Hitomi no Catoblepas 2

Here's ch 2 in all its nonexclusive goodness!

page #s based on raw, spaces = panel break

01
-Next door to my house there's a really large temple
-It's called "Genbuji"*
(T/N: This was brought up by GK; genbu + ji = genbu temple, yes, but in japanese they pronounce the whole name genbuji. I personally want to call it like it is in japanese so if you see genbuji temple, even though that's technically redundant, it makes more sense to the average english reader.)

-Oddly enough, no one's ever seen people go in our out of this temple
-Rumor has it that it's uninhabited
-Makes you wonder if it's even being used as a temple...

-right txt: What's the secret of the temple next door!?
-Th-this is your home?
bottom txt: It's the 2nd chapter of the newly serialized "Hitomi no Catoblepas!!"

02
#2 - The visitor

box: Everyone around here calls this temple
lower box: "the abandoned temple." No one dares go near it
(t/n - it's actually "nukegara", nukegara = a shed skin/exoskeleton. But "shed skin temple" sounds uber lame...)
white txt right: The mysterious eye that can destroy Youma...!/Shimura Tokio...exactly who is he?!
txt lower right is "tanaka yasuki", the author.

txt upper left: The 2nd chapter of the newly serialized comic! A whopping 27 pages!
(T/N - not more pages :'( )
-You're kiddin', right?

03
-Huh? Why do you ask?
-'Cuz...this is the famous "abandoned temple"

-Nobody lives here. I mean, the gate's always locked!
-I've never spotted a single cat,
-and no one ever comes to worship over at this big 'ol, worn-out shrine.

-...Yeah, okay. Just follow me.
-W-what're you doin'?!

-OPEN (it's just a funky font)

sfx - creaking (gigigigiiii)

-No way!!
-...It opened....

left txt: SUMMARY - Kishida Miiko is a female high school student who lives in K city--the city with a long history and rich with culture. One day, she was attacked by a terrible monster called "Gardenia" while onboard the subway. At that time, a young man with a red eye named Shimura Tokio appeared and defeated the Youma with a mysterious power. According to him, he possesses the power to stop the time of anything he sees. ...Just who is he?!

04
-Welcome back, (top)

-...wha th--!
-WHAT THE HECK?!

-Ah, I'm sorry they startled you.
-It's always like this. I've been asking them to stop doing this, but...

-No way! Who're all these people?! There's this many?!
-But...I've never seen anyone 'round here!

05
-Master!! (top)

-There's a barrier surrounding this temple.
-From the outside, you can't see its true appearance.
-Either I have to invite someone,
-Or they would have to break it by force to get inside here.

-Wow...the inside's gorgeous
-But uh, what's this "master" thing?

-Master Tokio
-I was worried, since you were late in returning home

06
-Oh...I see you've brought someone with you?
-My, my...
-Welcome to the Shimura household!
sfx: nosonoso = slow shuffling

-Ah...thank you...excuse me
-What kinda clothes are those?!
-I'm home, Hakutaku

-And what of the Gardenia?
-Yeah, I finally took him out
-Well done! It took quite a few victims, after all

-Everyone!

-The master has defeated the Youma and returned home safely!!

07
-Ohh!
-Great job as always, master Tokio!
-He's even brought a female visitor with him!

-Female?! Are you serious, Ayame?!
-Do you really think I'd make that up, Takuda!?
-Get everything ready for our guest!

-Please use this cushion!
-Allow me to carry your luggage!
-Here, let me rub your shoulders!
-Oh my, she's very cute!
-Here you go. Although, it's just a cheap tea...
-Hey, hey!

-Here you are!
-Please enjoy your meal!
-Do you like Manjuu? (= steamed buns w/ filling. very good)
-Thank you!/Thank you!
-This is my special pumpkin candy!
-I'm sure you'll love it!

-Huh?!
-She-she's...floating..?!

08
-What's with this temple?!
-Well, since this is delicious, I'll let it slide...

-Look, Ayame...you need to think a little more before you act
-Crowding around her with such a large crowd...she's just going to get nervous and leave!
-You too, Tokuda! Is it that strange that I brought a female guest?!

-Maybe they're some kinda' big-shot family?!

-Please excuse their rude behavior
-I hear you met with quite a dangerous situation today, lady Kishida.
sfx: kata kata kata (clink-ing)

-I am known as Hakutaku.
-I am one of the servants employed by the Shimura family.
-Ah...nice to meet you
-E-excuse me, uh...why do you know my name?

