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Re: First manga translation, want reviews!

Thank you for the review. Ill apply the modifications.
 

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MSG Detective Conan 690

Introduction:

This is the first installment in an ongoing series of translations written in collaboration by a Manga Study Group ("MSG"), the goal of whose members is to improve their proficiency in the Japanese language by studying and translating manga. Transcripts and translations will be completed using Google Docs and posted on these forums for critique.

http://docs.google.com/Doc?id=dfqt9qtx_0gzgg4sgv
 
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Re: MSG Detective Conan 690

Ok, I'll have go =D I started reading it and thought it was a little hard to begin with, but when the adults stopped talking it got easier =D

I'll try and see if I can fill in any gaps.

Pg 01
Caption:いつもと様子が違わねーか、オメーラ? (オメーラ = お前ら)

Pg 02
Side Text: 新シリーズ!! 帝丹小(ていたんしょう)へやって来た白鳥(しらとり)警部のお目当ては、もちろん…
It's a new series!! Inspector Shiratori shows up at Teitanshou, and his purpose is, of course...

Kobayashi: え? 盗難事件?
Oh? A robbery case?

Kobayashi: もしかして、今日もニュースでやってたあれですか?
Perhaps it'll be on the news today as well? (Isn't this past tense? "Could it be that thing was on the news?")
Shiratori: ええ… 戸閉まりには気をつけてください…
Yes...Please take care to lock your doors...
Shiratori: この界隈の宝石店や古美術店(アンティークショップ)を荒らし回っている窃盗犯で、今月に入ってもう5件目ですので…
Since we the beggining of this month there have been about 5 incidents by the robbers that broke into the Jewelry store and Antique shop (that could probably be worded better)
Kobayashi: でも、ここは小学校、盗られる(とられる)物なんて…
But, this is an elementary school. There's nothing to steal...

Shiratori: いやいや、用心に越した事はありません!
Now, now, one can't be too careful!
何かあればすぐに僕に連絡を!
If something happens contact me immediately!
飛んできますから!
I'll race right over!
Kobayashi: あ、はい!
Eh, OK!

Pg 03
Mitsuhiko: また来てますね 白鳥警部…
Detective Shiratory is here again, eh?
Genta: 昨日も来てたよなぁ?
He was he yesterday, too?
Ayumi: うん!
Yep!

Ayumi: 仕事熱心だね!
He's really dedicated!
Mitsuhiko: ええ!市民を守る警察官ですから!
That's right! It's because the police are supposed to protect the citizens!
Conan: いや、白鳥警部は捜査1課の強行犯係… 担当は主に殺人事件…

Conan: 盗難事件の担当は捜査3課! 
Robberies are responsibility of the 3rd Division.
まあ、怪盗キッドみてーな予告状を出して空を飛び回り世間を大騒ぎさせる派手な大泥棒は、捜査2課扱いになっちまうけどな…

Genta: じゃあなんで来てんだよ?
Then why did he come?
Mitsuhiko: 担当でもないのに…
If he's not even in charge of this...
Conan: あ、いや、それは…
Uh, well, you see...
Haibara: 仕方ないじゃない?
It's no use, isn't it?

Haibara: 白鳥警部にとって小林先生は… 運命の人だもの…
As far as Inspector Shiratori is concerned, Kobayashi sensei is...his fated partner...

Side text: ●江戸川(えどがわ)コナン●高校生探偵・工藤新一(くどう・しんいち)が黒ずくめの組織に毒薬を飲まされ小さくなった姿。正体を隠すため、仮の名前・江戸川コナンを名乗って、幼なじみの蘭(らん)の家に居候をしている。
Conan Edogawa. High school detective Shinichi Kudou became tiny after being forced to drink poison by the Black Organization. In order to conceal his true identity, he has adopted the alias "Conan Edogawa." He lives at the house of his childhood friend, Ran.

●工藤新一●高校生探偵。今は江戸川コナンの姿で、難事件に挑んでいる。
Shinichi Kudou. High school detective. Now in the form of Edogawa Conan, he takes on the most challenging cases.

Pg 04
Side text: ●白鳥任三郎(しらとり・にんさぶろう)●警視庁捜査一課の警部。高木(たかぎ)は佐藤(さとう)を巡る恋の宿敵(ライバル)。
Ninsaburou Shiratori. Police Department Division 1 Inspector. Takagi is his romantic rival for Satou.

●少年探偵団●元太(げんた)・光彦(みつひこ)・歩美(あゆみ)にコナンと灰原(はいばら)を加えた帝丹小1−Bの5人組。数多くの難事件を解決してきた。
Junior Detective Club. Genta, Mituhiko, Ayumi, along with Conan and Haibara, all from Teitanshou Elementary School 1-B. They have solved a great many challenging cases.

Mitsuhiko?: う…
Eh..
Genta?: 運命の人!?
Fated partner?

Shiratori: しーっ しーっ!
Kobayashi: ?
Conan: おい… その事は機会を見て自分で言うから黙ってろって言われたじゃねーか?
Haibara: あら、そうだったかしら?

Haibara: イラつくのよね… 自分の気持ちをなかなか伝えず女を振り回すラブコメ野郎…
Conan: まさか、それオレの事じゃねぇだろーな?

Haibara: まあ、いいカップルだとは思うわよ…
小林先生は江戸川乱歩(えどがわらんぽ)マニアで事件好き! 彼から捜査の話を色々聞けるだろーし…
Conan: 答えてねーし…

Genta: 事件っていえばよ、この前 光彦言ってたよな?
Speaking of cases, weren't you talking about one recently, Mitsuhiko?
Ayumi: そうそう、確か倉がどうとか…
That's right, it was something about a warehouse...
Mitsuhiko: ああ…
Yeah...

Mitsuhiko: もののけ倉(ぐら)の事ですね!
A haunted warehouse!

Pg 05
Conan: もののけ倉?
A haunted warehouse?
Mitsuhiko: ええ…
Yeah...
ウチのクラスの琢馬君(たくまくん)が、米花町(べいかちょう)5丁目にある親戚の家で友達とかくれんぼをしていた時の事らしいんですけど…
It was when Takuma-kun from our class visited a relative of his in Beika Town, District 5. He was playing hide and seek with his friends..

Mitsuhiko: 友達が全然見つからなくて、もう倉しか捜す所がないと思い…
The friends completely disappeared. The only place left to search was the warehouse...
木に登って倉の窓から中をのぞいたら…
When he climbed a tree to peek through the warehouse window...

Mitsuhiko: 高そうな美術品などが大量に置かれていて…
he saw a bunch of expensive artworks...
そのお宝の陰から誰かがこっちを見ていたそうです…
And it seemed like someone was watching him from the shadows of the treasure.

Genta: それ、かくれんぼしてた友達じゃねーのか?
Maybe it was his friends that he was playing hide and seek with?
Mitsuhiko: 琢馬君もそう思って 中に入ろうとしたけど、扉に鍵がかかっていて友達の名前を呼んでも出てこないから、家の人に鍵を開けてくれと頼んだんです…
Takuma-kun thought so, too. He tried to go inside but the door was locked. Even when he called them by name they still didn't come out, so he went to the guy at the house to unlock the door for him...
Mitsuhiko: そうしたら家の人は…
And the guy at the house said...
その倉はもう何年も開けてないから、人が入れるわけがないって言われて…
"That warehouse has been closed for years. Nobody can go inside."

Ayumi: そ、それで捜すのあきらめちゃったの?
And so he gave up the search?
Mitsuhiko: いいえ!琢馬君が絶対 人がいたと言い張り、鍵を開けてもらって中に入ったら…
No! Takama-kun said there was definitely someone inside, and demanded that the door be unlocked so he could enter.

Mitsuhiko: さっき見たはずの人やお宝は影も形もなくなっていて…
There was no trace of either the person he was sure he'd seen or of the treasure.
不思議そうな顔をした琢馬君に、家の人がその倉の言い伝えを教えてくれたそうです…
Takama-kun made a strange face, and the guy from the house told him the legend of the warehouse...
「この倉に大切な物を置いてはならない… 置けばたちまち消えてしまう…
"You can't place anything of importance in the warehouse...if you put something inside it will immediately disappear...

Pg 06
Mitsuhiko: 大食らい(おおぐらい)のもののけ倉に飲み込まれてしまう」って…
It'll be swallowed up by the gluttonous haunted warehouse!"
Ayumi: えぇ~!?
Huh!?
Genta: ま、まさか捜してた友達も倉に食べられちまったのかよ!?
Y-you mean, the warehouse also swallowed the friends he was looking for!?
Mitsuhiko: いえ、その後(あと)すぐ別のところからヒョッコリ出て来たそうです…
No, later on they appeared someplace else unexpectedly.

Mitsuhiko: でも、そのショックで琢馬君は毎晩悪い夢にうなされてるらしいですけど…
But the shock of it all gave Takuma-kun bad dreams every night...
Ayumi: 今日も学校お休みしてたもんね…
He was absent from school today, too...
Kobayashi: なるほど…
I see...

Kobayashi: 大食らいのもののけ倉…
A gluttonous, haunted warehouse...
まさに奇々怪々な江戸川乱歩の世界ね…
Exactly like the strange and mysterious world of Ranpo Edogawa.

Ayumi: こ、小林先生…
Ko-kobayashi sensei..
Haibara: 白鳥警部は?
Where's Inspector Shiratori?
Kobayashi: さっき帰られたわよ…
He just went home...
鼻歌まじりに…
humming a tune...

Kobayashi: それより、問題はその倉!
一刻も早く我ら少年探偵団でその倉の謎を解いて、琢馬君を安心させてあげなきゃいけない…
Anyway, the problem is that warehouse!
We, the Juvenile Detective team need to solve the warehouse mystery and put Takuma-kun at ease...

Pg 07
Kobayashi: ――って…
So-

Kobayashi: ちょっとー!
探偵団顧問の先生を無視しないでよー!
Hey! Don't abandon the Dectective team's teacher!

Mitsuhiko: 小林先生が来ると色々面倒ですから!
If Kobayashi-sensei comes there'll be various troublesome things. (this could be worded better too, but I can't think of anything that sound better)
Ayumi: そこは入っちゃダメとかもう帰る時間だとかね…
Things like "You can go in there" and "It's already time to go home"
Genta: 足手まといだしよ!
She'll just be a hindrance.
Haibara: それじゃあ、その問題の倉 5丁目にあるらしいし…
Oh yeah, that warehouse is 5 blocks away
Conan: 同じ5丁目の毛利(もうり)探偵事務所に集合ってか?
Conan: んじゃ、ちょっと事務所に入って待っててくれよ!
Conan: 蘭姉ちゃんに今日は遅くなるかもって書き置きしてくっから!
I'll write a not saying I might be late
Ayumi: うん!
Ok!

Mitsuhiko: 楽しみですね もののけ倉!
I'm looking forward to it, that haunted warehouse!
Genta: けど、マジで倉が化け物だったらどーすんだ?
But, if there really is a monster, what'll you do?
Ayumi: 平気だよ!
It'll be fine!

Ayumi: きっとコナン君がお化けじゃないって解いてくれるもん!
I'm sure Conan would say there's no monsters, we're gonna solve this!
Genta: オゥ!
Yeah
Mitsuhiko: ですね!
Right!
Haibara: ――ったく…
Ugh..

Pg 08
Haibara: あなた達、毎度毎度 江戸川君に頼りっ放しね…
たまには、彼をギャフンと言わせたくならないの?
Evertime, you always rely on Edogawa-kun...
Don't you want him to be speechless every now and then?
Everyone: え?
huh?

Mitsuhiko: 無理ですよー…
It's impossible
Ayumi: コナン君 頭いーもん!
Conan-kun is smart
Genta: 変な事いっぱい知ってるしよォ…
He know loads of weird things...
Haibara: 私は気構えの事を言ってるのよ!
それじゃー成長しないわよ!

Mitsuhiko: あの どこに…?
Um, where are you of to?
Haibara: ト・イ・レ!
Toilet!
Genta: オレは成長してるぞ… 今日も母さんに大きくなったって言われたし…
I'm grown up.... Today, my mum told me I've gotten big...
Ayumi: でもさ…
Yeah, but...

Ayumi: 見てみたいよね? コナン君のギャフンって言う顔!
You want to see it right? Conan-kun's speechless face!
Genta: だよな?
Yeah?
Mitsuhiko: ええ!一度ぐらいは彼がボク達に参ったをする情けない顔を…
Ayumi: あ…
Uh..

Mitsuhiko: い、いや 今のは…
Erm..Just now...
Genta: かるーい冗談でよ…
Just a little joke...
Ayumi: ウソだから…
It was a lie so...

Pg 09
Conan: 悪い悪い、待たせたな…
Sorry, I'm back

Conan: ん?
huh?

Conan: どーした?机の周りに集まって…
What's up? You're all gather around the desk...
Mitsuhiko: あ…
いや…
Uh..Well..
Conan?: 小五郎のおっちゃんなら競馬場に行ってて いねーぞ…

Conan: あれ? 灰原(はいばら)は?
Huh, wheres Haibarai?
Haibara: 呼んだ?
You called?
Genta: んじゃ、早く行こーぜ その倉に!!
Right then lets go! to that warehouse!!

Ayumi: サッサと行ってチャッチャと解決しちゃお!
Mitsuhiko: ボク達探偵団の前に謎なんてないんですから!!
Because in front of us the detective team, there are no mysteries!!
Conan: ん? やけにはりきってんあ オメーら…
Uh? You're all in terribly high spirits... You lot...

I'll stop here since I'm running out of time...Am I doing this right, at this rate this page is gonna be really long...is that ok? :s
 

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Re: MSG Detective Conan 690

Conan: ん? やけにはりきってんあ
Typo, that should be やけにはりきってん.

This is some of the stuff I didn't know, which I thought other people might find useful. (Slightly edited Japanese definitions from Google.)

