Mousou Kikou - Adolescence Avatar, ch. 1
This is my first attempt at translating anything in nearly a decade, and my semantic understanding of Japanese has probably gone totally to crap, so any guidance you can give would be most appreciated
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Mousou Kikou - Adolescence Avatar, ch. 1
Raws can be found here:
http://mangahelpers.com/m/mousou-kikou-adolescence-avatar
I didn't bother with first page, which is a splash page advertisement for Dengeki Daioh Genesis.
Key: [page/panel/utterance]
Narration
"Speech"
'Asides'
*Thought*
[Furigana]
*'Memory of the speech of others'*
(Translation Notes)
<sound effects>
CP/0/0:
Super popular for 'World Embryo' in Monthly Young King Ours!!
The new project is a magical girl setup!?
With color leader pages!
Moriyama Daisuke's Magnificent Meeting!!
Mousou Kikou - Adolescence Avatar
01/1/1: Let's talk about my class.
01/1/2: "Have you heard about the grand ghost horde?" <zawa-zawa - blah blah blah>
01/2/1: "It appears around here at night!" <zawa-zawa - blah blah blah>
01/2/2: First Year, Class C; 15 boys, 13 girls.
01/2/3: "Yesterday, even Koba-chan [Kobayashi-sensei] saw it!"
01/2/4: There are nine people in the slacker group.
01/2/5: "Seriously!?"
01/3/1: "...also-"
01/4/1: "Those ghosts- wherever looked, they were all anime and manga characters!"
01/4/2: "Like Shana or Kino or 'TORADORA!'s Taiga - or like the beast men from special effects shows?"
01/4/3: "Characters like that, all packed in and shuffling around!"
02/1/1: "ROFLCOPTER, who's your source!? Why do you know so much about the characters?" <Ahahahahaha!> (Note: Yes, these kids do speak using Japanese Internet slang; i will try to render this in English equivalents, when possible.)
02/1/2: 'You sure it wasn't a Dengeki festival?' (Note: all of the characters mentioned/depicted are from stories serialized in Dengeki magazines)
02/1/3: "Honda from class B; on the way back from club-"
02/1/4: "Unbelievable!!"
02/1/5: Six are in the hardcore otaku group... basically, gross otaku and fujoshi.
02/2/1: They're in the minority here. <GAN - THUD>
02/3/1: "Keep it down!"
02/3/2: "Ah..."
02/3/3: And then there's one more-
02/3/4: The anti-otaku group, the biggest faction; the celeb-asshat alliance.
02/4/1: "S- sorr-."
02/4/2: "Jabbering away about that stuff- pigs."
02/4/3: "Go eat in the toilet." <Gyahaha!><sugo-sugo - trudge, shuffle>
02/5/1: "Aaa~h, so sad."<shari-shari - nom nom><jyuu - sluuuurp>
02/5/2: "But they're just too clueless. What do you expect, after shouting like that?" (Note: she actually says "KY-sugi." KY is short for Kuuki Yomenai, which is Japanese Internet slang term that has no functional English equivalent, and means that the subject can't read the atmosphere.)
02/5/3: "Right, Yazaki-kun?"
03/1/1: "They're just overemotional brats. Now that you mention it..."
03/1/2: "Getting all worked up talking about anime or ghosts or stories-"<fuaaaaa - yaaaaawn>
03/1/3: "I don't believe in anything I haven't seen with my own eyes."
03/2/1: "Eee~h? But wouldn't it be neat if there were ghosts? I mean, love telling ghost stories..."
03/3/2: "Ah... izzat so?"
03/3/3: "Are~? Yazaki-kun, you wouldn't happen to be-?" (Note: She is implying that he's maybe afraid of ghosts, due to his lukewarm reply.)
03/3/4: "-It's been nice; gotta go."
03/3/5: It's the kind of set up you'll see in any class.
03/3/6: Me, Yasaki Yuuri, and this girl, Kishimoto Akane, are currently on this side [anti-otaku group].
