Hakuouki Jurenka 2

My suggested changes are bolded. Like last time, good job!
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1.

Text 1: He doesn’t

Text 2: have much time left…

Text 3:
Hakuoki Jurenka
Mysterious Tale of the Shinsengumi

Text 4:
Artist: Shinohara Hana
General Editing: Idea Factory, Design Factory

2.

Matsumoto: I’ll say this as a doctor. // You’re suffering from tuberculosis.

Okita: Hmm…? // It’s that well-known fatal disease, after all…?

Matsumoto: Yes…aren’t you surprised?

3.

Okita: It’s my own body… // I always had a bad feeling about it.

Box 1: Tuberculosis…

Box 2: A fatal disease…

Text 1: Okita-san…

Text 2: is going to die?

4.

Matsumoto: It’s nothing to laugh about. / You should leave the Shinsengumi and go to recuperate soon. // You should go somewhere with fresh air and eat something healthy. / You’ve got to take it easy…

Okita: I can’t do that. // You see…that would mean leaving the Shinsengumi, right?

Matsumoto: Why do you want to be here so much?

Okita: Whether my life is long or short, // there’s not much I can do.

5.

Okita: Killing the enemies that stand in the way of the Shinsengumi… / That’s all I can do. // If I don’t have much time, then that’s even more so. // Being here is everything to me.

6.

Okita: Chizuru-chan, come out from there. // You’re there, aren’t you? // Alright, come over here.

Chizuru: Excuse me…

7.

Okita: Why are you sitting so far away?

Chizuru: Eh…but…

Okita: Even if tuberculosis is contagious, / that still upsets me…

Chizuru: It’s not like that!

8.

Chizuru: Ah…

Okita: Could it be that you took what Matsumoto-sensei said seriously? // Do I look like I have a strange illness? // You won’t tell anyone about this silly thing, will you? // If you do intend to tell someone, // then maybe I’ll have to kill you…

9.

Text 1: My chest…

Text 2: Why does it feel like this?

Text 3: Even though there’s so much I want to ask…

Okita: Come to think of it, maybe that medicine // could cure my illness?

Chizuru: That can’t be… // Okita-san…

Okita: You know about it after all? / What that medicine really is…

10.

Box 1: My father’s research

Box 2: It was a secret order from the Bakufu to increase the Shinsengumi’s power in battle.

Box 3: The “Ochimizu” creates humans with the powers of demon gods and the ability to heal themselves.

Box 4: Once someone uses it, they will be tormented by a terrible pain.

Box 5: Eventually they’ll become a monster with an insane desire for blood.

11.

Okita: Of course I’m not going to drink it. // You must have seen it too, / it was a complete failure that the Shinsengumi couldn’t control. // It’s meaningless if I go mad… / Completely meaningless…

Chizuru: Meaningless?

Okita: If I’m no use to the Shinsengumi, // then my existence is worthless.

Chizuru: What are you talking about…?

Okita: Hey…

12.

Okita: I don’t think // you should be involved with me anymore.

Chizuru: Eh…?

Okita: If I become unable to move because of my illness, then I won’t be much help looking for your father. // I’m no use to you anymore, right? // So, you should…

13.

Chizuru: No!

Okita: Ah… / Did I hear that correctly?

Chizuru: I said… / No! // I… // I… / Your being useful isn’t the reason I want you by my side!

14.

Okita: Be by your side…? // …Hmm

Chizuru: No…you see…

Okita: Hmm? // Are you saying that’s not right?

15.

Chizuru: I can’t abandon you… // Not that I really understand it myself…

Box 1: I’m worried…

Box 2: Really worried…

Okita: You’re a strange girl.

16.

Okita: If you insist… // then you can do what you like…

Chizuru: Yes! // I’ll do that!

17.

Okita: Thank you

Text 1: He understood that being destroyed was his fate

Text 2: and even accepted the cruelty of that.

Text 3: I didn’t understand his being like that.

18.

Text 1: But

Text 2: Why does my chest feel so tight?

Text 3: Am I really that afraid of him leaving?

Text 4: I knew the reason for that.

Text 5: I cried when I realised that

Text 6: there was nothing I could do.

19.

Text 1: From then, Okita-san’s illness

Text 2: got worse day by day.

[SFX] cough (x3)

20.

Chizuru: Okita-san! // Okita-san…! / Is it alright for you to be moving around?!

Okita: Hmm…what happened? / You didn’t call me, so I thought that I’d go by myself. // I was sad that you were always out… // Listening to what people say, too…

21.

[SFX] cough

Chizuru: Okita-san! // Please don’t overdo it! / Everyone is fighting! // Please get some rest!

Okita: Be quiet!

22.

Okita: It’s not like I’ve become weaker! // I… // I can still fight!

23.

Men: Ah… // haha… // ha…

Okita: They’ve gone berserk…?!

24.

[No text]

25.

Okita: Tch… // This is how I am now…? / The leader of the Shinsengumi’s first division… // Souji Okita…

26.

Chizuru: Okita-san…why did you drink the Ochimizu?!

Men: Blood… // Blood… // Blood…

27.

Chizuru: Okita-san…no! // If you drink that…

Text 1: Was my future reflected

Text 2: in Okita-san’s eyes as he stared at the men?

28.

Okita: Ahhh…!

29.

[No text]

30.

Text 1: Why does he fight to the extent that

Text 2: he abandons his life as a human and becomes a demon?

Text 3: If I had the courage

Text 4: and the strength

Text 5: Would I have been able to change anything?

31.

Text 1: Then

Text 2: I finally understood.

Text 3: With the same feelings in mind

Text 4: he took the Ochimizu for the sake of what was important to him.

Text 5: His smile as he accepted everything

Text 6: was sorrowfully imprinted in my mind.

Box 1: An eternal moment…

Box 2: End

Thank you again! I really appreciate it and I'm glad there wasn't much to change.