たまには、彼をギャフンと言わせたくならないの?
ぎゃふん
ぎゃふんとは、言い負かされて言葉も出ないさま。多くは「と」を伴い、「ぎゃふんと言わせてやる」などと使われる。

Conan: 何撮ってんだ?
Ayumi: 写メだよ!
写メ(写メール)
カメラ付き携帯電話を用いて撮影した画像を電子メールに添付して送信するサービス。

カメラ付き携帯電話・PHSで撮影した画像自体や撮影する行為そのものについて、「写メ」「写メる」などと呼ぶ傾向も一部にはある。

一度ぐらいは彼がボク達に参ったをする情けない顔を…
参った
柔道・剣道などで、負けた者が合図にかける声。
 
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continued from bombpersons's post.
Pg 10
Ayumi: あ、そう見える?
Oh, you can tell?
Genta: まぁ、今日のオレらはよ!
Today is gonna be ours!
Mitsuhiko: いつもと一味違う事は確かですよ!!
This time will be different!

Haibara: どーでもいいけど、はりきりすぎて羽目外さないように…
Everyone: はーい!

Chair??: ガタ

Old man: ホー… 琢馬君の友達か…
You're Takoma-kun's friends?

Old man: それで、あの倉を調べに来たんじゃな?
Then you have come to check out the warehouse, right?
Mitsuhiko: ええ!
Right!
Genta: オレら少年探偵団だからよ!
Of course, because we're the Juvenile Detective team!


Old man: まあ 好奇心旺盛なのはいいが、深入りしすぎて倉に食われんようにな!
Curiosity is good, but don't go to far into the warehouse and get eaten.
Conan: だってよ!
Mitsuhiko: 大丈夫! お化け話のほとんどは恐怖心が生み出す錯覚…
I'm not worried, almost all scary stories are just made up.

Genta: この世に解けねぇ謎なんてよォ…
There aren't any mysteries that can't be solved.
Ayumi: ちーっともないんだから!
Conan: あ、ああ…

Pg 11
Haibara?: へぇー… かなり古そうだけど意外に普通の倉ね…
It looks like a regular warehouse, besides being old.
Old man: なんでも幕末頃(ばくまつごろ)に建てられたそうじゃ…
I heard that it was built in the last days of the Tokugawa.

Conan: ん?
Huh?

Conan: 何撮ってんだ?
Why are you taking pictures?
Ayumi: 写メだよ!
We're mailing them!
Mitsuhiko: これから倉の謎を解き明かすんですから!
They will help us solve the mystery of the warehouse!
Genta: その倉の周りを撮ってもいいじゃんか!
It's ok to take pictures here, right?

Conan: そ、そうだな…
Oh, I see.

Old man: ホレ、開いたぞ!
I've got it open.

Old man: まあ、中には何もありゃせんがな…
See, there's nothing here.

Everyone: おー!
Oh--

Pg 12
Ayumi: すごく広ーい…
It's really wide...
Mitsuhiko: でも、真っ暗でほとんど何も見えませんね…
But it's so dark, I can't see anything.

Conan: かろうじて見えるのは、天井近くに付いている…
You can kind of see something if you look hard by the ceiling.

Conan: あの窓の隙間から漏れ出る光だけか…
It's just some light coming through the cracks in the window.

Genta: おーし! 倉の中の写メ、取りまくろうぜ!
Alright let's start taking pictures!
Conan: 気をつけろよ! 足元暗いんだか…
Be careful, watch your footing in the dark.

Conan: ら!?
Huh?

Conan: うわぅ


Conan: イテテ…
Ow
Ayumi: コ、コナン君!?
Konan-kun?
Haibara: 自分で言って自分でコケてりゃ世話ないわね…
He stupidly doesn't even listen to his own advice.

Pg 13
Conan: 違うよ… この階段が…
That's not it, it was the steps.

Conan: ん?
誰かが歩いた足跡がある…
Somebody's foot prints...

Conan: しかも、倉の真ん中だけ…
子供の足跡じゃねぇね…
Not only that, they're only in the middle of the warehouse. The're not a kid's footprints.

Conan: あ、
あれは…
Oh, that's...

Conan: ソロバン?
An abacus?

Conan: 足跡は壁に埋め込まれたこのソロバンにつながってる…
ん? ソロバンにしては珠(たま)の数が妙だな…
Those foot prints and this abacus stuck in the wall have to be connected. Hm? The counters for this abacus are kind of strange.

Old man: おーい… 何もありゃせんじゃろ?
There's nothing right?
扉を閉めるから出て来なされ!
I'm gonna close it up so come out!
Conan: あ、うん…
Ah, sure...

Conan: おい、オメーらも出るぞ!
You guys come on too!
Mitsuhiko: あ…
Ah...
Genta: オウ!
Got it!

Pg 14
Old man: 満足したかな? 探偵団諸君!
Are you satisfied? Detectives.
Ayumi: ええ…
Yes...
Mitsuhiko: まあ…
I guess so...

Mitsuhiko: あ、でも陽(ひ)が暮れたらもう一度 倉を調べてもいいですか?
When the sun goes down can we have another look?
Genta: それまで大人しくしてっからよ!
We'll be good until then.
Ayumi: お願い!
Please!
Old man: ああ…
構わんが…

Conan: なぁ? あの窓だよな? 琢馬君が中を覗いた窓…
Hm? Was that the window Takoma-kun looked in?
Haibara: ええ…窓はあれ1つしかなかったから…
Yes, there's only one window...

Conan: んじゃ、陽が暮れるのなんか待たねーで今見てみよーぜ?
琢馬君が目にしたお宝ってヤツを…
We don't have to wait until night, How about I go check now? To see the treasure Takoma-kun saw.

Ayumi: コナン君 大丈夫?
Konan-kunn are you alright?
Mitsuhiko: 落ちないでくださいよ…
Don't fall.

Haibara: どーせ何もないわよ…
It's not like there's gonna be anything.
Genta: さっき見たじゃんか!
Didn't we just look?
Conan: ちょっと確かめるだけさ!
I just want to check.

Conan: 倉ん中見たらすぐに降りっから…
I'll come down right after I see inside.

Pg 15
Ayumi: え? 
Huh?
Mitsuhiko: ちょっ…


Conan: さ、さっきのジイさん連れて来い!!
早く!!!
Get the old man, quick!

Genta: おい、コナン?
What is it Konan?
Mitsuhiko: 何か見えたんですか?
Did you see something?
Ayumi: 連れて来たよー!
I brought him.

Old man: 何もありゃせんと思うが…
I'm guessing there's still nothing.

Pg 16
Old man: ほれ みい!
See, look!

Conan: そ、そんな…
バカな!?
What the... no way!
Haibara: で? 何が見えたわけ?
So, did you see something?

Conan: た、確かにあったんだよ…
さっきまで…
I'm sure I did, just now...

Conan: 床一面に埋めつくされた…
お宝の山がな!!
The floor was covered with treasure, mountains of it!


第24号につづく
To be continued in 24


Side text: やはり、この倉は”もののけ倉”なのか!? 次号!!
The warehouse was haunted after all? Until next time!
 
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Re: MSG Detective Conan 690

Just letting you guys know (I emailed the person that originally asked about this idea too)

But it's 100000000000000000 times better to start from the first chapter. Translating depends a lot on context and with Japanese having the habit of dropping the subject when it's understood = you can't translate a chapter correctly without knowing what is going on before hand (Thus why you should read before you translate)

So why not try translating something from the beginning (like some of the new series listed in the shout box ;) )
 

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New Translator, need a bit of guidance. :)

Hey. I've never done this before, but it's seems really cool. I've been wanting to try translating for a while. I'm just wondering which manga I should translate, and where I should find them on the site. I think I have an idea, but I just want to make sure I'm doing the right thing. Should I just go to "download manga" > "[JP] Raws" and find one there? Are all the manga there that don't have a translator listed waiting for someone to come along and work on them?

Thx!
 

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Re: New Translator, need a bit of guidance. :)

Hi. Welcome to MH.

First, you should translate a manga that you like and that isn't being done by someone already. I mean, there's only so many weekly Naruto/Bleach translations people can take before they just start finding it silly.

Second, you should translate a manga that you feel comfortable with. If you're learning Japanese, maybe you're better off trying an easier manga, something with furigana and katakana. If you're a fluent speaker, then you could probably translate series that are only kanji.

Third, to download manga on MH, go here: http://mangahelpers.com/downloads/?lang=jp

It'll list the recently uploaded raws for MH. You can also search for specific series to see if there are raws. There are other sites for raws (PM me if you'd like some links).

Have a good one, and thanks for helping the community out!
 

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Re: MSG Detective Conan 690

Thanks for the suggestions, njt. We'll see what happens with Conan for now--it's possible we could run into problems later on when the story moves back to the Black Organization stuff, but at least for this story arc not knowing a lot of background shouldn't hurt.

I'll also let the others know about the new series in case someone is interested in starting up another group. There are enough of us learning Japanese that we could probably support multiple series.
 

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Re: MSG Detective Conan 690

Detective Conan tends to go by in "cases" so starting here at the start of a new case isn't too bad. I'm very interested to see how this project will go :D
 

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Re: MSG Detective Conan 690

So it turns out our group has decided to conduct our chapter discussions primarily at our home forum. However, I will post the links to the group translations here for feedback.

P.S. I told the others about the new manga series and some have already expressed interest in creating additional study groups for them.
 
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TLR 151

Can someone look over this for me? I feel like my brain is a little off this week for some reason. So I would really appreciate it if someone like over this for me.

Thanks

Title:Friends
page 1
outside panel
Lala VS Black!/A Desperate Situation!!

page 2
panel 2
St Stop!!/Rito!?
panel 3
!/Yuuki-Kun!!
panel 4
You're in the way, Move!
panel 5
I...I won't

page 3
panel 1
If your gonna shot Lala-san and Yuuki-kun then you're gonna have to shot me!!/!!
panel 2
Haruna-chan...
panel 4
Yami-san!

page 5
panel 1
Gahhh
panel 2
Eh!?
panel 3
Kyaaa/Sa...Saruyama!? WHy!?
panel 4
...He was/you true target, right...Black

page 6
panel 2
ahh
panel 3
!? Eh.../What's that!?
panel 4
He is Karmelon a master of disguise who has many forms./A man who is trying to escape with stolen highly classified information from a certain galaxy Mafia.

page 7
panel 1
IS that you true unseen form?/When I shot you, You made youself appear died by using optical illision and a death imitating device, and thought that I would over look that.
panel 2
But... I know by the smell./The smell of blood.../you mean...
panel 3
Indeed... the dead body didn't have a smell of blood./At first I thought it was a prank by Tenjouin Saki but when Black showed up that became unlikely.

page 8
panel 1
You're playing dead and slipping pass Black/And changing place with Saruyama Kenichi who dashed out of the room.
panel 2
And trying to use me and the princess to defeat Black. That what you were trying isn't?
panel 3
...Yami-san You've been reading Detective Manga lately haven't you.../Well done Mikan
panel 4
........./Shii...

page 9
panel 1
Damn ittt
panel 2
!!/Smoke!?
panel 3
Damn I can't see
panel 4
!?
panel 5
!!/There are two Nana!?/Kukuku...You'll never guess which one is the real one!!

page 10
panel 1
Black...I hear you have a policy of not getting other people involved in you missions/ So now you have to be careful.
panel 2
uhn?/What's with those looks...
panel 3
haa
panel 4
Thi this is strange. I know I scanned and transformed perfectly...
panel 5
!!

page 11
panel 1
You making fun of me aren't you.../Hyaaa
panel 2
Well excuse me for being flatchested!!!/Gyaaa/I guess the damage he recieved has missed up his system.
panel 3
That why his image blurred when the light went out, He couldn't cope with the sudden change in lighten/ and That one moment was enough to tell who the fake was.
panel 4
...This is the end.

page 12
panel 1
!!
panel 2
Please wait
panel 3
I thought I told you not to interfer.
panel 4
I don't intend to./It's just...

page 13
panel 1
I don't want my friends to see/ anymore then this of our bloodly world...
panel 2
.........
panel 4
Yami...San...
panel 5
If you want to show him then I don't care./He's not my friend his my target./Ehhh!?
panel 6
...Sorry but

page 14
panel 1
I can't do.../mau mauu
panel 2
Celine again!!
panel 3
She saying "Let all get alone Mauuu->heart/Stop that
panel 4
This is a major discussion!!/ Let go/.....

page 15
panel 2
Ahh
panel 3
Waaa
panel 4
Pekeee/!!?

page 16
panel 1
Wahh/utto
panel 2
Hyaa
panel 3
Yu...Yuuki-kun You're at it again!!/kaaa.../I'm Sorrrrrrrrry!!

page 17
panel 1
WHat's with this people?/Black
panel 2
They're a little wild...
panel 3
........./...I agree.

page 18
panel 2
yaaa I'm glad you two are fine!!/I can't believe you two were tied up in the storage room...
panel 3
Lala What happen to that alien?/Well Black fix the fault in electro-magnetic field then I called Zastin and had him deal with him.
panel 4
And as always he said he would hand him over to the Galaxy Police.
panel 5
I see.../Rito Do you know where Yami-san is?

page 19
panel 3
I don't feel like finishing my job/ This time I let you handle it Golden Darkness.
panel 5
.........
outside panel
THe still/ comfortable Cat
bottom of page
Next Issue, Rito and Lala both Form Change!?
 

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Hoop Men 11

Found some time to do another chapter. It would be great if a helpful proofreader offered some time to go over this one (or chapter 10 which still lacks some checking as well). : )

My translation | Raw @ MH
 

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Blood Type V Oneshot, Clear Qualia 1 and 12 Nin no Yasashii Koroshiya -Leo Murder Case- 1

I made a request in the dedicated proofreader topic, but I hope it's okay to ask here too. I'm new to translating here and I'd really appreciate it if anyone could proofread the following:


Thanks in advance!

