Bakuman 89

[Bakuman 89 Translation by Kewl0210]
Page 1:
Saikou: "5th year 3rd class Chimitsu Kei is having fun talking with his friends as he goes to get his school lunch. But his eyes look like he's thinking of something else. Those eyes are not noticed by anyone"......
Shuujin: How's the original story with just sentences......?
Insert Text: Towards defeating Eiji!! Will this new experiment bring good luck!!?
Title: Bakuman
Page 89 Title and Character Design
Original Story / Ooba Tsugumi Manga / Obata Takeshi
Saikou: Only just reading it, it wants to make me up the eyes.
And I want to change the character design, too. With like a hairstyle that hides his eyes or something.
Shuujin: Heeeeh. By just doing that it'll...
溶け込んでるって結構重要なキャラ付けじゃんそこも描きたくなる
Saikou: Yeah. Then he'll blend in with everyone and give him a more relatable character, right? I wanna draw that, too.
Shuujin: I see... I couldn't have expressed that with my stick figure name from before~~~
But if you draw this too closely there won't be enough pages... I omitted things where I judged that I could...
Paper: 5th year 3rd class Chimitsu Kei is having fun talking with his friends as he goes to get his school lunch. But his eyes look like he's thinking of something else. Those eyes
[It's the same thing as the above first bubble]
Saikou: Well, these first 20 pages are definitive, but......
Shuujin: ?

Page 2:
Saikou: With a text-only original story I can imagine more!
Shuujin: !
Th...
That's great!
Saikou: Yeah! I can space and split panels as much as I want... With a name I had to try really hard and stretch the panels to split them up.
This isn't a strong point of mine, but...
I assumed that the original story hard to be a name...
That was a blind spot in my thinking............
I've been doing it for years so I think I can do this. This way I can envision the pictures in my mind first, so it can work.
Shuujin: But if I talk about the characters emotions in detail, the text will definitely get longer. Will that be all right?
Saikou: Write as much detail as you can, then it'll be my job to show the emotion in the drawings.
It's just that making it into a name will take some time...
Shuujin: And I'll need time to switch from doing stick-figure names. It's going to be a race against time more so than ever before.

Page 3:
Shuujin: Today's the 29th... Even if it's all text, it'll take me another one or two days to finish chapter 1.
Saikou: So then it'll take me two days for the clean copy of the name... So the name for chapter 1 won't be up until New Years or the second......?
Shuujin: So the first or the second. You up for no New Years Day break?
Saikou: Up for it? We don't have any time for new years breaks. I'll just tell my parents "congratulations" in the morning, and it'll be ok.
Then we'll be comparing it to the previous name again and see if it's really better, seeing if there are any more places to fix and fixing them.
We'll make the best thing we can and then have Hattori-san look at it and give us his views, and somehow make it better, going up until the last minute.
So we can beat Eiji.
正月返上
Shuujin: Oh... Ooh. So we're giving up new years?
..........
Miyoshi: You want to sacrifice the New Years Holiday for work, right? It's okay.
It'll be fine just us three here on New Years. I'll make ozouni for it.
TL Note: Ozouni is a Japanese New Years dish; rice cakes boiled in vegetable soup.
Shuujin: ..........Kaya-chan...
Okay, but I'm definitely gonna go give your family a new years greeting.
Miyoshi: Well, my parents don't make that big a deal out of it, but I guess they wouldn't mind you showing up for a bit.
Shuujin: G-Got it...

Page 4:
Shuujin: Hattori-san.
Hattori: How goes it? When do you think you'll finish the name by?
Shuujin: Eh!? You're already on vacation, aren't you, Hattori-san? The New Years vacation is 6 days, isn't it?
Hattori: Hey, hey, we went from originally going to make the manuscript to redoing the name, so do you think I could sit back and relax?
I'll come look it over as soon as you're done. Well, I hope you'll forgive me if I can't on New Years day.
Shuujin: .........
Kaya: He's such a nice guy.
Whoever: ..........
Shuujin: But the 2nd is okay, right?
Hattori: Eh!? The 2nd!? You're going to re-draw an entire 52 page named by then?
Shuujin: Yes. We're gonna try.
Hattori: Okay. I'll contact you during the afternoon on the 2nd.
Shuujin: Okay......We'll call you as soon as we're done, too.
Hattori-san's going this far for us......
Saikou: Let's give it everything we've got!
Shuujin: OOOOOOOOO
Kaya: OOOOOOOOOOOOO!