09
-Hakutaku knows everything.
-He's served our home for longer than anyone else.
-He's like a walking dictionary

-Hoho...saying "everything" is overdoing it!
-Besides, master Tokio
-Anyone would know their neighbor's face!
-Eh...?

-NEIGHBOR?!
-So you weren't listenin' after all!

-Thank you for your business!
sign: Kishida fruits

-...hey, honey,
-Isn't Miiko a bit late? I wonder if somethin' happened?
-Ha ha...She's probably jus' eatin' out again

sign on back - Kishida fruits

10
-Wooow! What a beautiful garden! Ya even got a huge pond!
-Ya live in a place like this?!
-It's like, so amazin'!

-Cool! Incredible!
-ho ho
-I can't believe the person I saved by coincidence turned out to be the Fruit shop's daughter next door. This city is smaller than I thought...
-I wonder if this is some kind of fate... (sigh)

-Heeey! Exactly who are ya? It's about time to explain!
-What? You mean right now? It's going to take a long time.
-Since you live next door, why don't you just go home for today? I'll explain tomorrow.

-WHAT THE HECK!
-You tricked me!!
-I only came along 'cuz you promised to tell me!!
-No...you see...uh...I'm sorry...
sfx stomp stomp

11
-I just want to watch my anime while I eat the ramen I bought for dinner
-Are you messin' with me!? You didn't buy any ramen!!
-It's right here, in my bag. Do you want some?

sfx - shuffle shuffle

-Huh?

sfx - slide

-Look, I got two!
-This shop's ramen is really delicious!
sfx - clunk

12
-Hey! Are you tryin' to piss me off?
-This is jus' a fake! It's plastic!!
sfx - tap tap

sfx - poof!
-AAAH!
sfx - splish

-Oh...
-It smells good!
sfx - steamy
-No way!

-I stopped that ramen's time.
-It's easier to carry that way.
-Plus it keeps it fresh

-Oh yeah! That...that magic trick ya do wit' that red eye of yers!
-I wanna know all about that!!
sfx top - Pii (turning on tv sound??)
sfx btm - BAM!
-So, HEY!! You mean ta' tell me that you ca--WHAT ARE YA DOIN' TURNING ON THE TV?!!?!

-You said that you're keepin' a monster...a Catoble-whatever, in your eye
-Usin' its power, you're able ta' stop the time of whatever it sees
-I got that much...
(as in, "i understand at least that"...is this correct english?)

13
-I told you that we, the Shimura family, are a guardians of K city
-It's been our duty since a thousand years ago to destroy the Youma that appear in our world
-In order to be able to beat the Youma, we need a power on their level

-For generations, members of the guardian families have always been special
-By taming a Youma and keeping it inside one's body, that person gains superhuman abilities
-They are able to use the "Youkai no jutsu" (from last chapter, "demon rearing arts")

-Just like my late father,
-I've inherited the youma Catoblepas

14
-Fightin' youma, guardian of K city? ...seems real complicated
-But still I can't believe there was really a monster!
-I was about to be turned inta' a mummy...

-Miss Miiko, how fortunate for you
-That the head of a guardian family boarded the same train

-Family head??
-Oh...he hasn't told you?

-What are you hiding it for, Master Tokio!
-Master Tokio is the 21st Shimura guardian family head!
-No matter what kind of Youma it is, master Tokio can destroy it in a flash!

15
-Ending the life of a Youma in an instant...that is master Tokio's fantastic power!
-I'm sure you witnessed it for yourself, miss miiko
-The Eye of Catoblepas can not only stop time, but life itself!

-As the ruler of time and existence...even reigning over the spirit world itself--
-The Great Catoblepas is said to be the strongest (in existence/there is)!! ->() is added, i think it sounds run-on without something there. Those are my suggestions

-Thus our family's head, commanding the very Catoplebas itself...is the strongest in K city!
-Before Master Tokio's eye,

-There is no enemy
-That is a match for him!!

16
-Please stop flattering me, Hakutaku! You're over-exaggerating!
-I only speak from my own experience of witnessing your amazing work!

-I knew it!
-He is some kinda big shot!
sfx - slurp slurp

-Whatever...let's just leave it at that, okay? You can go now.
-Lookin' at him now he doesn't seem special at all
-Judgin' by how he does stuff his way, he's gotta be an only child!

-Hoho...as you can see miss Miiko, that's just the way master Tokio is
-If you'd like, I could show you around this temple
-EH? REALLY!?

