Claymore 78

it has come to my attention that there is discussion over my translation at forums elsewhere. If you spot inaccuracies or questionable parts, please do post here (after all, how else will I know??). I don't claim to know everything, I make mistakes too. Thanks for your help guys.

done, but please proof. thanks for the suggestions & sorry for the delay

edit: minor fix on page 12. Wasn't clare, rather, the "source" of the scents was actually given no object

01
-Check it out, Galk!! (not gark?)
-It's her!
-Yeah.

-Damn that woman...
-always showing up at the last second...!

-I'm going to die?
-First you come out of nowhere and then you start telling bad jokes...

-Those huge leg-like appendages you're on...
-I believe there were 8, right?

-Huh?

-Since one's down, that makes 7 to go
-That's a number I like

left: Amidst the bloodshed taking place at Labona, Clare suddenly appears! For the first time in seven years, she once again wields her sword in this city...

02-03
-Enough talk--
-You're going down!
bold: A daring challenge...!!
SCENE.78 - The renegade soldiers

-Ch!

04 no txt

05
-This isn't happening!
-What the hell!?

-The only thing I'll tell you is the name of this technique
-It's the swiftest skill of all, once used by the former number 8, Flora...
(t/n more literally "It's the fastest sword skill that Flora, the former number 8 who died in the north, used..." but that's way too much for the bubble IMO)

-KAZEKIRI (t/n - lit. "cutting wind" = wind cutter?)

06 no txt

07
-WHA---!!?

08
-Aaah!!

-What is it!?
-What's going on!?

-Ngh...?!

09
-Kuh....!

-You've lost both your eyes and your arm?
-No, it seems you lost your sight much longer ago

-That voice...I remember you...
-You must be...!

-Sorry, but this will have to wait
-I have some business to attend to

10
-Let's finish this in a flash!
-There's no need to hold back against an Awakened, after all!

11
-Mm.

-hehe

12
-Wha...who..??
-Who are
-those people?
-Are they are allies?

-...strong

-Hm?
あの中から強い匂いが二つする・・・
-There are two strong scents among them all

-They are all strong...but those two scents are much stronger than the rest...
七つの中でとびぬけた二つ
-They surpass...all the others by far...
lit. among the seven, those two surpass all others

13
-Hmph

sfx: Guni guni

sfx: gi / gishi

14-15
sfx bubbles: Gishi (all of them)
-For me to have to revert to my original form...
-You're still weaklings but at least you'll provide me some entertainment...

16
-Are you kiddin' me!?
-She's this freaking big!?

-Yee-haw!

-Denev! Clare! Cover me!
-I'll use my Senkuuken to finish her! (t/n - senkuu-ken is lit whirlwind sword, probably "drill sword"?)

-STOP!
-Don't be fooled--that monster is...!

17
-Her vital spot is in her lower abdomen
-But it seems that like a stream of water, it is constantly moving--never in one spot

-Huh!?

-She's lying about that being her true form
-Her true body is wrapped inside of that outer appearance
-Her actual size and appearance is no more than that of an average person

-That body is just for show
-Her weakness is her head, as well as that hair which connects her to that Awakened form

18
-...so there you have it. Anything you'd like to add,
-Galatea of the "heavenly eyes"?

-No, that was completely correct
-The only additional thing I can think of is that since her hair is a direct link to this form,
-If you want to take her down then there's no point in attacking anywhere but her real head
(t/n - is it just me or was all of this dialogue painfully obvious?)

-Got it.
-I'm guessing that you must be the leader of this team?
(t/n - very unsure of who's saying this line. I think it means galatea is being asked if she's in charge of the other two??)

-I'm just someone who ran away from the Organization
-I'm different from you guys

-Please, save this city for me
-"Phantom" Miria...

-Sure thing.

19
-I won't let
-anyone else die!
sfx bubble :vuvuvu

-SHIN...
-GENEI... (t/n - lit. new / illusion = "the new phantom"?)

20-21
-GAH!?

-Where is it?

-Upper half...
-...the left arm

22
-GUAAAA

23
-Where now?

-The right half...
-The upper arm above the shoulder

24
-YA-HOOOOO

-Shit!!!

-Her vital spot is moving in the shape of a human...
-Yes, that is her real body

25
-Amazing...!
-They've almost taken down the Awakened number 2...in just seconds!?!

-Damnit!!

26
-Don't move!
-Or I'll take her head clear off!

-Ah!!!

-Do you really think we care about hostages?

-Against an ordinary soldier, this wouldn't work
-But judging by those outfits, you aren't any ordinary group

-Besides, didn't you say earlier you wouldn't let anyone die?
-If you're naive enough to spout nonsense like that, this method is more than effective!

27
-Not a step closer
-Unless you care for your friend here!

-It's useless
-You might as well give up!

-Wait...you're...
-I know you!

28
-Yes, it's been a while
-I'm happy to see you again,
-Galatea

-Soldier number 47...
-Can you still use that move?

-Of course
sfx bubble: shhiiing
-It's not as powerful as before but, my accuracy has improved

-I SAID STOP!!
-OR ARE YOU DEAF!?

29
sfx bub: psssh

-Ngh...
-Kah...!!
sfx bub: hiiiin
-More accurate, you say?
-You just took off some of my hair!

-Yes, I know. That was intentional
-But if I can avoid it from here on, I will

-Hah.
-Thanks for being considerate

-...ing with me...

-QUIT SCREWING WITH ME!!
-YOU WORTHLESS SCUM!

-Don't make me repeat myself
-This city will be your grave!

30-31
bold: Kazekiri ends the battle--in a flash!
(or, total english: "her wind cutter ends the battle instantly!")

TO BE CONTINUED (in may issue)
(END)