Page 5:
Hattori: Oh, he's here?
SFX: Pinpoon (doorbell)
Miura: Thanks for doing this.
Hattori: You've got a busy New Years Eve, huh?
Miura: Well the serialization meeting was on the 26th. It's too late in the year, isn't it~~~
Miura: So we're going to Niizuma-kun's place to do the editor hand over?
Hattori: Yes.
Miura: Niizuma Eiji, eh...? I ended up as editor of an amazing sensei again~~ My heart's pounding.
Hattori: Niizuma-kun's editors can end up doing nothing and be a person to pick up manuscripts, so be careful.
Miura: .........Just pick up the...... manuscripts?
Hattori: You could say there aren't really any opportunities for editors to interfere...
Miura: I see... So actually, it feels like I'll end up studying him.
Hattori: Right! Watch him closely and study.
Miura: ! .....
Yes...

Page 6:
Sign: Niizuma
Limited Company
Eiji
Hattori: This is the editor who'll be in charge of "+NATURAL" from now on, Miuta.
Miura: My name's Miura Gorou. Nice to meet you......
Card: Miura Gorou [Down the middle.]
Public Company Shueisha
Weekly "Shounen Jump" Editor [Upper right]
[The rest isn't important. Or... I just can't read it. It says Recycled Paper on the bottom by the way.]
Eiji: You used to be Ashirogi-sensei's editor, didn't you? It's a pleasure.
Miura: It's...... It's a pleasure for me to become your editor, too, Niizuma-kun.
Eiji: But
Miura: !?
Eiji: You shouldn't have made Ashirogi-sensei write that cliched gag manga.
Miura: !
Eiji: Ashirogi-sensei does REALISTIC stories and REALISTIC pictures.
Miura: .........Yes... That's right... Well that's why the next one they're starting is that kind.
Eiji: "Kanzen Hanzai Club"!! It fits Ashirogi-sensei perfectly. You did well to bring them that far. Let's do it, Miura-san.
Miura: .......Well, uh...
This time I'm getting praised this fast...?

Page 7:
Eiji: This time Ashirogi-sensei is gonna be tough, right...
Serious drawings and
serious laughs, too...
Miura: Senpai, did you talk about the contents of "Kanzen Hanzai Club" with him?
Hattori: No, not at all.
Miura: So Niizuma-kun knows basically what it's about even though he didn't read it?
Eiji: They said to "Kanzen Hanzai Club", even "CROW" and "+NATURAL" fall behind.
So I can imagine. [So there are faces after the titles, right? You know right?]
Miura: .........Is that right?
Eiji: So let's do out best so we don't lose to that Ashirogi-sensei!!
Miura: Eh!?
Ah.
Yes.
Ha~~~~...
From beginning to end we were going at Niizuma-kun's pace. But with just those few minutes I feel like I can tell what everyone meant when they said how amazing he is....
Hattori: He's definitely got ESP.
Miura: ..........
Hattori: Well, that's all the work for this year.
Miura: Yes. But in the new year starting on the 3rd, I'm having meetings with Akina-kun... She's really hard to deal with, that girl......
Hattori: Haha...... Well, keep it steady. I'm starting on the 2nd with Ashirogi-kun.
Miura: Uwah, the 2nd......?