-If you're still willing, we'd be happy to have you for dinner too
-How about it, Master Tokio?
-YA-----Y!!
-What the heck is with you, Hakutaku?!

17
-Just how much of other people's food are you planning to eat, Miiko?
-I'll be back later! Enjoy your cartoons!
-...thanks...

-Wow..
-Hey, Mr. hakutaku...what is this?

-A--ah, these are portraits of the prior Shimura family heads
-Amazing! Feels like they got a long past!
-Let's see...the Shimura now is the 21st so...

-Ah...so the 20th one must be Shimura's dad...
-He looks like a real kind person...

-And the one nexta' it must be Shimura!
crooked - ...but they're all Shimuras...

18
-Huh? But...he's just a kid in this pic?
-Well it looks like 'im, but...somethin's different...

-...who is this?

19
-Excuse me
-Excuse me
-Hmph!

-Who are ya?! You look suspicious!
-How'd you get in here?!

-How'd I get in...? Obviously, from the entrance

-What?!
-Then, you must be master Tokio's guest!
-Oh my, we're having a lot of guests today!

-I came to pay my respects to Mr. Tokio for the other day...My name is Inaba.
-I promised to visit him today.

20
-Please forgive me for being rude, Mister Inaba!
-Ooh, is this a present? An assortment of seasonal fruits from the shop next door!* Master Tokio will be very pleased!
(*she says from "kishida fruits" but fruits is redundant. I was thinking of changing the name to kishida produce, but I dont know if fruit stores in japan carry veggies too. If you like produce then you may want to change the previous pages too).
-After all, only people invited by the master can get inside

-Haha...that's true...

-But there's another way...if the barrier surrounding this temple
-was pried open by force, that is...

-...why do you know tha---!

sfx zoku (i think thats throbbing/heartbeat-kinda sound)

21
-Hakutaku!!
-What's the matter, master Tokio?

-I sense something evil has entered the temple grounds!
-What??
-The barrier's been broken

-...ow

-IYAAAAAAAAAA!!
sfx CRASH
-MASTER, HELP!!

-This youma sneaking into our Genbuji temple
-is either really sure of his strength, or really foolish
-...at a time like this--!!

22
-Ms. Miiko! Since I don't know anything about our intruder, you're safest staying next to me!
-Please don't leave my side!
-O--okay!

-sfx - CRASH

sfx - scatter scatter
-KYAA!!

-Aaa...m-master...
-Please...be careful...
-It...uses...
-p-posion...

23
-Kurumi!!
-Saohime!!

-EHEHE!
-Those women were just shikigami, huh?
[shikigami = summoned spirit, in english the best word is "familiar". (played any rpg's?)]

sfx spraying sounds (pssshhhh)

24
-That scrap paper
-Won't satiate me!
-It looks like
-only raw human will do!!

-ew!
sfx - sticky sounds, left of that is dripping
-W-w-w-w-hat is it this time?!
-Oh no!

-ehehehehehe!
-Don't even try it!
-You can't escape my web!
sfx - kasa kasa (rustle rustle)

-That spider-like appearance...and that characteristic pattern of stripes on its eight limbs...
-There's no doubt about it! That's the youma "Arachne"!
(kanji is phonetic. I don't see any meaning to it)
-The thread it spins is extremely strong! It feeds on its prey while they are unable to move!

-No way!!
-What can Shimura do!?

25
-Guhuhawhaha!!
-Whether the Shimura family head or the like...
-There's nothing to fear!
(t/n: older japanese. writing it for later research: 恐（おそ）るるに足らんな. lit. lacking in fear?)
sfx are same from earlier - kasa kasa kasa

26
-I've captured you, Shimura Tokio!
-You won't be able to move a single millimeter from there!

-Ch...you have the worst timing!
-Hmm?

-It's already 18:00...(6pm) my show's about to start!!
-Are you going to take responsibility for making me miss my show?!
-I looked forward to it all week, too...there's only five minutes left!!
-What the heck are ya talkin' bout, at a time like this!!

-Are you making fun of me?!

bottom left: #2/end. wow...he turned out to be somethin' else! Next time: In a full page center color, there'll be a huge battle and more secrets revealed about the Shimura family!!

27
-Your movements are completely sealed!!
-I'm going to enjoy taking you apart...nice and slow!

-I'm serious.
-...ow
-I'll end this in two minutes.
-Both of you, get back.
white: 眼差しに怯えなし！ = A look with no fear! (better english -> His eyes hold no fear!/There is no fear in his eyes!, etc)

-End-

Hands down, page 12's line is the best :)