(Sorry, I forgot to mention that I use British English)


I found a proofreader through the dedicated proofreader topic, so I don't need one for these chapters. Thanks to anyone who looked though~
 
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Goshuushousama Ninomiya-kun ch1

Please help out.
Can an experienced translator go over it and see how Sorting did?
my translator needs help since he( is not so good with grammar and English)

Sorry about posting the entire thing in the post, but since its not mine translation and he isnt registered,I just didnt want to make it seem like my tl.

here is a link to the Chinese raws.
if you
http://mangahelpers.com/s/nonbiriscans/details/35819

Here is a japanese raw for those who prefer the J raw
http://mangahelpers.com/downloads/details/35821



Goshuushou-sama Ninomiya-kun
+ translated by Sorting using Chinese raws
Take note of the font size and the spacing between each sentence in a combined speech bubble
*= notes
**=my opinion

Reserved for Nonbiri-Scans

1
Sfx: check check
Big words on the left: An unnerving and heart thumping life begins
Girl: mmmm….
Boy: I pushed a girl down
02-03
Boy: if this continues, it is going to bad
Boy: it is going to be that kind of incident
Sfx: every day
Sfx: this may also be
Sfx: an adolescent’s
Sfx: superfluous starting

Boy: Wait, calm down…… calm down first, Ninomiya Shungo!!
Boy: ok, let me remember slowly
Boy: What really happened!?
Boy: why
Boy: would it turn out like to be this kind of situation!! *turn out like this* (also can)
4
Box: a few hours ago
Sfx: zuga zuga
Sfx: zugaaaaa zugaaa zugagaaaaaa
Boy: Alright
Boy: cleaning finished finally
Sfx: pokaaaaantsu

5
Boy: All that is left is to weigh the sugar, water the garden
Boy: and then to prepare dinner
Sfx: keda
Boy: After my dinner at 7pm, I will clean up a bit. Bathe at 9pm. If this happens , I will be able to sleep at 11pm. Before then, I can rearrange the food in the refrigerator.
Boy: Alright today’s schedule is perfect.
Sfx: pipoooon pipoooooon *door bell
Boy: coming
Boy: May I ask who it is
Sfx: suuuu
Man: Ah, I apologise for my tardiness. I was tied down by my work hahaha
Sfx: kachanmi

6
Man: To tell you the truth, this is my first time coming into your house. I never knew that it will be this beautiful
Sfx: talking non-stop
Man: there could even uniqueness in the priced distinct of the city. However, there will also be that.
To have a beautiful house that has picturesque scenery is fine, but to live in here, being trapped like an animal doesn’t seem to be very convenient
Man: Built at the crest of a hill, won’t it be troublesome to climb up to your house. However I praise you for that
From today onwards, I will be under your care, but I believe that we will be very happy living together…… Oh I forgot, did your sister come back?
Boy: Uh. wait
Boy: First of all, who is that person!?
Man: Also, what does he mean by ‘under your care’
Man: Oh!? Is it that your sister had not told you yet?
Boy: I did not heard anything from nee-san
Boy: nee-san? Is it one of nee-san’s doings?
Man: is it then I should introduce myself first
Man: My name is Tsukimura Mikihiko. Please to meet you
Boy: Uhh! My name is…
Man: Ahhh I heard everything about you from Ryoko-chan ha
Man: So, this is child
Man: is my younger sister, mayu
Sfx: bow

7
Man: same as you, a first year high school student
Girl: Starting today, we will be living here.
Boy: Did I hear wrongly. Living here with me!?
Man: Go on, introuduce yourself
Girl: Ah…. Okay
Girl: Uh…
Girl: Ah…Uh…Ah
Girl: I’m I’m Tsukimura Mayu

8

Boy: Uh…
Boy: I understood the situation
Boy: but can you explain further
Sfx: Zuriiiiiii Zuriiiiiii
Boy: Hello
Phone: Ahhh Shungo? It’s me
Boy: … Nee-san Where are you now
Phone: Two people will be coming to live with us starting today. Take care of them please!
Boy: You should have said that earlier
Sfx: chubaaaaaaaan
Boy: Nee-san!?
Boy: How many times have I told you to call home?
Boy: It has been a month already since your last call
Boy: Hello, Nee-san?
Nee-san: I would think that they should be there already
Nee-san: I will also come back tonight I’m a little occupied right now
Boy: Wait…… What are you doing right now?

9
Nee-san: so that’s it. You will understand more once you ask Mikihiko…
Boy: Nee-san!? Hello….
Boy: Wait…. Nee-san
Man: Pardon me
Sfx: pitsu
Man: Hello? …. Yeah
Is it you? Obtaining the your number is faster than I expected
Man: Work again? This is troublesome
You must have heard. I’m taking a vacation for awhile.
Man: The one involving U.S.’s Security, have you completed it? Even if you have said that, it is troublesome for me
Boy: What kind of job does this man have…….
Man: hello?
Man: oh my! I understand. The client is the chief’s daughter, let me take the job. Hahahaha
Sfx: embarrassed
Man: Mayu…..
Man: I still have some work to do. Be a good child when I’m not here.
Mayu: it can’t be… Nii-san?

10
Man: So this is the situation
Man: I have some urgent matters to attend to. Please accept my sincere apologies.
Sfx: pata pata
Man: Well then! Please take care of my little sister!!
Boy: A rope ladder!?
Man: We will meet again someday!!
Girl: Nii-san!!
Girl: Wait!!
Girl: Wait, Nii-san!
Girl: Don’t leave me alone
Man: hahaha
Man: No need to say goodbye thank you I gooooooo

11
Sfx: Silence
Boy: Uh… Tsukimura-san
Boy: Ah yes
Boy: Have you heard anything from your brother?
Mayu: No….. I was only told of this matter only yesterday …
Boy: So that’s how it is…
Boy: You should come in first since you are going to live here
Girl: Pardon me
Boy: ……please come in
Girl: ……Yes

12
Girl: ahhhhh you are mistaken!!
Mayu: sorry, what I meant wasn’t that
Sfx: waaa
Mayu: Okay
Mayu: Pardon me
Sfx: taka taka taka
Mayu: ….? Waaaa!
Sfx: Crash
Boy: That’s gonna hurt……

13

Boy: ahya ahya
Sfx: shaking
Boy: Tsukimura-san……. Are you alright?
Girl: No!!
Girl: Don’t touch me!!
Boy: I…… I don’t have that kind of motive
Sfx: panicking
Boy: So…sorry
Girl: Uhhh
Girl: It isn’t like that… uh…
Sfx: Silence
Boy: Anyway, let’s leave it like that

14
Boy: Before everything is cleared up, you can take things slowly
Boy: my sister and your brother will return back quickly
Boy: I will be in the house if you have anything you need, you can call for me
Boy: Oh man
Boy: What was that about?
Mayu: Don’t touch me!!
Boy: ..Hmmmm

15
Boy: I should not bother myself with this matter……..
Boy: But… what is nee-san thinking about?
Sfx: butsu butsu
Boy: Having an adolescent boy and girl living under the same roof. It will be too late once something happens.
Boy: however
How can I ignore a guest?
She looks pitiful
Sfx: Face red
Boy: but it seems that she hate me
Sfx: ahhh
Boy: I should make a cup of tea for her later
Girl: ummm….
Girl: ni…… ninomiya-kun?
Sfx: panicking

16

Ninomiya: ……What?
Mayu: ummm ummm
Mayu: I’m really sorry about before
Ninomiya : No… it doesn’t matter
Ninomiya: As an apology, let me help you!!
Mayu: apologising is enough; I’m able to cope by myself
Mayu: No, I must!!
Ninomiya: Not doing anything but just waiting might bore her out
Ninomiya: umm, can I ask for your help….?
Sfx: haaa
Mayu: yes!
Mayu: I will do my best!
Sfx: zutsu
Sfx: biku

17

Mayu: Ni.. .Ninini… ninomiya-kun!?
Mayu: Are you alright!?
Sfx: waaaa
Ninomiya: I’m alright……
Ninomiya: Just had my eyes stung by the onions
Mayu: Stung by onions?! !!
Ninomiya: White coloured…… isn’t it supposed to be those grey-coloured but it had to be pure white
Ninomiya: …no where am I looking at!? This is very rude to her
Mayu: Are you sure… you are alright?
Ninomiya: Ahhh, I’m alright
Ninomiya: Onions do not just sting your eyes but irritate your nose as well.
Ninomiya: this is a fact
Thinking: What happened to me, causing me to panic?
If it is a normal average day, this would have never happened…
Ninomiya: First of all… I should calm down
Ninomiya: ummm I will be going to collect some vegetables
Ninomiya: do you want to help me cut the cabbages over there?
Mayu: Yes, I understand
Ninomiya: I’m leaving it to you

18

Ninomiya: Tsukimura Mayu……Ahhh…
Ninomiya: it seems that I’m mistaken that she hates me
Ninomiya: Then why would she escape from me?
Ninomiya: is it that I have some kind of body odour?
Ninomiya: which reminds me what kind of opinion she has on cohabiting?
Ninomiya: does she agree?
Ninomiya: …never mind. No matter what I’m objecting to it…
Sfx: hauaaaaa

19
Ninomiya: It’s also white…….
Ninomiya: with lingerie of this quality, looks like it might worth over 5 thousand yen
Ninomiya: But then
Ninomiya: what the heck am I doing!!?
Mayu: umm ninomiya-kun……?
Ninomiya: ah… sorry
Ninomiya: no
Ninomiya: it is my mistake
Mayu: It is my fault for not noticing…..
Mayu: come
Mayu: let me help you carry the box
Mayu: Ninomiya-kun

20
Sfx: zusaaaan
Ninomiya: yahooo
Sfx: dogooo
Words on surfboard: talent
Ninomiya: oh no
Ninomiya: No… umm
NInomiya: No, it’s not that…
Ninomiya: wa
Ah
Ninomiya: Now is not the time to think about other matters
Ninomiya: relax …I must calm down. She is just stretching her hands for the vegatables
Ninomiya: It is absolutely not for me to hug her in her chest she will only accept
Ninomiya: THE VEGETABLES!!
Ninomiya: Stay normal…… Stay normal!! Where is my self-motivation…..
Sfx: zun
Sfx: doshikun
Ninomiya: The undefeatable motivation

21

Mayu: ummmm
Mayu: Ninomiya-kun
Nimoniya: ummm ah
Sfx:ahhhhhh
Nimoniya: it’s nothing
Nimoniya: Even having a male and female together alone, my reaction might be a bit too much?
Nimoniya: Once nee-san comes back, I should not have this kind of reaction anymore?
Nimoniya: Stay normal Stay normal
Nimoniya: ??????????????? * probably just a cheer
Sfx: hooooo
22
Nimoniya: Tsukimura-san
Sfx: Surprised
Mayu: Y…yes!
Nimoniya: How can I put it as? You are different
Nimoniya: how different……
Mayu: Ohh… Yes, is that the case?
Nimoniya: ah… sorry if I had made you angry
Mayu: How…how can that be possible?
Nimoniya: Ah I forgot
Nimoniya: Can you rinse the cabbages you had cut just now?
Mayu: The fact that I’m a very normal commoner…
Nimoniya: Tsukimura-san?
Nimoniya: … Tsukimura-san, are you listening?
NImoniya: rinse the cabbages under the water
Mayu: Ah!?
Mayu: Yes!?
Sfx: panicking
Mayu: Oh! I’m sorry, I will do it immediately!!
Sfx: gushi
Sfx: zushi

23
Nimoniya: Waa!?
Nimoniya: Tsukimura-san!?
Mayu: Kyaaaaa!!
Sfx: Guguguguu
Sfx: ahhhh
Mayu: no….!! ahhhh I’m sorry! I’m sorry!!
Nimoniya: Turn off the tap quickly… the tap
Waaaa!!
Nimoniya: boku!!

Nimoniya: wait……
Nimoniya: Turn … off the tap quickly!!
Mayu: I can’t
Mayu: Don’t touch me…!
Nimoniya: Then, let go of your hand!!
Mayu: kyaaaaa
Nimoniya: Let go of your hand quickly!!
Mayu: Wait!! Don’t do it first
Mayu : Kyaaaaa

24
Sfx: drenched
Nimoniya: ……
Sfx: finally
Mayu: I’m sorry
Nimoniya: ……It doesn’t matter
Mayu: …….ummm are you alright?
Nimoniya: I cannot say it is alright after this incident……
Mayu: ah…… no I’m not talking about that
Mayu: ummmm Nimoniya-kun’s body
Nimoniya: eh…… myself?

25
Nimoniya: Is there something wrong with my body?
Eh ah……
Mayu: no
Mayu: ummm don’t
Mayu: put it to heart……
Mayu: ummm ……
Mayu: it’s nothing….. no
Sfx: kasshi
Nimoniya: to..tow.. towel
Nimoniya: I will bring some towels!!
Sfx: gurun

26
Sfx: do do do do
Sfx: banmmu
Nimoniya: it…
Nimoniya: was really dangerous just now……
Nimoniya: I must take more precautionary measures…… She was completely defenceless…
Nimoniya: If this continues on, it will become……
Nimoniya: a path of no return!!
Mayu: Kyaaaa
Sfx: * evil sounds
Nimoniya: But what happened to me today…… I feel exhausted
Nimoniya: Was the girl the cause of the allergy and my reaction with the opposite sex?
Nimoniya: No…it couldn’t be that. It must have been caused my panic over her defenceless body
Mistaken that it was caused by feelings of the opposite sex

27
Nimoniya: sorry , Tsukimura-san. Must have caused you to wait
Nimoniya: oi…….!?
Nimoniya: oi… ah…
Nimoniya: this……
28
Nimoniya: Tsuki……
Nimoniya: Tsukimura-san!!
Sfx: baiiiiiintsu
Nimoniya: Respond! Saying something!
Nimoniya: Tsukimura-san!!
Nimoniya: wuwa
Sfx:zurutsu
29
Sfx: don da…… *crash
Nimoniya: That’s why I said
Nimoniya: I oppose against…..
Nimoniya: Cohabition

30

Interviewee: They even did those kinds of things……
Interviewee: He is only a normal teenager…….
Interviewee: I pity him…
Nimoniya: no no , now is not the time to think about those matters
Nimoniya: …tsukimura-san
Nimoniya: tsukimura-san?
Nimoniya: right now, the condition of her body is of highest importance!!
Nimoniya: …. It seems that she has a fever

31
Sfx: pikun
Mayu: ah….
Mayu: ah nnnnn…. *moaning sounds
Nimoniya: ah? Ahnnn!?
Mayu: xixi
Nimoniya: wait a minute
This cannot be possible
Before I can take her temperature, I should take off her clothes, isn’t that right?
*My first translation was* before perpetrating* which what the sentence literally meant*
Mayu: nnnn
Mayu: nnnn
Nimoniya: But her clothes are worn properly, it’s just that she is breathing heavily
Nimoniya: even so……
Nimoniya: she looks cute
Nimoniya: very cute!!
32
Nimoniya: darn it……. Weird!! Something weird is happening to me!!
Nimoniya: from just now, what has happened to me?! My body seems to be like being attracted by her.
Sfx: jiiiiiii
Nimoniya: ….nee-san tsukimura-san
Nimoniya: what are you two doing over there?

