I Am A Hero 1

Seriously, this was fine besides the odd capitalisation issue. There is -one- moderate fix on page 35. Check for bold text.
Consistency notes for myself:
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Edits for the Tank

Notes for editing, character voices:

H: Hideo: Protagonist, 35, manga assistant, otaku, delusional, manic, obsessive, eccentric, low confidence, man-child
Y: Yajima: Supporting character, Hideo's imaginary friend, subservient, stupid

I Am A Hero 1

Back Cover: It's the beginning of the end

Page 01
SFX: Go-

Page 02
SFX: Ja-

SFX: Biiiiii

Page 03
SFX: Jakon-

SFX: Gi-

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Chapter 1
Chapter 2
Chapter 3
Chapter 4
Chapter 5
Chapter 6
Chapter 7
Chapter 8
Chapter 9
Chapter 10 The breaking point
Chapter 11

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I AM A HERO
HANAZAWA KENGO

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Chapter 1

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Page 12
SFX: Pachi-

Page 13
SFX: Kacha

Page 14
H: ...Okay.

H: ...All clear.

SFX: Go-
SFX: Su-

Page 15
SFX: Uiiiiiin

SFX: Garogarogarororororo

SFX: Paka-

Page 16
SFX: Toro Toro

SFX: Ga- ga- mugu ga
H: Yum...
H: This is good...
SFX: Pochi-
SFX: PI-

SFX: Pi-
SFX: Pi-

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H: ...Sunday, huh.
SFX: Mugu

SFX: Pa-
TV: Fire at a senior citizens' home; 13 dead
H: Oh-

SFX: Ga-

SFX: Kopopopopopo

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SFX: Kacha Kacha
H: I...

TV screen: Dog bitten; in critical condition
TV: That should be “bitten by dog” and not “dog bitten”. Our apologies for the typo.

H: Really can't stand female anchors. [should probably change announcers to anchors later on. Lit: hate female anchors/announcers]

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Y: Huh?!
Y: Why?
Y: They're the kind of people that, like, everyone wants to date once.

H: ...You really want to hear it, Yajima?
Y: Yeah, lay it on me!!

H: Their personaaalities... [lit: self absorbed, always looking out for themselves first]
H: and, like, major disaaasters...

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H: See, first of all, like, the younger bunch on TV these days are just bad. Only those pageant-winning types trying hard to look good are worth a damn. [he's sighing here, so this line should give the impression that he feels like he's educating Yajima]\this second sentence gives me a case of the wtfs. It sounds like exactly the opposite of what he's saying.\
H: So... obviously... [another sigh, he's playing teacher]
H: If, like, some major disaster happened during a live news broadcast, you think they could snap out of their usual role of only concerning themselves with the steamy sex lives of pro baseball players and the young elite?
H: You think they wouldn't just abandon their journalistic responsibilities? You think they'd be able to report on it calmly when they're the type of people who only look out for number one?

H: Nope. No freaking way. They'd probably just be running around in circles screaming their heads off. You get it now? [another sigh]
H: All things considered, I find flight attendants, who are putting their lives at risk for their job, far more admirable.

H: Besides, news anchoring shouldn't be about selling fresh faces. After they've done, like, ten years of grunt work,
H: and they're mentally and physically capable, over thirty, seasoned and ready, then they should be on screen.
TV: Thank you for watching. [Lit: Broadcast finished]\boy has it been a long time since I saw a TV station sign off at night\

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H: But, you know, in the end, even though I really don't care that much about female anchors or flight attendants,
H: like,
H: if one threw herself at me, I'd still hit it.

Y: Oh man, f'real?!
H: Yeah, in fact,

SFX: Piiiii

H: brainy ones are... - ah.
SFX: Gi-

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SFX: Pi-
SFX: ZaZa-

SFX: Piiiiiii
SFX: Pi

SFX: Gagaga

SFX: Pi
SFX: Piiiiiiiiiiiiiiii

SFX: Bu-

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SFX: Ba-

H: The radio...
SFX: Pachi-
SFX: Zaaaaaa

SFX: Zazaza
SFX: Piiiiiiiii

SFX: JiJi-
Radio: -dio late-night broadcast.
H: Oh!
Radio: Coming up, the news...

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SFX: JiJi-
Radio: Yesterday evening after ten... a senior citizens' home...
Radio: ...caught fire. Thirteen were unable to escape in time...
Radio: ...according to authorities, one of the residents... an eighty-four year old man, set fire to...
SFX: *Zazaza

...Shit.
They're here.

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SFX: Ba-

SFX: Bikuku

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H: You asssshooole.