03/4/1: 'Tsk- isn't he just covering his own ass?' you say? <katsu-katsu - step step>
03/5/1: I just don't want any trouble; as transfer student, y'know. <GATCHA - CLICK>
04/2/1: "Daaaaaamn, I'm beat. Don't got a lotta time, though, either." <kata-kata - tap tap tap>
04/2/2: "Already pretty much pissed away the afternoon."
04/2/3: "If I wanna finish today, I better knock it out in one shot!"
04/3/1: #1 Fantasy Boy Meets Girl <KATAt - TAP->
05/2/0: <pochat - droop->
05/3/1: "Night..."
05/3/2: "Uwaah! Crap, I fell asleep again!"
05/4/1: "Shii~t! I was doin' so well today, too..." <gusha-gusha - rustle rustle>
05/4/2: "...should I head home? ...Shit!"
05/5/0: <katsu-katsu - step step>
06/2/1: ...ghost horde, huh?
06/2/2: Oi, look around! Where the hell do you see something like that?
06/3/1: That's just confusing reality with fantasy.
06/3/2: Twisting reality to fit your own convenience.
06/3/3: If you do that, if you turn your back on reality...
06/4/1: *...but, it's not like I don't understand how it feels to let your imagination run wild.*
06/4/2: *The school really does look like another world, at night*
06/5/1: "After all, for the occult, this is the perfect situation!"
06/5/2: "For instance, if there were a campus battle or something, and the totally ordinary hero broke his normal routine-"
06/5/3: 'Something like that.'
07/1/1: and met
07/2/1: the heroine...
08/1/1: "Is it you? The one who's possessed by delusions?"
08/3/1: ...a witch?
08/3/2: ...flew? She flew!? <fuwa - swish><tot - tp->
08/4/1: Is this for real!? No way!
08/4/2: "I don't know where you got possessed, but it'd be bad to leave you like this." <Pou - Woosh>
08/4/3: You only hear about stuff like this in stories.
08/4/4: "So... you're going to let me exorcise you!"
08/5/1: ...but ...it's here ...it's real. <Dokun - Kathump>
09/1/1: A heroine <dokun-dokun- kathump-thump-thump>
09/1/2: that only exists in stories...
09/2/0: <DOKUN - THUMP><para-parara - flip; rustle>
09/3/1: "Wha..." <BARA-BARARA - FLAP; RATTLE>
09/3/2: "What the hell~?!"
09/4/0: <zuzuzu - swish-swish><nyuu - streeetch>
10/1/1: "Eh~!? If you're possessed, it shouldn't... th... this is bad!" <BAt - Lunge>
10/2/0: <ZARARARARA - FSSSSSHH>
10/4/0: <DZUAAAAAA - SHOOOOOOM>
11/1/0: <AAAAA - SWOOOOOOO>
11/2/1: "Eh~" <shuuu - fsssss>
11/2/2: Just now, what...
11/3/1: "Aa~ uwah?! My notebook is~!" <PUshuuu - PFfsssss>
11/3/2: "What the heck is that computer!? What's in there!?" <ZAt - Surge>
11/4/1: "Delusions went flying everywhere!!"
11/4/2: "It couldn't be...!? You're..."
11/5/1: "Wh... what's in my..." <Kaaaa - Bluuush>
11/6/1: "U-uwawawa, it's nothing!!" <DAt - Dash>
11/6/2: "Ah! Wait..."
11/7/0: <KIIN KOON KAAN KOON - DIING DOONG DAANG DOONG>
12/1/0: <KIIN KOON KAAN KOON - DIING DOONG DAANG DOONG>
12/2/1: "Ne~, Yasaki-kun?"
12/3/1: "What's wrong? You're making a face like it's the end of the world."
12/3/2: "Aa~... it has ended, in a sense... my notebook..." <DO~N - SLU~MP>
12/3/3: "Notebook?"
12/3/4: "Ah- no, it's nothing!"
12/4/1: *It started up, but- my doodles- my bookmarks- everything was gone!*
12/4/2: 'Uwaaaaaaaaa!'
12/4/3: *Not to mention a half-year's worth of my blood, sweat and tears...*
12/6/1: But... that was real too, wasn't it?
12/6/2: If that's so... then could we meet again... or...?