33
Nee-san: What are we doing…..?
Nee-san: is what you see
Nii-san: From now on, you can call me nii-san
Nimoniya: Elements of life associated factor deficiency disease?
Nimoniya: n
Nii-san: To tell you the truth, both I and Mayu are diagnosed with Elements of life associated factor deficiency disease.

34

Nii-san: our physique….. Is that we need to “connect” with the opposite sex to survive
Nimoniya: wait, ummm
Nimoniya: so you are saying that……
Nii-san: Do I need to say it. Shungo-kun, it isn’t like those rape and abuse that you said,
It is just a very normal sexual intercourse
Nee-san: oh my, please watch your words, Shungo-kun
Nimoniya: No… I did not say anything
Nii-san: ……. However, looking at another angle, this is not just normal……
Nii-san: it is very normal
Nii-san: Our bodies are unable to make life force
Nii-san: Thus if we do not do it with other people, we will not be able to survive
Nimoniya: What does life force means?
Nii-san: For a human to live, he needs a considerable amount of life energy. That is life force

35

Nii-san: Therefore those with Elements of life associated factor deficiency disease…
Nii-san: to be able to sexually attract the opposite sex, one must have high adaptability
Nii-san: To put it simply, it is to seduce good man or woman
Could be said as the capabilities of Midara *lewd sorcery
Nimoniya: …umm
Nimoniya: Isn’t this what people call Succubus!?
Nii-san: Correct……. the females are called Succubus while the males are called Incubus, Shungo-kun.
Nimoniya: What does this have to do with your stay at my house?
Nii-san: n… this is just the beginning; the next one will be the answer.
Nii-san: Concerning my younger sister

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Nii-san: Mayu… she is different from other Succubus.
Nii-san: She has andophobia . *might have spelling error*
Nii-san: It could be the reason why she cannot control her powers.
Nii-san: Just by having a slight contact on her, she could make the victim unconscious
Ninomiya: So that is why…
Flashback: don’t touch me
Nimoniya: Your body…
Nimoniya: And when she loses her will, she cannot absorb life energy to recover those that she releases.
Nimoniya: like what happened before. Due to her anxiety and exhaustion, as well as using up a large amount of life energy, she fainted.
Nii-san: Aren’t she pitiful?
Nii-san: have to live a life trapped indoors and have no improvement since.
Thus she will have to cohabite with us to cure her phobia

37 *a lot of boxes, ask me if need help
Nii-san: So these are the reasons for her cohabitation
Nimoniya: Wait…
Nimoniya: Just these? Wait a minute!!
Nii-san: Oh I forgot From tomorrow onwards, Mayu will be transferring to your high school
Please take care of her
Nimoniya: Ah?
Nimoniya: Transferring to my school!?

Mayu: Ummm…… Nimoniya-kun
Mayu: Nimoniya-kun
Nimoniya: Even in the same class
Nii-san: I even arranged for her to be in the same class as you
Mayu: I need your help, Nimoniya-kun
Mayu: Hook… my bra please *actual: my bra hook*
Mayu: Do you want to eat together?

38

Nee-san: You do not need to help to change her clothes
Nee-san: Also, there will not be any lunch made by a girl
Nee-san: Mayu needs to be exposed to the real world and understand more about relationships
Nees-san: To cure her andophobia
And fortunately you seem to have a resistance to Succubus.
Nee-san: You should come and help too
Nimoniya: how can that be! Wait!
Wuwaaaa
Nimoniya: I can help
Nimoniya: But we are not a couple. Moreover to have a male and a female staying together is a bit…
Nee-san: …..There is no use escaping, Shungo-kun
Nee-san: Are you regretting your actions?
Sfx: den
Sfx: guha

39
Nimoniya: that….
Nimoniya: that was not purpose, I ……
Nee-san: So because of your that, you might have hurt her
What will Mayu think of this?
Nee-san: aaa… he is such a heartless guy
Being my little brother, he has hurt you
Nimoniya: So I said that was
Nimoniya: not on purpose
Nee-san: I don’t care what you think
Nee-san: But if there is no such person as Shungo-kun? Shungo-kun!!
Nii-san: My sister has that kind of personality. If….
she knows that you are those nocturnal male who hunts for breasts when the girl is asleep, what kind of reaction will she give
Nimoniya: So I’m saying that
Cohabiting is very dangerous!
Nimoniya: A male and a female living together in a house will cause much unnecessary stimulation
Nimoniya: Even those with no sexual desires will become restless for the whole day…..
Ahhhh… I wash my hands off this matter!!
Nimoniya: To put it simply, I object to cohabitation!!
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Nee-san: So… I will show this video to mayu to see. I will exhibit it tomorrow morning
Nii-san: It hurts me dearly. The expression that she will show on her face….
Sfx: kasshiiiiiiiin
Nimoniya: I can barely manage my life with my sister
Nimoniya: From now onwards, I will also need to deal with Succubus!?
Sfx: ahhhh……
Nee-san: Is something wrong with you?
Sfx: Laugh
Nii-san: It seems that he agrees gladly
Sfx: Chronic gastritis worsens…… (tears) *weird sentence*
Sfx: to be continued!!
 
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Rozen Maiden II Tale 16

I'm not sure if I mistranslated anything in this chapter of Rozen Maiden. I've got very very little experience with Japanese, so I'm not too sure about the quality of my work. Would a kind and experienced translator mind checking over my work?

Its Rozen Maiden II Tale 16 and fully transcribed.

And here's the RAW

Thanks guys!
 
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Chaosic Rune 34

I decided to start translating following my TL's advice and so I decided to pick up on Chaosic rune again since it's only 20+ pages a chapter.
The problem is I'm not confident in my abilities since I'm teaching myself.

http://www.mediafire.com/?nmqmmwtydmy

Script
Chapter 34: Little Sister

Page 1
竜界のカード使いがどうして機界のモンスターを召喚でまんだよ!?/信じられねェありえねェ!!
A Dragon Society cardbearer can summon a Machine Society Monster!?/ I can't believe that's possible
クンがぁっ!いい気になんなよ俺のオモチャはクランヤ 再生カード使いだけじゃ ねェんだよ!! バーカがぁ!
Dammit! Kuran isn't my only ressurected cardbearer toy!! Idiots!
ブッ殺せェッ!ガラクタ人間 どもぉーっ!
Go and beat them to death my garbage human!
Page 2
ムダだっ サーキット=ウォーカーッ!!
It's useless! Circuit Walker!!


オイ どうした!?
Hey, What's wrong!?
ミキユ。。。
Mikyu.....
テメエらまで俺に逆らうってのか!?//そんなこと許さねェぞコラぁっ!!
You bastards are going to disobey me!?//Something like that is unforgivable!!

Page 3
クソっクソぉっどいつもこいつも俺に逆らいやがってぇっ!!/ だがなぁっ いからサーキット=ウォーカーッでもモンスターは操れねェぞ! どうやってこの電磁バリアを破る気だ?んん!?
Damn it all! I hate everyone going against me!! Even if you have Circuit Walker to manipulate the monsters, how do you plan to destroy my electromagnetic barrier? Hmm?
デス=レックス!
Death Rex!
食ってもよかったのか!?//ならば早く言え!!
It's okay to eat him now!?//Then hurry up and say so!!
俺には指1本触れらんねェぞっ!ザマミロ
Try to lay one finger on me! You'll get what you deserve!
ピツッ
Crack
Page 4!!

し。。。下からだと。。。? き。。。汚ねェ。。。
Fr...From below....? Th...That's Dirty...

ぐえっ
Guee!
戯けが!
Fool!

Page 5
もういい。。。。//こんなクズでもクランの兄さんなんだ
That's enough.../He may be a piece of crap but he's still Kuran's brother
フンッ//抑こんな喰い残しに未練など無いわ!
Hmph//I didn't want to eat leftovers in the first place!
甘いんだョバカ。。。。。マニューバーが残ってれば。。。。//俺は何度でも。。。再生できるんだ。。。ク。。。ククク。。。
Don't be so optimistic moron....Maneuver is still intact.....//No matter how many time...I can still regenerate...he...hehehehe
ガツヤッ
Gazaa
バサ。。。
thud...

Page 6
さあ。。。。。一緒に行こうクラン
Now..Let's go home together, kuran
リョウガ。。。。。
Ryouga...
どこへ行く?。。。。。クラン。。//お兄ちゃんを見捨てるのか?/!
Where are you going....kuran?//Are you going to abandon me?
俺がどれ程オマエを大切にしてきたと思ってる?//オ。。。オマエのためにヅャマな両親まで殺してやったっていうのに。。。。。
Do you have any idea how important you are to me?//Fo...for your sake I even killed our parents

Page 7
殺した。。。?/。。。。パパとママ。。。?//そうだよ! アイツら俺が躾けてるのを見てクランと引き離そうとしやがったんだ!!
Killed....?/ Mama and papa...?// That's right! I had to discipline them for trying to separate us!!
ムカつくからメッタ刺しにして/海に捨ててやたあヒャハッヒャハハハ
Even though it made me feel sick to stab them/ Then I tossed them into the sea Hyahahahahaha
分かったろ?クラン//俺はオマエのことだけを第一に考えてきたんだ
You understand now Kuran?//I've always been thinking about you first
。。。。よく分かったよ
....I finally understand

Page 8

。。。。私にはお兄ちゃんしかいないんだってずっと思ってた。。。でも違う!!//オマエがいたから私はずっと一人ぼっちだったんだ!!
....I always thought Onii-chan was thinking about me....but that's wrong!!// You're the reason I was left alone!!
ヴォルボックス!
Vorbox!
おお!分かってくれたか。。。クラン//よーしそいつで源リョウガをブッ殺せ!
ooh! I see...kuran/Okay let this guy go beat Ryouga Minamoto to death!
ヅャオ
Zuoo
Page 9
そいつを//喰いつくせっ!!
Devour//Him!!
オイ!!俺の話をちゃんと聞いてたのかクラン?
Hey!! Didn't you listen to me?
Page 10
ガバァ
Gahaa!!
うああああーーっ!!
Uwaaah!!
くソッッ
Dammit
!?

ドラゴンのカード?
A Dragon Card?

Page 11
ヒ。。。へへ。。。源リョウガにできたんだ。。。//俺にだって竜界のカードぐらい。。。
Hi...hehe...Just as he has them...// I also have Dragon Society cards....
開けっ!//竜界の紋よ開けっ!!
Open!//Open the dragon society's crest!!
クソっ!!どうしてだ?//開かねェぞチクショー!!
Damn!! Why?// It won't open!!
フ。。。ククク。。。クク。。。//!
he....hehehe...he//!
。。。。なってない//やっぱりオマエはなってないな。。。
...it won't/ Of course it won't open for you...
。。。クッ//どいつもこいつも。。。
...gah//Everyone....
ぐおっ!!
GAH!!
Page 12

うぎっ//ひゃべひいいっ
Ugee!//Hyahii!
スタ
Step
さあ。。。クラン!!//遠慮しないで好きなだけ食べていいんだぞ
Okay...kuran!! // Eat whatever you want you don't have to hold back
Page 13
わぁい!いただきまぁす
uwahh! Itadakimaasuuu
さっきは。。。//殴ったりして悪かったなクラン
A little while ago...// I had to hit you for being bad kuran
ううん。。。/ぜっんぜん平気だヨあ
Yeah.../ I
お兄ちゃん親代わりだからクランが いい子になるよう厳しく躾けなきゃいけないんだこれも全部オマエのためなんだよ
I'm acting as your foster parent, so for you to become a good girl I have to be strict in disciplining you, all for your sake

Page 14
分かってくれるよなクラン?
Do you understand Kuran?
うん//だっていつものお兄ちゃんスッゴク優しーもん!!
Yep// Even so, Onii-chan is always kind!!
よぉしすきなモンドンドン頼んでいいからな!//ホントぉ!?じゃあねぇイチゴオムレツぅ
I see. Alright, hurry and order whatever you want! // Really! Then I'll get the strawberry omelet
ありがとうございました
Thank you very much
いっちにぃさんしぃおんにーちゃんだいすきっ!!
One, two, three, four, Onii-chan's the one I love the most!!*(*tl note: She trying to sing or cheer)

アハハハッ//なでそれは?//にぃにぃさんしっろにーちゃんだぁいすきっ!
Ahahaha//What's that suppose to be?//Two, Two, Three, Four Onii-chan's the one I love the most!!(*

Page 15
゛お兄ちゃん大好き体操゛だよっ!!早くお腹空かせてねぇ。。。//もう1回食べるのお!
"Onii-chan Love Gymnastics"!! It empties my stomach faster...//So I can eat again!
small text: いっちにぃさんしぃ
small text: One, two, three, four
ポン
Pat
バカだなそんなにすぐ腹が減るかよ//今日は帰ろここへはまた明日来ればいいじゃないか//ホントぉ
It's a joke that you stomach will shrink// Let's go home, we'll come back tommorow//Really
さあ帰ったら何して遊ぶ?クラン//へルトラマンごっこぉ!//アハハ。。。クランは正義のへルトラマンが大好きなんだな
So anyway, what should we play when we get back, kuran?// Hero man!//Ahaha...you love the righteous hero man don't you?

Page 16
でもねでもねぇ!//いっちばん大好きのはお兄ちゃんだヨぉ
But you know what!// I love Onii-chan the most!
さよなら。。。//お兄ちゃん
Goodbye....//Onii-chan

Page 17
上の階にもまだ敵がいるのかな?
Is there still another enemy on the next floor?
ああ。。。//もっと強い敵がな。。。
Yeah../An even stronger one....
あ。。。//ありがとう。。。ハカナ。。。リョウガ
Th...//Thank you...Hakana...Ryouga

Page 18
ヘェ。。。珍しく素直じゃないか//ウ。。。ウるさいっ
Heh...It's rare to see you so docile// Sh...Shut up

ん?
hm?

