Belmonde le VisiteuR 4

Thanks for waiting folks, I'm finally free again. I should be able to keep up weekly from now on. Taking a look at the releases, it looks like i'll be doing Belmonde and Claymore as my personal projects. Everything else will either be by request or if I'm reading it and I don't see a translation already up.

I'll be translating this chapter as I go since I'm in the middle of things, so if it's not done come back later. After this I'll do claymore extra 2.

This time, I'm trying to mimic the style of narration, let me know if it's a little too much.

BTW - I changed the name crowe to Chloe

01
とある夕刻気づくと彼はいつものほの暗い場所に来ていた
ある人物への呪詛の言葉を何万回と叫んだ場所だ
-It was one day, after night had fallen, that he retreated to his usual abode
-It was a place that he called down evil day after day upon one certain man...

だがこの夜は珍しく（彼にとっては本当に珍しいことなのだが）幸福な気持ちに満たされていた
-But this night was unusual (well, everything about him is unusual), because it was filled with a very happy air

ようやくこの日が来た
ベルモンド
さんざん苦しめられたお前を
-Belmonde...
-You've made me suffer unspeakable things
-But the day has at last arrived...

ついに殺すことが出来る
-That I can finally kill you!

まずはあの五人衆に役割を果たしてもらうとしょう・・・
長い夜が始まろうとしていたーー
-I just need those five to carry out their part first...
-Looks like tonight is going to be a long one--

left: 極秘の存在である彼を知る男！！
-Why does this man know of belmonde?!

02
right: 謎の男の命により5人が迫る！
-Under that mysterious man's command, 5 men are closing in!

修道院Ｒ。ＳＴ。Ｍ正面
Outside Rivière Saint Michel

こいつらってホントにあのリシュリウ親衛隊だったのか？
ああ　間違いない　馬車で囚人の搬送をしているらしい
ルマスクからの情報では4人のはずだが一人足りないな・・・まだ中にいるんだろう
-Were these guys really part of Richelieu's defense squad?
-No doubt about it, they were part of the convoy transporting prisoners
-According to Lemasque's intelligence, there was supposed to be four, but we're one short...he's probably inside

世に名高いリシュリウの親衛隊も俺たちが相手じゃこのざまが
もう少し早くパリに戻っていれば・・・
-You mean this is the level of Richelieu's precious squad? They're no match for us
-If only you guys had returned to Paris sooner,

殺されることもなかったのになぁ
-You might have lived to see tomorrow

第四幕　来襲する男達
The 4th Act - surprise assault

03
どうだ　ロラン　うまいもんだろ？
-Well, Roland, what'ya think?
small: It's Celine

はーあ！！セリーヌ様なんという破廉恥なポーズを・・・
ちょっとベル様！似顔絵は頼みましたけど私あんなポーズとってませんよ！！
脱いでもないし！
そうだったか？
-AAAAH! What have you done to mademoiselle Celine?!
-Wha--m-Monsieur BELLE!! I might have asked you to draw my picture but I didn't ask for that pose!!
-Or my clothes missing!!
-Oh, really?

気に入らないなら破り捨てるまでだ
ああ！もったいない！
-Well if you don't want it I guess I'll just have to trash it
-STOP!! That'd be a waste!!

なんだ欲しいのかロラン
このムッツリすけべか
このエロエロ親衛隊！
うわああ！何を言ってるんだ僕は！！
-What, you want it Roland?
-Didn't know you were into this kind of stuff
-You perv!!
-UWAAH!! What are you talking about?! I just--!

04
この絵を見る限りたいした体じゃないわね
私に比べれば
-Looking at this figure, you don't have much to offer
-Compared to me, that is

！！なによ！！クロエ！
ベル様の助手にしてもらえたからって調子にのるんじゃないわよ！！
-!! What did you say, Chloé !!
-Just because Monsieur Belle let you become his assistant doesn't give you the right to act so cocky!

私の方が絶対いい体よ！
ほら
ほら
-I'm way better!!
see?
see?