13/1/1: "Cheers, Underclassman-kun!" <GARAt - CLATTER->
13/1/2: "Hittin' it hard~!?"
13/2/1: "Oo~h! There you are, boy!" <bun-bun - swish-swish>
13/2/2: The reunion flag was already flipped!?
13/3/1: "A third-year...?" <zawa-zawa - blah blah blah>
13/3/2: "Sakura-senpai."
13/4/1: "Cosplay again?" <zawa-zawa - blah blah blah>
13/4/2: "Why did she come back to school, after all this time?"
13/4/3: "Uwa~, how lame..."
13/5/1: "What's with this reaction?" <boso-boso - mutter-mutter>
13/5/2: "Kishimoto-san, who is she?"
13/5/3: "Oh yeah, since Yazaki-kun is a transfer student..."
13/5/4: "She's famous; the first-term student council president... who resigned after three days."
14/1/1: "The third-year, Sakurabi Yukimi-senpai." <DON - BAM>
14/1/2: "She's basically a weirdo trouble maker."
14/2/1: "Wh... what?!"
14/2/2: "Hmm... not much to look at..." <uro-uro - oogle-oggle>
14/3/1: "Well aren't you a gloomy one?"
14/3/2: "Come with me! I'll fix you right up!" <tyun - sway>
14/4/1: "Wha..." <PON - POOF>
15/1/1: "What was that all about?!"
15/2/1: "Are you trying to cause a misunderstanding?! Kishi... everyone was-!"
15/2/2: "That was nothing. The real issue is the truth, right?"
15/3/1: "Inside of you is the power of self-delusion."
15/4/1: "Haven't you heard of it? Like in 'Poltergeist?'"
15/4/2: "In theory, it's a phenomenon where the melancholy feelings of adolescence are projected onto reality."
15/5/1: "Moreover, there are people in whom the strength of those feelings towers over all others..."
15/5/2: "People who possess delusions so strong that they can rewrite the laws of reality..."
15/5/3: "O- oi, wait a sec... you don't mean..."
16/1/1: "YES! The recent ghost disturbances were all manifestations of your delusions... though I originally thought that you'd been possessed by someone else's delusions."
16/1/2: "I've been looking for someone like you, yes..."
16/2/1: "A person with the power to become the embodiment of childish delusions... in other words-"
16/2/2: "A Trollsper!" <ZABAAN - JAB (Note: this, like many others, is sort of an 'emphasis effect' rather than a 'sound effect' for Yukimi energetically making a grand proclamation.)
16/3/1: 'Troll...' (Note: As in Internet troll; the wording she uses implies that he's able to 'troll' reality, like an angry twelve-year-old might troll an Internet forum. This is also a play on words; Chou-Nouryouku-sha is literally something like 'super power/ability user,' and is usually translated as 'Esper' or 'Psychic.' Yukimi has replaced the superlative 'Chou' with 'Chuu,' which is Internet slang for someone who makes childish comments on message boards and is very similar to the English Internet slang term 'Troll,' naming him a Chuu-Nouryouku-sha, or 'troll power/ability user.')
17/1/1: "Ah-! wait..."
17/1/2: 'Hahaha, so stupid...'
17/1/3: "I'm not done talking to you yet!"
17/2/1: "Enough! I don't confuse reality with fantasy!"
17/2/2: "I don't believe in anything I haven't seen with my own eyes!!"
17/3/1: "But can't you feel it!? The gloom-"
17/4/1: "Listen to your own heart!!"
17/4/2: "Is the real you okay with how you are now!?"
18/1/1: "Hey, now! That's my business..."
18/2/1: Geh... Kishimoto-san...
18/3/1: "Ah- Yasaki-kun... What was that?"
18/3/2: "Worthless nonsense... I'm heading back."
19/1/0: <pooon - fwrrrr>
19/2/1: "Thank god I made printouts..." <kata-kata - tap tap tap>
19/2/2: "...but retyping everything again..."
19/3/2: *'-ghost disturbances were all manifestations of your delusions-'* <kata - tap>
19/3/3: *'-can't you feel it!? The gloom-'*
19/4/1: ...I want to believe that it's a lie, but... I can feel it.
