be in the same school
いやー金積んで入れてくれた最高ランクだったんス~ でもまさか敏ちんがいるとは思わなかったっス~
Iyaa it was the highest ranking school that would let me in with a pile of money su~ But I didn’t expect Toshi-chin to be there su~
でもね…おばさん俺思うんですヨ 人生一歩先では何が起こるかわからんもんだな~~って
But you know… Auntie I sometimes think One step ahead in life you don’t know what might happen
ネ……………
ne……………
…………

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「そして――」
「Then――」
あー掃除終わったー
Ahhh, Finished cleaning
平音はどこか仮入部したん?
Heion, you join any clubs?
あ…いや俺は別に
ah… no, not really
あ!こんな所にいた部長!!!
Ah! There you were Chairman!!!
ちょっ俺は悪いけど入る気はないし…
Wai I’m sorry but I have no intention of joining…
何言ってんのー音楽室に入部希望者待たしてるんだから――
What are you saying, we’re making recruits wait in the music room――
いや待て俺楽譜よめねーし音楽なんかやったこと…
Hey wait I can’t read scores and I’ve never done music…
ノープロブレム!!!あたしも岩崎って人も完全初心者だし!!!なんとかなるっしょ!!!
No Problem!!! Both Iwasaki and I are complete beginners too!!! We’ll manage!!!
でもあたしはけっこう楽しみなのよ 初めての人たちと初めてのことをやるって…
But I’m quite looking forward to it Doing something new with new people…
なんだかワクワクすると思わない?
Doesn’t it make your heart leap?
入学早々の思いもよらない展開―― 彼の胸中は複雑だった
The unpredictable events after induction―― his chest was full of conflicting thoughts

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「ひとつは」 「とてつもなく大きな不安」
「First was」 「A massive terror」
やっほー!
Yahooo!
「そして裏腹に」
「And yet underlying that was」
平音くん!! 来てくれたんだ?
Heion-kun!! You came?
「これから先」「毎日新しい何かが待っているんじゃないかという予感――」
「The feeling that」「everyday there would be something new waiting ahead of him――」
(はじめの… 一歩!!)
(The first… Step forward!!)
 

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[Shonen] Naruto Chapter 397 by KNH

As always, the parts I was unsure of are in bold

Page 1

うちはイタチの真実を知る者だよ
The one who knows the truth about Uchiha Itachi

Side portion:
もう一人の"写輪眼を持つ男"が語るイタチの真実-----そして、その目的とは!?
The other person who carries a sharingan speaks of the Itachi's truth----And, what is his objective?!

Page 3

Tobi:
まさか!?
This can't be...

Page 4

ナンバー397:真実を知る者
Number 397: The one who knows the truth

トビを包む黒き炎・・・これは!?
The black flame that engulfs Tobi....what is it!?

Page 5

Sasuke:
ぐっ!
Ugh!

ぐおおお
ぐっ!!
Ughhhh
Ugh!!

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Sasuke:
な・・・何だ・・・今のは?
Wh...what was that....just now?

Page 8

Tobi:
イタチがお前に仕込んだ"天照"だ
It's the "Amaterasu" which Itachi gave you.

Page 9

さすがイタチだ死んでもなお驚かされる
As expected from Itachi... even though he's dead he further surprises me.

ここまでの手を打っておくとはな・・・
I've taken measures for this up until now, though

Sasuke:
一体・・・何のことだ?
What...is this about?

Tobi:
お前に術をかけていたのだオレを殺すため
いやお前からオレを遠ざけるためとでもにおうか
He gave that jutsu to you...in order to kill me
Or should I say it was for me to keep my distance from you.

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Tobi:
おそらくお前がオレの写輪眼を見ると
It seems if you look at my sharingan...

"天照"が自動的に発動するように仕掛けたんだろう。
...Amaterasu is set up to automatically activate

Sasuke:
......?

Tobi:
さすがのイタチにもオレの全ては知られていなかった・・・
Itachi didn’t fully understand everything about me as expected...

でなければ死んでいた
If that wasn't the case, I would be dead

イタチの最後っ屁ってやつだな・・・
Itachi is really someone who doesn't give up...
[I read about an イタチ's 最後っ屁, and it does seem to be some sort of last of resort when its corned, but I'm not sure if I accurately conveyed what he was trying to say]

オレには通用しなかったが・・・
It had no effect on me but...

Sasuke:
・・・・・だから・・・何の話をしてる?
What exactly....are you talking about?

イタチは死ぬ前お前に何かをしたハズだ
Before Itachi died, he must have done something to you

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最後・・・お前のために己の瞳力をお前の中へ注ぎ込んだのだ
Lastly.... he had put his eye power into you for your sake.

Sasuke:
何を言ってる・・・?
What are you saying...?

・・・一体・・・何が言いたい?
....what...the hell are you trying to say?

どうしてイタチがそなんことを・・・
Why would Itachi do something like that....

Tobi
分からないのか
Don't you undersand...

Page 12

Tobi:
お前を
He did it to...

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Tobi:
守るためだよ
...protect you

Page 14

Sasuke:
・・・守る?
To protect...

守るだと・・・?!
To protect me?!?

何の冗談だ・・・!?
What kind of joke is that...?