今度は7階か!
Now it's on the 7th floor!
なんだ?アレは。。。!?

What is that..!?
いやあー間に合ったね
No, what good timing

Page 19
君たちにも是非//見てもらいたかったからねホントよかったよ源リョウガくん//テメエも総務部か?//うん
You guys made it/ I'm really glad, I wanted to see you Ryouga Minamoto-kun//Are you part of the general affairs department as well?//Yeah

七城時レツだ。。。よろしくね
Shichijouji the name...Nice to meet you
さあ。。。僕のメタモ=ラーバがもうすぐ羽化するよ//アハッアハハハハッ
Now...Emerge my Metamo Larva//Ahahahahahaha

Page 20
お母さんといっしょ
With my mother
Page 21
お兄ちゃんといっしょ
With my brother


Edit: Changed chapter, added script, some help please
 
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Gintama 74

Please and thank you. :D

RAW

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bx:第十七四訓
Chapter 74

― それでさァ 結局 野球の試合も中止
So like, the baseball game had to be suspended in the end
その賠償金もウチが払うことになちゃって神社売り飛ばしちゃったのよ
and we had to sell off the shrine to pay off their losses.

― ホント やってらんないわよ たかが犬一匹のためにさァ
Really, all this trouble just for one dog.
また 妹とアパート暮らしよ
So now my sister and I are living in an apartment.

― だからさァ 男も犬も一緒なのよ
Men and dogs are the same, I tell you.
身勝手に捨てるといつか そうやって復習されるのよ
Throw them away and they’ll come back to bite you in the ass someday.

― 男は大丈夫よ 犬よりバカな生き物だから
Nah, men are easier to deal with. They’re even stupider than dogs.

― 阿音ちゃん 指名入りました 三番テーブルついて
Ane-chan, you’ve been requested at table 3.

― また菊屋の旦那だわ 好きねー あのエロジジーも
Must be Master Kikuya again. That old perv’s sure got a thing for you, doesn’t he?

― ねェ だから言ったでしょ?
It’s like I just told you.

― ホントバカよねー 巫女ってだけで みんな メロメロなんだから
Men are so dumb. Just parade around as a miko and they’re all over you.
ナースに巫女にスチュワーデス女に神聖な幻想でも抱いてのかしら?
Nurses, mikos, and stewardesses must be some kinda fantasy for them.

― 女なんてねェ みんな こえだめから生まれてきてんのよ 銀蠅の飛び交う中戦ってんのよ
Us women are born from the cesspool. We hafta fight to survive.


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― 旦那~~!!
Master~~!

― 阿音だよォ~~!また会いに来てくれたん・・・
Your Ane is here~! I’m so happy you came to see me aga—

― げふォぶふォ
Glub glub glub

― あっ 阿音ちゃんが来ましたよ~~菊屋の旦那
Oh! Ane-chan’s here, Master Kikuya~!

― 何してんの アンタァァァ!!
What the hell are you doing?!


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― 阿音ちゃんが来るまでヘルプに入ってたんだけど 急にお尻をさわられたものだから ビックリして・・・
I thought I’d keep him company until you came, but he suddenly felt me up so I got a little surprised…

― こっちがビックリだわァ!!アンタ 私のお得意様に何してくれてんのよォ!!
I’m the one who’s surprised here!! What do you think you’re doing to my client?!

― ごめんなさい 私のお得意じゃないし いいかなって思って
I’m sorry. He’s not my client, so I didn’t think it’d be a problem.

― いいわけねーだろ!大体アンタ自分のお得意のゴリラストーカーもいつもボコボコにしてんだろーが!!
It is a problem! And that gorilla stalker of yours is always hanging around here, you know!!

― 誰がゴリラストーカーだ!失敬だぞ君!!
Who’re you calling a gorilla stalker?! How rude!!
お妙さん ちょっとビシツと言ってやってください!
Otae-san! Tell her what an awesome guy I am!

txt:早くこっち来てください
And please come over here soon.

― わかりました ・・・消えさりなさい ゴリラ
Sure. Get lost, Gorilla.

― いや そうじゃなくて
No, not that…

― この世に 一片のDNAも残さずに消え去りなさい ゴリラ
Vanish from this world without even leaving a trace of DNA behind, Gorilla.

― いや そうじゃなくて
No, not that…

― ちょっとォ 落ち着いてよ阿音 他のお客さんがxxxいてるよ
Calm down, Ane. You’re bothering the other customers.

― 確かにお妙もやり過ぎだけど菊屋の旦那にも問題があったのよ
Sure, Otae went overboard, but Master Kikuya was in the wrong too.
おさわりパブと勘違いしてるフシがあって店の他の娘も嫌がってたの
The other girls don’t want the customers to think this place is some kinda free touching zone either.

― ケツさわられた位であんだっつーのよ ケツがなんで二つに割れてるかしってる?
What’s wrong with getting a little felt up? Why else do you think we got two butt cheeks for?
それは片方さわられても平気なようによ
Even if one cheek gets felt up, everything will still be all good.

― いや 違うと思う
I don’t think that’s it.

― 違うわ お尻はね 人間が昔 天使だった頃の名残なのよ 翼だったの
You’re wrong. Way back when, humans used to be angels and butts used to be wings.

― なにそれ?ロマンチックなつもり?
What’s with that story? Are you trying to be romantic?

― じゃあ 乳ならどうじゃあああ!!
Then how ‘bout your boobs?!


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― 胸もダメです
Breasts are also a no-no.
胸はね 人間が昔 古代兵器だった頃の名残なのよ ミサイルなの
Way back when, humans used to be ancient weapons and breasts used to be missiles.

― 最終的に人間って何だったのよ!!
Just what the hell were we?!


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― 第七十四訓
Chapter 74
キャバクラ遊びは20歳になってから
Cabaret Clubs Are For Ages 20 and Up


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― いやいやいやいや 確かにね ウチはおさわりパブではないです
My, my. Of course, we’re not a free-touch kind of club.

― でもね SMクラブでもないからね
However, we’re not an SM* club either.

*SM = sadistic, masochistic

― サディスティックなプレイを楽しむ所ではないからね
People don’t come here for sadistic play.

― そーですね
Yes, you’re right.

― そーですねって・・・森田一義アワーでもないからね ココは
“Yes, you’re right?”… This isn’t the Morita Kazuyoshi Hour* either, you know.

*Variety show in Japan in which the line “Yes, you’re right” is used often.

― そーですね
Yes, you’re right.

― ・・・腹立つなコイツら
These girls are really pissing me off…

― でさー お妙ちゃんさァ 確かに君にはタチの悪い酔っ払いを追い払う用心棒的なことも頼んでたけど
Now then, Otae-chan, you’ve been a big help acting as a bodyguard chasing away all the drunkards.
最近ちょっとやりすぎたから用心棒にしても
Lately, though, you’ve been a bit too extreme even for a bodyguard.

― 棒じゃないです 穴です
I’m not a stick. I’m a hole.*

* Word play on bodyguard (youjinbou) and stick (bou).

― いや そーいう問題じゃないからね 女の子がそんな事言ったらダメだからね
No, that’s not the problem here. And young ladies shouldn’t be saying that kind of thing.

― それから阿音ちゃん 君はね お金がほしいのはわかるけどやり方がちょっとあざとすきるね
As for you, Ane-chan, I understand that you want the money, but your methods are too aggressive.
お客さんから一杯苦情が来てるからね 「散々 貢がされた挙句捨てられた」って
I’ve had many customers complaining to me about how you throw them away after sucking them dry of their money.

― 捨ててません また お金を貯めてはいあがって来た男達はリサイクルするつもりです
I’m not throwing them away. I recycle men who save up more money and then come crawling back.

― そんな 地球に厳しいリサイクルきいたことないからね
I’ve never heard of recycling that was so bad for the Earth.


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― まーね 二人ともウチの店では売れっ娘だし
Well, you two really sell here at this club…
ホントはね 温かい目で見守っていきたいんだけれども
So I’d really just like to keep a protective watch over you.

― 核弾頭二つ所持してやってける程甘くないから この世界
But this isn’t the kind of the world in which you can survive with two nuclear warheads in your possession.
だから今月中にどっちか一人店やめてもらうから
Therefore, one of you will have to quit this month.

― 残ってもらうのはこの店にとって有益になる方
The one who brings in more profit will be the one to stay.
そうだね 明日はちょうど今月の売り上げが出る日だから
Let’s see... Tomorrow will be the perfect time to tally up this month’s earnings.

― そこで より大きい利益をあげて方にこの店に残ってもらうから
At that time, I’ll let the one who brings in more profit stay at this club.

― 冗談じゃないわよ
You’ve gotta be kidding me!

― 生活が苦しくなってこれから頑張らなきゃって時に・・・
My life just got more difficult and now I gotta work even harder?

― いまいましい女だわ
What an annoying woman!

― 思えば私のお得意さんが一体何人あの女の犠牲になったことか・・・
Just how many of my clients have fallen victim to that woman already?

― 売り上げなんて私の足元にも及ばないくせに妙にみんなに慕われてて
She doesn’t rake in as much money as I do and yet everyone totally loves her.
― そういうところも前からきにくわなかったのよ
That part of her always disgusted me.


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― これを機に店から追い払ってやるわ
I’ll use this chance to get rid of her!

― 阿音ちゃん
Ane-chan.

― なんか大変なことになちゃったわね
It seems like things have gotten out of hand.

― ごめんなさい 私が火種になったみたいで
I’m sorry. I feel like I caused all of this.

― フン あんたの手は読めてるのよ
Hmph! I see what you’re trying to do.

― 気にしちゃいないわよ
Don’t worry about it.

― まァ お互い 明日は頑張りましょ
Anyways, let’s both work hard tomorrow.

― 人の良さそうな素振りで 私に近づいて油断をさそうつもりなんでしょ
Tryin’ to get close to me and catch me off guard with the goody-goody act, huh?

― その勝負なんだけど
About our little contest…

― 私は降りさせてもらいます
…I’m forfeiting it.


― みんなからきいたわ
I heard from the others.
阿音ちゃん 住んでた神社も事情で売り払ってすごい苦労してるって
I know about how you had to sell off your shrine and the troubles you’ve been having, Ane-chan.

― 確か 引きこもりの妹の面倒も見てるんでしょ?
You’re also looking after your hikikomori sister, right?

― 私・・・阿音ちゃんとは戦えない
I…don’t want to compete with you, Ane-chan.

― 私してっるから
Because I understand you…

― 阿音ちゃんが誰よりも頑張り屋さんで誰よりも一生懸命働いてたこと
You try harder and work harder than everyone else at the club.

― それじゃ
Goodbye, now.

― 明日頑張ってね
Do your best tomorrow.


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― ・・・なんなのよ
…What was that all about?

― 拍子抜けだわ
That was kind of a let-down.

― わけのわからない女
I don’t get that woman at all.

― でも
But…

― どーしてあの女がみんなに慕われてるか
I think…

― わかった気がする
I get why everyone likes her now.

― 私 いつの間にか金にばかり目がくらんで
I might’ve become…

― スゴク嫌な女になっていたかもしれな・・・
an unpleasant woman who’s only hungry for money somewhere along the way…

― いらっしゃいませー
Welcome!

― ここであってんだよな ここでいいんだよな
This is the place, right? This place is good, right?

― オイオイ ここ高っけーんじゃねーの 大丈夫か?
Hey, hey! Ain’t this place pricey? Think we’ll be okay here?

― えーと 二名様で?
Party of two, right?


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― あっ・・・アンタ万屋の!!
Huh?! You’re the guy from the Yorozuya!!

― あっ アバズレ巫女 お前もここで働いてたのか?
Oh! It’s the bitchy miko! You work here too?

― 誰かアバズレよォ!!アンタなんでこんな所にいんの!?
Who’re you callin’ bitchy?! And what’re you doin’ here?!

― ん?ちょっと知り合いがな
Oh, I know someone here.

― お客様ァ ご指名の女の子は?
Sir, which girl would you like to request?

― お妙ちゃん 頼むわ
Otae-chan, please.

― 銀さーん 長谷川さーん こっちです
Gin-saaan! Hasegawa-saaan! Over here!

― あ・・・
That…

― あの女ァァァ
That biiiiiittttch…!!!

― 客に呼び込みかけてやがったァァァァ!!
She rounded up her own customers!!

― いやー キャバクラなんて久しぶりだぜ
Man, it’s been a while since I’ve been to a cabaret club!

― オイ ホント サービスしてくれるんだろうな あんま金ねーぞ
Hey. It’s gonna be on the house, right? I don’t got a lotta money on me.

― 阿音ちゃん
Ane-chan.

― 住んでた神社も事情で売り払ってすごい苦労してるって
I know about how you had to sell off your shrine and the troubles you’ve been having.

― 私
I…

― 阿音ちゃんとは戦えない
I don’t want to compete with you, Ane-chan.



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― なーんてね 神社がどうなろうがしったこっちゃないわ
Yeah, right! I don’t give a damn about your shrine!

― 私には父上の道場を再興するという悲願があるのよ
I want to revive my father’s dojo, you know!

― やられたァァ!!
She totally got me!!

― 私としたことがァ!!
I should've seen it coming!!

― あっ 阿音ちゃーん!
Ah! Ane-chaaan!

― 女は みんな こえだめから生まれて きたということを忘れていたァァ
I totally forgot that women are born from the cesspool!!

― くそがァァァ 今からでも間に合うかァァ!!
Shiiiittt! I dunno if I’ll make it in time!!

― ういーす おりょうでーす わっ!カッコイイ グラサン!
Hi there! I’m Oryou. Wow! Cool sunglasses!

― えっ?わかる 高かったんだよコレ 実は
Oh, you’re into them? They were really expensive, you know.

― とりあえず何?ケツとかさわっていいの?
So what now? Do I get to touch your ass?

― 冗談だよ お前の貧相なケツさわる位ならパン粉を練り続けた方がマシだ
I was joking. I’d rather knead dough over and over again than rub your bony ass.
サービスって何?こんなサービス御免だよ ちょっと
I thought you were gonna treat us tonight. So far, the service kinda sucks.