19/4/2: If that was my fault...
20/1/1: "This..." <BARARA - RATTLE>
20/1/2: Again...?
20/2/1: *'Delusions went flying everywhere!'*
20/2/2: 'KYAAAAAAA!'
20/3/1: "The scattered delusions..."
20/3/2: "What happened to them?"
20/4/2: "Kishimoto-san!!"
21/1/1: "Boy!"
21/1/2: "Senpai!?"
21/2/1: "A monster, Kishimito was..."
21/2/2: "Help me; your delusion extermination will-"
21/2/3: "What the hell are you!?"
21/3/1: "That's right, to break it down for you, I'm a delusion embodiment... 'Avatar' Seeker!" <ZATSUN - POSE>
21/4/1: What the hell is that!? Again with the 'troll'ish thing... <zoku-zoku - shiver>
21/4/2: But...
21/5/1: "NOOOOOO!"
21/5/2: "Kishimoto-san!!"
22/1/1: "Are you..."
22/1/2: "Noooo!! I'm going to be eaten by a scribble~!!!" <DO~N - BA~M>
22/2/1: My fantasy = my descriptive ability <boku-boku-boku - click-click-click>
22/2/2: = my artistic ability. <chiin - cha-ching>
22/3/1: "Noooo~! Don't look~! It's too awfull~!" <goro-goro - roll-roll>
22/3/2: "Get a hold of yourself!"
22/4/1: "Teach me how this delusion is 'configured!' Without that, fixing it..."
23/1/1: "AUGH..." <GYABA - GRAB>
23/1/2: "SENPAI!!"
23/2/1: "I'm fine, so the configuration..."
23/2/2: "What's it's weakness!?"
23/4/1: "...Nivurgant is a living weapon of the Vanar Phase Shift..."
23/4/2: "It can move out of phase, so physical attacks from the material world are completely useless against it."
23/4/3: "Only Oratorio, the quartz staff wielded by the hero, can interfere with this, by..."
23/4/4: 'Huh?!'
23/4/5: "Wh- what's with this complicated setup!?"
24/1/1: "It's the light novel I've written..."
24/2/1: 'Huh?'
24/3/1: "...I was planning on submitting it to Dengeki Taisho..."
24/3/2: "I spent every day at school writing it- just a little longer, and I would have finished- but..."
24/3/3: 'Ya... Yasaki-kun?'
24/3/4: "...you were writing a light novel?"
24/3/5: "That doesn't suit you at aaall~" <BUCHIt - SNAP->
24/4/1: "Is there something wrong with that!?" <GOKIKI - WHOOOM>
24/4/2: "I know! All the time, everything I do is just to cover my own ass!!"
24/4/3: "I actually LOVE anime and manga and light novels and erotic games!!!"
25/1/1: "BUT MY CLASS IS SO FULL OF CRUEL BASTARDS THAT JUST BEING AN OTAKU IS ENOUGH TO BE CALLED WEIRD!"
25/1/2: 'Uweh~ it's tough to be an otaku, isn't it~?'
25/1/3: "THE ONES THAT GOT SINGLED OUT COULD ONLY SMILE AND ACCEPT THEIR TERMINATION NOTICES!!"
25/2/1: This... the boy's Troll Power is increasing...
25/3/1: "WHAT THE HELL IS WRONG"
25/3/2: "WITH HAVING VIVID FANTASIES!!!?" <DOKIN - KATHUMP>
26/1/1: "Well then, boy!" <ooooo - wooooo>
26/1/2: "Eh...?"
26/1/3: "The only one who can crush the delusions that you've given birth to is you!"
26/2/1: "Call it to mind... the method to end this tale!" <ooooo - wooooo>
26/2/2: "...wait a sec..."
26/2/4: "A hero to defeat this enemy!"
26/2/5: "But the hero is..."
26/3/1: "That will become your avatar!" <KAt - FLASH->
27/1/0: <SHARARA - FLUTTER FLUTTER><PAKYAA - POO~IT (Note: another 'emphasis effect,' this time for... stunning cuteness, i guess.)