Page 15

もう一度言う
I'll say this again

お前は兄の事を知っているようで何も知らない
You think you know your brother, but you don't know anything

Sasuke:
それ以上ふざけたことをぬかせばお前を殺す!
If you say anymore bull like that, I'll kill you!

どうやわ一筋縄ではいかなそうだな
It doesn't seem any ordinary method will work

ま無理もない・・・怪しげな奴にこんなことを急に言われてもな
Well, I don't blame you...even if a questionable person like myself were to suddenly say this...

だが・・・オレの話していることは事実
But...what I'm talking about is the truth

イタチからも聞いただろう?
You heard from Itachi, too, right?

あの夜の協力者のことを・・・
About the person who helped that night

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Tobi:
オレがそのうちはマダラだ
I am that Uchiha Madara

イタチのことなら何でも知ってる
I know many things about Itachi

・・・まあイタチはそのことに気付かずに死んだがな
....well, Itachi died without having known that

Sasuke:
うるせェ!!!
SHUT UP!!

そんなことはもうどうだっていい
That doesn't matter anymore!!!

オレの前から消えろ!!
Get away from me!!!

Page 17

Madara:
いや聞いてもらう
No, I'll have you listen

いやお前は聞かなくてはならない
No...you must listen!

それがお前の義務だ!
That's your obligation!

忍の世の為木ノ葉の為そして何より弟のお前の為に全てを懸けた
For the sake of the shinobi world, for the sake of Konoha, and most importantly for your sake as his little brother, everything was risked.

兄 うちはイタチの生き様を!!!
Your brother, Uchiha Itachi, lived!!!

Side Portion:
全てを終えたサスケを新たなる混乱に引き込むマダラ。サスケを守るため-----その口から語れるイタチとは!?
With everything finshed for Sasuke, Madara draws him into further confusion. In order to protect Sasuke-----Who is the Itachi that he speaks of?!

ナンバー397 次号は、作者取材のため
休載させていただきます
Number 397 Next time, Author Research
It will not be published

[I wasn't sure if I should have included the second part. Is it to indicate there will be no Naruto next week?]
 
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Re: [Shonen] Naruto Chapter 397 by KNH

Itachi is really someone who doesn't give up...
I'm not much of a translator but from the general flow of things I think its meant to mean like a last ditch attempt of some sort.

Your brother, Uchiha Itachi, lived!!!
生き様を > way of life / life story. as far I can make out. yeah.

again I'm not a translator.

But your translation is interesting. the bits you are unsure of means that I should probably be unsure of too.
 
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Re: [Shonen] Naruto Chapter 397 by KNH

Finished adding your translation to the compilation. Other than what ketwaroo pointed out it seems fine. If there is something else that might be an issue I'm sure that you yourself would be able to pick it out in the compilation.
 

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Re: [Shonen] Naruto Chapter 397 by KNH

Thanks a million for the trans. :)
 

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Re: Houkago Wind Orchestra by Yami no Ame

I, a translator native at Japanese, took a look through.
Below are corrections.

この春から高校生
A high schooler starting from this summer
it's from spring, not summer (unless you consider April as summer).

ようはおおよそ濃ゆい青春を送るタイプではなく ____ それは彼自身自覚するところ
Basically, he isn’t the type that has an interesting spring time of youth _____ That is something that even he appreciates
"interesting spring time of youth" is directly translated. It means something like "adolescence," "youth," whatever...
Also, Heion does not "appreciate," he just know it himself.

勉強もスポーツも全てにおいて平凡で実に目立たない高校
A plain school that is average in everything, results and sports
Well...I don't want to go into grammar and all that sort, but "grades/rank" rather than "results".

は~~ 入学早々最っっっっ低だ!!!
Haaa This is sooo bad right from induction!!!
let's call it "open house" rather than "induction."

(ねっねっ今度家行ってイイ?)
(hey, hey can I go round your house?)
"round" is unecessary.

「藤本鈴菜ですよろしくお願いします」
‘I’m Rina Fujimoto, Pleased remember me’
"pleased remember me"...I think I'd word it "nice to meet you all"

バカか俺は!!! これじゃーナンパ君2号じゃん!!!
Am I stupid!!! At this rate I’m gonna be Womaniser #2!!!
err...maybe "Womanizer" is okay, but just in case, it is meant "wooer."

わぁ…すごいりっぱな楽器庫
Wow… What a great instrument store
not a store, but a storage.

おまえがゆーか!!
You can talk!!
"how dare for you to say that" is sort of the meaning here.

overall, the "mobile number" is in fact "(mobile) mail address."


major fixing on getting meanings correctly is done.
there are some grammars and sentence structures that can be worked out, but I guess it isn't fatal.
 

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Re: Houkago Wind Orchestra by Yami no Ame

Thanks a lot, I'll get to wrok on this chapter if this is all the mistakes the translator made, though it seems he didn't make too many mistakes and so I guess I can rely on him in the future.

On another note


ささやかな出会いが多重奏を作り出す… 吹奏楽グラフィティ、開幕!
Small meetings overlap to create an ensemble… Brass music graffity, Begin!

Does it really say Brass Music Graffiti, because that just sounds kind of strange?
 
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