― どうだか 鼻血なんてたらしていやらしい
Oh, really? You seem pretty turned on, getting a nosebleed like that.

― すごいや この人一コマ前の事もう忘れてるよ
Unbelievable! This person already forgot what happened a panel ago!

― とりあえず 何飲みますぅ?
To start off with, would you like something to drink?
ドンペリとか あと・・・そうね ドンペリとかあるけど
How about some Dom Pérignon? And then, let’s see…We also have Dom Pérignon.

― 焼酎水割り
Watered-down shochu*.

*Shochu is Japanese liquor similar to vodka.

― わかりました じゃあ ドンペリで
Okay! Dom Pérignon it is, then!

― 誰かー 通訳呼んでくれ
Someone, call an interpreter for me!

― ドンペリか~~ なつかしーな 幕府にいた頃は接待とかでよく飲んだよ
でも今じゃちと高すぎて手が出ねーな
Dom Pérignon, huh? How nostalgic. When I was still with the government, I used to drink it a lot at the business parties.

― なんかもっと安いのでいいよ ベールとか・・・
Something cheaper would be better, like beer…


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txt:ドンペリ
Dom Pérignon
ドンペリのドンペリ割り
Dom Pérignon diluted with Dom Pérignon
ベール じゃなくてドンペリ
Beer…not. Dom Pérignon
首領ペリ
Dom Perrygnon
ドンペリしかねーだろ
Nothing but Dom Pérignon here
やっぱドンペリだろ
Still Dom Pérignon
ドンペリって言っちゃえヨ
Just say Dom Pérignon already!
アレ?ドンペリって何だっけ なんか訳わからなくなってきた
Huh? What’s Dom Pérignon again? I don’t get what’s going on anymore.
ドンペリドンペリ
Dom Pérignon Dom Pérignon

― ドンペリしかねェェェェェェ!!
There’s nothing but Dom Pérignon!!

― ぼったくりだ
This is a rip-off!
間違いねェ・・・ぼったくりバーだよココ
No doubt about it! This bar’s a total rip-off!

― バカな お妙ちゃんに限ってそんな
No way. Otae-chan wouldn’t do something like that.

― だって ドンペリのドンペリ割りってなんだよ?割り切れねーよ ドンペリも俺の気持ちも割り切れねーよ
I mean, what the hell’s Dom Pérignon diluted with Dom Pérignon? It’s inexplicable! Both the Dom Pérignon and my feelings are inexplicable!

― 銀さ~~ん 私 久しぶりにドンペリが飲みたいドン
Gin-san~~ It’s been a while since I’ve had Dom Pérignon so I’d like to drink it, Dom.

― ドンって何?久しぶりって飲ましたことねーよ そんなもん
The hell’s with the “Dom”? And you’ve never even had Dom Pérignon before!

― 長谷川さんのグラサンとドンペリ合うと思うんだけどな~~ペリ
Hasegawa-san, your sunglasses really match the Dom Pérignon, Pérignon!

― ペリ!?おかしい!おかしいよ!ってか ほめるところグラサンしかねーのか!?
“Pérignon”?! This is weird! This is too weird! And you’re only praising my sunglasses!

― オイオイオイオイ 語尾を合わせたらドンペリになっちゃったよォ
Hey, hey, hey, hey! If you put the endings together, they become “Dom Pérignon”!

― サブリミナル!サブリミナルかァ!俺達の深層心理に直接働きかけるつもりかァ!!
It’s subliminal! Subliminal messaging! They’re totally trying to brainwash us!
耳をふざけェェ!!惑わされるなァ!!
Shut your ears!! Don’t give in to them!!


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― すいませーん ドンペリ五本お願いドン・・・
Excuse me! Five bottles of Dom Pérignon please, Dom!

― キャ―――!!
Kyaaaaaahh!!

― 松平の旦那よ!!
It’s Master Matsudaira!!

― まっちゃん!!まっちゃん!!
Ma-chan! Ma-chan!

― パパー うれしいわ ホントに来てくれたのね ごめんね~ 仕事中だったんでしょ?
Papa~! I’m so happy! You really came for me! Sorry~ You must’ve been working, right?

― いいんだよ あんな会議江戸が滅亡するわけでもあるぬーし
It’s all good. It’s not like Edo’s gonna go up in flames if I skip out on that meeting.
でもオジさんはここに来ないと滅亡するからね
But I would’ve gone up in flames if I didn’t come here.

― あれは松平の旦那!!
That’s Master Matsudaira!

― ヤバイわ お妙!あのオッサンの遊び方とんでもなく派手で有名なのよ!!
This is bad, Otae! That old man’s famous for his extravagant money spending!!

― パパァ~~ 私 久しぶりにドンペリ飲みたーい
Papa~~ I haven’t had Dom Pérignon for a while so I wanna drink it~~

― あんなもんジュースじゃねーか
That thing’s like juice.
オジさん もっときっついの飲みたいんだけどなァ
This old man wanted to drink something stronger.

― ドンペリ五本入りまーす!!
Five bottles of Dom Pérignon over here!!

― 旦那ァァァ 素敵ィィ!
Master, you’re so wonderful!


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― あわわ 一気に五本・・・こんなの勝ち目が
Wow, wow. Five bottles at once… We don’t stand a chance.

― 何?アレに勝ちたいの 心配しなくても 俺達水と焼酎8たい2の水割りで アレより ハイになれるぞ
What? You wanna win at that? No worries, then. We can get high on just 80% watered-down shochu.

― そんな戦いじゃないから そんな哀しい勝利いらないから
It’s not that kinda competition. We don’t need such a pathetic victory.

― クク 見た?
Heh heh! See that?

― これがあなたと私の手駒の違いよ
This is the difference between our pawns.

― お妙 どうする?このままじゃ・・・
Otae, what’re we gonna do? Things are lookin’ bad…

― オイオイ 君達 せっかくのキャバクラでなんてしけたツラしてんだ?
Hey, hey! That’s no face to make when you’re in a cabaret club, you guys!

― ドンペル~~ニョ
Dom Pérignyon~~

― 十本もってこい
Bring ten bottles!

― ゴリラ!!
Gorilla!

― 近藤さん!!
Kondo-san!


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― キャアアアア すごいわァァ!!
Kyaaaaaah! Amazing!!

― 一気にお妙ちゃんが阿音ちゃんを抜いたわよ!
Otae-chan overtook Ane-chan in one shot!

― なにっ!!
What?!

― 店の女の子から事情はききました
I heard about your situation from the other girls.

― お妙さん 水くさいじゃありませんか
Otae-san, you should’ve come to me.
俺の預金通帳は既に夫婦用としてお妙さんと兼用になってるんですよ
I’ve already registered my bank account with you as husband and wife.

― もう 安心してください
You don’t have to worry anymore.

― こう見えてもけっこー稼いでますから
I might not look like it, but I’m actually loaded with money.

― ゴリラさん
Gorilla-san…

― ゴリラはないよね このシーンでゴリラはないよね
There’s no gorilla here, is there? There’s no gorilla in this scene, right?

― 近藤ォォォォ てめっ このかぶき町で俺より目立とうなんざ百年早ェんだよ!!
Kondoooo! You’re 100 years too early to try an’ outdo me here in Kabuki Town!!

― うるせェェ エロジジー!今日から夜の帝王はこの俺だァ!!
Shut it, ya old perv! From now on, I’m gonna be the Night King!!

― ふざけるなァァァ!俺の生きがいを奪う奴は将軍でも許さねェェ!!ドンペリ十五本だ!!
Don’t screw with me! I won’t let anyone try to snatch away my life’s work even if he’s the Shogun! Fifteen bottles of Dom Pérignon over here!!

― キャアアアア!!パパ カッコイイ!!
Kyaaaaaa! Papa, you’re so cool!!

― お妙さァァァん こっちもドンペ・・・
Otae-saaaan! Bring me some Dom Pé—

― すいませーん これでドンペリおかわり
Excuse me! More Dom Pérignon over here, please!

― って もう 頼んでるしィィィ!!それ俺の財布だしィィ!!カッコイイとかそーゆーのないしね!!
Wha?! You’re already helping yourself!! That’s my wallet!! And you didn’t even tell me I was cool or anything!!


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― いやいや カッコいいよ お前 俺らはちゃーんとわかってるよ
Nah, man, you’re totally cool! We totally get you!

― なかなか キャバ娘にこんな貢げないよ スゲーよ ゴリラがGORILAに見えるよ
Cabaret girls don’t usually get to drink this much. This is great! Gorilla really looks like a GORILLA!

― アルファベットに変わっただけじゃねーか!!ってか キャバ娘でもない お前らが なんで飲んでんの!?
You just changed the capitalization!! And you guys aren’t even cabaret girls! Why are you drinking?!

― わっわっわっ スゴイ デッドヒート!
Wow, wow, wow! Amazing! They’re head-to-head now!

― スゴイ!!過去最高 記録だわ
Incredible! It’s a new record!

― ドンペリ
Dom Pérignon!

― ドンペリ
Dom Pérignon!

― ドンペリの嵐だわ
It’s a Dom Pérignon drink-off!

― ドンペリ
Dom Pérignon!

― ドンペリ
Dom Pérignon!

― ドンペリ以外きこえない!
All we can hear is “Dom Pérignon”!

― やるな 近藤 だがそろそろ財布の方がヤバくなってんじゃねーのか?
Pretty good, Kondo. But hasn’t your wallet reached its limit about now?

― フン 甘くみるなよ
Hmph! Don’t take me lightly.

― 俺はなァ 貯金をほとんど下ろして・・・
I’ll have you know, I withdrew all of my savings and…

― って アレェェェェ!!もうねーじゃん!どーいうこと!?
Huuuuuhh?! It’s empty! What’s goin’ on?!

― フハハハ てめーはドンペリなんざ滅多に頼んだことねーからしらねーだろ!
Bwahahaha! You don’t drink Dom Pérignon much so you wouldn’t know!

― アレ マジでホント高けーんだぞ!ダース単位で買ってたら金なんかスゲなくなる フハハハハハ!どうしよう 母ちゃんに怒られる
That thing’s really expensive, ya know! Buying a dozen of ‘em eats up a lot of money! Bwahahaha! What do I do?! My wife's gonna be angry with me!

― って お前もヤバイのかィィィ!!
You’re screwed too?!


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― ヤバイ・・・お妙さん
This is bad, Otae-san…

― 近藤さん もういいです ここまでやってくれただけで
Kondo-san, it’s fine. You’ve brought me this far already.

― お妙さ・・・
Otae-sa—

― あとは刀を売払ってくれれば充分ですから
All you have to do now is sell off this katana.

― 売払ってって・・・それは武士の魂なんですけど
Sell it off? But that’s a samurai’s soul there…

― 魂なんてまた買えばいいじゃないですか
You can just buy another soul.

― ギャハハハハハハ!そーだよ 中古で買え 俺なんて通販で刀買ってんだよ!!
Gyahahahahaha! That’s right! Buy a used one! I even got mine through mail order!!

― えー お前 マジで仙人にもらったとか言ったなかった!?
Eh? Didn’t you tell me you got it from a hermit?!

― お前はグラサンな
You sell off your sunglasses.

― え
Eh?

― だから グラサン売ってこいって言ってんだよ
I’m telling you to sell off your sunglasses.

― たけーんだろ
It’s worth a lotta money, right?

― うわわわわ!!
Whoa whoa whoa!!

― ギャハハハハハ!貧乏なくせに見栄張って高いモン身につけてるから そーいう目にあうんだよ!
Gyahahahaha! It’s ‘cause you wear flashy stuff even though you’re broke that this kinda thing happens!
俺を見ろ!日頃質素に生きてるから失うものなんてなにも・・・
Take a look at me! I live like the broke person that I am so I’ve got nothing to lose!

― お前は無人契約機な
You fill out a welfare application.

― え
Eh?

― だから 無人契約機行って 金借りてこいっていってんだよ
Like I said, go fill out a welfare application. I’m telling you to borrow money.


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― ククク だから ガキが夜遊びなんて百年早ェつったんだよ
Heh heh heh. I told those brats they were 100 years too early to be playin’ at night.

― 引き際をしらねー ガキはこの街では生きていけねーのさ
Brats who don’t know when to quit won’t make it in this town.

― よし 財布もスッキリしたし 阿音ちゃん そろそろ お勘定を・・・
Alright, then! My wallet’s completely empty now. Ane-chan, ring up the cost for me.

― 何言ってんの?
What’re you sayin’?
財布は空でも口座は空じゃねーだろうが
Your wallet’s empty, but your bank account isn’t.

― 早く下ろしてこいよ 奥さんに全部バラすぞ
Hurry up and withdraw some money or I’ll rat you out to your wife.

― え
Eh?


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― うん! よく頑張った
Mm! Well done!

― 特別に二人とも合格
Under these special circumstances, you two pass.

― いい勝負だったわ
It was a good match.

― これからもこの店二人でもりあげていきましょうね
Let’s keep livening things up around here.

― 欲望の街 かぶき町 今宵も変わらず くり返される 男と女の愛憎模様 かりそめの夢としりつつ 抜けられぬ 馬鹿な男の悲しき性よ ああ 今日も朝日が 目にしみる
In the town of desires, Kabuki Town
This evening is also the same as any other
Repeating and never changing
Even though the men and women know
That their pattern of love and hate is just a fleeting dream
They can’t escape it
Such is the nature of these foolish men
Ahhh
Once again
The morning sun pierces their eyes today

― オイ なんか上に亦タなナレーション流れてるぞ
Hey. There’s some kinda weird narration above us.

― ごまかせると思ってるのか それで丸く収まると思ってるのか
You think you can fool us?! You think this makes up for everything?!
 

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― 何・・・では 松村 出川らもきゃつらに捕縛されたと
What?! Matsumura, Degawa, and the others have been arrested?!

txt:第七十五訓
Chapter 75

― うぬぬ・・・おのれ 真選組め
Nngh… Damn Shinsengumi!

― きけば あの桂 高杉らも連中の追随を恐れ 江戸より身を引いているとか
I heard even Katsura and Takasugi are leaving Edo because they’re afraid of them.

― 腰抜けどもが 己の身命を顧みず 国を救わんとする大和魂を忘れたか
The cowards! Have they forgotten the Yamato spirit that drives us to defend our country even in the face of death?