Page 8:
Box: New Years Eve
Shuujin: What'ya think? It interesting?
Saikou: Yeah. Since it was a name I'm able to get an idea of its shape more and more.
I'll make a clean copy with this.
We'll manage it by the 2nd somehow.
Shuujin: Then I'll make a text manuscript for chapter 2.........
Saikou: ..........
Saikou: Go home, Shuujin. It's new Years Eve.
Shuujin: It's New Years Eve for you, too, Saikou.
Saikou: I'm not married.
We said we'd sacrifice our holiday and stuff, but don't make it feel any rougher on Kaya-chan.
Shuujin: ...Feel rougher...huh?........... I guess you're right.
Then won't you at least go home, too, Saikou?
Saikou: .........What's with that. Ok, well I guess I really should, now.
SFX: PINPOOON
高木香耶庵です 年越しそばの出前にあがりました
It's me, Takagi Kayaa. I came to deliver your New Years soba I cooked up.
Saikou: It's Kaya-chan.

Page 9:
Ashirogi: ........
Miyoshi: What? You've already had soba?
Shuujin: Maybe I still don't understand Kaya-chan completely.
Miyoshi: EEEEH!? After living together for a year, that's a problem ain't iiiiit!?
Saikou: Haha...
Whoever: 3
2
1
Ah
Happy New Year!! You two went into the new year at work, you're real pros!
Saikou: O~~~~~
It's 3AM. That's enough already, let's call it a day.
Shuujin: Yeah, I'll go, too.
Someone: Sure does feel like new years, doesn't it?
The stars are really pretty.
When you look at a starry sky, your head gets empty and you forget about reality.
Shuujin: Really? I get worried about being a mangaka star, though.
Saikou: Azuki's face always comes to mind for me.
Miyoshi: Well, that's our Mashiro.........

Page 10:
Box: January 2nd.
Saikou: Chapter 1 name compleeeete!!
Shuujin: It's definitely powered-up from before.
Miyoshi: Yeah, yeah. Even I can tell.
Saikou: Let's just have Hattori-san take a look at it for now.
[It's... 2AM. I pretty much feel like Saikou at this point.]
Shuujin: Saikou, you'be basically not slept since New Years Eve, are you okay?
Saikou: It's the same with you, right, Shuujin? We said we'd have it up by the 2nd so we need to show it today.
Miyoshi: Well, I'm going.
Saikou: Thanks for everything, Kaya-chan. Your ozouni was delicious.
Hattori: It got better.
In just five days... they redid it all the way to page one.......

Page 11:
Shuujin: Hew...
Saikou: Thank God...
Shuujin: Then what parts do we fix.........?
Saikou: Is there any way to make it better? So we'll definitely beat Niizuma-san?
Hattori: !
...........I'm plenty willing, too, but...... it's pretty clear these two haven't been sleeping well.
まだ貪欲に
And even though there shouldn't be enough time, they're still so avid...
but I can't break that willingness.
The weakest point is the protagonists' character, but... Beyond the setup of him being a regular elementary schooler...
Well, yes..........
Shuujin: The title!? There's a movie with the same title, so is it okay to still not change it?
Hattori: Mm? I see. Then it would be better to change it.
Ah, like I thought...... Making it western writing........
"Kanzen Hanzai Club" would be "Perfect..." something like that, right?
"THE PERFECT CRIME CLUB", right? But just making it western-style writing it too contrived.
And it's too long........
[Note to humans. This is why you don't translate manga titles.]

Page 12:
Hattori: There's always the safe easy-to-understand way of putting the protagonist's name into the title.
Shuujin: Ah, I've heard of doing that.
Saikou: They make the protagonit's name the title quite a bit, though.
Hattori: Well then let's start with the protagonist's name..............
Chimitsu Kei...... It's not very protagonist-like. [Chimitsu Kei is big/bold]
[I was close. I wrote it as "Jimtsu".]
Shuujin: Now that you mention it... I just put it in temporarily so I could get on with the stroy.
Hattori: Oozora Tsubaki, Sakuragi Hanamichi........... Those are good, don't you think? [Names big]
Shuujin: Those are cool.... Even if it's not the protagonist, the main characters need to be named. Something really cool like Rukawa Kaede. [Name big]
Saikou: We're not set on putting the protagonist's name in the title though. "Captain Tsubasa".... That one is perfect. [Name big]
Hattori: This girl, "Annojyou Mai" isn't bad, though.
Shuujin: That's was Mashiro's name. Maybe Mashiro has a better sense for that.
I'm not trying to force the job on you, though.
TL Note: The original character name is a pun on "Secret" and "Plan". Hattori's suggestions mean literally "Big Sky Wing" and "Cherry blossom Tree Flower Path". Shuujin's suggestion means "Flowing River Maple". "Captain Tsubasa" is an 80s manga that ran in Jump. Annojyou Mai is a pun on the Japanese word "Girlfriend". "Mai" means dance, but could mean the English word "My". [It's not my job to figure out where to put notes. I made it as short as would make sense.]
Box: One hour later.
Shuujin: Maybe a more serious pattern like Yamada Tarou or something.
Saikou: For this manga it'd better to avoid real sounding names.
Box: Another hour later.
Hattori: Oh well. The title and names will be homework.
Ashirogi: ......Okay...