28/1/0: <paku-paku - jaw working soundlessly>
28/2/1: "U... uwaa~!? What the hell is this!?" <kyuu-gaku - twitch-slump>
28/2/2: "You... that light novel- what kind of story is it?"
28/3/1: "'Valkyrie Supreme Hildy ☆ BREAK.' It's a story about a super strong magical girl who beats the crap out of super horrible enemies..." <moji-moji - fidget-fidget>(Note: Probably to be pronounced Valkyrie Supreme Hildy STAR BREAK.)
28/3/3: "Wh- what's with that look?! Can't you think of it on a basic level?! It's a tale that turns the entire magical girl concept on it's head like never before!!" <kiii - squeal>
29/1/1: "But before that, this guy...!" <do-do - stomp-stomp>
29/1/2: "Y- yeah!"
29/2/1: 'Oraoraoraora!'
29/2/2: "DORYAAAAA!!" <GON - WHAM>
29/3/1: "GUBOWAA!?" <DOKAt - SLAM->
30/1/1: "Owowowow!" <ooooo - wooooo>
30/1/2: "No effect?!"
30/2/1: "That's no good!!"
30/2/2: "You have to role-play by the rules of the delusion!!"
30/3/1: "You mean... I have to fight like a magical girl...!?" <kaaa - bluuush>
30/4/1: "Yes! Become the character! That the principle of an avatar..."
30/4/2: "Ah-" <giri-giri - tense; tighten>
30/4/3: "AGU-!!"
30/5/1: "QU...ICKLY!! ...HNN-" <guru-guru - spin-spin>
31/1/1: 'If I gottaaaa-'
31/1/2: 'Uwoooooooh!'
31/2/1: "M- mou~! Alright! Now I'm going to let you hear Hildy's song!" <kira-kira - twinkle; sparkle; shine>
31/2/2: "'Devils Will Be Completely Blasted to Bits! ☆'" <-Image Song
31/3/1: 'Geh-!'
32/1/1:
Valkyrie Supreme Hildy ☆ BREAK
Main Theme 'Miracle Idol'
Writer/Composer: Yazaki Yuuri
Don't lose, don't stop,
I'll give half my normal liveliness to you!
There's always a free pass through the gates of the future!
At the core of everyone, this feeling is carried!
*Miracle Idol
Let's fly together
To a special place,
Because surely there-
Because surely there-!
<*Repeat>
(Note: Sorry, not even gonna try to make this sound good; it would probably sound pretty horrible in Japanese, too. The boy is not a talented song writer.)
34/1/0: <DOOOOO - FWOOOM>
34/3/1: 'Uu~m, uu~n...'
34/3/1: "Right- above all, it's good that you're safe."
34/3/2: "And when you wake up, you'll have forgotten all of this! It was just a delusion, right!"
34/3/3: "...hey, how long do you plan on sulking?" <zu~n - despair>
35/1/1: "I've decided! I'm going to rewrite that story after all! Writing it and doing it are completely different!"
35/1/2: "As first-year high school boy, that... that..."
35/2/1: "NUWAA~!!!" <GOSU-GOSU - BAM-BAM><busha~ - spuurt>
35/2/2: *Must be a flashback to the shame bomb.* <fufufu - hohoho>
35/2/3: Like a former fat kid that can't move on. <gokri - shing> (Note: Yeah, I really don't know if i got this one right; best I can do.)
35/3/0: <sut - slowly>
35/4/1: "Well?"
35/4/2: "Refreshed?"
35/6/0: <pori-pori - ruffle-ruffle>
36/0/0: For now, the matter is settled... right?!
36/1/1: "Well... maybe." <gutsu - grip>
36/3/1: "You know, it feels kind of dangerous that you're 'refreshed' after turning into a total loli."
36/3/2: "Groo~ss ☆!" <bua~ - whooo><ha - ah><GA~N - DOOOOM>
36/4/1: "N-n-no! It doesn't have that kind of meaning at all!"
36/4/2: "You're kidding! I understand-
" <pupupu - snicker>
36/4/4: "NO YOU DON'T!!!"