― だがそれは好機と見てよいのでは?
But doesn’t this seem like a good time to strike?

― 我ら八留虎三兄弟が今行動を起こせば 桂 高杉に先んじて攘夷党の先陣をきれるというもの
If we three Paruko brothers strike now, then we’ll be the first wave of attack for the Joui Faction, acting even before Katsura and Takasugi.

― しかし兄者 我等兄弟三人で真選組を潰せるのか?
But brother, can we really defeat the Shinsengumi with just the three of us?

― 特別警察などとうたったところで奴らはしょせんの出のにわか侍の集まり
Even though they’re supposedly a unique police force, they’re just a bunch of lowly young samurai.

― 奴らを統制する頭を砕けばただの烏合の衆となり果てるわ
If we take out their leader, then they’re nothing but a big mob.

― 的は真選組の頭脳・・・
Our target is the brains of the Shinsengumi…

― 鬼の副長こと土方十四郎
…the Demon Vice-Chief, Hijikata Toshiro.


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― 第七十五訓
似てる二人は喧嘩する
Chapter 75
Those Who Are Alike Will Fight


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― 親父
Hey, old man.

― いつもの頼む
Give me the usual.

― へい
Comin’ right up!

― アラ 土方さんが制服着てないところ初めて見たわ
Oh? This is the first time I’m seeing you without your uniform, Hijikata-san.

― 今日はオフだ
I’m off today.

― 一人モンはやることがなくていけねーよ
It's no good havin’ nothing to do when you’re alone, though.

― いたらいたでうっとしーもんですよ
It's better than having someone nag at you.

― そーか
Is that so?

txt1:・・・クク
Heh heh…

― やだよ アンタ!!
Don’t say that, dear!

txt2: 鬼の副長ともあろうものが
Even the Demon Vice-Chief…

txt3:スキだらけではないか
…lets his guard down sometimes.


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― これならば容易に始末できそうだ
Looks like this will be a piece of cake.

― いくか
Let’s do this!

― へい!
Here ya go!

― 土方スペシャル一丁!!
One order of the Hijikata Special!!

― ・・・うぷっ!!なっ・・・なんちゅうーもん食ってんだ
…Blurgh!! Wha…What the hell is he eating?!

― ウエッ 見てるだけで気持ち悪くなってきた
Ugh! I’m getting nauseous just watching him!

― へい!
Order up!

― 宇治銀時丼一丁!!
One order of the Uji Gintoki Bowl!!


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― ん
Hm?

― おいィィィィ!何 今度は小豆!?
Huuuuuhhhhh?! What the, this time they’re azuki beans?!

― ウオェッ 何だこの店は!?変な奴ばっかだ!!
Ugh! What’s with this restaurant?! It’s full of weirdos!!

― オイオイ ちょっと わりーんだけど
Hey, hey. You over there with the mayonnaise.
そちらのマヨネーズの方 席 外してもらえねーか?
Don’t mean to bother you, but couldja leave?

― そんなモン横でビチャビチャ食われたら食欲が失せるわ ねっ おじさん
My appetite’s shot with you slurping that down over there. Right, old man?

― え?俺?
Huh? Are you talking to me?

― だったらテメーが 席 外した方が得策じゃねーのか?
Then wouldn’t it be all good if you leave?

― ご飯に小豆かけて食うようないかれた味覚の奴に定食屋に来る資格はねェ ねっ おじさん
Someone who’s crazy enough to put azuki beans in his food shouldn’t be eating at a restaurant anyway. Right, old man?

― いや・・・あの・・・
Um…excuse me?

― 太鼓の昔から炭水化物と甘い物は合うとされているのをしらねーのか?
Don’tcha know that carbohydrates and sweets have gone together ever since the olden days?
あんパンしかりケーキしかりよォ ねっ おじさん
Just look at anpan* and cake. Right, old man?

*Bread filled with bean paste.

― え?いや しらないけど
Huh? Well, I wouldn’t know…

― 何を味わうにも まず それをひき立てるイレギュラーさが必要というのが わからんのか?
Don’t you know that whenever you’re seasoning something, you need a special ingredient to make it stand out?
塩気 酸味をきかせることで元ある食材の味がより引き立つんだ つまりマヨネーズだ ねっ おじさん
By adding something salty and sour to the mix, the flavor will stand out even more. That’s mayonnaise for you. Right, old man?

― いや・・・もうちょっと 俺にふらないでくれない 関係ないから
Uh, could you stop dragging me into this? It’s none of my business.


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― 俺の宇治銀時丼をお前の犬のエサと一緒にするなよ
Don’t lump my Uji Gintoki Bowl in with your dog food.
これはな 昔デザートと飯をバラバラに食うのがたるかったサンドイッチ将軍がつくり出した 由緒正しい食べ物なんだよ
The Sandwich Shogun made this dish when he was too lazy to eat his dessert and main course separately, y’know. This right here’s a historic meal.

― ねっ おじさん
Right, old man?

― いや 誰?サンドイッチ将軍って サンドイッチじゃないじゃん それご飯じゃん
Who the hell is the Sandwich Shogun?! And that’s no sandwich, that’s rice!

― それを言うなら俺のだってなァ 飯とマヨネーズバラバラに食うのがたるかった バルバロッサ将軍が・・・
Well, I’ll have you know that my dish was created by the Barbarossa* Shogun when he was too lazy to eat his mayonnaise and dinner separately.

*I think Barbarossa is a reference to a Japanese game called Barbarossa. It’s a strategy game set during WWII and the player’s a Nazi soldier.

― だから誰ェェ その将軍達は!?マヨネーズなんて別に必ずとらなきゃいけないものじゃないし!
Who the hell are these Shoguns?! Mayonnaise isn’t even something you have to eat with every meal!

― そんなに言うなら宇治銀時丼とお前の犬のエサスパシャルどっちが優れてるか食べ比べてみるか?
If that’s how it is, then why don’t we just compare an’ see which is better? My Uji Gintoki Bowl or your Dog Food Special?
ねっ おじさん
Right, old man?

― ねっ おじさんって 何 ちょっと まさか俺が・・・
Me again? Hey, hold on! You’re not trying to tell me to—

― 上等だ ねっ おじさん
Fine with me! Right, old man?

― 待てェェェ!全然 上等じゃないから!!何ィィ!?俺が食べるカンジになってんの!?
Hold it right there! It’s not fine at all! Whaaaat?! You’re going to make me be the judge?!

― 公正な判断は赤の他人じゃねーと下せんだろう そーいうことで ねっ おじさん
We gotta have a neutral outsider be the judge to be fair, right? That’s how it’s gotta be. Right, old man?

― 頼むわ ネおじさん
We’re counting on you, Right-Old-Man.

― ネおじさんって何!?なんか名前みたいに・・・うごっ・・・ムガモゴ
Who are you calling “Right-Old-Man”?! Don’t just go making up names for me—Urp! Bluuurgghh!

― どうだ ネオジサン 俺のがうまいだろ?アレ?ネおじさん?
Well, Right-Old-Man? Mine’s good, right? Huh? Right-Old-Man?

― ネおじさァァァん!!
Right-Old-Maaaaannn!!


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― ・・・チッ 思わぬ邪魔が入ったな
Tch! Looks like an unexpected bump in the road showed up.

― 兄者 なんだったんだ あの白髪頭?
Brother, who was that White Head?

― わからん
No idea.

― まァ いい 次郎 次はお前がいけ
Well, whatever. Jiro, you go this time.

― しくじるなよ
Don’t mess this up.

― あー 気分が悪い
Man, I’m not feeling too good.

― よりによって休日に嫌な野郎と合っちまった
Of all days, I had to run into a guy I hate on my day off.

Sign:となりのペドロ
My Neighbor Pedro*

*Parody of Hayao Miyazaki’s movie, “My Neighbor Totoro”.

― 映画見て気分変えようと思ったが
I was thinking of watching a movie to get out of this funk, but…

― ガキ向けか・・・見る気しねーな
A kid’s movie? Doesn’t sound too appealing…

― ペドロォォォ お願い 力を貸してェェ!!
Pedrooooo! Please, help meeee!!

― お静が・・・妹が迷子になって・・・あの子 きっと一人で泣いてるわ!!私 どうしていいかわからないの!!
My…My little sister, Oshizu, got lost… And I’m sure she’s crying all by herself somewhere…!! I don’t know what I should do!!


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― アレ・・・警察とか電話したか お前
Oh, man… Did you call the police or anything?

― お願い ペドロ!!
Please, Pedro!!

― ウチ 今 電話とめられてるからなァ
But my house phone’s been cut off, so…

― お願い ペドロ!!
Please, Pedro!!

― お前ら でも アレだな 困った時だけペドロペドロってさァ 調子いいよね
こないだサ ウチ ピンポンダッシュしてったろ?おじさん しってんだからな 全部
Y’know, you guys only come yelling “Pedro, Pedro!” when you’re in trouble. And the other day, you guys played Ding Dong Dash on me, didn’t you?! I know all about it!

― だまれ ペドロ!!
Shut it, Pedro!!

― コラ!!大人に何てこというんだ!コラッ!!
Hey, now!! Watch your mouth when you’re speaking to your elders!!

― やられたよ
Man, I was wrong…

― 大人の鑑賞にもたえうる映画だ いや大人にこそ 見てほしい映画だ
It’s a movie that appeals to adults too. No, it’s a movie that adults should watch.

― どこで泣いてんだ?
What’s he crying about?

― だが この暗がりなら仕事もしやすいわ
But with this darkness, my job’s going to be easier.

― 後ろからズブリと
I can stab him from behind and—

― オイ
Hey!

― オイ そこの!
Hey, you up there!

― グスグスグスグス うるせーよ 全然きこえねーよ
Stop with all the sniffling! I can’t hear a thing!

― 今 ペドロ なんつったんだ ピンポンダッシュが何?
What did Pedro say just now? What about the Ding Dong Dash?


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― あっ すまねェ ペドロはな どうやらあの娘にピン・・・!
Oh. My bad. Seems like that girl was playing Ding—

― まァァァァた テメーかァァァ!!
You agaaaiinnn?!
なんだ てめェェ!俺の行く所 行く所現れやがって!!
What’s with you, showing up wherever I go?!

― こっちのセリフだ ボケェ!なんだ?友達になりたいのか?友達になりたいのか?
That’s my line, idiot! What, you wanna be pals?! You wanna be pals or somethin’?!

― アホかァァ!!なーんか後ろでポップコーンもっさもっさうるせー奴がいると思ったら!出て行け!スグ出て行け!
Are you the idiot?! And here I was thinking there was some guy behind me munching on his popcorn really loud! Get outta here! Get outta here right now!

― うるせェェェ!!歯の裏側についたポップコーンとるのに夢中になってたらなァ
Shut up!! I was going crazy tryin’ to pick popcorn outta my teeth!

― もう映画の内容についていけなくなってたんだよ!もう訳わかんねーんだよ!もう俺にはポップコーンしかねーんだよォ!!
Now I dunno what the movie is about anymore! Now I dunno what’s going on anymore! Now all I’ve got left is popcorn!!

― ぶっ
Agh!

― ちょっ!!
Hey—!!

― 侍のくせに んな うわついたモン食ってるからそんな事に なんだ バカかてめーは! ポップコーンみてーな頭しやがって!
You had it coming, eating stuff like that even though you’re a samurai! Are you an idiot, having such a popcorn-like head?!

― はじけるのは頭だけにしとけ!
I hope your head pops open!

― ふべらっ
Gah!

― マヨラー侍に言われたくねーんだよ!!そのピッタリヘアー どうやってんセットしたんだ!?マヨネーズでセットしてんじゃねーの!?
I don’t wanna hear that from a Mayo Samurai!! And just how did you get your hair so neat like that?! Didja put mayonnaise in that too?!

― いだだだだ!ちょっ 痛いって!!
Ow ow ow ow! Hey—That hurts!!

― 表出ろコラ!墓前には何をそなえてほしい 小豆か?ポップウコーンか?
You wanna take this outside?! Whaddya want me to offer at your grave?! Azuki beans or popcorn?!

― オイぃぃ!!おめーら うるせーんだよ!!
Hey! You guys are making a ruckus!!

― ケンカなら外でやりやがれ!迷惑なんだよ!
If you’re gonna fight, do it outside! You’re bothering the rest of us!


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― なんだテメーら?昼間から こんなクソ映画見やがって暇人どもが 働け
・・・と この編笠が言ってました
What’s with you guys? If you have the time to be watchin’ this stinkin’ movie, then get your asses to work, you slackers!...is what this guy with the hat said.

― はァ!?
Huh?!

― こっちはイライラしてんだ かかって来いや ・・・とも言ってました
I’m all pissed off now, so come at me!...is what he also said.

― 待てェ!!なんで俺が
Wait!! Why would I say that?!

― 上等だコラァァ!!
Sounds good to me!!
― やっちまえェ!!
Get ‘em!!

― いだだだだ!!ちょっと待ってェェ!俺は関係な・・・
Ow ow ow ow!! Hold on a minute! I’ve got nothing to do with—

― しめた
All right!

― この混乱に乗じてしとめられ・・・
I’ll take advantage of the confusion and kill—


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― みなさーん
Everyone~

― 映画は
Let’s all sit down…

― 静かに見ましょう
and watch the movie quietly.

― ・・・泣けるね この映画
Such a touching movie…


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― お・・・おのれェェェ 土方とあの白髪頭めェ
Hijikata and White Head, you bastards!

― 次こそは必ずしとめる
I’ll definitely get you this time!

― 弟たちの敲きだ
I’ll avenge my brothers!

― なんで休日にこんなに疲れなきゃならねーんだ
Why do I hafta get so tired on my day off?

― 行くとこ行くとこ あの野郎に出くわしちまう
That bastard keeps showing up one place after another.

― 認めたくねーが
I don’t wanna admit it, but…

― どうやら俺と奴の思考は似通っているらしい
seems like the both of us think alike.

Sign:  健康ランド
Health Land

― ああ ひとつ風呂浴びてマツサージチェアで昼寝してー気分だ だがだまされんぞ 俺が今 そう考えているということは
Man, I feel like taking a bath and then napping in a massage chair. But I won’t fall for it again! If I’m thinking like this now, then that guy’s probably thinking the same thing.