セ・・・
セリーヌ様貴族令嬢がそのようなまねは
どう？
負けを認めなさい
-M-
-Mademoiselle Celine!! This is not the way a noble should conduct herself...
-See!?
-Now admit your defeat!

あらこんなことに桃が
もいでベルに食べさせてあげよう
きゅあ！
-Oh, you mean these tiny peaches?
-I'll pick them so master Belle has something to eat
-kyaa!

ちょっと話しなさいよ！
あらこの桃なかなか取れないわ
二人とももっと仲良く
-S-stop it! Let go!
-Oh my, they seem to be stuck on tight...
-hahaha!!
bottom right: P-please...play nice, you two...

05
なんか随分とにぎやかになったね
ジョルジュどうしたこんな遅くに
差し入れさ
仕事が終わった頃だろうと思って
-Seems like you're having a party down here
-What brings you down here this late, George?
-Refreshments!
-I thought you might have been done with work, so...

small: a carrot...

長い付き合いだがお前が死にたがってるとは知らなかったぞ
はは冗談冗談ほらパンとミルク
-I've known you for quite a while but I never knew you wanted to die so young
-Haha it was a joke...see? I have bread and milk too

でもベルッちの周りがこんなににぎやかになるなんて
あの頃は創造もできなかったな
-Still, hard to believe it's so lively around you, Belluchi
-I would've never imagined it back then

フン
hmph

06
ガキの頃はこの地下室に閉じ込められた私に会いに来るのは
アンドレ副院長とお前だけだったな
small: でさ・・・その親父様が実はオカマって話でね
そうだ
僕ら3人は親子のようなもんさ
-When I was a kid, the only ones who came to see me
-Were you and Andre
small: oh, did'ya know? They say the old man's actually gay! (t/n - what the heck are they talking about?!)
-Yeah
-We were like family

副院長には怒鳴られた記憶とどつかれた記憶しかないだな
はは僕には優しいおじさんって感じだったけどね
-All I can remember is the Abbot screaming and kicking my ass
(t/n - ZOMG best word ever http://tinyurl.com/2fjyq7)
-Haha, I always thought that was his way of showing he cared

あの頃から・・・私にほんの少しでも人間らしい部分が身についたとするなら・・・
-Ever since back then, if there was one person I had to attribute to giving me a single ounce of humanity

-it would have to be you, George

07
(note - sorry, it's talking too long to type the script. Unless it's a special/complex sentence I'm going to just trans from here out)

-Oh, knock it off, saying something that isn't like you
-Did something bad happen to make you say that?

-After all, you don't have a single ounce of humanity in you
-just kidding

-you may be right
-Ops, looks like I said too much (the small txt is a chuckling sfx)

-Well, I'm off to bed
-Later

食いしん坊のクロエが一人でパンを食べつくそうと！
-Monsieur Belle!! Chloé's being a pig and trying to eat all the bread!!
-glug
-glug
-Oh--now she's downing the milk in one breath!
-S-so fast!!
-Roland!! Quit staring and stop her!!

box: 五人衆”ティフォ”　頭 ゴシィスマ
The 5-man band "teifuo"/leader - goshiisuma
(t/n - help! names! what are they? likely french...any ideas on the code name there and what it means?)
-All right, let's go have a look
-According to Lemasque, somewhere inside this cloister
-Is that "Belmonde" guy

08 - here's their names for future reference
ドドルワ - Droidroite (it's like saying le-left)
ゴゴーシュ - Gaugauche (and ri-right)
ブッチ - pucchi
バレアー - Balaiar

-so that means the first ones to find him and kill him
-are the ones who'll get Lemasque's reward, right?
right: Gaugauche
left: Droidroite

-o-ooh, so this is "first come-first serve"??　”早し者勝ち”
-I just learned that word!
box: pucchi

-Obviously, you retard
-Anyway, if we wake the friars it's going to get messy
-Best to do this as quietly as possible
-We should treat this like an assassination
box: Balaiar

-Since Lemasque is willing to pay that much for this job,
-it's best not to let your guard down
-You mean he'll be stronger than Richelieu's squid?!
-SQUAD you idiot, it's SQUAD

-...Argh!!
-I got blood on my shirt!
lower right: Tiny spot
俺としたことが！！
-There's no way I did this! (t/n - not sure)

09
-Damn you!! Spewing your germs on me!
-C-calm down, Balaiar! You gotta fix that tamper!
-It's TEMPER, not tamper!! (潔癖）
-Just keep your mouth shut, dumbass!