H: This is all 'cause you were telling scary stories at work.
SFX: Pechi- Pechi-
H: Punk assss.
H: Just stick to talkin' 'bout your precious news skanks! [lit: only talk about female anchors/announcers]

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Radio: And our next song will be...
Radio: Yamazaki Hako's “Curse”.
Song: ... Klang, Klang, Klang, driving the nails in.

Song: The tatami crackles beneath your feet.
SFX: Bu-
SFX: Ba-

SFX: Fuu [panting]
SFX: Fuu

Page 28
SFX: Chira [glance]

H: ...3 o'clock.

SFX: Gu-
H: ...Namu Amida Butsu. [Amitabha have mercy on me]

H: Namu Amida Butsu! Namu Amida Butsu! [Amitabha have mercy on me]
H: Namumyou Houren Gekyou! [Glory to the Lotus Sutra]

H: ...Maybe I should go to the convenience store.
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H: Namu Amida Butsu
H: Namu Amida Butsu.
H: Granny prays to you every day. [I guess his grandma is alive]
H: Namumyou Houren Geeeekyoooou. [stretching out the last phrase]
H: Namu Amida Butsuuuu. [stretching out the last syllable a bit]

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H: Not even a minute...
H: has passed...

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H: And I can't hear any cars at all...
H: ...hffff [fuu, panting]

H: But I'm right next to a highway... time has stopped... \そして、時が動き出す.\
H: hffff

H: Hfff [Fuuu]
H: HaHfff [Fuguu]

Page 32
SFX: Ba-

SFX: Kachi Kachi Kachi

H: ...Tekko.
SFX: Gugu
H: ...She's probably asleep. She's got work and all...
Cell: Speed Dial [Commonly dialed numbers]
Cell: Home (home) >
Cell: Mom (cell) >
Cell: Kurokawa Tetsuko (cell) >
Cell: ??n ?? >

H: I mustn't...
H: run away... [fuck you shinji]

Page 33
SFX: Zoku Zoku

H: ...I got it. I know what to do.

Page 34
Manga: Homunculus, Poohtarou the Bear, Saruman [Puutarou and Winnie the Pooh are different things]\but the similarity of spelling (クマのプー太郎 vs. クマのプーさん) makes me want to transliterate it like this\

Y: Whatcha doin'?

H: Making a [magical] circle of protection. [get all magic the gathering up in this bitch]

H: To me, Nakagawa Isami-sensei's comics occupy a space far removed from the realm of fears. [dread/fear/horror in the general sense, not his specific fears, this is the reason why I don't like, “takes me away from my fears,” maybe “takes me away from the space of fear...”]\and the manga shown is, of course, Poohtarou the Bear by Nakagawa Isami\
Y: Whoa! That's a unique take on them!

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H: Textbooks should be good too.
H: They're always so overly serious and artificial that it's somehow sort of funny. They're far from scary. \shooting for 'stilted' while still keeping 'cold, inhuman, robotic' in mind\
Books: Japanese 1, Japanese 2, (A detailed guide) New Geography, Modern Society, Japanese Literature, (A detailed guide) ??

Book: 1985 Yearbook
H: And, finally, an old yearbook.
H: My middle and high school ones won't work well, but my elementary school one should still be full of hopes and dreams. I'll be able to use that.

H: I spread them out evenly like this,
H: and I'm pretty much done.
H: ...All that's left is my ace in the hole.

Page 36
SFX: Gu-

SFX: Zuzuzu

Page 37
SFX: Giii

Lock box: 24-hour anti-theft device operating inside
SFX: Ga-chan

SFX: Gata Goto

SFX: Kachi Kachi Kachi

Page 38
SFX: Kacha

H: You ain't comin' in here... [not even letting a finger in]
SFX: Suu

SFX: Puni [Squish]

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SFX: Puuu

SFX: Gachan

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H: …

H: Mmhmm.

H: Everything's fine.
H: I'm all right.

H: ...I'm gonna be okay.

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H: I am a hero.

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Book: memories of our school trip [lit: field trip of memories]

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Book: memories of our school-

Book: memories of-

SFX: Pata

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SFX: Pi-
TV: Hayashi Mitsue, Tozawa Hiroko, Okamoto Juri, Andou Narumi
TV: April 27th, (Mon)

Girls: All together now...
Girls: Goo~d morning!! [yes there is a pun here, ohayou, opayou, oppai, fuck that though]

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H: Good morning...

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H: ...and good night.
SFX: Pa-paa
SFX: Burororo

Nice job. no spelling problems or grammer issues.
great job, Laika!