― 恐らく奴もそう考えている つまり逆をついて 俺が今全く行きたくない所へ行けばいい・・・と 奴は考えていそうなので 俺はさらにその逆をついてストレートに健康ランドに行けばいいと思います・・・アレ?作文?とか奴は考えているので
I’ll do the opposite and go to a place that I don’t really want to go to…is what that guy’s thinking. So then I’ll to do the opposite of that and go straight to Health Land…Huh? An essay?...is what that guy’s thinking or something like that.


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― 俺はその逆の逆だァァァ!!
I’ll do the opposite of that opposite!!

― ・・ひ~じか~たく~ん
Hiii~jikaaa~ta-kuuuun.

― いい加減にしてくれよ
Cut it out already, will ya?

― 俺はなァァ 俺が行こうとする所はまたお前が来てんじゃねーかと思って逆に行きたくない所に行こうと思ったけど
Y’know, I was thinking that you were gonna show up where I was going again, so then I thought of doing the opposite and going to a place I didn’t wanna go.
お前のために行きたくもねー所に行くのは嫌だったので自分に素直に行きます・・・アレ?作文?とか思ってここに来たらこの様かァァ!!
But I didn’t wanna go to a place I didn’t wanna go just ‘cause of you so I went wherever I wanted to… Huh? An essay?...is what I was thinking so I came here, but yet this mess happens!!

― チクショウ 「アレ作文?」しか合ってねーじゃねーか お前の思考を深読みした俺がバカだった
Shit. So the only thing I got right was the “Huh? An essay?” part? I was a moron for reading into your thoughts too much.

― ・・・まァ いい これだけ 顔 合わしちまうのも何かの縁かもしれなェ
Ah, screw it. Seeing you here again might be some kinda fate or something.

― とりあえず 出ていけ
Anyways, get outta here.

― なんで俺がお前の指図を受けなきゃならねーんだ
Why should I listen to you?

― 出ていくならお前が出ていけ
If anyone’s leaving, it should be you.


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― オイオイ お前は小学生か?
Hey, hey. Are you in grade school?
俺はこうして顔つき合わせてるとどうせまた喧嘩になるから顔合せねーでいこうと 至極大人の意見を言ったんだよ
We’re gonna end up fighting again if we’re face-to-face, so it’ll be fine as long as we don’t see each other. It’s a very mature way to handle this.

― だからテメーが出てけばいいだろ
Then if you leave, it’s all good.

― だからお前それを言うなよ!!俺 今出てこうと思ってたのにお前に言われてから出てったらお前に従った事になんだろーが!もう出れねーだろーが!察しろよガキ!
I don’t want you telling me that!! I was just thinking of leaving, but if I do that now, it’ll look like I listened to you! I can’t leave anymore! Think about how I feel, ya brat!

― うるせー!!オメーもガキだろーが!!
Shut up! You’re also a brat!!

― 言っとくけどテメーが出るまで俺は出ねーぞ
Just to let you know, I’m not leaving until you do.

― ふざけんな オレも出ねーぞ
Don’t give me that crap. I’m not leaving either.

― クク
Heh heh.

― 二人 バカなところも似ているようだな
Looks like those two share their stupidity too.

― そこで意地を張り合っているがいい
Go ahead and fight all you want in there.
Sign: 清掃中
“Closed for Cleaning”

― ひからびるまでな
Until you dry up, that is.

― オイ・・・いい加減にしとけよ
Hey… You don’t have to push yourself so hard, you know.

― お前 全身 汗だくじゃねーか 脱水症状でぶっ倒れるぞ 俺は大丈夫だけど
Aren’t you all sweaty now? You’ll faint from dehydration, I tell you. But I’m still doing okay over here.

― そんな ヤワじゃねーんだよ
I’m not that weak.

― お前こそ 笑顔がひきつってるぞ 水飲みてーだろ?俺は大丈夫だけど
I should be telling you that. Your smile’s all twitching, y’know. You want some water, right? But I’m still doing okay.

― いや お前より俺の方が大丈夫だ
No, I’m doing better than you.

― いや お前の大丈夫より俺の大丈夫の方がデカイ
No, my okay is way more better than your okay.


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― そんな事ぬかしてるが本当はしんどいのはわかってんだ
You say that, but I can tell you’re having a tough time.
テメーのハラは読めてるんだよ
I can see right through you, you know.

― バカ言っちゃイカンよ 俺はサウナ大好きだからね 蒸すのが大好きでね
Don’t be stupid. I love saunas. I love steaming.

― こないだもね 新八達に蒸しパンつくってやったら 引いてたね 凝り過ぎたね
Just recently, I steamed some bread for Shinpachi and the others, but then I over-steamed it.

―なんなら もっと室温あげるか?
How ‘bout I turn up the heat?
俺ァ もっと 熱いのが好きなんだよ
I like it much hotter, y’know.

― なァ なにィィィィ さらに室温を上昇させやがった
Wh-Whaaattt?! He’s making it even hotter!

― 足りねーよ
Not enough.

― バケツの水全部いれろ
Just dump the whole bucket of water in.

― あっ あいつらバカか お前らとじこめられてんだよ こっから もう出れないんだよ
Are you stupid?! You guys are locked in! You won’t be able to get out anymore!

― あ・・・あああああ ご・・・極楽だぜい
A…Aaahhhh… T-This is heaven…

― いや ホントに極楽いっちゃうから!
Um, I think you’re really going to heaven!

― ア・・・アドレナリンがものっそいことになってるな やっぱり命のやりとりってのはいいもんだ
I-I’m totally pumped up now. Nothing like putting your life on the line!

― 無理すんなよ そろそろ意識朦朧としてんじゃねーの?俺の姿も見えなくなってんじゃねーの?
Don’t push yourself too hard! Aren’t you just about to lose consciousness? You can’t even see me anymore, can ya?

― 降参しちゃえよ 言っとくけど 俺はしないよ いやっ ホント
Give it up already! Just to let you know, I’m not gonna give up. Yeah, seriously!

― オイぃぃぃぃ 誰としゃべってんの!?誰としゃべってんの!?
Heeeyyyy! Who are you talking to?! Just who are you talking to?!

― クク そろそろ限界のようだな
Heh heh. Looks like you’re about to reach your limit too.

― アレ 全然 このタバコ味しねーぞ
Huh? This doesn’t taste like a cigarette at all.

― それタバコじゃねーから!!
Because that’s not a cigarette!!


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― オメーよォォ!ホント マジいい加減にしてくんない!?
When are you going to stop this already?!

― なに?なんなのお前は!?こんな所で死ぬつもりかァ?こんな下らん意地の張り合いで!?
What’s with you?! Are you planning to die here?! All for this stupid fight of stubbornness?!

― お前みたいな奴でも死んだら悲しむ奴がいっぱいいるの!それでも降参しないなんてそれはエゴだよ バカヤローだよお前は!!
Even someone like you has people who’d be sad if he died! If you’re not gonna give up, then it’s just your ego! You’re a complete moron!!

― 悪いこたァ言わねェ 降参しろって!頼むから 三千円あげるから!!
I won’t be mean about it! Just give up! I’m begging you! I’ll give you 3000 yen*!!

*3000 yen is about 30 dollars.

― 三千円で誰が動くかァァ!!
As if someone would move for that much money!!

― なんて・・・
What…

― なんてバカな奴らなんだ
What a bunch of fools!

― でも なんでだ こんなバカな奴らなのに
But for some reason…even though they’re such fools…

― なんでこんなに胸が・・・
For some reason, I’m moved by them…

― 国のために命を駆ける俺達攘夷志士
We of the Jouishishi risk our lives for the country.

― こんな下らんことにも命を掛けられる男達
And yet these guys are here risking their lives for something so petty.

― そこに違いなんて・・・
There’s no difference…

― オイ
Hey.

― フフ・・・ったく
Heh heh… Man.

― たいした野郎だよテメーは
You sure are something.

― 参ったよ
I give up.

― どうやらこの勝負・・・
Seems like this match…


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― 俺の負けらしい
…is my loss.

― オイッ!
Hey!

― すっすまねーが
S-Sorry ‘bout this, but…

― 万事屋の連中に・・・伝えてくれねーか?
Can you tell my buddies at the Yorozuya...

― あばよって・・・
…“goodbye” for me?

― てめェ・・・
You bastard…

― 俺ァ 面倒は御免だ
That’s too much trouble for me.

― こいつァ 自分で伝えるんだな
Go tell them yourself.

― できん
I can’t do it.

― 俺にあんな熱い男達を殺すことは・・・できん
To kill such passionate men…I can’t do it.


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― おいィィィィお前ら!!
Hey, you guys!!

― 早く出てこい!!
Hurry up and get out of here!

― なーんてなァ
 甘ェんだよテメーは!
As if! You let your guard down, bastard!!

― くらいやがれェ!!
Eat this!!

― 何ィ!?
What?!

― テメーのハラは読めてるって言っただろーがァァ!!
I already told you that I can see right through you!!


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― うおおおお!!
Uoooooo!!

― ぶはっ!!
Guh!!

― ぐえぶ!!
Argghh!!

Small txt: いでででで
Ow ow ow ow!

― チッ引き分けか
Tch! A tie, huh?

― いや オメーの方が絶対先に出てた
No, you definitely came out first.

― いや オメーの方が
No, it was you.

― ん
Hm?

― あり?
Huh?

― 誰だコイツ・・・
Who’s this guy?
 
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Trinity Blood Special

I'd like to have a translation check of the whole chapter, please.

RAW


01
txt:未だカムバックの声高き、「夜の女王」編のキャラ再び!!
Due to popular demand, the characters from the “Queen of the Night” arc return!!

― そのころ帝国では。
We will meet at the Empire when the time comes.

txt2:外伝
Side Story
おばあさまといっしょ
Together with Grandmother


02
― ずああああああッ
Grraaaaawwwrrr!

txt:久々登場!のイオンとバイバルスですか・・・?
Ion and Baibars return to the stage after a long time…?


03
― ―――甘い!
Too weak!

― が!!
Gah!!

― ―――っ
Kkhh…

― まッ
I…
まだまだァ!!
I’m not finished yet!!

― っ どせえええい
Hyaaaaaaaaaahhh!!

― ぐげッ
Guh!
なっ
Wha—

― なんのッ
What?!

― うぅ
Ugh!

― いま少し脇を締められませ イオン様
Your side is wide open, Master Ion!


04
― くッ!!
Kuh!!

― は――っ
*Pant*

― ぜ―― ぜ―――
*Pant pant*

― 悪い癖が出ておりますぞ イオン様
You’re developing a bad habit, Master Ion.

― むやみに正面から打ち込めばよいというものではないと申し上げたはず
It’s not good to keep charging blindly into the front all the time.

― それと加速(ヘイスト)を使いすぎです
You’re also accelerating too much.
少し休まれた方がよろしいかと
I believe it’d be best for you to rest for a while.

― こう連日 修業続きでは御公務にも障りましょう・・・
We should suspend your training and palace duties…
ミルカ様もご心配されます
Lady Mirka is worried about you.

― 無用!!
Nonsense!!
続けてくだされ バイバルス殿
Continue with the training, Sir Baibars!

bx:バビロン伯 シェラザード・アル・ラフマンが外(アウター)で死んだ。
Shahrazad Al Rahman of the Babylon Empire died in the Outer World.


05
bx: 討ち取ったのは
The one who killed her…
そなたの仰せではたしか 余は
I’m sure I told you before…

― 「もう百年励めばまっとうな遣い手になれる」と―――
“If I work hard for a century, then I’ll be able to become stronger”.

bx2: 聖女エステル
…was Lady Saint Esther.

txt: 余は知っている。それは嘘じゃ。絶対に。
But I know. I know that’s a complete lie.

bx3: ただひとつ真実なのは
The one and only truth is that…

bx4:エステルは今もあの野蛮な外(アウター)で一人戦っているということ
Esther is fighting that savage Outer World by herself right now.

― それでは遅すぎる故!
But it’ll be too late by then!

― 余はこうして
So for now…
そなたに胸を借りておるのじゃ バイバルス殿!
I’ll just have to keep sparring with you, Sir Baibars!

bx5: いつかまた会おうと約束した あの娘は―――
That girl promised we’d meet again someday.

― ―――承知!
Understood!

bx6:ならばせめて余は!
The least I could do…


06
bx1:強くならねば
…is get stronger…

bx2:一日も早く!!
…as soon as I can!!

― ・・・らッ?
…Huh?

― あ
Oh!

― いけない 力を少々
This isn’t good!

― 込めすぎた・・・
He used a bit too much power…
あっちゃ―――
Oh, my…


07
― ・・・むー・・・
Hmm…
・・・とはいえ この軽すぎる体重がな・・・
My body is too light, isn’t it…?
やはり余にもそなたのような筋肉が必要だろうか・・・
I need to get muscles like you…

― そもそもその大きな剣がズルイぞ
But it’s unfair that you use such a big sword in the first place.

― いえッ
Not at all.
イオン様は帝国きっての脚(スピード)をお持ち故 それを生かすべきかと小官は・・・
You are the fastest person in the Empire, Master Ion. You should use your speed to your advantage.

― これ イオン バイバルス
Ion, Baibars.

― はいッ
Yes?

― よいことを思いついたぞよ
I have a very good idea!

― 近うよれ。
Come here!


08
― ・・・祖母様 ミルカ様
Grandmother…//Lady Mirka…
・・・これは・・・
What is this about…?

― うん。深い意味はない。
Oh, nothing really.

― 強いていえば イオン
If anything,
そなたの着地があまりに見事だったのでのう
I was inspired by your splendid landing, Ion!
バイバルスはそのついでじゃ。
You should do it next, Baibars.

― ささ!続けよ続けよ
Come, come! Please do continue!

― ・・・その・・・
Um…
・・・このままで・・・?
Wearing this…?

― ん?
Hm?

― あぁ イエ!!
Uh…it’s nothing!!

― 引き続きご指南をバイバルス殿!!
Please continue with the training, Sir Baibars!!

― 承知!!
Of course!!

txt:ミルカ最強・・・。
Mirka’s the strongest of them all…
 
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