-All right, everyone

-The race is on!! (競争）

-Ww-wait up!!

10
-Hey Roland, what'ya think of this one? (small - it's Chloé )
left - uhuhuhuu!!

-Please stop this!!
-Absolutely not! I won't look!
-GUWAH!! C-Chloé...
-W-what!! Chloé!!
-Did you really pose for that!?
-I wonder...

-Well, if it's for master Belle,
-there's no pose I can't make

-Eeeek!! Monsieur Belle!! Can I live here too!?
-You can't. We already have Camus. There's no more room for pets
-Meow
-Who're you calling a pet!?

11
-Ha ha...Chloe has quite a mean side doesn't she? 腹黒い

-That's why my name is CH-LO-e (T/N - KU-RO-e, pun on previous line. haraguroi = mean, kuro (dark) sounds like the latter part of the word)
-Really??
-Nope
-Nngggh!! (sfx of frustration, swap for something better?)

-Well then, I will be taking my leave
-Me too
-After those two interrogations, I'm pretty worn out from using my magic

-But Roland, let me ask you something
-Who's the guy that's been standing over there?

-huh?

-...w-WHO ARE YOU--!?

12
-I hate filth so much...I'm always having to clean up here and there
ついた通り名が”ほうき・Ａ”ってんだ
-That's why my name's Balaiar (t/n - here's the line that hints about his name. the text there is "broom - A". In french the word is Balai + A. So is his name spelled balaiar)
-I'm so pissed off that I got my clothes dirty

-In fact, it made me so upset that I threw that shirt away
-Oh...another stubborn stain...
(all these little bubbles say something like "scrub")
-Finally!
-Now I'm feeling a lot better

ここに一番乗りてきたからな！！
-Because it looks like I got to you first!!

13
-Mademoiselles Chloe, Celine...Please stay back!!

-Not you! I want the guy behind you...
-BELMONDE---!!

-Looks like this man is more than just a petty thief!! こそ泥

-Hou...there's people who've heard of me in the outside world?
-I'd love to hear the details about that

14
-Wh-WHAT THE!!

-Are you insane?! Isn't that guy your ally?

-GASP GASP
前置き位してください！
-Monsieur Belmonde!! Couldn't you at least give me a warning or something?!
-I'm going to stab you from behind
-TOO LATE NOW!!

15
-Wh--what!? What the hell happened?!

-Why do you know about me?
-And why are you here?
-I have a lot of questions I want to ask you...

-That's right...Belmonde, as well as this torture chamber, are part of the country's top secrets. We protect it with our lives
-So from what source was this information leaked?!

-But I'm guessing you aren't going to give me the answers so easily

-I know! You said you hate dirt, right?
-I just thought of the perfect way to make you confess

16
-Hey, Chloe, could you please go get the thing that comes out often from the storeroom?
-Yes

-What "thing"?

-I don't get this guy...what was it Lemasque said about him again?
-Ah, whatever...after all, the one who's going to get the reward...

-IS ME!!

17
-Rea-dy? un deux trois
-un deux trois

-Damn!! I can't tell where the heck he's swinging!!
-More importantly...

18
-What the hell is going on!?!

19
-Heru I gosh it risch ere (Belle, I got it right here)
-squeak/squeak
-Oh, good job! small: I'll pet him later

EEK!! small - that's a...!
small left: Why's it in her teeth?!

-R-R-RAT!?!

left text: What torture lies in store?!

-Well then, I've got the perfect torture for a clean freak like you
-We're going to play a little life-staking game here with the filthiest thing in the world
-squeak

The 4th act/end
next time: Balaiar screaming at the top of his lungs! Fear leads to even greater fear...!

-end-

Thanks for everyone's help/suggestions!