Page 13:
Saikou: Is there anything we should fix after that?
Hattori: ...................
Will you be all right with not making the manuscript, Mashiro-kun.
Saikou: Orihara-kun will be coming as an assistant.
If I get two more people of some drawing skill, I figure I might be able to get the manuscript done by the 13th at the earliest.......
Saikou: Until then, I want to make it more interesting up till the last minute.
Shuujin: And I'd like to have you look at the text versions from chapter 2 on. I thought I'd like to create a stock while we have time.
Hattori: The name was interesting even before they fixed it. When I told them it was 4 to 3 in a majority vote with Niizuma-kun winning, they did things like changing to a text original story......
Now going higher as long as there's time... If it's no good this time, there won't be any more... So they understand what it means to beat Niizuma-kun...?
I'll make sure to get assistants that can match your drawings, Mashiro-kun, but...
Saikou: Thank's a lot.
Hattori: The New Years Party is on the 13th.
Shuujin: Oh, that's right... We got serialized, so we have to go.
Saikou: I forgot.............
Hattori: .............

Page 14:
Hattori: If you can't come no matter what, if I just tell them about it, it'll be fine. It'll just end with someone getting angry at me.
Ashirogi: ! ...... A-Aw man........
Hattori: Compared to how selfish you guys have been up until now, it's no big deal.
Ashirogi: .........
Shuujin: What're we gonna do about the 12th?
Saikou: The 12th?
Shuujin: The coming-of-age party...
Saikou: !...... I won't go, but... I said I'd get a long-sleeved kimono for Kaya-chan.
Shuujin: Even Azuki will be wearing a kimono.
Saikou: I promised with Azuki we wouldn't meet when we were at Hachiouji.
Shuujin: Th... That seems kinda unfair doesn't it?
Hattori: This is good as a whole.
Just the title and the character names...
And there's one more thing left that I think is the most important thing you should do.
Saikou: The most important!?
Hattori: Make the protagonist more protagonist-like.

Page 15: [When's this fucking chapter gonna end? It's fucking 4AM... I've been translating this for... some long period of time.]
Hattori: We want him to be a normal elementary schooler, so that much can't be helped.
But this is too normal.
Ashirogi: Ha~~~~~h.
When we were doing "Tanto" we struggled over that, too. It's a weak point of ours~~~~ [Face after name. Like, always.]
Saikou: So it's a matter of character design, right?
Hattori: ........Yes. I'd like some more characteristics.
Saikou: ............
Character design... What I should do.......
I'll make the character.
Takagi will do the title main character's names!
That can be switched in, so it's fine not to do until the manuscript's done.
Shuujin: Oh! Right.
Hattori: I've given all the advice I can.
From here, it depends on how much these two kids want it.
That's the best we have....
Ashirogi: Hattori-san, anything else?
Hattori: Now is just some small things we can fix right now. Let's get on that right now.
Ashirogi: Okay.

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Ashirogi: So with that, everything's really perfect except for the title and names?
Hattori: Yes. That was all the advice I can give.
I've been studying, too, so you two wouldn't get left behind.
Shuujin: Y... You really did that?
Saikou: Thank you very much for coming so early in the year.
I'll do my best with the character design.
Hattori: Yeah. When you get to another major point, you can call me.
Box: January 3rd.
Miura: Now then, I'll move right along and read the original script.
Iwase: I'm especially confident with this one.
Miura: Yes, just as you said, I think this is immensely interesting.
Iwase: .........
And?
Miura: ?
Iwase: Please say clearly where it's interesting! If it were Hattori, he would say so clearly!

Page 17:
Miura: Eh, r-right. Overall, it's.........
Iwase: Please don't joke like that!
Please raise points one by one! This is no business meeting. Please grow up!
Miura: Y-Yes, ma'am! I'm sorry...
A~~~~, that was scary... That's why even senpai wanted to give a complaint to the group leader, huh?............ Anyhow, I should bring this original story to Niizuma-kun's place...
Sign: Niizuma
Limited Company
Eiji[WHEN IS THIS CHAPTER GONNA END!? WE'VE SEEN THIS SIGN ALREADY!]
Eiji: OOOOH.
It's fantastic!
You sure did it, Miura-san!
And I was doubting if Akina-sensei was really into this or not, but this is amazing!
How'd you do it!!?
Miura: No... Well, this much is just.............
Box: January 12th [I feel like I've been translating this for the amount of days that have passed in the story. But really it's only been like 8 hours.]
Saikou: Is the coming-of-age party already over!?
Saikou: I still haven't come up with the title or the name, but what were you able to do alone?
Miyoshi: Iwase and Ishizawa came, too. It got kind of uncomfortable mid-way though...........Don't you think?
Saikou: So do any of these click with you?
Shuujin: Hey, how many patterns did you draw!? There are a hundred of these, aren't there!? Whatever clicks with you is fine, Saikou.
Saikou: None of them click with me yet, that's why I did this. I did think of some items, though.

Page 18:
Miyoshi: Ah, my phone.
It's from Abe-chan, who I haven't seen in a while.
Excuse me.
Phone Strap: Chara
Saikou: !
Box: January 13th. New Years party.
Eiji: Ashirogi-sensei aren't heeeeere!? That's too bad... No, they're working their hardest, so I'm happy.
Hiramaru: Is the captain of the Fukuda group on vacation, too? Giving up this fun time, what's he thinking!?
Yuujirou: Fukuda-kun is going all-out to draw a one-shot.
Eiji: Hiramaru-sensei, it looks like we'll have to try our hardest as well, doesn't it?
Hiramaru: Hahhahha~~~ People who wanna work hard can. I, on the other hand, should be resting. The otter figurines are selling like crazy, so I'm all about rest and relaxation.
Aoki: Hiramaru-sensei, I misjudged you. You're quite self-conceited.
Hiramaru: Eh, Aoki-san, you were heeeeere!? Wai.... That was a lie, please wait..........
Yoshida: You reap what you sow, Hiramaru-kun. You should lay off the booze.

Page 19: [Thank God.]
Eiji: Akina-sensei, your last original script was fantastic!!
Iwase: Of course. I'm going to become the best in this world. I hope your drawings will be better than ever, too, Niizuma-san.
Eiji: Roger.
Hattori: ..........
......Ashrirogi-kun will make it in time.
Hiramaru: I'll never drink again.......
Yoshida: Liar.
Hattori: But can they really compete with Hiramaru-kun. Niizuma-kun, Fukuda-kun, and Aoki-kun?
Saikou: Ooh!
"完全犯罪モード" "普段" "完全 (我) ツール ストラップ"
ドライバーメジャー ホチキス サバイバルツール etc..."
Boxes: Perfect Crime Mode
Normal
(My) Crime Tool Strap
Outside Box: Screwdriver, tape measure, stapler, survival tools, etc...
Shuujin: A cell phone strap and glasses!? This is good stuff! And it's not unnatural even for an elementary schooler.
Seriously, it's cool!!
Insert Text: The evolving serialization name!! This work... it has no bottom in sight!!
Bottom: Bakuman
...Page 89
/ End
[K, it's 4:30 AM now... I'm gonna go sleep. I really gotta start these earlier and not do anything else on Thursdays...]